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What are essential qualities for an individual at ucf? Is it their grades? How many community service hours? Or maybe it's their drive and determination. I am not the valedictorian of my school but I have been through many unexpected and great life experiences. Experiences that have led to the establishment of work ethic, and leadership. Two traits that I consider to be exceptionally important in life. Work ethic is something that everyone has in them, but it is up to the individual to capitalize on it. Since I can remember I've always wanted to do my best in all things, from sports to school.This summer I put my work ethic to the test, by becoming a counselor at a 7 week sleep away camp. Hearing the word camp counselor may sound like an easy and fun job, but that is a misconception. Easy would never be a word to describe this occupation, strenuous, demanding, and unyielding suit the definition much better. Waking every morning at 7:00, to some of the most rowdy and rambunctious children on this planet, puts your work ethic to an ultimate test. You could've had the most trying and physically hard day, but camp does not stop for you, you keep on persisting. One of the greatest life experiences, has reaffirmed certainty in my work ethic. Leadership is essential for any community, or organization. Leadership is another trait that everyone has, and yet some people allow it to lie dormant. Leadership has different forms, from having to guide a group of individuals to a certain goal, to knowing when another person is more qualified, and stepping down. Both at certain times can be extremely crucial to a goal, both I have had to do. At 17 I was leading 5 day drips on Maine's toughest mountains. Thrown into this adventure with little help, I was forced to assume the role of a leader, to guide 13 year olds with no wilderness experience. The outcome of this task was a complete success, and I became a full time trip leader. In times when a leader has to step down to benefit the community, is of same importance of stepping up. It maybe harder to perform, but a leader does not only look out for himself, a leader puts others before himself. With my knowledge I have gained in work ethic and leadership, I know me going to UCF would not only contribute the community, but help me grow more into the young man I want to be. | What are essential qualities for an individual at UCF? Is it their grades? How many community service hours? Or maybe it's their drive and determination. I am not the valedictorian of my school, but I have been through many unexpected and great life experiences. Experiences that have led to the establishment of work ethic, and leadership. Two traits that I consider to be exceptionally important in life. Work ethic is something that everyone has in them, but it is up to the individual to capitalize on it. Since I can remember I've always wanted to do my best in all things, from sports to school. This summer I put my work ethic to the test, by becoming a counselor at a 7-week sleep away camp. Hearing the word camp counselor may sound like an easy and fun job, but that is a misconception. Easy would never be a word to describe this occupation, strenuous, demanding, and unyielding suit the definition much better. Waking every morning at 7:00, to some of the most rowdy and rambunctious children on this planet, puts your work ethic to an ultimate test. You could've had the most trying and physically hard day, but camp does not stop for you, you keep on persisting. One of the greatest life experiences, has reaffirmed certainty in my work ethic. Leadership is essential for any community, or organization. Leadership is another trait that everyone has, and yet some people allow it to lie dormant. Leadership has different forms, from having to guide a group of individuals to a certain goal, to knowing when another person is more qualified, and stepping down. Both at certain times can be extremely crucial to a goal, both I have had to do. At 17, I was leading 5-day drips on Maine's toughest mountains. Thrown into this adventure with little help, I was forced to assume the role of a leader, to guide 13-year-olds with no wilderness experience. The outcome of this task was a complete success, and I became a full time trip leader. In times when a leader has to step down to benefit the community, is of same importance of stepping up. It is maybe harder to perform, but a leader does not only look out for himself, a leader puts others before himself. With my knowledge I have gained in work ethic and leadership, I know me going to UCF would not only contribute the community, but help me grow more into the young man I want to be. |
Around the time of my birth, my parents' ideas on what my name should be had a totally different outcome than what was previously planned. My mother wanted to name me 'Sally'; "I like simple names..." she would tell me. While on the other hand, my father wanted to name me 'Shaniqua'. (A little ghetto-fabulous if you ask me.) But in the end, neither one of those names were given to me. Instead I was given a rather unique and uncommon name. A name that often becomes butchered when attempted to be pronounced. Erkenesh is my birth name. I grew up as a child who often regretted the first day of school. The moment my teacher was about to take attendance I would prepare nervously for her to come across my name struggling to pronounce it; just so that in the end I would have to say it the correct way -out loud -in front of the entire class becoming the center of attention and a victim of laughter and stares. Some teachers would take one look at that foreign name and decide at that very moment to call me by my last name, Serrano, for the entire year; simply because it was not as complex to say. Now as I have matured I've learned to embrace my name -not because it's my birth name- but because of its meaning. My name is Ethiopian and means 'reconciliation to God'.I was named after a deceased missionary, Erkenesh Tekelamarian, who took part in a great revival in Ethiopia and brought lost souls to Christ. My father chose that name for me because he found a connection between his walk with God and the name's meaning itself. He had backslidden from church and eventually found his way back to "The Cross". Thus, my name became a symbol for his relationship with God. At first I wanted to change my name; I know now that I wouldn't trade it for any other. I was named after greatness and my name has showed me that no matter how unique it may be it sets me apart as an individual. So let me properly introduce myself... "My name is Erkenesh Condra Serrano." | Around the time of my birth, my parents' ideas on what my name should be had a totally different outcome than what was previously planned. My mother wanted to name me 'Sally'; "I like simple names..." she would tell me. While on the other hand, my father wanted to name me 'Shania'. (A little ghetto-fabulous if you ask me.) But in the end, neither one of those names were given to me. Instead, I was given a rather unique and uncommon name. A name that often becomes butchered when attempted to be pronounced. Ernest is my birth name. I grew up as a child who often regretted the first day of school. The moment my teacher was about to take attendance I would prepare nervously for her to come across my name struggling to pronounce it; just so that in the end I would have to say it the correct way -out loud -in front of the entire class becoming the center of attention and a victim of laughter and stares. Some teachers would take one look at that foreign name and decide at that very moment to call me by my last name, Serrano, for the entire year; simply because it was not as complex to say. Now as I have matured I've learned to embrace my name -not because it's my birth name- but because of its meaning. My name is Ethiopian and means 'reconciliation to God'. I was named after a deceased missionary, Ernest Tekelamarian, who took part in a great revival in Ethiopia and brought lost souls to Christ. My father chose that name for me because he found a connection between his walk with God and the name's meaning itself. He had backslid den from church and eventually found his way back to "The Cross". Thus, my name became a symbol for his relationship with God. At first, I wanted to change my name; I know now that I wouldn't trade it for any other. I was named after greatness and my name has showed me that no matter how unique it may be it sets me apart as an individual. So let me properly introduce myself... "My name is Ernest Contra Serrano." |
I have a dream: a dream of making the world a better place, a dream of bringing people from different walks of life together, irrespective of anything, to work hand-in-hand for a better tomorrow, a dream of creating sustainable technologies, a dream of solving the energy crisis, a dream of creating an economic balance between the countries of the world, a dream of making this world a place where companionship thrives and no social divisions prevail, a dream of living life to its fullest. MIT is a place where im sure I can continue working towards my wish everyday. MIT is a place I know where I can balance the Riemann Hypothesis and Fuzzy Circuits and quite a lot of fun and laughter too. Last year, I wasn't even sure whether I would ever be able to go to college. I couldn't apply for the 2008 session, due to terrible family conditions centered on my father's illness. I take it positively; I decided not to let the feeling of an uncertain future destroy my present. I plunged into activity. Balancing jobs, studies and my own research projects, I tried consolidating my family. I gave them strength, leaving no stone unturned to rebuild my family, moment by moment. I have seen poverty, felt its pangs, been thrown into a deep dark hole, and successfully climbed back out. My struggles have rendered me a stronger and more determined person. I know how it feels to be deprived of opportunities and be oppressed. So, this year I decided to give back to the world that has inspired me to climb back up through the hole. I have traveled to remote villages, work with inhabitants, motivating them to come up and speak for themselves, creating self-help groups. I have worked with children with disables, creating awareness within their families that their children are entitled to the same rights as we are. I am not trying to change the whole world at once, but I believe that one day I will, starting today with one village, one disabled child, and one oppressed farmer. I have always been different from my peers. I don't know whether thats good or bad, but at a time when my friends were thinking of the inter-school debate competitions in terms of a topic they didn't really believe in, I was devoting myself to the making of the artificial eye. I had to face jeers and terrible comments; everybody thought I was a show-off. But I didn't let that hamper my work. I always said to myself, "What do you care what other people think?" I failed quite a lot during my first project, because I didn't have a mentor to correct my mistakes. I didn't want somebody to help me. I wanted to learn from my own mistakes. I got up every time I fell; every failure for me was another opportunity to reach my goal. Every living moment was an inspiration for me, reminding me of the power of human spirit, teaching me resilience and perseverance. I have also found out that I love taking risks. There's a joy in venturing into the unknown which rock-climbers like me know very well! It's the joy of putting your hands into the golden pot, terribly excited; not knowing what may come out. I am driven by that excitement. That desire to do off-the-beaten-path things, to create something, to solve problems. It's this desire that takes away my fear of failure and gives me the strength to lead, and take the initiative in creating the difference. I love life, with all its ups and downs, tears and sorrows, failures and achievements. I believe in enjoying life, drinking from the fire-hose of knowledge as much as this life would let me to. I believe in the power of hope, in the power of love and in the power of friendship. I believe in working together with people. I thrive best in a collaborative atmosphere, because I believe I alone can't make a difference, I need the help of all my brothers and sisters. Whatever few opportunities life has given me, I have grabbed them with both hands. I consider myself fortunate on having received a sound education. In a country where half the children don't even know that there are 26 letters in the English Alphabet, I consider myself lucky enough to have been exposed to such wonderful opportunities that have helped me to know myself better, to challenge myself, to cross the limits that I had unknowingly set for myself. Having said all this, MIT is just the logical next step for me. I believe I will thrive in MIT's collaborative yet intense atmosphere, a place where new ideas are born everyday, a place which provides a guiding light to the world, a place where people, though so busy with their immensely important work, find out time to sit back and enjoy and "live" life. | I have a dream: a dream of making the world a better place, a dream of bringing people from different walks of life together, irrespective of anything, to work hand-in-hand for a better tomorrow, a dream of creating sustainable technologies, a dream of solving the energy crisis, a dream of creating an economic balance between the countries of the world, a dream of making this world a place where companionship thrives and no social divisions prevail, a dream of living life to its fullest. MIT is a place where I'm sure I can continue working towards my wish every day. MIT is a place I know where I can balance the Riemann Hypothesis and Fuzzy Circuits and quite a lot of fun and laughter too. Last year, I wasn't even sure whether I would ever be able to go to college. I couldn't apply for the 2008 session, due to terrible family conditions centered on my father's illness. I take it positively; I decided not to let the feeling of an uncertain future destroy my present. Furthermore, I plunged into activity. Balancing jobs, studies and my own research projects, I tried consolidating my family. I gave them strength, leaving no stone unturned to rebuild my family, moment by moment. I have seen poverty, felt its pangs, been thrown into a deep dark hole, and successfully climbed back out. My struggles have rendered me a stronger and more determined person. I know how it feels to be deprived of opportunities and be oppressed. So, this year I decided to give back to the world that has inspired me to climb back up through the hole. I have traveled to remote villages, work with inhabitants, motivating them to come up and speak for themselves, creating self-help groups. I have worked with children with disables, creating awareness within their families that their children are entitled to the same rights as we are. Furthermore, I am not trying to change the whole world at once, but I believe that one day I will, starting today with one village, one disabled child, and one oppressed farmer. Furthermore, I have always been different from my peers. Furthermore, I don't know whether that's good or bad, but at a time when my friends were thinking of the interschool debate competitions in terms of a topic they didn't really believe in, I was devoting myself to the making of the artificial eye. Furthermore, I had to face jeers and terrible comments; everybody thought I was a show-off. But I didn't let that hamper my work. I always said to myself, "What do you care what other people think?" I failed quite a lot during my first project, because I didn't have a mentor to correct my mistakes. Furthermore, I didn't want somebody to help me. Furthermore, I wanted to learn from my own mistakes. Furthermore, I got up every time I fell; every failure for me was another opportunity to reach my goal. Every living moment was an inspiration for me, reminding me of the power of human spirit, teaching me resilience and perseverance. I have also found out that I love taking risks. There's a joy in venturing into the unknown which rock-climbers like me know very well! It's the joy of putting your hands into the golden pot, terribly excited; not knowing what may come out. I am driven by that excitement. That desire to do off-the-beaten-path things, to create something, to solve problems. It's this desire that takes away my fear of failure and gives me the strength to lead, and take the initiative in creating the difference. I love life, with all its ups and downs, tears and sorrows, failures and achievements. I believe in enjoying life, drinking from the fire-hose of knowledge as much as this life would let me to. Furthermore, I believe in the power of hope, in the power of love and in the power of friendship. Furthermore, I believe in working together with people. Furthermore, I thrive best in a collaborative atmosphere, because I believe I alone can't make a difference, I need the help of all my brothers and sisters. Whatever few opportunities' life has given me, I have grabbed them with both hands. I consider myself fortunate on having received a sound education. In a country where half the children don't even know that there are 26 letters in the English Alphabet, I consider myself lucky enough to have been exposed to such wonderful opportunities that have helped me to know myself better, to challenge myself, to cross the limits that I had unknowingly set for myself. Having said all this, MIT is just the logical next step for me. I believe I will thrive in MIT's collaborative yet intense atmosphere, a place where new ideas are born every day, a place which provides a guiding light to the world, a place where people, though so busy with their immensely important work, find out time to sit back and enjoy and "live" life. |
Every summer that I travel to Maine is a unique experience. For 2 weeks, my family and I get to enjoy clear air, rolling hills, and sleepy towns. This short vacation from crowded South Florida always reminds me that most of the world does not have the same luxuries and priorities that many of us have in Broward County. Maine, and the North East in general, is focused greatly on building a "green" society, and place a lot of importance of being environmentally friendly. South Florida, for the most part, is more interested in material possessions and status. Visiting Maine gives me an opportunity to rejuvenate my "green side", and nurture my soul. My entire life, I have been surrounded by many varied cultures. Growing up outside of Seattle, Washington, I was immersed in a large Asian and White community. Now that I live in Florida, I am largely involved in Spanish culture. And every year when I travel to Maine, I experience living in a French community. Being involved in these types of varied cultures has made me into a very tolerant person. I love to learn about different ethnicities, and I appreciate diversity. I am non-judgmental and open to new ideas and customs. Maine's beautiful landscapes and seascapes cause thousands of artists to flock to its coasts each summer. The large artistic community that surrounds me when I travel to Maine serves to inspire and illuminate me. I enjoy contributing to this community by creating my own renditions of Maine's beauty. My appreciation for art and culture has been increased greatly by visiting Maine each summer. I have formed an understanding and admiration of beauty and culture, and this has made me into a better artist, and has changed my perception of the world- I notice small details, fantastic color, and unique shapes all around me. My understanding of diversity, my tolerance, and my increased appreciation of art and culture will allow me to positively contribute to the University of Florida campus, and will greatly affect my college experience. These traits, along with my ability to be non-judgmental, will allow me to interact with many different types of people, and gain new knowledge from them. -- UNFINISHED | Every summer that I travel to Maine is a unique experience. For 2 weeks, my family and I get to enjoy clear air, rolling hills, and sleepy towns. This short vacation from crowded South Florida always reminds me that most of the world does not have the same luxuries and priorities that many of us have in Broward County. Maine, and the North East in general, is focused greatly on building a "green" society, and place a lot of importance of being environmentally friendly. South Florida, for the most part, is more interested in material possessions and status. Visiting Maine gives me an opportunity to rejuvenate my "green side", and nurture my soul. My entire life, I have been surrounded by many varied cultures. Growing up outside of Seattle, Washington, I was immersed in a large Asian and White community. Now that I live in Florida, I am largely involved in Spanish culture. And every year when I travel to Maine, I experience living in a French community. Being involved in these types of varied cultures has made me into a very tolerant person. I love to learn about different ethnicities, and I appreciate diversity. I am non-judgmental and open to new ideas and customs. Maine's beautiful landscapes and seascapes cause thousands of artists to flock to its coasts each summer. The large artistic community that surrounds me when I travel to Maine serves to inspire and illuminate me. I enjoy contributing to this community by creating my own renditions of Maine's beauty. My appreciation for art and culture has been increased greatly by visiting Maine each summer. I have formed an understanding and admiration of beauty and culture, and this has made me into a better artist, and has changed my perception of the world- I notice small details, fantastic color, and unique shapes all around me. My understanding of diversity, my tolerance, and my increased appreciation of art and culture will allow me to positively contribute to the University of Florida campus, and will greatly affect my college experience. These traits, along with my ability to be non-judgmental, will allow me to interact with many types of people, and gain new knowledge from them. -- UNFINISHED |
Over the past two months I have written many essays. Some of them were for colleges and some of them were for scholarships; but my essay for Boston College has been in the works since I visited during the summer of 2007. That is when I had my first visit to Boston College. Even though I was born and raised in South Florida, Boston feels like home every time I visit. I still have many relatives in Massachusetts and we have visited every year since I was a little kid. My father is Jewish and was born in Beth Israel Hospital. He lived in Brookline and grew up near Coolidge Corner before he moved to Florida. My mother is a native Floridian and had a very Catholic upbringing. Coming from an interreligious family has exposed my brother and I to both religions' beliefs and Holidays. A few times each year we went to Synagogue, we celebrated Passover and Yum Kippur with my Father's family. I even know some of the Hebrew prayers. Other times we attended church and celebrated Christmas and Easter. We often had deep discussions about both religions, but my parents left the decision of what to believe open to us. When I was young I was offered the chance to attend Hebrew School and have a Bar-Mitzvah or attend CCD classes, but did not really see any need. When my brother, Spencer, was eight or nine years old he decided to follow in the Jewish faith and attend classes at the local Temple. He was a Bar Mitzvah last year and we had a great party. I was happy for him, that he had found a place where he thought he fit. Me on the other hand, I could not decide and did not think it was that important. I attended public schools up until middle school. When I was in eighth grade a Dean from the public High School I would be attending came and spoke to our class. The only things he talked about were how only one out of three of us would graduate, and that discipline was more important than learning. It was not what I was expecting when I was looking forward to high school. That is when I started looking for other alternatives such as Magnet Programs and Private Schools. A good friend told me about St Thomas Aquinas High School. It was not to far away and my parents said if I did well on the entrance exam and was accepted I could go. I was accepted and have been enjoying my high school experience ever since. For the last three and a half years I have been getting an incredible education, I have made some really great friends and been inspired by many great teachers. One of my theology teachers, Dr. McDonald, told me to keep questioning and striving and that one day I would figure out my place and where I fit. When I was on my visit to Boston College and I stood in one of the old buildings with all the culture and knowledge that had been built into them, I knew I wanted to attend here. I wanted to sit in that old library and read some of those books, and discover more about what I had been given a glimpse of. I had been to five different college tours; I had received hundreds of college applications and letters, when I thought about college I got dizzy. But standing in that hall on that day in June every thing seemed to slow down. It was a feeling in my heart unexplainable but undeniable too. I believe it was a sign of where I may fit and that it was important to study what I believe. I would love the chance to learn from the Jesuit's at Boston College. I have a strong and diverse background in religion and would bring with me the ideals and questions I have from both of my religious upbringings. | Over the past two months I have written many essays. Some of them were for colleges and some of them were for scholarships; but my essay for Boston College has been in the works since I visited during the summer of 2007. That is when I had my first visit to Boston College. Even though I was born and raised in South Florida, Boston feels like home every time I visit. I still have many relatives in Massachusetts, and we have visited every year since I was a little kid. My father is Jewish and was born in Beth Israel Hospital. He lived in Brookline and grew up near Coolidge Corner before he moved to Florida. My mother is a native Floridian and had a very Catholic upbringing. Coming from an interreligious family has exposed my brother and I to both religions' beliefs and Holidays. A few times each year we went to Synagogue, we celebrated Passover and Yum Kipper with my Father's family. I even know some Hebrew prayers. Other times we attended church and celebrated Christmas and Easter. We often had deep discussions about both religions, but my parents left the decision of what to believe open to us. When I was young I was offered the chance to attend Hebrew School and have a Bar-Mitzvah or attend CCD classes, but did not really see any need. When my brother, Spencer, was eight or nine years old he decided to follow in the Jewish faith and attend classes at the local Temple. He was a Bar Mitzvah last year, and we had a great party. I was happy for him, that he had found a place where he thought he fit. Me on the other hand, I could not decide and did not think it was that important. I attended public schools up until middle school. When I was in eighth grade a Dean from the public High School I would be attending came and spoke to our class. The only things he talked about were how only one out of three of us would graduate, and that discipline was more important than learning. It was not what I was expecting when I was looking forward to high school. That is when I started looking for other alternatives such as Magnet Programs and Private Schools. A good friend told me about St Thomas Aquinas High School. It was not too far away and my parents said if I did well on the entrance exam and was accepted I could go. I was accepted and have been enjoying my high school experience ever since. For the last three and a half years I have been getting an incredible education, I have made some really great friends and been inspired by many great teachers. One of my theology teachers, Dr. McDonald, told me to keep questioning and striving and that one day I would figure out my place and where I fit. When I was on my visit to Boston College and I stood in one of the old buildings with all the culture and knowledge that had been built into them, I knew I wanted to attend here. I wanted to sit in that old library and read some of those books, and discover more about what I had been given a glimpse of. I had been to five different college tours; I had received hundreds of college applications and letters, when I thought about college I got dizzy. But standing in that hall on that day in June every thing seemed to slow down. It was a feeling in my heart unexplainable but undeniable too. I believe it was a sign of where I may fit and that it was important to study what I believe. I would love the chance to learn from the Jesuit's at Boston College. Furthermore, I have a strong and diverse background in religion and would bring with me the ideals and questions I have from both of my religious upbringings. |
The personal statement is as vital to the application process as the form, transcript and references. I will provide insights into my personality and character while introducing myself to you. Divorce is seldom only about a man and a woman; families are often effected, most frequently the children. At an early age, I became accustomed to trips back and forth between my parents' homes. While many children of divorced parents find themselves messengers, my parents made a genuine effort to work with each other. Although most daily dealings centered on my mother, my father remained involved to the best of his ability. The irregular hours of his job made planned visits a challenge, but my mother was always willing to accommodate. While both parents shared my childhood years, by the time I was an adolescent I found myself going from two parents to four. Both of my parents had remarried, and my father's marriage brought with it three new siblings whereas previously I had none. Never having shared my father with anyone before, I found that suddenly his attention and affections were divided five separate ways. Coping with these changes in my life has not only made me stronger and more resourceful but made me cognizant of the fact that the world does not revolve around me. I believe these abilities provide strength as I deal with people at work and in daily life, whether classmates; instructors, co-workers andor customers. Several qualities that I possess will enable me to contribute to the University of Central Florida community. My true strengths lie in my industrious nature, sense of integrity, reliability, and my value of the volunteer ethic. I began working two months after my fourteenth birthday, right after hurricane Wilma. I assisted my local Publix during the recovery efforts. While doing this, the manager took notice and subsequently offered me a job. I have continued working for them ever since. My sense of integrity stems from the examples set by my parents; I have a strong sense of right and wrong. Rules and laws should apply to everyone, not simply a few who lack power or privilege; we have the right to demand integrity from those we choose to lead us. Being unreliable is not only inconsiderate, but also disrespectful. Throughout my life, I have always believed that if I am expected to be somewhere on time I should be. Consequently, I miss very little school, have good punctuality at work, and (unless there is a great emergency) I never miss my duty to volunteer. In short I live up to my commitments. Valuing the volunteer ethic takes not only time and patience but also a positive attitude. Part of that attitude is the ability to work well with others and respond well to the unexpected. Whenever new projects arise in my community I am one of the first people called because of these attributes. Thank you for this opportunity to provide a glimpse into how I deal with challenges while expressing some of what is important to me. There is far more than can be covered here, and I look forward to meeting the admissions staff for further discussion. | The personal statement is as vital to the application process as the form, transcript and references. I will provide insights into my personality and character while introducing myself to you. Divorce is seldom only about a man and a woman; families are often effected, most frequently the children. At an early age, I became accustomed to trips back and forth between my parents' homes. While many children of divorced parents find themselves messengers, my parents made a genuine effort to work with each other. Although most daily dealings centered on my mother, my father remained involved to the best of his ability. The irregular hours of his job made planned visits a challenge, but my mother was always willing to accommodate. While both parents shared my childhood years, by the time I was an adolescent I found myself going from two parents to four. Both of my parents had remarried, and my father's marriage brought with it three new siblings whereas previously I had none. Never having shared my father with anyone before, I found that suddenly his attention and affections were divided five separate ways. Coping with these changes in my life has not only made me stronger and more resourceful but made me cognizant of the fact that the world does not revolve around me. I believe these abilities provide strength as I deal with people at work and in daily life, whether classmates; instructors, co-workers ardor customers. Several qualities that I possess will enable me to contribute to the University of Central Florida community. My true strengths lie in my industrious nature, sense of integrity, reliability, and my value of the volunteer ethic. I began working two months after my fourteenth birthday, right after hurricane Wilma. I assisted my local Publix during the recovery efforts. While doing this, the manager took notice and subsequently offered me a job. I have continued working for them ever since. My sense of integrity stems from the examples set by my parents; I have a strong sense of right and wrong. Rules and laws should apply to everyone, not simply a few who lack power or privilege; we have the right to demand integrity from those we choose to lead us. Being unreliable is not only inconsiderate, but also disrespectful. Throughout my life, I have always believed that if I am expected to be somewhere on time I should be. Consequently, I miss very little school, have good punctuality at work, and (unless there is a great emergency) I never miss my duty to volunteer. In short, I live up to my commitments. Valuing the volunteer ethic takes not only time and patience but also a positive attitude. Part of that attitude is the ability to work well with others and respond well to the unexpected. Whenever new projects arise in my community I am one of the first people called because of these attributes. Thank you for this opportunity to provide a glimpse into how I deal with challenges while expressing some of what is important to me. There is far more than can be covered here, and I look forward to meeting the admissions staff for further discussion. |
Describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school. Over the past two and a half months I have written many essays. Some of them were for colleges and some of them were for scholarships; each was on a different topic. This essay, however, will be on what I think has been the greatest experience of my life and has prepared me for college the most. For the past 6 years I have participated in a Youth Leadership Program that involves teaching and umpiring kids for baseball. Throughout the years, I have witnessed the ups and downs of this program and of the people involved. I have learned that parents and coaches can get extremely involved in the game and can get carried away in a negative way. They can get out of control and start screaming at the kids, which is where I come in and try to diffuse the situation. Most of the time I can successfully calm the individual down, but occasionally, I will have to throw a parent or coach out of the game, which makes the children feel terrible. Opposed to these negatives are the positive side of things; the looks on the kids' faces when they make a good throw to get someone out or if they get a good hit. Many times after a kid makes an error or wrong play I will stop the game and explain to the kids what were wrong and try to teach them the right way to play. I also teach them about good sportsmanship, which I think is very important in this day and age of rich and self absorbed athletes. The kids have grown to like and respect me since I have advanced throughout the years, growing up with them. I am there to stick up for the kids and to be their leader on the field and off. Sometimes I will see one of the kids at the mall and they will stop to talk and introduce me to their parents. I know the kids look up to me so I always try my best to set a good example and to live up to their expectations. This experience has taught me how to be a good communicator and has given me extra confidence when I am dealing with teachers and other adults. It has also taught me to look at things objectively and to keep a cool head under pressure. I am ready to take on all of the challenges ahead of me at the University of Florida. | Describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the OF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school. Over the past two and a half months I have written many essays. Some of them were for colleges and some of them were for scholarships; each was on a different topic. This essay, however, will be on what I think has been the greatest experience of my life and has prepared me for college the most. For the past 6 years I have participated in a Youth Leadership Program that involves teaching and umpiring kids for baseball. Throughout the years, I have witnessed the ups and downs of this program and of the people involved. I have learned that parents and coaches can get extremely involved in the game and can get carried away negatively. They can get out of control and start screaming at the kids, which is where I come in and try to defuse the situation. Most of the time I can successfully calm the individual down, but occasionally, I will have to throw a parent or coach out of the game, which makes the children feel terrible. Opposed to these negatives are the positive side of things; the looks on the kids' faces when they make a good throw to get someone out or if they get a good hit. Many times after a kid makes an error or wrong play I will stop the game and explain to the kids what were wrong and try to teach them the right way to play. I also teach them about good sportsmanship, which I think is very important in this day and age of rich and self-absorbed athletes. The kids have grown to like and respect me since I have advanced throughout the years, growing up with them. I am there to stick up for the kids and to be their leader on the field and off. Sometimes I will see one of the kids at the mall, and they will stop to talk and introduce me to their parents. I know the kids look up to me, so I always try my best to set a good example and to live up to their expectations. This experience has taught me how to be a good communicator and has given me extra confidence when I am dealing with teachers and other adults. It has also taught me to look at things objectively and to keep a cool head under pressure. I am ready to take on all the challenges ahead of me at the University of Florida. |
This is the 1st paragraph of my essay "Vires? Artes? Mores?' what does that mean?" people might wonder what it means when they first step into Florida State University unless they knew Latin. The three words play a huge role at FSU because it has known as the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. But the three words are not going to be important to us if we do not know the meaning of it. 'Vires' means strength of all kinds, 'Artes' indicates the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art, and 'Mores' refers to character, custom, or tradition. | This is the 1st paragraph of my essay "Virus? Arts? Mores?' what does that mean?" people might wonder what it means when they first step into Florida State University unless they knew Latin. The three words play a huge role at FSU because it has known as the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. But the three words are not going to be important to us if we do not know the meaning of it. 'Virus' means strength of all kinds, 'Arts' indicates the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art, and 'Mores' refers to character, custom, or tradition. |
In my opinion Relentless is having enough strength to never give up on myself or my dreams no matter what stands in my way. My dream has always been to be the first person in my family to go to college. I'm confident I can achieve that dream. Throughout my adolescent life I was raised by my mom but that never has effected me I believe my mom did the best she could with what she had. I was born in Michigan, in 1991 soon after my birth my parents who never married broke-up. My mom had full custody off me but I visited my dad on the weekends, me and my dad never got along and when I was 12 he gave up all parental rights of me so he wouldn't have to pay child support. I haven't seen my dad since then. In the summer of 2004 my mom decided to move to Florida with her boyfriend of two months. About six months later her boyfriend deserted us in the middle of the night I assume he moved back to Michigan but I'm not sure. So my mom and me were stranded in Florida and she couldn't afford the bills with her job. We struggled for a few months then she got fired and we were living of welfare when she met her next boyfriend. After about two months of dating we moved in with him. That was one of the worst experiences in my life he was an alcoholic and would beat my mom and they would argue till 4 in the morning frequently. Then on the night before my first day of school as a junior my mom and her boyfriend got in a huge fight and he hit her and I was sick of it so I stood up to him and we fought my mom ran out into the street screaming because he had broke all the phones. About fifteen minutes later the cops walked in and found me holding him down in a choke hold, my 12 years of wrestling really paid off. So he went to jail and we got restraining orders on him. My mom then started to rent a house living of welfare and food stamps again life wasn't to fun. But eventually my mom found a new boyfriend and they dated for about four months then she moved to Port Charlotte with him and told me I had to find somewhere to live because she was moving to Chicago with her boyfriend. That's when I finally broke down at wrestling practice, my coaches asked me what was wrong and I told them. The very next day my coach told me I could move in with him and his family I was hesitant at first but I reluctantly went my mom promised to get a job and pay my coach three hundred dollars a month. She still has no job, hasn't sent a dime, and hasn't even called my coach. I'm lucky to have found people as loving and caring as the people I'm living with. My coach has told me over and over he doesn't care if he ever gets any money from my mom that's not why he did this he did it for me. I don't know where I'd be without him and his family. I realize I haven't had the easiest life and I've had to stay strong to get through the worst but that doesn't bother me at all because one day I know all my hard work will pay off. That is why I believe that the value of "Vires" can best be applied to me. I managed to find the courage and strength to never put my head down. I'm not sure where my education will take me but with my strong determination I have gained I' sure I will go far and would like to fulfill my dreams by attending Florida Sate University. | In my opinion Relentless is having enough strength to never give up on myself or my dreams no matter what stands in my way. My dream has always been to be the first person in my family to go to college. I'm confident I can achieve that dream. Throughout my adolescent life I was raised by my mom, but that never has effected me I believe my mom did the best she could with what she had. I was born in Michigan, in 1991 soon after my birth my parents who never married broke-up. My mom had full custody off me, but I visited my dad on the weekends, my dad and I never got along and when I was 12 he gave up all parental rights of me, so he wouldn't have to pay child support. I haven't seen my dad since then. In the summer of 2004 my mom decided to move to Florida with her boyfriend of two months. About six months later her boyfriend deserted us in the middle of the night I assume he moved back to Michigan, but I'm not sure. So my mom and I were stranded in Florida, and she couldn't afford the bills with her job. We struggled for a few months then she got fired, and we were living of welfare when she met her next boyfriend. After about two months of dating we moved in with him. That was one of the worst experiences in my life he was an alcoholic and would beat my mom, and they would argue till 4 in the morning frequently. Then on the night before my first day of school as a junior my mom and her boyfriend got in a huge fight, and he hit her, and I was sick of it, so I stood up to him, and we fought my mom ran out into the street screaming because he had broken all the phones. About fifteen minutes later the cops walked in and found me holding him down in a choke hold, my 12 years of wrestling really paid off. So he went to jail, and we got restraining orders on him. My mom then started to rent a house living of welfare and food stamps again life wasn't to fun. But eventually my mom found a new boyfriend, and they dated for about four months then she moved to Port Charlotte with him and told me I had to find somewhere to live because she was moving to Chicago with her boyfriend. That's when I finally broke down at wrestling practice, my coaches asked me what was wrong, and I told them. The very next day my coach told me I could move in with him and his family I was hesitant at first, but I reluctantly went my mom promised to get a job and pay my coach three hundred dollars a month. She still has no job, hasn't sent a dime, and hasn't even called my coach. I'm lucky to have found people as loving and caring as the people I'm living with. My coach has told me over and over he doesn't care if he ever gets any money from my mom that's not why he did this he did it for me. I don't know where I'd be without him and his family. I realize I haven't had the easiest life, and I've had to stay strong to get through the worst, but that doesn't bother me at all because one day I know all my hard work will pay off. That is why I believe that the value of "Virus" can best be applied to me. I managed to find the courage and strength to never put my head down. I'm not sure where my education will take me but with my strong determination I have gained I' sure I will go far and would like to fulfill my dreams by attending Florida Sate University. |
I have read A Brief History of Time written by Stephen Hawking. I admire Stephen Hawking very much. He is not only one of the greatest astronomers through out history, but also an invalid who faces many more difficulties than normal people. His spirit on scientific research and his daily life has influenced me in my interest, my character and my world view significantly. When I first read his book, I was attracted by the fascinating universe. Where did human beings come from? Why is the universe the way it is? Does time have a staring point? Although they are big questions, they are attractive to me. I asked my physics teacher questions about astronomy, and searched for information on the internet when I was confused. I exchanged E-mails with a Harvard professor. He gave me lots of valuable suggestions and a website which releases the newest achievements on astronomy. I spent all my free time reading and studying on astronomy. As a result, I learned lots of knowledge about the universe. I became able to understand high-toned theories, like why the universe is expanding, how scientists found black holes, and how we can perform time travel etc. The more I learn on the mysterious universe, the more I am interested in astronomy. Stephen Hawking's experience also affected my character. He became paralyzed when he was studying in Cambridge University. The doctor told him that he could only live for, about, two years, but he could never be defeated. He keeps fighting against his fate. He is still living today and has great achievements. His story encourages me. When I face challenges, I cheer myself on with his spirit. I tell myself never give up because Stephen Hawking never did. Stephen Hawking's philosophy also has a great effect on my world view. "We are just an advanced breed of monkeys on a minor planet of a very average star." said by Hawking. I always considered human beings are the cleverest creatures in the world, but I never compared us to the creature from outer space. Maybe, what he said is true. Who knows? I always used his words to warn myself, just like no one knows whether the E.T exists. There are so many things we don't know about the world, which is why we always need to keep a modest attitude to learn knowledge, receive others' advice. Mr. Stephen Hawking teaches me so much from his story, his behavior and his spirit. I admire him and hope to be a person as intelligent as him. | I have read A Brief History of Time written by Stephen Hawking. I admire Stephen Hawking very much. He is not only one of the greatest astronomers throughout history, but also an invalid who faces many more difficulties than normal people. His spirit on scientific research and his daily life has influenced me in my interest, my character and my world view significantly. When I first read his book, I was attracted by the fascinating universe. Where did human beings come from? Why is the universe the way it is? Does time have a staring point? Although they are big questions, they are attractive to me. I asked my physics teacher questions about astronomy, and searched for information on the internet when I was confused. I exchanged E-mails with a Harvard professor. He gave me lots of valuable suggestions and a website which releases the newest achievements on astronomy. I spent all my free time reading and studying on astronomy. As a result, I learned lots of knowledge about the universe. I became able to understand high-toned theories, like why the universe is expanding, how scientists found black holes, and how we can perform time travel etc. The more I learn on the mysterious universe, the more I am interested in astronomy. Stephen Hawking's experience also affected my character. He became paralyzed when he was studying in Cambridge University. The doctor told him that he could only live for, about, two years, but he could never be defeated. He keeps fighting against his fate. He is still living today and has great achievements. His story encourages me. When I face challenges, I cheer myself on with his spirit. I tell myself never give up because Stephen Hawking never did. Stephen Hawking's philosophy also has a great effect on my world view. "We are just an advanced breed of monkeys on a minor planet of a very average star." said by Hawking. I always considered human beings are the cleverest creatures in the world, but I never compared us to the creature from outer space. Maybe, what he said is true. Who knows? I always used his words to warn myself, just like no one knows whether the E. T exists. There are so many things we don't know about the world, which is why we always need to keep a modest attitude to learn knowledge, receive others' advice. Mr. Stephen Hawking teaches me so much from his story, his behavior and his spirit. I admire him and hope to be a person as intelligent as him. |
Ever since I moved to Florida at the age of three, I have loved it here. I have always wanted to attend college, but was unsure of my choice. I have lived in Orlando the entire time I have lived in Florida and drive by UCF occasionally. Each time I drive by I see the light poles with the UCF flags on them and many students roaming with their gold and black shirts, the gigantic Bright House Stadium, and the beautiful campus. After looking into all the great opportunities available at UCF I realized I wanted to be a UCF Knight. I have spoken to individuals that attended UCF and they tell me how amazing it is, the curriculum, the people, the sporting events, they say UCF has it all and they would not have chosen any other college. Additionally, UCF has one of the most exciting sports programs in Florida. I am a huge sports fan and would definitely attend all of the home football and basketball games to help support the Knights. UCF has always been a leader with one of the best business programs around, and also offers many internship opportunities. One day I hope to own a successful business and I believe with UCF's academic curriculum I will be able to achieve that goal. | Ever since I moved to Florida at the age of three, I have loved it here. I have always wanted to attend college, but was unsure of my choice. I have lived in Orlando the entire time I have lived in Florida and drive by UCF occasionally. Each time I drive by I see the light poles with the UCF flags on them and many students roaming with their gold and black shirts, the gigantic Bright House Stadium, and the beautiful campus. After looking into all the great opportunities available at UCF I realized I wanted to be a UCF Knight. I have spoken to individuals that attended UCF, and they tell me how amazing it is, the curriculum, the people, the sporting events, they say UCF has it all, and they would not have chosen any other college. Additionally, UCF has one of the most exciting sports programs in Florida. I am a huge sports fan and would definitely attend all the home football and basketball games to help support the Knights. UCF has always been a leader with one of the best business programs around, and also offers many internship opportunities. One day I hope to own a successful business and I believe with UCF's academic curriculum I will be able to achieve that goal. |
When I was in elementary school I had a steady interest in a science. I used to enjoy reading a book about researching natural phenomena and our body. Those books I had read in period as a child had influenced to my aptitude for biology. Those book contained science story such as an outer space, an organism and a robot. Especially I had a great interest about a cat. Watching cat's movement and write down about cat's weight and how many times they are eating like a professional researcher. It was a most enjoyable hobby during my youth. As I was getting order, I began to dream about being a scientist. How it would be wonderful if I become a scientist who is researching professionally. And I have a passion to help unfortunate people if I become a scientist who has exceeded knowledge in biological science. My main objective of studying biology is to have an occupation that is related with medical filed so I can give a help to disable people. I do not want to study for being a rich person but for community and the world. | When I was in elementary school I had a steady interest in a science. I used to enjoy reading a book about researching natural phenomena and our body. Those books I had read in period as a child had influenced to my aptitude for biology. Those book contained science story such as an outer space, an organism and a robot. Especially I had a great interest about a cat. Watching cat's movement and write down about cat's weight and how many times they are eating like a professional researcher. It was a most enjoyable hobby during my youth. As I was getting order, I began to dream about being a scientist. How it would be wonderful if I become a scientist who is researching professionally. And I have a passion to help unfortunate people if I become a scientist who has exceeded knowledge in biological science. My main objective of studying biology is to have an occupation that is related with medical filed, so I can give a help to disable people. I do not want to study for being a rich person but for community and the world. |
I am attracted to both the Mathematics and the Physics program. Most importantly, both of them interest me and I think I have future in both, because this semester I was in the top of my class in both mathematics and physics (altough I sahred the rank with two other peers in math) If I had to choose one, right now I have a slight preference for Physics as a major. Why? I want to better our society, something harder to do with pure mathematics. The way I see it, pure mathematics will make me profit while pure physics will make me and the others profit. | I am attracted to both the Mathematics and the Physics program. Most importantly, both of them interest me and I think I have future in both, because this semester I was in the top of my class in both mathematics and physics (although I shared the rank with two other peers in math) If I had to choose one, right now I have a slight preference for Physics as a major. Why? I want to better our society, something harder to do with pure mathematics. The way I see it, pure mathematics will make me profit while pure physics will make me and the others profit. |
Here's my UF essay. I would appreciate any advice you might have. I am particularly concerned about my opening paragraph--does it seem like a rough transition from that paragraph to the next? **** It is five thirty on a misty August morning, and I walk quietly down the stairs of the old farmhouse that I share with five other young interns. I put on my rubber boots and walk to the goats' pasture, a fenced yard behind the house. There, I give our two young does fresh hay and change their water before walking back to the farmhouse to prepare for a new day of working in the fields on the organic vegetable farm that is temporarily my home. I decided that I wanted to work on an organic farm in the winter of 2007. Though I am not from a farm family, I had become very interested in sustainable agriculture over the past year or so. So, that February, I doggedly contacted farms that had advertised positions on organic agriculture websites. At the end of the month, Harvest Hill Farm in Walden, Vermontïa tiny, remote community in the northern part of the stateïagreed to take me on as an intern the coming summer. I arrived in the forested, hilly, rural community of Walden in early June to begin working. I quickly formed close bonds with the other young women working at the farm as our combined effort nutured produce from soil to consumer. I immersed myself in the rhythm of rural life and farm work, rising early and working in the fields or greenhouse from 8 a.m. to 5 p.m. When one intern decided to buy two goats to keep outside of our farmhouse, I was thrilled, and I became the first person to see them each morning. Though I had been worried that I would have a hard time doing physical labor 40 hours a week, I soon almost wished that I could work longer days. When I helped at farmers' markets, I realized how happy people were to purchase produce directly from the farm. Strolling shoppers smiled to see large, crisp heads of lettuce and stacks of freshly dug beets on our produce-filled tables. Though I had already decided that I wanted to become a small-scale, sustainable farmer because I knew that food produced organically is healthier for consumers and the environment, seeing this connection between people and land reconfirmed my convictions. Working on the farm was the best way that I could have spent the summer. I learned more about organic food production, to be sure. But just as importantly, I learned what it feels like to be a part of something important, and to work closely with others to accomplish a greater goal. As a student at the University of Florida, I would bring to the campus that ability to work collectively, and to understand how my small contributions add up to something larger than myself. Most importantly, I would bring the passion that drives my life: my dedication to sustainability and a healthier agriculture. **** Thanks for the help. | Here's my OF essay. I would appreciate any advice you might have. I am particularly concerned about my opening paragraph--does it seems like a rough transition from that paragraph to the next? **** It is five thirty on a misty August morning, and I walk quietly down the stairs of the old farmhouse that I share with five other young interns. I put on my rubber boots and walk to the goats' pasture, a fenced yard behind the house. There, I give our two young does fresh hay and change their water before walking back to the farmhouse to prepare for a new day of working in the fields on the organic vegetable farm that is temporarily my home. I decided that I wanted to work on an organic farm in the winter of 2007. Though I am not from a farm family, I had become very interested in sustainable agriculture over the past year or so. So, that February, I doggedly contacted farms that had advertised positions on organic agriculture websites. At the end of the month, Harvest Hill Farm in Walden, Vermont tiny, remote community in the northern part of the stateïagreed to take me on as an intern the coming summer. I arrived in the forested, hilly, rural community of Walden in early June to begin working. I quickly formed close bonds with the other young women working at the farm as our combined effort nurtured produce from soil to consumer. Furthermore, I immersed myself in the rhythm of rural life and farm work, rising early and working in the fields or greenhouse from 8 a.m. to 5 p.m. When one intern decided to buy two goats to keep outside our farmhouse, I was thrilled, and I became the first person to see them each morning. Though I had been worried that I would have a hard time doing physical labor 40 hours a week, I soon almost wished that I could work longer days. When I helped at farmers' markets, I realized how happy people were to purchase produce directly from the farm. Strolling shoppers smiled to see large, crisp heads of lettuce and stacks of freshly dug beets on our produce-filled tables. Though I had already decided that I wanted to become a small-scale, sustainable farmer because I knew that food produced organically is healthier for consumers and the environment, seeing this connection between people and land reconfirmed my convictions. Working on the farm was the best way that I could have spent the summer. I learned more about organic food production, to be sure. But just as importantly, I learned what it feels like to be a part of something important, and to work closely with others to accomplish a greater goal. As a student at the University of Florida, I would bring to the campus that ability to work collectively, and to understand how my small contributions add up to something larger than myself. Most importantly, I would bring the passion that drives my life: my dedication to sustainability and a healthier agriculture. **** Thanks for the help. |
Because I was alone during my youth, some people might think I am a solitude person. But in reality, I am very a sociable and lively person. I had steady relationship with people whoever I had related with. And I was very talented in Physical Education class. It leaded me to awarded 1st honored when I was in junior high school. I was a very curious person. When I was in high school I was very excited whenever I had a research projects and especially I was highly interested in biological research project. Objective of developing my aptitude in biology, I had decided to apply biological science school in university of stony brook. After I have graduated the university, I want to have an occupation that related with medical cares or agriculture. Further more I want to gives positive influence to the unfortunate people. Practical uses of biological science would be my ultimate goals for studying biology. I believe there are still lots of unrevealed mystery in biological science such as genetics and the theory of evolution. I have steady desire in researching genetic science because with study of it, we could establish the better method of curing people. And I do not want to believe that we are a descendant of a monkey; I want to prove it that we are just who we are, with researching on it. I believe destination is a real, because whenever I have had final test during high and junior high school I had got an outstanding grade compare to other classes. It could be nothing defends on one's perspective view, but in my point of view, I believe there was a special reason why I was good at biology. I could be a purpose of God or whomever who has an authority in controlling the world. However I want to study biology. When I was in high school, I used to participate volunteer for community service. Actually I used cleaned their house and washed cloths for a disable people. From my experiences of a volunteer, I had been awakening my heath for disable people that I should be grown up who can help them. Especially In my academic career, I had decided to study biology to be one who can give a medical help for them. With my great interest in biology and desire to help a disable people, it had leaded me to apply University of Stony Brook as biology major. | Because I was alone during my youth, some people might think I am a solitude person. But in reality, I am very a sociable and lively person. I had steady relationship with people whoever I had related with. And I was very talented in Physical Education class. It leaded me to awarded 1st honored when I was in junior high school. I was a very curious person. When I was in high school I was very excited whenever I had research projects, and especially I was highly interested in biological research project. Objective of developing my aptitude in biology, I had decided to apply biological science school in university of stony brook. After I have graduated from the university, I want to have an occupation that related with medical cares or agriculture. Furthermore I want to give positive influence to the unfortunate people. Practical uses of biological science would be my ultimate goals for studying biology. I believe there are still lots of unrevealed mystery in biological science such as genetics and the theory of evolution. I have steady desire in researching genetic science because with study of it, we could establish the better method of curing people. And I do not want to believe that we are a descendant of a monkey; I want to prove it that we are just who we are, with researching on it. I believe destination is a real, because whenever I have had final test during high and junior high school I had got an outstanding grade compare to other classes. It could be nothing defends on one's perspective view, but in my point of view, I believe there was a special reason why I was good at biology. I could be a purpose of God or whomever who has an authority in controlling the world. However, I want to study biology. When I was in high school, I used to participate volunteer for community service. Actually I used cleaned their house and washed cloths for a disabled people. From my experiences of a volunteer, I had been awakening my heath for disable people that I should be grown up who can help them. Especially In my academic career, I had decided to study biology to be one who can give a medical help for them. With my great interest in biology and desire to help a disabled people, it had leaded me to apply University of Stony Brook as biology major. |
"When I was sixteen I started working as an aide for an after school program. I still remember the first day; I walked into the building and saw kids running through the hallways, slamming lockers, calling each other names. At first having a disguisted look on my face I remembered that only three years ago I was one of those kids. I proceed to walk to the cafeteria were the program was being held and saw fifteen students all between the ages of eleven to thirteen, and all with an upset look on their faces. Instead of coming to the program they would rather go home and play with friends or play video games. I knew I had to get across to them somehow, but the hard part was how. My job was to help them with their homework, engage in constructive activates, and most importantly keep them out of trouble. Being a teenager and getting middle school kids to respect you is not as easy as you think. You have some saying "You are my parent." Others were saying "Why do I have to listen to you, not an adult either?" That is when I realized what work I had cut out for me. I remember my supervisor saying the way to get these kids to respect you is to have them fear you, but I do not believe in that. I believe in order to earn respect you must earn it. My biggest challenge was what I was going to do to gain these kids' respect. I could not be too nice because then my kindness would have been mistaken for weakness. But on the other hand I could not be too strict because then I would have been disliked. I came to the conclusion that I needed get to know each student individually. So instead to talking on the phone or playing on the computer like my co worker I decided to be engaged in conversation with each student getting a sense of who they were individually and not looking at them as just kids that I have to watch." | "When I was sixteen I started working as an aide for an after school program. I still remember the first day; I walked into the building and saw kids running through the hallways, slamming lockers, calling each other names. At first having a disguised look on my face I remembered that only three years ago I was one of those kids. I proceed to walk to the cafeteria where the program was being held and saw fifteen students all between the ages of eleven to thirteen, and all with an upset look on their faces. Instead of coming to the program they would rather go home and play with friends or play video games. I knew I had to get across to them somehow, but the hard part was how. My job was to help them with their homework, engage in constructive activates, and most importantly keep them out of trouble. Being a teenager and getting middle school kids to respect you is not as easy as you think. You have some saying "You are my parent." Others were saying "Why do I have to listen to you, not an adult either?" That is when I realized what work I had cut out for me. I remember my supervisor saying the way to get these kids to respect you is to have them fear you, but I do not believe in that. I believe in order to earn respect you must earn it. My biggest challenge was what I was going to do to gain these kids' respect. I could not be too nice because then my kindness would have been mistaken for weakness. But on the other hand I could not be too strict because then I would have been disliked. I came to the conclusion that I needed to get to know each student individually. So instead to talking on the phone or playing on the computer like my co-worker I decided to be engaged in conversation with each student getting a sense of who they were individually and not looking at them as just kids that I have to watch." |
The guiding words to Florida State University, "Vires, Artes, Mores", is a part my life in every way. Strength, skill and character are all qualities that I've built since I was a young child. Vires, meaning strength, has given me the ability to fight for what I want to in life, and keep going even when life isn't how you wanted it to be. Artes, meaning skills, has something I've acquired from learning, not only education but also about myself and knowing where I see myself in the future. Mores, meaning character, was instilled in me through my parents, such as in having good manners and morals. These attributes that I possess help will hopefully guide me into becoming a FSU Seminole. Even back in eighth grade I showed the skills to know what I would want to do with my life. Therefore, I applied to the Culinary Arts Academy at my high school and was accepted. As freshman year began I realized what a great experience this would give me into the field of my choice. Through this class I have been not only exposed to the different opportunities available in Hospitality Management but a chance to see them first hand. My exposure has been broadened awareness about working in the kitchen to now knowing that it could also entail working in hotels, catering, resorts, and much more. Now in my fourth year of this program I am very proud that I was able to demonstrate the commitment and have been given the confidence to pursue this career in higher education. My family has definitely had a major influence on my life and on my decisions toward the culinary arts and hospitality management. Growing up in New England, but traveling the country and Europe, they have allowed me to experience various regional and ethnic influences in food. My parents have always instilled in me to try new things and for that I've built more character. Also, my father's wine business and his job has showed me the fine details of travel and hospitality. I am grateful for the exposure to the very things that lead me to pursue an education and career in them. The excitement I feel to reach my goal of a career in hospitality management is growing stronger each day. The ability to work in a field that blends with my personality and varied interests presents a unique opportunity for me. The philosophy of "vires, artes, mores" is just the guiding words of being a FSU Seminole, but actually possessing the traits shows a true Seminole! | The guiding words to Florida State University, "Virus, Arts, Mores", is a part my life in every way. Strength, skill and character are all qualities that I've built since I was a young child. Virus, meaning strength, has given me the ability to fight for what I want to in life, and keep going even when life isn't how you wanted it to be. Arts, meaning skills, has something I've acquired from learning, not only education but also about myself and knowing where I see myself in the future. Mores, meaning character, was instilled in me through my parents, such as in having good manners and morals. These attributes that I possess help will hopefully guide me into becoming an FSU Seminole. Even back in eighth grade I showed the skills to know what I would want to do with my life. Therefore, I applied to the Culinary Arts Academy at my high school and was accepted. As freshman year began I realized what a great experience this would give me into the field of my choice. Through this class I have been not only exposed to the different opportunities available in Hospitality Management but a chance to see them first hand. My exposure has been broadened awareness about working in the kitchen to now knowing that it could also entail working in hotels, catering, resorts, and much more. Now in my fourth year of this program I am very proud that I was able to demonstrate the commitment and have been given the confidence to pursue this career in higher education. My family has definitely had a major influence on my life and on my decisions toward the culinary arts and hospitality management. Growing up in New England, but traveling the country and Europe, they have allowed me to experience various regional and ethnic influences in food. My parents have always instilled in me to try new things and for that I've built more character. Also, my father's wine business and his job has showed me the fine details of travel and hospitality. I am grateful for the exposure to the very things that lead me to pursue an education and career in them. The excitement I feel to reach my goal of a career in hospitality management is growing stronger each day. The ability to work in a field that blends with my personality and varied interests presents a unique opportunity for me. The philosophy of "virus, arts, mores" is just the guiding words of being an FSU Seminole, but actually possessing the traits shows a true Seminole! |
Individuality is more than just a faction of life, it's the way one shows the world who they are. Individuality allows us as human beings to speak through our values. Values are the things that we live by and guide our life off of. "Vires, Artes, Mores" closely relate to the existence of individuality and values. Vires directly refers to the physical, emotional, and intellectual strengths. All are essential in our everyday life. For me, emotional strength is the most crucial. Having one of my best friends become diagnosed with cancer, I like knowing that I have a sound head on my shoulders. Knowing that when the worst hits the wall, I'll be able to pull myself together. Physical strength is the appearance of strength, but looks can be deceiving. My father and Grandfather have greatly expanded my intellectual mind. I've learned many life lessons between the two of them. As some say, Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, I say nothing could be more right. Beauty comes in many shapes, sizes, and forms. Whether it's a painting, a novel, or a musical piece, there is beauty within. To me the beauty lies with a guitar. I have devoted five years of my life to playing. I play music that is beautiful to me. To love and be dedicated to something that long is a feat within itself. Mores is known as the idea of character, customs, and traditions. Character though, is the key word that sticks out. To have character is something that is hard to come by now. Society has become a mirror image of the mass media around it. I value individuality and the concept of creating your own image. One should let the world know that their unique in every way. To make it through in today's world, you need your values and your individuality. Without them you have nothing to live your life by. "Vires, Artes, Mores" is a map of how to be your own person. | Individuality is more than just a faction of life, it's the way one shows the world who they are. Individuality allows us as human beings to speak through our values. Values are the things that we live by and guide our life off of. "Virus, Arts, Mores" closely relate to the existence of individuality and values. Virus directly refers to the physical, emotional, and intellectual strengths. All are essential in our everyday life. For me, emotional strength is the most crucial. Having one of my best friends become diagnosed with cancer, I like knowing that I have a sound head on my shoulders. Knowing that when the worst hits the wall, I'll be able to pull myself together. Physical strength is the appearance of strength, but looks can be deceiving. My father and Grandfather have greatly expanded my intellectual mind. I've learned many life lessons between the two of them. As some say, Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, I say nothing could be more right. Beauty comes in many shapes, sizes, and forms. Whether it's a painting, a novel, or a musical piece, there is beauty within. To me the beauty lies with a guitar. I have devoted five years of my life to playing. I play music that is beautiful to me. To love and be dedicated to something that long is a feat within itself. Mores are known as the idea of character, customs, and traditions. Character though, is the key word that sticks out. To have character is something that is hard to come by now. Society has become a mirror image of the mass media around it. I value individuality and the concept of creating your own image. One should let the world know that their unique in every way. To make it through in today's world, you need your values and your individuality. Without them, you have nothing to live your life by. "Virus, Arts, Mores" is a map of how to be your own person. |
When I first looked at the essay and read Florida State's motto I realized that this philosophy is a part of everyone's life and they may not aware of it. I know that my parents and my grandparents have taught my brother and I this philosophy and it has always been expected of us. The balance of the three elements, "Vires, Artes, Mores," are essential parts of my life. I have been fortunate enough to be a part of a high school community that excels in both athletics and academics. Through my four years there I have grown and matured in so many ways. Academically I have been pushed to reach my greatest potential and be all that I can be. In athletics I was told everyday for years that what goes into practice should be nothing more than your absolute best. I learned I should not only apply these words in school or on the court but in all aspects of my life. Playing a varsity sport in high school is all consuming. You are always expected to be there and be ready to play hard. The most strenuous part of it is always remembering your academics are as important as your athletics. Keeping your grades up while having so much on your plate is a challenge but it is reachable with hard work and determination. An art teacher, an architect, a musician, a sculptor, a few graphic design artists, a painter and a photographer. These are the people who have surrounded me my entire life, they are my family. Artistic talent has been a constant in my upbringing. Not only the physical concept of art but also the creative minds and personalities of artists. The idea that beauty is in all that we see and we do is a strong belief in my household. It has taught me to appreciate even the smallest of things. I have seen the kind of passion and commitment it takes to accomplish a work of art. That kind of drive has helped inspired me to never give up. As a small child I learned not only right from wrong but that everything we do can somehow effect the people around us. My mother has always been the voice in the back of my head reminding me the importance of social justice in the world. She has always told me it is my moral obligation to help others and to give back to my community. Between home and school I have been a part of many service projects and through them I have learned first had how important it is to serve others in our lives. Through my four years of high school my strength, skill, and morals have helped me become the person I am. Through the traditions, academics, and my desire to be part of the Florida State family I know I can become the person I want to be. | When I first looked at the essay and read Florida State's motto I realized that this philosophy is a part of everyone's life, and they may be not aware of it. I know that my parents and my grandparents have taught my brother and I this philosophy, and it has always been expected of us. The balance of the three elements, "Virus, Arts, Mores," are essential parts of my life. I have been fortunate enough to be a part of a high school community that excels in both athletics and academics. Through my four years there I have grown and matured in so many ways. Academically I have been pushed to reach my greatest potential and be all that I can be. In athletics, I was told every day for years that what goes into practice should be nothing more than your absolute best. I learned I should not only apply these words in school or on the court but in all aspects of my life. Playing a varsity sport in high school is all consuming. You are always expected to be there and be ready to play hard. The most strenuous part of it is always remembering your academics are as important as your athletics. Keeping your grades up while having so much on your plate is a challenge, but it is reachable with hard work and determination. An art teacher, an architect, a musician, a sculptor, a few graphic design artists, a painter and a photographer. These are the people who have surrounded me my entire life, they are my family. Artistic talent has been a constant in my upbringing. Not only the physical concept of art but also the creative minds and personalities of artists. The idea that beauty is in all that we see, and we do is a strong belief in my household. It has taught me to appreciate even the smallest of things. I have seen the kind of passion and commitment it takes to accomplish a work of art. That kind of drive has helped inspired me to never give up. As a small child I learned not only right from wrong but that everything we do can somehow effect the people around us. My mother has always been the voice in the back of my head reminding me the importance of social justice in the world. She has always told me it is my moral obligation to help others and to give back to my community. Between home and school I have been a part of many service projects and through them, I have learned first had how important it is to serve others in our lives. Through my four years of high school my strength, skill, and morals have helped me become the person I am. Through the traditions, academics, and my desire to be part of the Florida State family I know I can become the person I want to be. |
I would really have to say that the "bump in the road" that affected my academics, would have to be health reasons. I have had my share of health issues from freshman through my junior year of high school. Little did I realize what a problem this would become, not only academically but in my personal life also. I really did miss a lot of school and it was hard to keep my grades where they should have been. I missed having fun with friends when I was not feeling well and had to stay home many Friday nights when all my friends were at football games, I was home in bed. So many Saturday mornings, my friends called and wanted me to go to the beach, or shopping I just couldn't get out of bed. I even missed homecoming my junior year. Yes, I bought a ticket, bought a dress that I had searched months to find the perfect one, but as usual I got sick as I was putting on my new dress. I was heart broken. I finally decided that something had to be done. My doctor finally decided surgery was my only option. Not too mention I was sick and tired of medication. Reluctantly, my parents and I agreed to surgery. It really came down to the only thing that would make me better. We decided to have it done over the summer, so I would have plenty of time to recover. I was scared. I never had any surgery and didn't know what to expect. My parents were always very encouraging. They told me that there was noting to be afraid of, and would tell me how much better I will be after. They were right. I am doing so much better. I still feel sore, but as each day goes by, I notice a remarkable difference. This year, my senior year is supposed to be easy. All my hard work was supposed to pay off this year. Not for me, because of an illness I have to work extra hard to prove myself. I know that the "bump in the road" is over, surgery was successful. I have in fact, never felt better physically. I do not want people to think of this as an excuse, or a cop out. It really happened to me. I feel like I missed a lot of events throughout high school due to this bump in the road. I am looking forward to all the senior events and even joining clubs to make the most of my year. Perhaps trying to fit everything in this year will be a challenge, but I want to do what I missed out on my first few years. I plan on going to college, no matter what it takes to get there. I will be the first in my family to attend college, and there is no bump in the road big enough to stop me from doing that. I know with perseverance and determination I will not stop until I succeed. | I would really have to say that the "bump in the road" that affected my academics, would have to be health reasons. I have had my share of health issues from freshman through my junior year of high school. Little did I realize what a problem this would become, not only academically but in my personal life also. I really did miss a lot of school, and it was hard to keep my grades where they should have been. I missed having fun with friends when I was not feeling well and had to stay home many Friday nights when all my friends were at football games, I was home in bed. So many Saturday mornings, my friends called and wanted me to go to the beach, or shopping I just couldn't get out of bed. I even missed homecoming my junior year. Yes, I bought a ticket, bought a dress that I had searched months to find the perfect one, but as usual I got sick as I was putting on my new dress. I was heartbroken. I finally decided that something had to be done. My doctor finally decided surgery was my only option. Not to mention I was sick and tired of medication. Reluctantly, my parents and I agreed to surgery. It really came down to the only thing that would make me better. We decided to have it done over the summer, so I would have plenty of time to recover. I was scared. I never had any surgery and didn't know what to expect. My parents were always very encouraging. They told me that there was noting to be afraid of, and would tell me how much better I will be after. They were right. I am doing so much better. I still feel sore, but as each day goes by, I notice a remarkable difference. This year, my senior year is supposed to be easy. All my hard work was supposed to pay off this year. Not for me, because of an illness I have to work extra hard to prove myself. I know that the "bump in the road" is over, surgery was successful. I have in fact, never felt better physically. Furthermore, I do not want people to think of this as an excuse, or a cop out. It really happened to me. I feel like I missed a lot of events throughout high school due to this bump in the road. I am looking forward to all the senior events and even joining clubs to make the most of my year. Perhaps trying to fit everything in this year will be a challenge, but I want to do what I missed out on my first few years. I plan on going to college, no matter what it takes to get there. I will be the first in my family to attend college, and there is no bump in the road big enough to stop me from doing that. Furthermore, I know with perseverance and determination I will not stop until I succeed. |
How should i continue? how should i describe how this value is reflected in my life. This is where i stopped at... In existence your moral strength is frequently being tested. High School is where I felt my moral was tested everyday, and because of this I have learned how to build up and polish my moral strength. Through High School | How should I continue? How should I describe how this value is reflected in my life. This is where I stopped at... In existence your moral strength is frequently being tested. High School is where I felt my moral was tested every day, and because of this I have learned how to build up and polish my moral strength. Through High School |
When we arrived, the kids immediately ran to greet Rodrigo. They immediately told him what they had done throughout the week. Their sense of intimacy with him brought me down to earth and made me feel more comfortable around them because I felt their need of friendship. I recall talking to this girl named Allison; she shared with me how the day before she banged her head against a pole because she could not stand being detained any longer. The only thing she longed for was freedom. As the words came out of her mouth, I learned to be thankful to God for the freedom, material things, family, educational opportunities, and many other things that he has given me. I could not help myself but to feel guilty about how all my dreams fulfill so easy compared to theirs. Throughout the night, I listened to heartbreaking testimonies of teenagers who have dreams, hopes, and goals to meet in this country, just like me seven years ago when I arrived from Chile. After hearing those stories of desolation and sadness, I shared with them my story of how I overcame many obstacles throughout my life like being unable to speak English and feeling like nobody cared for me. To my surprise, my story gave them a little sense of hope and expectancy towards their future. What had seemed at first as a nerve-racking experience turned out to be a real awakening for my life. This experience helped me realized that I have not suffered at all throughout my life compared to what these teenagers undergo daily. After having meaningful conversations with them, I realized that they were normal people just like me, with whom I could establish lifelong friendships. Whether I continue my education at the University of Florida or anywhere else, I will always have the desire to motivate people into pursing their dreams no matter what the obstacles or circumstances they face | When we arrived, the kids immediately ran to greet Rodrigo. They immediately told him what they had done throughout the week. Their sense of intimacy with him brought me down to earth and made me feel more comfortable around them because I felt their need of friendship. I recall talking to this girl named Allison; she shared with me how the day before she banged her head against a pole because she could not stand being detained any longer. The only thing she longed for was freedom. As the words came out of her mouth, I learned to be thankful to God for the freedom, material things, family, educational opportunities, and many other things that he has given me. I could not help myself but to feel guilty about how all my dreams fulfill, so easy compared to theirs. Throughout the night, I listened to heartbreaking testimonies of teenagers who have dreams, hopes, and goals to meet in this country, just like me seven years ago when I arrived from Chile. After hearing those stories of desolation and sadness, I shared with them my story of how I overcame many obstacles throughout my life like being unable to speak English and feeling like nobody cared for me. To my surprise, my story gave them a little sense of hope and expectancy towards their future. What had seemed at first as a nerve-racking experience turned out to be a real awakening for my life? This experience helped me realized that I have not suffered at all throughout my life compared to what these teenagers undergo daily. After having meaningful conversations with them, I realized that they were normal people just like me, with whom I could establish lifelong friendships. Whether I continue my education at the University of Florida or anywhere else, I will always have the desire to motivate people into pursing their dreams no matter what the obstacles or circumstances they face |
--The first time I heard my boss sing was strange. Normally the radio played over the speakers, echoing the musical history of my childhood. "The songs I grew up with," a coworker my age commonly remarked; the '90s soft rock and pop songs were as much hers as mine. Yet when I arrived at 6:45am, ready to serve coffee so the world could wake up while I longed for sleep, my boss' voice carried over noisy customers and coffee grinders. He hummed pleasantly while bearing a tray of donuts over workers' heads, replenishing not only pastries but passion as well. His simple contentment invigorated us like wildfire. The sounds of a shift at Dunkin' Donuts differ from typical assumptions. Coffee brewed noisily and alarms buzzed. Often a frustrated palm slapped the sugar dispenser, begging the machine to please work today. Once, when I failed to make the dispenser function, a coworker came over and wordlessly slammed it with the heel of her palm. 'That is how you do it,' her eyes declared. The violent strength of my coworkers and I surprised customers. We banged with irritation on the hot chocolate containers, spreading powder evenly throughout. We whacked coin rolls on the counter, chopping the paper-and-metal cylinders in half. We swept away crumbs and torn napkins at a ferocious pace, clearing the floor in minutes. While we behaved cheerily for customers, we took out anger in a gratifying bam or clang. We were pleased and angered as one; customers elicited the same responses from us. We became a family teaching each other something about human cooperation. As one my coworkers' musical voices enticed my ears-many conversed in Portuguese, and I fought to understand through my knowledge of Spanish. Comprehension of their quick conversations grew the longer I worked. Soon those same voices addressed me animatedly, and I soaked in their accents, secretly loving the purring rumble of rolled r's. They became familiar voices, no longer the Portuguese I had imagined hostile in my first month. I learned to appreciate these fascinating people who had made a life in America. About half the staff spoke Portuguese; the rest were English speakers, either students like myself or thirty-something women. Their voices narrated heartbreaking tales of alcoholism, divorce, and financial troubles; yet they spoke with nonchalant contentment. Though struggling they held on, reduced to selling coffee alongside seventeen-year-olds. Before ever working at Dunkin' Donuts, I thought of the place in odors-pungent coffee, warm bagels and muffins, steamy lattes. Now, though, I identify it through sound-not quarters clinking into tip jars or cash registers ringing merrily, but workers moving in unison, their diverse voices serving, judging, and telling the stories of their lives. I think of a deep conversation with my boss about my future after giving my two-week's notice. I think of myself, promising to return next summer. I think of happiness despite hardship, and I wonder if I can live as contently as someone who serves coffee for a living. | --The first time I heard my boss sing was strange. Normally the radio played over the speakers, echoing the musical history of my childhood. "The songs I grew up with," a coworker my age commonly remarked; the '90s soft rock and pop songs were as much hers as mine. Yet when I arrived at 6:45am, ready to serve coffee, so the world could wake up while I longed for sleep, my boss' voice carried over noisy customers and coffee grinders. He hummed pleasantly while bearing a tray of donuts over workers' heads, replenishing not only pastries but passion as well. His simple contentment invigorated us like wildfire. The sounds of a shift at Dunkin' Donuts differ from typical assumptions. Coffee brewed noisily and alarms buzzed. Often a frustrated palm slapped the sugar dispenser, begging the machine to please work today. Once, when I failed to make the dispenser function, a coworker came over and wordlessly slammed it with the heel of her palm. 'That is how you do it,' her eyes declared. The violent strength of my coworkers and I surprised customers. We banged with irritation on the hot chocolate containers, spreading powder evenly throughout. We whacked coin rolls on the counter, chopping the paper-and-metal cylinders in half. Furthermore, we swept away crumbs and torn napkins at a ferocious pace, clearing the floor in minutes. While we behaved cheerily for customers, we took out anger in a gratifying bam or clang. We were pleased and angered as one; customers elicited the same responses from us. We became a family teaching each other something about human cooperation. As one my coworkers' musical voices enticed my ears-many conversed in Portuguese, and I fought to understand through my knowledge of Spanish. Comprehension of their quick conversations grew the longer I worked. Soon those same voices addressed me animatedly, and I soaked in their accents, secretly loving the purring rumble of rolled r's. They became familiar voices, no longer the Portuguese I had imagined hostile in my first month. I learned to appreciate these fascinating people who had made a life in America. About half the staff spoke Portuguese; the rest were English speakers, either students like myself or thirty-something women. Their voices narrated heartbreaking tales of alcoholism, divorce, and financial troubles; yet they spoke with nonchalant contentment. Though struggling they held on, reduced to selling coffee alongside seventeen-year-olds. Before ever working at Dunkin' Donuts, I thought of the place in odors-pungent coffee, warm bagels and muffins, steamy lattes. Now, though, I identify it through sound-not quarters clinking into tip jars or cash registers ringing merrily, but workers moving in unison, their diverse voices serving, judging, and telling the stories of their lives. I think of a deep conversation with my boss about my future after giving my two-week's notice. I think of myself, promising to return next summer. Furthermore, I think of happiness despite hardship, and I wonder if I can live as contently as someone who serves coffee for a living. |
She began to count, "ehad, shtayim..." I was clenching my fists and beginning to sweat... "shalosh"! I screamed at the top of my lungs. I had done it... I had just gotten my nose pierced. Believe it or not, I am deathly afraid of needles. Coming from a conservative Cuban family, neither I, nor anyone else including and especially my parents, saw this coming. Pearls in my ears and a ribbon tied in my neatly pulled back hair each day at school, I just wasn't the type. Rewind one month and you'd find me at my Tia's house with my rowdy Cuban family. Dancing, singing, eating, laughing, this was a typical night for the Susis. Loud sounds of Cuban music explode inside the house; Tio is dancing, Primo is playing the bongos, Abuelo is singing, and that's when I know... the fiesta has officially begun. We all sit around one big table and devour my Tia's famous arroz con pollo. Conversation begins about my big trip to Israel. My trouble-making cousins taunt my parents about how all of their friends who have been to Israel come back with piercings. My parents immediately dismiss their comments because they are convinced I'd never get anything pierced. I dismiss them as well. But... we were all wrong. "Get that thing out of your nose NOW!" my mother yelled from across the airport. "You don't think you're getting into my car with that thing in your nose, do you?" grunted my dad with furious eyes. So, I had my nose pierced for all of... one week. And what did I get for it? A long lecture and grounded... very, very grounded. This summer, spontaneity got to the best of me. Easily inspired, as I am, I fell head over heals for Israeli culture. My curiosity lured me to dress differently, try new foods, and search deeper into myself to find who I really am. What I found is that I have no idea. Am I the conservative Cuban girl with pearl earrings or the free spirit with the pierced nose? I left Israel with a sense of belonging; I am so attracted to the relaxed nature of their culture. Although piercing my nose may not have been the best approach, I have not yet satisfied my curiosity. I am a Jewban, as my friends sometimes call me, because I am Jewish and Cuban and strongly identify as both. In the past several years, I have been on a quest to learn more about my heritage and connect with my extended family in Israel and Cuba. I have spent the last two summers in Israel and visited Cuba with my parents and brother. Before my visits to Israel and Cuba, I thought of the freedoms we enjoy in the United States in political terms - freedom of speech, of the press and of religion. My family's circumstances in Israel changed my thinking. I always believed Israelis enjoyed the same freedoms we do in the United States. But I learned that they lack a basic, fundamental freedom - security. While in Israel, like here, we often spoke of my plans for college. Orr, one of my cousins, who just turned 15, will not go to college out of high school. Instead, he must enter the military. When my cousin Daniel and I went to a party in Tel Aviv by ourselves, his parent's concerns were not the same as my parent's concerns when I go out in Boca Raton. They spoke of terrorists. The suspicion of others and random danger was frightening. I had never before thought of security as freedom. Unlike Israelis, my family in Cuba does have security, but they pay a huge price. Cubans give lip service to freedoms of speech and of the press. My uncle Nene argued with me for hours that his freedom is real. His vote, he told me, even if it must be cast for the candidate selected by the government, is valuable. What Cubans really want, he said, is economic freedom. This was not what I expected from a citizen of a communist country. In Cuba we ate a different relative's house each night. Each time what they fed us took them all day to buy, often on the black market. I remember not thinking one night and eating an entire tomato at dinner - the only tomato. When my parents later told me that my Cuban relatives rarely ate tomatoes or fresh vegetables, I cried. I feel awful when I think of it to this day. At that moment, however, I understood that my Uncle Nene wanted the freedom to feed his family. That was all the freedom he needed. I took our freedoms for granted. I took my security for granted. I took the abundance the American free market economy allows for granted. I never understood the nuances. I don't think many Americans do. I know my friends do not. They have nothing to compare. This year I turn 18 and get to vote for the first time. I may be naïve, but my first vote for President will be for the man that I believe best appreciates these and other nuances of freedom. | She began to count, "had, stadium..." I was clenching my fists and beginning to sweat... "Shiloh"! I screamed at the top of my lungs. Furthermore, I had done it... Furthermore, I had just gotten my nose pierced. Believe it or not, I am deathly afraid of needles. Coming from a conservative Cuban family, neither I, nor anyone else includes and especially my parents, saw this coming. Pearls in my ears and a ribbon tied in my neatly pulled back hair each day at school, I just wasn't the type. Rewind one month, and you'd find me at my Tia's house with my rowdy Cuban family. Dancing, singing, eating, laughing, this was a typical night for the Susie. Loud sounds of Cuban music explode inside the house; To is dancing, Prime is playing the bongos, Abuela is singing, and that's when I know... the fiesta has officially begun. We all sit around one big table and devour my Tia's famous arrow con poll. Conversation begins about my big trip to Israel. My trouble-making cousins taunt my parents about how all of their friends who have been to Israel come back with piercings. My parents immediately dismiss their comments because they are convinced I'd never get anything pierced. I dismiss them as well. But... we were all wrong. "Get that thing out of your nose NOW!" my mother yelled from across the airport. "You don't think you're getting into my car with that thing in your nose, do you?" grunted my dad with furious eyes. So, I had my nose pierced for all of... one week. And what did I get for it? A long lecture and grounded... very, very grounded. This summer, spontaneity got to the best of me. Easily inspired, as I am, I fell head over heals for Israeli culture. My curiosity lured me to dress differently, try new foods, and search deeper into myself to find who I really am. What I found is that I have no idea. Am I the conservative Cuban girl with pearl earrings or the free spirit with the pierced nose? I left Israel with a sense of belonging; I am so attracted to the relaxed nature of their culture. Although piercing my nose may not have been the best approach, I have not yet satisfied my curiosity. I am a Jew ban, as my friends sometimes call me, because I am Jewish and Cuban and strongly identify as both. In the past several years, I have been on a quest to learn more about my heritage and connect with my extended family in Israel and Cuba. I have spent the last two summers in Israel and visited Cuba with my parents and brother. Before my visits to Israel and Cuba, I thought of the freedoms we enjoy in the United States in political terms - freedom of speech, of the press and of religion. My family's circumstances in Israel changed my thinking. I always believed Israelis enjoyed the same freedoms we do in the United States. But I learned that they lack a basic, fundamental freedom - security. While in Israel, like here, we often spoke of my plans for college. Orr, one of my cousins, who just turned 15, will not go to college out of high school. Instead, he must enter the military. When my cousin Daniel and I went to a party in Tel Aviv by ourselves, his parent's concerns were not the same as my parent's concerns when I go out in Boca Raton. They spoke of terrorists. The suspicion of others and random danger was frightening. I had never before thought of security as freedom. Unlike Israelis, my family in Cuba does have security, but they pay a huge price. Cubans give lip service to freedoms of speech and of the press. My uncle Nine argued with me for hours that his freedom is real. His vote, he told me, even if it must be cast for the candidate selected by the government, is valuable. What Cubans really want, he said, is economic freedom. This was not what I expected from a citizen of a communist country. In Cuba, we ate a different relative's house each night. Each time what they fed us took them all day to buy, often on the black market. I remember not thinking one night and eating an entire tomato at dinner - the only tomato. When my parents later told me that my Cuban relatives rarely ate tomatoes or fresh vegetables, I cried. I feel awful when I think of it to this day. At that moment, however, I understood that my Uncle Nine wanted the freedom to feed his family. That was all the freedom he needed. I took our freedoms for granted. I took my security for granted. Furthermore, I took the abundance the American free market economy allows for granted. Furthermore, I never understood the nuances. Furthermore, I don't think many Americans do. Furthermore, I know my friends do not. They have nothing to compare. This year I turn 18 and get to vote for the first time. I may be naïve, but my first vote for President will be for the man that I believe best appreciates these and other nuances of freedom. |
"Florida State's guiding words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" which in Latin mean "Strength, Intellect, and Character" are all words other people and myself would use to describe me. The one that I can relate to best would have to be "Vires." Sometimes strength is found from falling down and building yourself back up. On September 12, 2006 I fell down, but I never wanted to get back up. This was the day my godmother died, and also the very day she was diagnosed with breast cancer, stage 4. Throughout the 5 years she battled breast cancer she never once complained. She was the women that walked down the street with a shinny bald head but had a smile on her face. On the day the doctor told her she had 6 months to live, she laughed because she knew she was stronger than that. The strength she has given is unexplainable. After watching years of her suffer but not hearing a single complaint I now know the true meaning of the Latin word "Vires." She has given me moral, physical, and intellectual strength that one cannot describe. After attending numerous breast cancer walks with her I wanted to reach out to the community and spread that same strength she had given me to others still fighting. I called the Susan G. Koman research center and asked how I could help in the upcoming Breast Cancer walk. They asked me if I was interested in being the leader for all Dade County teenagers involved in the "I AM THE CURE" program. This was a program designed to reach out to the community and let it be known that early detection is the key to survival. That included putting up flyers around the community, and handing out pamphlets at the upcoming Susan G.Koman walk. At first I was hesitant I was not sure how I could possibly find time considering I had cheerleading practice, student council, and my academics to stay on top of. The next week I thought long and hard about whether I could handle it, I decided that if I stayed focused and organized I could defiantly find time. After 3 weeks of going around to local schools, restaurants, and businesses I found 250 teenage volunteers willing to help out in the race. The morning of the race we all arrived at Bay Side Park at 5am, wearing bright green shirts that said "I AM THE CURE" on the front, and on the back were the words "Every Person, Every Where." This was to state that breast cancer has no boundaries, be it age, gender, socioeconomic status or geographic location. Everyone is at risk. When the race began we handed out over 15,000 pamphlets, key chains, and t-shirts all stating the simple steps to early detection. During the survival ceremony I could not help but smile knowing that I had saved at least one person's life earlier that day. When the survivors began to walk I saw in every single woman's eyes that same strength Illiana O'Connor, my godmother, had up until her last day. It was that strength that got me out of bed that morning determined to make a difference." | "Florida State's guiding words, "Virus, Arts, Mores" which in Latin mean "Strength, Intellect, and Character" are all words other people and myself would use to describe me. The one that I can relate to best would have to be "Virus." Sometimes strength is found from falling down and building yourself back up. On September 12, 2006, I fell down, but I never wanted to get back up. This was the day my godmother died, and also the very day she was diagnosed with breast cancer, stage 4. Throughout the 5 years she battled breast cancer she never once complained. She was the women that walked down the street with a shinny bald head but had a smile on her face. On the day the doctor told her she had 6 months to live, she laughed because she knew she was stronger than that. The strength she has given is unexplainable. After watching years of her suffer but not hearing a single complaint I now know the true meaning of the Latin word "Virus." She has given me moral, physical, and intellectual strength that one cannot describe. After attending numerous breast cancer walks with her, I wanted to reach out to the community and spread that same strength she had given me to others still fighting. I called the Susan G. Woman research center and asked how I could help in the upcoming Breast Cancer walk. They asked me if I was interested in being the leader for all Dade County teenagers involved in the "I AM THE CURE" program. This was a program designed to reach out to the community and let it be known that early detection is the key to survival. That included putting up flyers around the community, and handing out pamphlets at the upcoming Susan G. Koman walk. At first, I was hesitant I was not sure how I could possibly find time considering I had cheerleading practice, student council, and my academics to stay on top of. The next week I thought long and hard about whether I could handle it, I decided that if I stayed focused and organized I could defiantly find time. After 3 weeks of going around to local schools, restaurants, and businesses I found 250 teenage volunteers willing to help out in the race. The morning of the race we all arrived at Bay Side Park at 5am, wearing bright green shirts that said "I AM THE CURE" on the front, and on the back were the words "Every Person, Everywhere." This was to state that breast cancer has no boundaries, be it age, gender, socioeconomic status or geographic location. Everyone is at risk. When the race began we handed out over 15,000 pamphlets, keychains, and t-shirts all stating the simple steps to early detection. During the survival ceremony I could not help but smile knowing that I had saved at least one person's life earlier that day. When the survivors began to walk I saw in every single woman's eyes that same strength Lilliana O'Connor, my godmother, had up until her last day. It was that strength that got me out of bed that morning determined to make a difference." |
I think the word that best fits me is Vires. Last track season was kind of a rough time of the year for me. All last school year I had been training for the triple jump. I wanted to do so good that following season, but it did not go as planned. In the first meet I got hurt. I pulled my hip flexor, it was very painful. I had felt that all that training during offseason was wasted. I really felt like there was no point in running that season because I would not be at 100% till the very end. But I could not let my team mates down, especially since I was a captain. Through out that whole season I dug deep and tried to do the best I could in every event. I would win every meet except the really big ones, which made me very frustrated. The coaches and my team mates new I could do a lot better than what I was doing, but I could not make any excuses, because leaders do not make excuses. So it got closer to the end of the season and I was getting a little better, I was finally able to receive a gold medal at a big meet. Getting that gold boosted my confidence up immensely. I was so excited because next week was regions and I was now the 2nd best jumper in region 6 AAA. Regions finally came up and I was ready to jump, at least I thought I was. I did horrible. I did not have one good jump. The second string jumper beat me. I was so embarrassed and torn up at the same time. I cried until everyone left the jumping pits. My coaches and friends tried to tell me to keep my head up, but I could not. I was way to embarrassed. I kept telling myself "this is not going to happen again". I made sure that I busted my butt to get better in every aspect. This summer I went to the weight room every single day and conditioned every single. I am stronger than I have ever been, and I know for a fact that strength was one of the reasons why I did not do well. All I have to do is keep a good mind set and things should go well. No matter how strong one is physically, if they are not strong mentally then the physical strength will not help one much. Through track and Field I have obtained better physical and mental power, which is why I choose vires. I am a hard working and determined student. When I put my mind to something it should come out the way I want it, and if it does not I will dust myself off and try again. I know FSU wants hardworking students that take school seriously. Not only do I feel I can help the school out academically but I can help out when it comes to athletics. I am well rounded student with a passion to do well, which makes me a good fit for Florida State University. | I think the word that best fits me is Virus. Last track season was kind of a rough time of the year for me. All last school year I had been training for the triple jump. I wanted to do so good that following season, but it did not go as planned. In the first meet I got hurt. I pulled my hip flexor, it was very painful. I had felt that all that training during off season was wasted. Furthermore, I really felt like there was no point in running that season because I would not be at 100% till the very end. But I could not let my teammates down, especially since I was a captain. Throughout that whole season I dug deep and tried to do the best I could in every event. I would win every meet except the huge ones, which made me very frustrated. The coaches and my teammates new I could do a lot better than what I was doing, but I could not make any excuses, because leaders do not make excuses. So it got closer to the end of the season, and I was getting a little better, I was finally able to receive a gold medal at a big meet. Getting that gold boosted my confidence up immensely. I was so excited because next week was regions, and I was now the 2nd best jumper in region 6 AAA. Regions finally came up, and I was ready to jump, at least I thought I was. I did horrible. I did not have one good jump. The second string jumper beat me. I was so embarrassed and torn up at the same time. I cried until everyone left the jumping pits. My coaches and friends tried to tell me to keep my head up, but I could not. I was way too embarrassed. I kept telling myself "this is not going to happen again". Furthermore, I made sure that I busted my butt to get better in every aspect. This summer I went to the weight room every single day and conditioned every single. I am stronger than I have ever been, and I know for a fact that strength was one of the reasons why I did not do well. All I have to do is keep a good mind set and things should go well. No matter how strong one is physically, if they are not strong mentally then the physical strength will not help one much. Through track and Field I have obtained better physical and mental power, which is why I choose virus. I am a hardworking and determined student. When I put my mind to something it should come out the way I want it, and if it does not, I will dust myself off and try again. I know FSU wants hardworking students that take school seriously. Not only do I feel I can help the school out academically, but I can help out when it comes to athletics. I am well-rounded student with a passion to do well, which makes me a good fit for Florida State University. |
As I walk through the doorway, I am immersed in a cloud of dust and debris. The room fills with the sound of wheezing and gasps for air. I look around at what used to be someone's home. Windows are shattered, furniture is scattered about the room, and the remnants of a life lye in disarray. Outside, the picture is just as grim. I sigh as I walk through the downtown that had been devastated by the flood of 2008. As I proceed, I see unbelievable destruction. Every neighborhood resembles a war zone. Orange signs posted on doors state, "CONDEMNED" in bold lettering. Cars are scattered about, lifeless, and covered in filth. Piles of garbage line the streets. I stop to stare in awe at what used to be the center of my town. I pass the YMCA where I exercise. The massive two-story windows are shattered, and the brand new Olympic sized swimming pool are filled with appliances, furniture, and debris of all kinds. Thousands of homes...destroyed. Millions of dollars in damage caused...overnight. How could this have happened? I often volunteer for worthy causes, but this is something extraordinarily different. When the water recedes, I am inspired to see how the community comes together. One day, I decide to work with my church group to help a single woman recover from the disaster. I arrive at the scene in the scorching weather. I wipe the sweat from my brow as I stare at the mass of destruction. I slide the pasty white respirator over my face and walk toward the home. Before I reach the doorway, I pass my friends who are comforting the woman. I expect to see her broken and despondent. However, I notice that she is smiling. I stand there bewildered. How can she be cheerful? Everything she owns is decimated. Her neighborhood has been washed away. I ponder this for hours as we attempt to clean the home. As I strike the side of the home, pieces of the walls and pieces of a life fall all around me. We move load after load of rubble out the door, yet the woman continues to glow. I continue with my task, still pensive about the woman's disposition. When we finish, I ask her, "I couldn't help but notice that you have been smiling all day?" A large grin forms on her face as she speaks these words, "Why shouldn't I smile? I am the luckiest woman in the world." She approaches me in friendship and hugs me tight. Later that night, I lie in my bed, pondering what the woman had said to me. I think about how the flood had changed the lives of thousands in my community. I had spent so much time feeling sorry for them, but I think I now understand something profound. No one could have foreseen this disaster, and no one person can fix it. In the wake of this cataclysm, the community is coming together in goodwill and companionship. The woman knows that we alone can't rebuild her home. We are just a group of kids from a local high school. However, I now see that, to the woman, the physical work is not the most important resource we provide. Instead, we help the woman in a deeper way by spending time with her; laughing, eating cookies, and simply showing her that we care. | As I walk through the doorway, I am immersed in a cloud of dust and debris. The room fills with the sound of wheezing and gasps for air. I look around at what used to be someone's home. Windows are shattered, furniture is scattered about the room, and the remnants of a life lye in disarray. Outside, the picture is just as grim. I sigh as I walk through the downtown that had been devastated by the flood of 2008. As I proceed, I see unbelievable destruction. Every neighborhood resembles a war zone. Orange signs posted on doors state, "CONDEMNED" in bold lettering. Cars are scattered about, lifeless, and covered in filth. Piles of garbage line the streets. I stop to stare in awe at what used to be the center of my town. I pass the YMCA where I exercise. The massive two-story windows are shattered, and the brand-new Olympic sized swimming pool are filled with appliances, furniture, and debris of all kinds. Thousands of homes...destroyed. Millions of dollars in damage caused...overnight. How could this have happened? I often volunteer for worthy causes, but this is something extraordinarily different. When the water recedes, I am inspired to see how the community comes together. One day, I decide to work with my church group to help a single woman recover from the disaster. I arrive at the scene in the scorching weather. I wipe the sweat from my brow as I stare at the mass of destruction. Furthermore, I slide the pasty white respirator over my face and walk toward the home. Before I reach the doorway, I pass my friends who are comforting the woman. I expect to see her broken and despondent. However, I notice that she is smiling. I stand there bewildered. How can she be cheerful? Everything she owns is decimated. Her neighborhood has been washed away. I ponder this for hours as we attempt to clean the home. As I strike the side of the home, pieces of the walls and pieces of a life fall all around me. We move load after load of rubble out the door, yet the woman continues to glow. I continue with my task, still pensive about the woman's disposition. When we finish, I ask her, "I couldn't help but notice that you have been smiling all day?" A large grin forms on her face as she speaks these words, "Why shouldn't I smile? I am the luckiest woman in the world." She approaches me in friendship and hugs me tight. Later that night, I lie in my bed, pondering what the woman had said to me. I think about how the flood had changed the lives of thousands in my community. I had spent so much time feeling sorry for them, but I think I now understand something profound. No one could have foreseen this disaster, and no one person can fix it. In the wake of this cataclysm, the community is coming together in goodwill and companionship. The woman knows that we alone can't rebuild her home. We are just a group of kids from a local high school. However, I now see that, to the woman, the physical work is not the most important resource we provide. Instead, we help the woman in a deeper way by spending time with her; laughing, eating cookies, and simply showing her that we care. |
There is no feeling like it. I sit at a cold, hardwood desk staring at the opposing team. My heart is racing. All sense of clemency and grace escapes as the judge enters the room. Everyone jumps to their feet proudly with militaristic speed. The atmosphere is tense but hushed. "Does the defense have a witness to present?" barks the judge. "Yes your honor!" I exclaim as I eagerly spring from my chair. My pulse is pounding in my throat as I pose questions to my witness. "Objection, your Honor!" screams a lawyer from the opposing counsel. "This question calls for the witness to testify to hearsay." I inhale deeply; a small smile forms at the corner of my mouth; and I know exactly how to respond. "Your Honor, this question does not call for an out of court declaration and is therefore not hearsay." I turn back toward the bench, and I continue with my questioning. Mock Trial is not only a competitive extracurricular activity, but it is also a program that conveys to high school and college students invaluable oratory skills and a complex understanding of the United States Judicial System. Every student who participates in mock trial understands the high degree of commitment and mental strain that the program demands, but the competitive trials that make our hearts race remind us of why we are involved in the first place - not to glorify ourselves, but to strive to represent our communities well. Could I get some hlep with structuring and a decent closing. It doesn't end well right now. Thanks!!! | There is no feeling like it. I sit at a cold, hardwood desk staring at the opposing team. My heart is racing. All sense of clemency and grace escapes as the judge enters the room. Everyone jumps to their feet proudly with militaristic speed. The atmosphere is tense but hushed. "Does the defense have a witness to present?" barks the judge. "Yes your honor!" I exclaim as I eagerly spring from my chair. My pulse is pounding in my throat as I pose questions to my witness. "Objection, your Honor!" screams a lawyer from the opposing counsel. "This question calls for the witness to testify to hearsay." I inhale deeply; a small smile forms at the corner of my mouth; and I know exactly how to respond. "Your Honor, this question does not call for an out-of-court declaration and is therefore not hearsay." I turn back toward the bench, and I continue with my questioning. Mock Trial is not only a competitive extracurricular activity, but it is also a program that conveys to high school and college students invaluable oratory skills and a complex understanding of the United States Judicial System. Every student who participates in mock trial understands the high degree of commitment and mental strain that the program demands, but the competitive trials that make our hearts race remind us of why we are involved in the first place - not to glorify ourselves, but to strive to represent our communities well. Could I get some help with structuring and a decent closing? It doesn't end well right now. Thanks!!! |
I was entering my junior year in high school. I felt that it was necessary to get a job. It became annoying always asking my parents for money. I wanted to spend my own money. I also wanted to save my money for college. My parents raised me believing that you must work for the things you want. I had to understand the value of a dollar and what it meant to work. I enjoyed the challenge of working. To be honest, I really enjoyed receiving a paycheck every two weeks. This work experience benefited me in many ways. I received a financial education. With my limited funds, I knew that I had to budget and plan for things that I wanted to buy. Also, I had to overcome the temptation of spending all of my paycheck on clothes and video games. If I wanted something, I had to save money. In addition, I learned valuable people skills. I interacted with people from all backgrounds and ... | I was entering my junior year in high school. I felt that it was necessary to get a job. It became annoying always asking my parents for money. I wanted to spend my own money. I also wanted to save my money for college. My parents raised me believing that you must work for the things you want. I had to understand the value of a dollar and what it meant to work. I enjoyed the challenge of working. To be honest, I really enjoyed receiving a paycheck every two weeks. This work experience benefited me in many ways. I received a financial education. With my limited funds, I knew that I had to budget and plan for things that I wanted to buy. Also, I had to overcome the temptation of spending all of my paycheck on clothes and video games. If I wanted something, I had to save money. In addition, I learned valuable people skills. I interacted with people from all backgrounds and ... |
I need some critique on my essay, I would appreciate any help given... please be brutal, I need to improve. :)Thank you in advance to anyone that helps revise this! In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school. Life is full of surprises, things happen for unknown reasons that change our lives and it is these things that shape us as we grow. It is not the experience that defines us, but our response, the emotion that we fill the experience with, is what will be remembered. I recall a certain event in my life that helped shape me to be the person that I am today; it is because of that day that I want to be a physician. Everyone is faced with a tragic situation in life, whether the death of a loved one or a severe illness, and it is usually these frightening moments that open our eyes and make us realize how lucky we are to be alive and to live the life that we have. I did not know my grandparents well as we moved from Ukraine to America when I was seven. My parents are young and proud to have five wonderful, healthy children. My growing up experience felt similar to Siddhartha Gautama's- Buddha- we were never exposed to death or illness. Life was secluded, sheltered; we were protected from the grief of the world, you'd always hear about the death of a classmates' grandparent but you did not know what that felt like. Like Siddhartha Gautama, you cannot live in this "magical world" forever but will have to venture out sooner or later and then you'll be hit with these overwhelming feelings, tragedies, sorrow. I was only eleven when my younger brother by a year, awoke suddenly in the middle of the night, disoriented. My parents rushed over to his room, but he couldn't speak, his words were jumbled syllables, incomprehensible. My dad grabbed me for a translator and rushed to the emergency room. I remember my brother lying on a bed surrounded by doctors, the machines were humming and flashing as he lied still. In desperation, my dad threw on a medical coat and attempted to help as best as he could as I stood less that ten feet away, shocked and in tears. Here was my best friend, my closest sibling, one who was always there for me as I was for him, and now in this frightening moment there was nothing I could do to help him. Those doctors were complete strangers! But it was in their hands that so many people trusted the lives of their loved ones. They are brave, they are intelligent, and they are the bringers of good news. My brother soon recovered and was soon able to go home. That was a terrifying new experience for us but we were all thankful that everything turned out all right. It is also the reason why I want to pursue a career as a physician. What those people do is beyond incredible, amazing, or courageous. You hear stories of young happy families who are struck with these tragedies, one in particular is of a father who was diagnosed with a life threatening illness and needed a heart transplant. He was a young father of two and had it not been for the medical care that he received he would not have be able to live to see his children grow up, get married, and become a grandparent. We are all lucky to be alive, to be able to see, talk, hear, these little things are taken for granted but there are always people who are not capable of performing these little things. I want to be a doctor so I could help people, it is my passion and it is something that I will pursue. It is intimidating to think that your future depends on what you do in these teenage years, but I have already taken the first step to accomplishing my goal. I'm preparing myself in high school by taking AP classes and applying to a college that will make a difference in my preparation for my career. When considering which school to apply to, many factors come in and for many aspiring students, rank is the deciding factor. UF has a lot offer, its dedication to medicine and partnership with Shands Hospital is something that no other college can compete with, and to top it all off, it has a high ranking as well. I have the determination and motivation to accomplish my dream, and I am pursuing the education that will help me achieve my future. AAB0123 | I need some critique on my essay, I would appreciate any help given... please be brutal, I need to improve. :)Thank you in advance to anyone that helps revise this! In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the OF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school. Life is full of surprises, things happen for unknown reasons that change our lives, and it is these things that shape us as we grow. It is not the experience that defines us, but our response, the emotion that we fill the experience with, is what will be remembered. I recall a certain event in my life that helped shape me to be the person that I am today; it is because of that day that I want to be a physician. Everyone is faced with a tragic situation in life, whether the death of a loved one or a severe illness, and it is usually these frightening moments that open our eyes and make us realize how lucky we are to be alive and to live the life that we have. I did not know my grandparents well as we moved from Ukraine to America when I was seven. My parents are young and proud to have five wonderful, healthy children. My growing up experience felt similar to Siddhārtha Gautama's- Buddha-we were never exposed to death or illness. Life was secluded, sheltered; we were protected from the grief of the world, you'd always hear about the death of a classmates' grandparent, but you did not know what that felt like. Like Siddhārtha Gautama, you cannot live in this "magical world" forever but will have to venture out sooner or later and then you'll be hit with these overwhelming feelings, tragedies, sorrow. I was only eleven when my younger brother by a year, awoke suddenly in the middle of the night, disoriented. My parents rushed over to his room, but he couldn't speak, his words were jumbled syllables, incomprehensible. My dad grabbed me for a translator and rushed to the emergency room. I remember my brother lying on a bed surrounded by doctors, the machines were humming and flashing as he lied still. In desperation, my dad threw on a medical coat and attempted to help as good as he could as I stood less than ten feet away, shocked and in tears. Here was my best friend, my closest sibling, one who was always there for me as I was for him, and now in this frightening moment there was nothing I could do to help him. Those doctors were complete strangers! But it was in their hands that so many people trusted the lives of their loved ones. They are brave, they are intelligent, and they are the bringers of good news. My brother soon recovered and was soon able to go home. That was a terrifying new experience for us, but we were all thankful that everything turned out all right. It is also the reason why I want to pursue a career as a physician. What those people do is beyond incredible, amazing, or courageous. You hear stories of young happy families who are struck with these tragedies, one in particular is of a father who was diagnosed with a life-threatening illness and needed a heart transplant. He was a young father of two and had it not been for the medical care that he received he would not have been able to live to see his children grow up, get married, and become a grandparent. We are all lucky to be alive, to be able to see, talk, hear, these little things are taken for granted, but there are always people who are not capable of performing these little things. I want to be a doctor, so I could help people, it is my passion, and it is something that I will pursue. It is intimidating to think that your future depends on what you do in these teenage years, but I have already taken the first step to accomplishing my goal. I'm preparing myself in high school by taking AP classes and applying to a college that will make a difference in my preparation for my career. When considering which school to apply to, many factors come in and for many aspiring students, rank is the deciding factor. OF has a lot offer, its dedication to medicine and partnership with Hands Hospital is something that no other college can compete with, and to top it all off, it has a high ranking as well. I have the determination and motivation to accomplish my dream, and I am pursuing the education that will help me achieve my future. AAB0123 |
I chose to write my essay on the Stonewall riots. I wrote my introduction and thesis and turned that in to my professor and she said that my thesis wasn't what she was looking for. She said to include how this movement more specifically relates to me and make sure the thesis more specifically addresses the prompt. I don't really know where to go from here, could someone help me come up with a better thesis? Or give examples on what my professor wants? Following Senator McCarthy's emphasis on anti-communism homosexuals were considered by the United States Government as un-American, subversive and a security risk. The government used every resource to find, arrest, and publicly humiliate every man and woman that was even suspected of being gay. Police would perform routine raids to remove gays from parks, bars, and beaches. The Stonewall Inn was a gay bar that stood out from all the rest. Even with no running water, overrun toilets and watered down drinks many consider The Stonewall Inn as the start of the Gay Rights Movement. Because of this outrageous oppression of the gay society, rioters valiantly emerged from the Stonewall Inn fighting for their rights and became activists that continue to fight and protect the rights I enjoy today. | I chose to write my essay on the Stonewall riots. I wrote my introduction and thesis and turned that in to my professor, and she said that my thesis wasn't what she was looking for. She said to include how this movement more specifically relates to me and make sure the thesis more specifically addresses the prompt. I don't really know where to go from here, could someone help me come up with a better thesis? Or give examples on what my professor wants? Following Senator McCarthy's emphasis on anti-communism homosexuals were considered by the United States Government as un-American, subversive and a security risk. The government used every resource to find, arrest, and publicly humiliate every man and woman that was even suspected of being gay. Police would perform routine raids to remove gays from parks, bars, and beaches. The Stonewall Inn was a gay bar that stood out from all the rest. Even with no running water, overrun toilets and watered down drinks many consider The Stonewall Inn as the start of the Gay Rights Movement. Because of this outrageous oppression of the gay society, rioters valiantly emerged from the Stonewall Inn fighting for their rights and became activists that continue to fight and protect the rights I enjoy today. |
Statement of Purpose: The fear and thrill of an architectural student review is unmatched by any other evaluation or assignment. After hours upon hours of tedious revisions and several sleepless nights, you are never "done," you are simply "out of time." The only thing that maintains confidence is the strength in conviction of design ideas and processes. My experiences at the University of Minnesota offered me a chance to learn about the principles of architecture, develop representation skills, and gain perspective to think like a designer. Both during school and upon graduation, I have held many intern positions in the fields of lighting design, interior design, graphic design, designbuild, as well as architecture. From this diverse work palette, I have a more holistic view of how architecture comes to be, causing me to appreciate all players involved. This has reaffirmed my goals as an architect, both with enhancement of skill and knowledge, as well as admiration for the profession. The beauty of architecture is that while it stands still, it has the potential to move. Not all creations are successful, certainly, but I believe that the pursuit of that ideal is worth the demanding professional journey. At this point in my career, I still cannot answer the question "What?" when it comes to my design ambition. But I can always answer "Why?" and "How?" My specific goals and the means to the end remain to be seen, but I know why I pursue this profession. I seek innovation and appreciation, the opportunity to make architecture move people. I am driven by what I do not know, but am confident that I can know. I have a passion for design, and a thirst for learning, and matched with my overall ambition, I am confident in the quality of my contribution to my own education. My purpose circles back to that same fear and thrill of a review. To stand next to your work and defend your design process at the risk of bad reception by the jurors, while terrifying, is a proud moment. I have been hooked on that feeling since my first review. It opened my eyes to my passion and inspired me to push forward, even after the deadline has passed. The world of design is exhilarating, especially in an ever-changing global society. The horizon calls for solutions in building design responding to the environment, politics, technology, and changing social standards. Architecture is not just the study of structure, but more importantly, the study of people. I want to continue to add to my education and professional experience to respond to these modern challenges. While proud of my accomplishments to date, I am not satisfied with my current level of understanding and experience. My successes have only caused me to realize that I want to know more, and that I am not finished, nor out of time. With a Master of Architecture from ___________, I look forward to adding to my experience, technical knowledge, and gaining a deeper comprehension of architecture as a practice. I know my skills will thrive in an academic environment of __________'s caliber, where excellence is the standard and innovative thinking is encouraged. | Statement of Purpose: The fear and thrill of an architectural student review is unmatched by any other evaluation or assignment. After hours upon hours of tedious revisions and several sleepless nights, you are never "done," you are simply "out of time." The only thing that maintains confidence is the strength in conviction of design ideas and processes. My experiences at the University of Minnesota offered me a chance to learn about the principles of architecture, develop representation skills, and gain perspective to think like a designer. Both during school and upon graduation, I have held many intern positions in the fields of lighting design, interior design, graphic design, design build, as well as architecture. From this diverse work palette, I have a more holistic view of how architecture comes to be, causing me to appreciate all players involved. This has reaffirmed my goals as an architect, both with enhancement of skill and knowledge, as well as admiration for the profession. The beauty of architecture is that while it stands still, it has the potential to move. Not all creations are successful, certainly, but I believe that the pursuit of that ideal is worth the demanding professional journey. At this point in my career, I still cannot answer the question "What?" when it comes to my design ambition. But I can always answer "Why?" and "How?" My specific goals and the means to the end remain to be seen, but I know why I pursue this profession. I seek innovation and appreciation, the opportunity to make architecture move people. I am driven by what I do not know, but am confident that I can know. Furthermore, I have a passion for design, and a thirst for learning, and matched with my overall ambition, I am confident in the quality of my contribution to my own education. My purpose circles back to that same fear and thrill of a review. To stand next to your work and defend your design process at the risk of bad reception by the jurors, while terrifying, is a proud moment. I have been hooked on that feeling since my first review. It opened my eyes to my passion and inspired me to push forward, even after the deadline has passed. The world of design is exhilarating, especially in an ever-changing global society. The horizon calls for solutions in building design responding to the environment, politics, technology, and changing social standards. Architecture is not just the study of structure, but more importantly, the study of people. I want to continue to add to my education and professional experience to respond to these modern challenges. While proud of my accomplishments to date, I am not satisfied with my current level of understanding and experience. My successes have only caused me to realize that I want to know more, and that I am not finished, nor out of time. With a Master of Architecture from ___________, I look forward to adding to my experience, technical knowledge, and gaining a deeper comprehension of architecture as a practice. I know my skills will thrive in an academic environment of __________'s caliber, where excellence is the standard and innovative thinking is encouraged. |
Many college freshmen fear the distance and separation from their loved ones. I however accept the challenge. I have learned through this experience that disconnection makes you stronger. | Many college freshmen fear the distance and separation from their loved ones. I however accept the challenge. I have learned through this experience that disconnection makes you stronger. |
When I was an elementary school student, I found out, I had an interest and aptitude for an art. With my passion on my art it leaded me to study at Sunhwa Art High school and study a fiber art at Ehwa Women University. With using of shear, dying a fiber, weaving, embroidery for main materials, I tried to express a fiber art during college years. Sensitivity creativity and diversity was must requirements at the embroidery, And I found out that I had a talents on embroidery. And with diversity of embroidery, I had desire to use it practically to cloths. My desire leaded me to work at LG Fashion. When I was taking an examination for service in a business company my portfolio had been admired company's staff and the company gave me a position at brand name "DAKS" It was a good opportunity to develop my art senses and career during 2years and I tried my best with my passion of art. But during I worked at Korean company name "LG Fashion," I had realized it was limited to develop my art sense compare to other countries especially USA. I wanted to stay equal with USA's fabric art level. I am still hunger to learn more about fabric art and silhouette, because I believe art is unlimited and my unlimited passion on art had lead me to apply this school. When I was a sophomore at university, I studied as an interchanged student for taking summer class. After finish my class, I reminded myself "someday I would come here again and study fashion whatever it cost" and I really interest in art sense and practical uses of art, I believe this school has very advance education system on that than other academic place. My specialty is drawing and creativeness, I have strong faith that I could me more professional if I study here. And my ultimate goal is making Korean art stay equal with USA. | When I was an elementary school student, I found out, I had an interest and aptitude for an art. With my passion on my art it leaded me to study at UNRWA Art High school and study a fiber art at Era Women University. With using of shear, dying a fiber, weaving, embroidery for main materials, I tried to express a fiber art during college years. Sensitivity creativity and diversity was must requirements at the embroidery, And I found out that I had a talents on embroidery. And with diversity of embroidery, I had desire to use it practically to cloths. My desire leaded me to work at LG Fashion. When I was taking an examination for service in a business company my portfolio had been admired company's staff and the company gave me a position at brand name "DAYS" It was a good opportunity to develop my art senses and career during 2 years and I tried my best with my passion of art. But during I worked at Korean company name "LG Fashion," I had realized it was limited to develop my art sense compare to other countries especially USA. I wanted to stay equal with USA's fabric art level. I am still hunger to learn more about fabric art and silhouette, because I believe art is unlimited and my unlimited passion on art had leaded me to apply this school. When I was a sophomore at university, I studied as an interchanged student for taking summer class. After finish my class, I reminded myself "someday I would come here again and study fashion whatever it cost" and I really interest in art sense and practical uses of art, I believe this school has very advance education system on that than other academic place. My specialty is drawing and creativeness, I have strong faith that I could be more professional if I study here. And my ultimate goal is making Korean art stay equal with the USA. |
My major is an undecided right now at College of Lake County. During attending that college, I always had a conflict in my mind that cares about which major I should study. Last year I had found what I want to study. It is art. Last year I had wall painting assignment from a church and had found myself that I have an talents in art. Honestly my favorite class was an art class; I never got bored or disappointed whenever I had art assignment. For me, art is energy of life and goals of my life. I am not one who is a professional at art but to be a professional, I decided to apply to the California College of art, and I just began my portfolio. My goals after I graduate college are that I could design fancy accessories. I am the one who crazy at little materials like fancy accessories. Whenever I saw that kind of little fancy things I could not stop myself to buy it. I used to imagine that it might be better if one that I bought was this or that color. That was why I wanted to design fancy accessories. I have desire to admire many people by designing little fancy materials. And I want to express my happiness and positive thought through fancy accessories so I can influence to the world even if it would be little like fancy materials. There is another objective for designing fancy accessories. During my high school years I participated in a volunteer community service whenever I had time. When I lived in the Philippines I helped church for teaching bible and giving the necessities of life to poor people. When I was in Malaysia I used to go to an orphanage and I played with orphan people. Whenever I had time with people who are suffering from infelicity, I used to imagine that how it would be grateful if I make fancy accessories for them. If that dream comes in reality I would not be envious anybody. | My major is an undecided right now at College of Lake County. During attending that college, I always had a conflict in my mind that cares about which major I should study. Last year I had found what I want to study. It is art. Last year I had wall painting assignment from a church and had found myself that I have an talent in art. Honestly my favorite class was an art class; I never got bored or disappointed whenever I had art assignment. For me, art is energy of life and goals of my life. I am not one who is a professional at art but to be a professional, I decided to apply to the California College of art, and I just began my portfolio. My goals after I graduate college are that I could design fancy accessories. I am the one who is a crazy at little materials like fancy accessories. Whenever I saw that kind of little fancy things I could not stop myself to buy it. I used to imagine that it might be better if one that I bought was this or that color. That was why I wanted to design fancy accessories. I have desire to admire many people by designing little fancy materials. And I want to express my happiness and positive thought through fancy accessories, so I can influence to the world even if it would be little like fancy materials. There is another objective for designing fancy accessories. During my high school years I participated in a volunteer community service whenever I had time. When I lived in the Philippines I helped church for teaching bible and giving the necessities of life to poor people. When I was in Malaysia I used to go to an orphanage and I played with orphan people. Whenever I had time with people who are suffering from infelicity, I used to imagine that how it would be grateful if I make fancy accessories for them. If that dream comes in reality I would not be envious anybody. |
Since then I have moved from Mississippi to Florida, to pursue my dream of going to the University of Florida. Leaving everyone and everything I have ever known behind was truly difficult, especially not knowing the outcome of my application. I have always believed that everyone has a purpose in life and that no one is ever sure of what their purpose is. I believe mine is at the University of Florida. I have this drive in me that has been there since I can remember, steering me towards UF. To think back to tenth grade and how all I wanted was to get out of high school and go to the University of Florida. And now, though I have hit a few bumps along the way, I am finally here at the moment I have dreamed about for so long." | Since then, I have moved from Mississippi to Florida, to pursue my dream of going to the University of Florida. Leaving everyone and everything I have ever known behind was truly difficult, especially not knowing the outcome of my application. I have always believed that everyone has a purpose in life and that no one is ever sure of what their purpose is. I believe mine is at the University of Florida. Furthermore, I have this drive in me that has been there since I can remember, steering me towards OF. To think back to tenth grade and how all I wanted was to get out of high school and go to the University of Florida. And now, though I have hit a few bumps along the way, I am finally here at the moment I have dreamed about for so long." |
It did not take long for me to conquer the language, make new friends, and easily adjust to the different culture. Soon after our arrival, I became aware of the sacrifices my parents were making with the intentions of starting over. It breaks my heart now to think of the hardships they endured; working minimum wage jobs endlessly in order to make ends meet. At one point, my father worked 18 hours a day struggling to keep our head above water. My parents have truly devoted their lives to making sure I have great opportunities, and I endeavor to express my gratitude by working hard to attain my goals. The effort my parents made to overcome adversity has opened my eyes to the altruistic love one feels for his or her child. Excelling in high school has been my way of showing them how grateful I am for their devotion. As my role models, they taught me how essential it is to prepare myself for the future. They continuously encourage me to educate myself as much as possible because knowledge is the only thing one can never lose. Throughout the past few years, I have recognized the importance of an education and have strived to maintain academic excellence. Education is my primary and most important priority in life. School opened my eyes to the complexity of the world that we live in; where there is an abundance of life waiting to be uncovered. For this reason, I want to pursue a career in the field of science. I have gradually developed a passion for learning; the more I learn, the more I want to discover. The barriers we have overcome as a family and the suffering I have witnessed in my parents has changed my outlook on life. My inquisitive mind will take me places where only few have been. As an aspiring veterinarian, I wish to perform research in the field of veterinary pathology. My thirst for knowledge will be my contribution to the University of Florida; allowing me to expand my intellect as I prepare myself to investigate new ideas and play a role in the growth of science and medicine. | It did not take long for me to conquer the language, make new friends, and easily adjust to the different culture. Soon after our arrival, I became aware of the sacrifices my parents were making with the intentions of starting over. It breaks my heart now to think of the hardships they endured; working minimum wage jobs endlessly in order to make ends meet. At one point, my father worked 18 hours a day struggling to keep our head above water. My parents have truly devoted their lives to making sure I have great opportunities, and I endeavor to express my gratitude by working hard to attain my goals. The effort my parents made to overcome adversity has opened my eyes to the altruistic loved one feels for his or her child. Excelling in high school has been my way of showing them how grateful I am for their devotion. As my role models, they taught me how essential it is to prepare myself for the future. They continuously encourage me to educate myself as much as possible because knowledge is the only thing one can never lose. Throughout the past few years, I have recognized the importance of an education and have strived to maintain academic excellence. Education is my primary and most important priority in life. School opened my eyes to the complexity of the world that we live in; where there is an abundance of life waiting to be uncovered. For this reason, I want to pursue a career in the field of science. I have gradually developed a passion for learning; the more I learn, the more I want to discover. The barriers we have overcome as a family and the suffering I have witnessed in my parents has changed my outlook on life. My inquisitive mind will take me places where only few have been. As an aspiring veterinarian, I wish to perform research in the field of veterinary pathology. My thirst for knowledge will be my contribution to the University of Florida; allowing me to expand my intellect as I prepare myself to investigate new ideas and play a role in the growth of science and medicine. |
For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life. Sometimes strength is found in falling down and being able to build up from the bottom. When I was fourteen I was angry and I took it out on myself-on my arms, my legs, and my upper thighs. I was thoroughly consumed in this dangerous lifestyle of constantly hurting myself when I felt down. I saw another friend start to dabble in the addictive disease called cutting and I grew scared for her. I wanted to yell to her, scream to her, "Don't do this to your self! You're better than this!" Though I knew I was a hypocrite myself, I didn't want anyone else to feel like I did. After two years, and with the help of several doctors I became healthy and happy again. I saw the world in a whole new light. I realized that being strong is accepting you aren't perfect: no one is. I came to the conclusion that I wanted more than anything to help people like me to know they weren't alone. I got in contact with my local educational TV channel and they told me there was a show called Reality Avenue where teens talked about issues we face today. I told them my story and was chosen as one of two people spotlighted on an episode about Self-Injuring. I spoke of how it was important to get help and that are always people who love and care about you who are eager to see you overcome it all. Don't think of how weak you are, think of how strong you are going to be. That's what really helped me. People would tell me, " If only you could see the smart, kind, beautiful, girl we see, you wouldn't do this!" I wished my story could stop every young boy or girl from hurting themselves, though I knew it was unrealistic. But, just knowing I might have helped one person made me feel courageous and strong! That feeling of helping people became my new addiction. Helping other people helped me heal. I now know we acquire the strength we have overcome. That is why I believe that the value of "Vires" can best be applied to me. I managed to find the strength of my moral outlook and my destiny of building the character of others. I'm not sure where my education is going to take me but with the strong sense of self I have gained and the drive to help others in need, I'm sure I will go far and would love to take the next step by attending Florida State University. | For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Virus, Arts, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Virus signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Arts alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life. Sometimes strength is found in falling down and being able to build up from the bottom. When I was fourteen I was angry, and I took it out on myself-on my arms, my legs, and my upper thighs. I was thoroughly consumed in this dangerous lifestyle of constantly hurting myself when I felt down. I saw another friend start to dabble in the addictive disease called cutting and I grew scared for her. Furthermore, I wanted to yell at her, scream to her, "Don't do this to your self! You're better than this!" Though I knew I was a hypocrite myself, I didn't want anyone else to feel like I did. After two years, and with the help of several doctors I became healthy and happy again. I saw the world in a whole new light. I realized that being strong is accepting you aren't perfect: no one is. Furthermore, I came to the conclusion that I wanted more than anything to help people like me to know they weren't alone. Furthermore, I got in contact with my local educational TV channel, and they told me there was a show called Reality Avenue where teens talked about issues we face today. Furthermore, I told them my story and was chosen as one of two people spotlighted on an episode about Self-Injuring. Furthermore, I spoke of how it was important to get help and that are always people who love and care about you who are eager to see you overcome it all. Don't think of how weak you are, think of how strong you are going to be. That's what really helped me. People would tell me," If only you could see the smart, kind, beautiful, girl we see, you wouldn't do this!" I wished my story could stop every young boy or girl from hurting themselves, though I knew it was unrealistic. But, just knowing I might have helped one person made me feel courageous and strong! That feeling of helping people became my new addiction. Helping other people helped me heal. I now know we acquire the strength we have overcome. That is why I believe that the value of "Virus" can best be applied to me. I managed to find the strength of my moral outlook and my destiny of building the character of others. I'm not sure where my education is going to take me but with the strong sense of self I have gained and the drive to help others in need, I'm sure I will go far and would love to take the next step by attending Florida State University. |
My goal is to attain a career that I'm passionate about. I always dreamed of working behind the scene and having a career in the Digital Film making & Video Production Industry. Having a career in Digital Film making & Video Production is a key part of the future development of the massive entertainment. With my right talents and education I can look forward to a truly exciting career. My goal is basically to graduate of the Digital Film making & Video Production Bachelor of Science degree. It will prepared me for entry level opportunities such as assistant video producer, digital film production assistant, digital camera operator, nonlinear editor, sound designer, and scrip writer. Education plays a very important role in making my life in the future as complete and fulfilling as possible. In my future I have to consider many occurrences that will be required to face. There are goals that need to be attained. I want to know how technology works. I want to be involved. I can learn in and out of the classroom about new and exciting ideas in technology and about my life as well. I can receive my knowledge and degrees and work where I want to work. I know that the Art Institute of California will offer me a wonderful experience with endless opportunity. I will contribute to the society rather then take from it. My education is important to my future because it is the true line between living a full life with all my dreams at my fingertips, and living with a sense of insecurity and merely getting by. The Art Institute of California will give me the tools I need to succeed and to become a "GREAT" leader for any film production company I walk into. I will show every person that has ever helped me, that their efforts have paid off on me and that I never gave up when the obstacles stood in front of me. I will be able to have the time and ability to show the children of my community how important an education really is and become a positive role model to them. I can become involved in the college organization meet new people, and have fun as well. I love to learn new ideas, and have bright plans for my future. | My goal is to attain a career that I'm passionate about. I always dreamed of working behind the scene and having a career in the Digital Film making camp; Video Production Industry. Having a career in Digital Film making camp; Video Production is a key part of the future development of the massive entertainment. With my right talents and education I can look forward to a truly exciting career. My goal is basically to graduate of the Digital Film making camp; Video Production Bachelor of Science degree. It will prepare me for entry level opportunities such as assistant video producer, digital film production assistant, digital camera operator, nonlinear editor, sound designer, and scrip writer. Education plays a very important role in making my life in the future as complete and fulfilling as possible. In my future I have to consider many occurrences that will be required to face. There are goals that need to be attained. I want to know how technology works. I want to be involved. Furthermore, I can learn in and out of the classroom about new and exciting ideas in technology and about my life as well. Furthermore, I can receive my knowledge and degrees and work where I want to work. Furthermore, I know that the Art Institute of California will offer me a wonderful experience with endless opportunity. Furthermore, I will contribute to the society rather than take from it. My education is important to my future because it is the true line between living a full life with all my dreams at my fingertips, and living with a sense of insecurity and merely getting by. The Art Institute of California will give me the tools I need to succeed and to become a "GREAT" leader for any film production company I walk into. I will show every person that has ever helped me, that their efforts have paid off on me and that I never gave up when the obstacles stood in front of me. I will be able to have the time and ability to show the children of my community how important an education really is and become a positive role model to them. Furthermore, I can become involved in the college organization meet new people, and have fun as well. Furthermore, I love to learn new ideas, and have bright plans for my future. |
As I came helplessly out of my mother's womb into the opportunistic yet perilous world, the first words spoken to me, in broken English, were, "You rill study vary hawd." From then on my stereotypical Korean parents expected the best out of me. Laying down a strict and structured lifestyle, my young immature self believed I was living under the realm of dictatorship; however, as I matured from my mental state of a 5-year old boy, I have come to realize the love in my "Dictators'" intentions as they sought to make me a successful person in life. "Coming home ten". It was as simple as that, they said it and I did it. As I watched my friends with their more lenient parents, I was envious and even irritated by their lack of rules compared to those of my parents'. The largest nuisance of the list of laws is no television during the weekdays (I say "is" because this rule sadly still does exist in my house today). As a child looking to enjoy life I missed my favorite cartoons and of course the important news (ok so not the second one). I would go to school not knowing the updated news on Ash's never ending journey in Pokemon and of course, the worldly business that was occurring. In addition to this seemingly unnecessary law, my parents had me make a list of things to do everyday. So, on that list I would put my dreary homework assignments, seemingly eternal tutor times, practice times for sports, and those irritating chores. I found this daily ritual almost as pointless as the no television policy. However, as I began to hatch from my cocoon of immaturity, I started to see the motives behind these rules my parents set forth. One of Covey's seven successful habits from The Seven Habits of Highly Effective People, is "First Things First". Now that I have evolved, my eyes have finally opened to see what my parents have been preparing me for. No TV during weekdays helped me to prioritize and realize that homework or work is more important than entertainment. Once I finish that which is important is when I should turn to relax with the lesser things on my to do list. That is when it clicked, my to do list! They had me make this list so I could plan, prioritize, and organize my life. This once arduous task makes my life so much easier as I try to balance my school work, sports, clubs, church, and friends. And to think, I once thought my parents were torturing me; however, I now know they have loved me so much that they would take the extra effort to instill in me these lessons of life. As I wait here on the starting line for that gunshot, I am confident and ready to take on the hurdles of life. This I know for my loving coaches are behind me cheering and my years of training ready to muscle on. And so, let the race begin. | As I came helplessly out of my mother's womb into the opportunistic yet perilous world, the first words spoken to me, in broken English, were, "You rill study vary had." From then on my stereotypical Korean parents expected the best out of me. Laying down a strict and structured lifestyle, my young immature self believed I was living under the realm of dictatorship; however, as I matured from my mental state of a 5-year-old boy, I have come to realize the love in my "Dictators'" intentions as they sought to make me a successful person in life. "Coming home ten". It was as simple as that, they said it and I did it. As I watched my friends with their more lenient parents, I was envious and even irritated by their lack of rules compared to those of my parents'. The largest nuisance of the list of laws is no television during the weekdays (I say "is" because this rule sadly still does exist in my house today). As a child looking to enjoy life I missed my favorite cartoons and of course the important news (ok so not the second one). I would go to school not knowing the updated news on Ash's never ending journey in Pokémon and of course, the worldly business that was occurring. In addition to this seemingly unnecessary law, my parents had me make a list of things to do every day. So, on that list I would put my dreary homework assignments, seemingly eternal tutor times, practice times for sports, and those irritating chores. I found this daily ritual almost as pointless as the no television policy. However, as I began to hatch from my cocoon of immaturity, I started to see the motives behind these rules my parents set forth. One of Covey's seven successful habits from The Seven Habits of Highly Effective People, is "First Things First". Now that I have evolved, my eyes have finally opened to see what my parents have been preparing me for. No TV during weekdays helped me to prioritize and realize that homework or work is more important than entertainment. Once I finish that which is important is when I should turn to relax with the lesser things on my to-do list. That is when it clicked, my to-do list! They had me make this list, so I could plan, prioritize, and organize my life. This once arduous task makes my life so much easier as I try to balance my school work, sports, clubs, church, and friends. And to think, I once thought my parents were torturing me; however, I now know they have loved me so much that they would take the extra effort to instill in me these lessons of life. As I wait here on the starting line for that gunshot, I am confident and ready to take on the hurdles of life. This I know for my loving coaches are behind me cheering and my years of training ready to muscle on. And so, let the race begin. |
As I pulled into my driveway the glistening rays of cheerfulness from the sunny yellow paint that covered my home invited me to come inside. All of my life I have been molded by parents who, despite their firm hand, support and love me in every way; and a sister who inspires me more than she could ever know. Each day when I walk out of my house I am reminded that my environment has shaped me into the proud, independent woman I am today. My parents painted their life skills on the canvas that is my future. From the day I was born my parents wanted nothing more than for me to behave politely. People are shocked with my "yes Sir and no Sir" responses, but I thank my parents for each time I was complimented on this. I believe having manners is a necessity in everyday life. Additionally, everyday that I walk into my house I am reminded that my parents sacrifice the salary they earn for me to dance. From this sacrifice I have learned the value of a dollar and appreciate each opportunity life presents me. The encouraging "you can do it honey" from the audience at every dance competition has lead me to have an optimistic and confident view of life. I can not thank my parents enough for influencing me the way they have. Stephanie, my younger sister, is the most mature fifteen-year-old I have ever met. She is the fishing hook that reels me back in from my fantasy world. When I want to escape to this world she uncoils my strength and perseverance to accomplish any task by inspiring me to succeed. Stephanie's stability in who she is has allowed me to exude my bubbly, inviting, generous personality to the world without the fear of rejection. My sister has truly helped create my outgoing personality. Pieces of my parent's support and sacrificial nature, a pinch of my younger sister's inspiration, and a loving, inviting environment have influenced every aspect of my life. College will be a whole new environment that will also help develop me as an individual, but I will always have the basis of who I am from the environment I have grown up in, my home. | As I pulled into my driveway the glistening rays of cheerfulness from the sunny yellow paint that covered my home invited me to come inside. All of my life I have been molded by parents who, despite their firm hand, support and love me in every way; and a sister who inspires me more than she could ever know. Each day when I walk out of my house I am reminded that my environment has shaped me into the proud, independent woman I am today. My parents painted their life skills on the canvas that is my future. From the day I was born my parents wanted nothing more than for me to behave politely. People are shocked with my "yes Sir and no Sir" responses, but I thank my parents for each time I was complimented on this. I believe having manners is a necessity in everyday life. Additionally, every day that I walk into my house I am reminded that my parents sacrifice the salary they earn for me to dance. From this sacrifice I have learned the value of a dollar and appreciate each opportunity life presents me. The encouraging "you can do it honey" from the audience at every dance competition has leaded me to have an optimistic and confident view of life. I can not thank my parents enough for influencing me the way they have. Stephanie, my younger sister, is the most mature fifteen-year-old I have ever met. She is the fishing hook that reels me back in from my fantasy world. When I want to escape to this world she uncoils my strength and perseverance to accomplish any task by inspiring me to succeed. Stephanie's stability in who she is has allowed me to exude my bubbly, inviting, generous personality to the world without the fear of rejection. My sister has truly helped create my outgoing personality. Pieces of my parent's support and sacrificial nature, a pinch of my younger sister's inspiration, and a loving, inviting environment have influenced every aspect of my life. College will be a whole new environment that will also help develop me as an individual, but I will always have the basis of who I am from the environment I have grown up in, my home. |
Your father, the man who has raised you since the day you were born, has died. This is one of the few things that someone can tell you that makes your knees go weak, your heart drop to the floor, and your mind go absolutely blank. However, this is exactly what I was told toward the end of my sophomore year. In a matter of pure seconds, I changed from a naďve sixteen-year-old that did not think past what was for dinner that night, to someone that I never knew I was going to be. I changed into someone that was confused and vulnerable, but also someone who would become stronger mentally after realizing what was really important in life. My dad developed ulcerative colitis about a month before he died, and he truly had been the epitome of health before that. When he checked himself in to the hospital, I could not comprehend what was happening all too quickly. My dad, the one who woke me up every morning despite my inevitable whining, the one who would stay up with me all night until I knew every fact for the next day's test, the one who I could honestly say would do anything in his ability to make me happy, was dying. At the time, I could not think past the handfuls of wires sticking out from all over his body in that hospital bed. I would not allow myself to think of my life without him. On June 4th, I was forced to face the fact that I could survive without my father. From the moment he was gone, I knew that I had to stay strong because all I had ever wanted was for him to be proud of me. The last thing my dad told me was that he loved me and I had made him proud, and I intend to keep making him proud every day. I feel that I have gained a new and unique perspective on my life, one that allows me see what is really important. There really is no possible way for me to have much concern for unimportant matters, when I have seen how fragile and unpredictable life can really be. After my father's death, I could have easily slipped into a cocoon and avoided the real world. Instead, I chose to embrace my life and live as a responsible, determined, and compassionate young woman. My father taught me to appreciate what I have, and I have only grown to understand the real meaning of that advice since his passing. When I think about possibly attending the University of Florida I am so excited for the opportunity that I will be given. My father did not have the chance to attend a university, and this had been one of his many dreams for me. I am looking forward to carrying on his personal tradition of self-reliance and improving myself, as a student and as a person, every single day. | Your father, the man who has raised you since the day you were born, has died. This is one of the few things that someone can tell you that makes your knees go weak, your heart drop to the floor, and your mind go absolutely blank. However, this is exactly what I was told toward the end of my sophomore year. In a matter of pure seconds, I changed from a nave sixteen-year-old that did not think past what was for dinner that night, to someone that I never knew I was going to be. I changed into someone that was confused and vulnerable, but also someone who would become stronger mentally after realizing what was really important in life. My dad developed ulcerative colitis about a month before he died, and he truly had been the epitome of health before that. When he checked himself in to the hospital, I could not comprehend what was happening all too quickly. My dad, the one who woke me up every morning despite my inevitable whining, the one who would stay up with me all night until I knew every fact for the next day's test, the one who I could honestly say would do anything in his ability to make me happy, was dying. At the time, I could not think past the handfuls of wires sticking out from all over his body in that hospital bed. I would not allow myself to think of my life without him. On June 4th, I was forced to face the fact that I could survive without my father. From the moment he was gone, I knew that I had to stay strong because all I had ever wanted was for him to be proud of me. The last thing my dad told me was that he loved me and I had made him proud, and I intend to keep making him proud every day. I feel that I have gained a new and unique perspective on my life, one that allows me see what is really important. There really is no possible way for me to have much concern for unimportant matters, when I have seen how fragile and unpredictable life can really be. After my father's death, I could have easily slipped into a cocoon and avoided the real world. Instead, I chose to embrace my life and live as a responsible, determined, and compassionate young woman. My father taught me to appreciate what I have, and I have only grown to understand the real meaning of that advice since his passing. When I think about possibly attending the University of Florida I am so excited about the opportunity that I will be given. My father did not have the chance to attend a university, and this had been one of his many dreams for me. I am looking forward to carrying on his personal tradition of self-reliance and improving myself, as a student and as a person, every single day. |
The Florida State University motto is "Vires, Artes, Mores" which literally translates into "strength," "skill," and "character." I believe that I possess all three of these things that make me a true Florida State Seminole. I have strength and I have skill and I have character. But not each concept stands on its own, its all three together that make me the person I am today, fighting for what I want more than anything, which is to become a part of the Florida State family. ... | The Florida State University motto is "Virus, Arts, Mores" which literally translates into "strength," "skill," and "character." I believe that I possess all three of these things that make me a true Florida State Seminole. I have strength and I have skill and I have character. But not each concept stands on its own, it's all three together that make me the person I am today, fighting for what I want more than anything, which is to become a part of the Florida State family. ... |
Thanks :D I was a sophomore in High school at that time and my family was in a bad financial situation since my dad was laid off from work, and not to mention that my brother went to a university and needed money to pay for his university tuition. However, I wanted to achieve one of my dreams of going to a summer program that I always wanted to go to since I was 12! The program was called the Student Science Training Program at a University where I spent seven weeks in a dorm going to lectures, labs, and doing research in the Medical field. I was filled with excitement realizing that I could now achieve my dream of going to this program during my sophomore year but my parents sadly told me that they couldn't afford it. I still persisted and I found out through my school that there was a scholarship that can award students $2,500. I first signed up for the summer program and to see if I would be chosen since only about 100 students out of the United States can be chosen to go to the program. My teacher was surprised since I was the first one to get the application. I was accepted into the program, and just had to pay the fee of $3,000. Then the scholarship application came out and after filling it out, I found out that I didn't get the scholarship. It felt like right when you were about to cross the finish line to get first place in a race, someone comes and pushes you down and all of the other racers beat you and you get last place. I went to the school program meeting even though I got strep throat and didn't want to go. I was upset to see that some of the students who got the scholarship didn't even need the scholarship or some of the students were forced by their parents to go! After filling out scholarships and emailing prestigious pharmacy companies, I finally was awarded $ 2,500. During the program I researched on the Formulation of Lipid-based gene delivery vehicles with reduced toxicity in Mammalian cells. After the summer program, I entered to the Regional science fair and got first place with two special awards in the Medical division, and won 4th place in the state competition. My life dream is to go to a University and get my PhD in pharmacy and help people in need of medications and work on research to cure diseases. From this experience, I learned to never give up on my dreams and always persist in what I believe in. This experience truly made me more focused and confident about myself and will truly affect my college studies by making me more apt and determined to achieve my goals in my studies in being a pharmacy student. It is crucial for students to understand how important an opportunity education is. It is the key to success, joy, and a bright future for all individuals from all backgrounds. | Thanks :D I was a sophomore in High school at that time and my family was in a bad financial situation since my dad was laid off from work, and not to mention that my brother went to a university and needed money to pay for his university tuition. However, I wanted to achieve one of my dreams of going to a summer program that I always wanted to go to since I was 12! The program was called the Student Science Training Program at a University where I spent seven weeks in a dorm going to lectures, labs, and doing research in the Medical field. I was filled with excitement realizing that I could now achieve my dream of going to this program during my sophomore year, but my parents sadly told me that they couldn't afford it. I still persisted, and I found out through my school that there was a scholarship that can award students $2,500. Furthermore, I first signed up for the summer program and to see if I would be chosen since only about 100 students out of the United States can be chosen to go to the program. My teacher was surprised since I was the first one to get the application. I was accepted into the program, and just had to pay the fee of $3,000. Then the scholarship application came out and after filling it out, I found out that I didn't get the scholarship. It felt like right when you were about to cross the finish line to get first place in a race, someone comes and pushes you down and all the other racers beat you, and you get last place. I went to the school program meeting even though I got strep throat and didn't want to go. I was upset to see that some of the students who got the scholarship didn't even need the scholarship or some of the students were forced by their parents to go! After filling out scholarships and emailing prestigious pharmacy companies, I finally was awarded $2,500. During the program I researched on the Formulation of Lipid-based gene delivery vehicles with reduced toxicity in Mammalian cells. After the summer program, I entered to the Regional science fair and got first place with two special awards in the Medical division, and won 4th place in the state competition. My life dream is to go to a University and get my PhD in pharmacy and help people in need of medications and work on research to cure diseases. From this experience, I learned to never give up on my dreams and always persist in what I believe in. This experience truly made me more focused and confident about myself and will truly affect my college studies by making me more apt and determined to achieve my goals in my studies in being a pharmacy student. It is crucial for students to understand how important an opportunity education is. It is the key to success, joy, and a bright future for all individuals from all backgrounds. |
Essay Prompt:For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life. My Essay:Values are more than a notion or theory in life. They are a reflection of each and every person, signifying the character inside of them. My life is guided by many different values; they are reflected in my every day demeanor. "Vires" and "Mores" are two Latin concepts that closely denote my values. Vires refers to the diversity of strengths one may consider a value; moral, physical and intellectual strengths among them. Moral strength tells a lot about a person. I have faith in my own moral beliefs; I would like to think nothing could cause me to waver from them. Physical strength is another important aspect of my life. Keeping my body healthy helps me maintain a better lifestyle both physically and mentally. As a competitive swimmer being physically competent is a great advantage. What I value most, however, is being strong intellectually. Intellectual strength helps me negotiate through each day whether I am at school, work, or at home reading a book. You must acquire strength intellectually through both education and life lessons. Mores; although this word has several different meanings, the concept of 'character' stands apart from the rest. As I walk through life I never try to step into anyone else's footsteps. I value being an individual, different from every single person on this earth; watching those around me trying to fit in by reflecting the personalities around them seems ridiculous. Obtaining and maintaining my own character and personality is a gift, and each place I go, I hope stand out from the people I meet. Without personal values, life would seem pointless. There would be little to aspire to. Although people's conceptual idea of values may differ, most can appreciate the definition of values embodied in the FSU guiding philosophy "Vires, Artes, Mores." | Essay Prompt:For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Virus, Arts, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Virus signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Arts alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life. My Essay:Values are more than a notion or theory in life. They are a reflection of each and every person, signifying the character inside them. My life is guided by many values; they are reflected in my every day demeanor. "Virus" and "Mores" are two Latin concepts that closely denote my values. Virus refers to the diversity of strengths one may consider a value; moral, physical and intellectual strengths among them. Moral strength tells a lot about a person. I have faith in my own moral beliefs; I would like to think nothing could cause me to waver from them. Physical strength is another important aspect of my life. Keeping my body healthy helps me maintain a better lifestyle both physically and mentally. As a competitive swimmer being physically competent is a great advantage. What I value most, however, is being strong intellectually. Intellectual strength helps me negotiate through each day whether I am at school, work, or at home reading a book. You must acquire strength intellectually through both education and life lessons. Mores; although this word has several meanings, the concept of 'character' stands apart from the rest. As I walk through life I never try to step into anyone else's footsteps. I value being an individual, different from every single person on this earth; watching those around me trying to fit in by reflecting the surrounding personalities seems ridiculous. Obtaining and maintaining my own character and personality is a gift, and each place I go, I hope to stand out from the people I meet. Without personal values, life would seem pointless. There would be little to aspire to. Although people's conceptual idea of values may differ, most can appreciate the definition of values embodied in the FSU guiding philosophy "Virus, Arts, Mores." |
I am an eraser. I extinguish mistakes and allow corrections. I erase the imperfections of myself because I am terrified of being flawed. Exactness affixes itself on me; teeth penetrate deeply into me, devouring my blunders, erasing them completely. This need to be flawless thwarted my capability to let things go, a labyrinth I cannot find an end to. Although people say this is a virtuous trait, I find it as an affliction and a forte because it distances me from living a life without torturing myself over the imperfections of this world; but also my strength, permitting me to do finest work. But I kept asking myself 'why am I like this?' I am in my 4th year at Montgomery High School and I was able to get here without much struggle. Becoming the first member to graduate high school and attend college in my family is a gift. I have always been a scholar since I was young; I always had insatiable hunger for learning and engrossing myself in various subjects. As a result, I have always excelled in the world of academics and this was the greatest pride and joy for my parents. I offered honor to my family name, my sole purpose to propel myself further. My parents shared the same sentiment and assisted me in any way possible. Completing high school and attending a university is a must. As each school year passed, it became increasingly difficult to keep an academic foothold. I felt like I was no longer on flat land, but on the edge of a cliff. I found myself in a trepid state. By the end of my junior and beginning of my senior year I have given up nights to study vigorously for the two trials that will eventually become my future. In my attempts to successfully score high on those exams, I have failed. I have failed to meet my parents' standard; those terrifying glares that penetrated my core. Those fixed stares of my infuriated parents slowly and brutally attacked my confidence. They did not help to alleviate my shame. They tried to help me by adding supplementary and weekend classes to my schedule, scrounging up every penny to provide for my education. I understood their cause, but my dignity could not stand more. Those scores snickered and mocked at my every conceivable weakness and I gave in. My forte was no longer supporting me. My A's became B-'s and B+'s and mistakes ran ludicrously over my assignments. I became so frightened that I would no longer try. This deep abyss of depression grasped onto my life, and it was time for me to erase its existence. I reflected on how and why I was in this state to begin with. I could not believe I had even considered giving up in my academics. Then I realized that there were two types of people in this world, those who realize and do nothing and those who confront and fix their mistakes. Some people do not resign themselves to what is handed to them and in an effort, correct their faults. That was me, I realize that if my grades did not meet my standards, I did not try hard enough, if my nights studying was not enough, I did not study hard enough. I was the protagonist in my own life instead of being an antagonist. My ambitions for college have been cultivated in this vision of always studying and advancing and any obstacle obstructing me must be defeated. I learned about resilience and about being steadfast in the face of adversity. I learned to be more diligent and now when I want something, I charge forward like an enraged ram, dashing until my ambitions are met. And I know these qualities will help me excel in college as they have helped me arise triumphantly in my turbulent years. | I am an eraser. I extinguish mistakes and allow corrections. Furthermore, I erase the imperfections of myself because I am terrified of being flawed. Exactness affixes itself on me; teeth penetrate deeply into me, devouring my blunders, erasing them completely. This need to be flawless thwarted my capability to let things go, a labyrinth I cannot find an end to. Although people say this is a virtuous trait, I find it as an affliction and a forte because it distances me from living a life without torturing myself over the imperfections of this world; but also my strength, permitting me to do the finest work. But I kept asking myself 'why am I like this?' I am in my 4th year at Montgomery High School, and I was able to get here without much struggle. Becoming the first member to graduate high school and attend college in my family is a gift. I have always been a scholar since I was young; I always had insatiable hunger for learning and engrossing myself in various subjects. As a result, I have always excelled in the world of academics and this was the greatest pride and joy for my parents. I offered honor to my family name, my sole purpose to propel myself further. My parents shared the same sentiment and assisted me in any way possible. Completing high school and attending a university is a must. As each school year passed, it became increasingly difficult to keep an academic foothold. I felt like I was no longer on flat land, but on the edge of a cliff. I found myself in a tepid state. By the end of my junior and beginning of my senior year I have given up nights to study vigorously for the two trials that will eventually become my future. In my attempts to successfully score high on those exams, I have failed. I have failed to meet my parents' standard; those terrifying glares that penetrated my core. Those fixed stares of my infuriated parents slowly and brutally attacked my confidence. They did not help to alleviate my shame. They tried to help me by adding supplementary and weekend classes to my schedule, scrounging up every penny to provide for my education. I understood their cause, but my dignity could not stand more. Those scores snickered and mocked at my every conceivable weakness and I gave in. My forte was no longer supporting me. My A's became B-'s and B+'s and mistakes ran ludicrously over my assignments. I became so frightened that I would no longer try. This deep abyss of depression grasped onto my life, and it was time for me to erase its existence. I reflected on how and why I was in this state to begin with. I could not believe I had even considered giving up in my academics. Then I realized that there were two types of people in this world, those who realize and do nothing and those who confront and fix their mistakes. Some people do not resign themselves to what is handed to them and in an effort, correct their faults. That was me, I realize that if my grades did not meet my standards, I did not try hard enough, if my nights studying was not enough, I did not study hard enough. I was the protagonist in my own life instead of being an antagonist. My ambitions for college have been cultivated in this vision of always studying and advancing and any obstacle obstructing me must be defeated. I learned about resilience and about being steadfast in the face of adversity. I learned to be more diligent and now when I want something, I charge forward like an enraged ram, dashing until my ambitions are met. And I know these qualities will help me excel in college as they have helped me arise triumphantly in my turbulent years. |
Describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school. As I look up into the bright sky, illuminated by the immense fire from the engines of the space shuttle, I realized I wanted to know everything about the great machine that glides through the emptiness of space. I desired to know how and what made this marvel go into such an unforgiving place. The knowledge of how to make a complex and wondrous space vehicle compels me. Holding my mother's hand and feeling the rumble of the ground beneath me while I watch alters my dreams. I have been a good student in math and science but that launch showed me what I can do with my skill. When I told my counselor about this experience, she told me engineering would be a perfect fit. Researching engineering made me realize that this was for me. The memory of how I felt and what I wanted to do with my life on my first space shuttle launch drives me to become an aerospace engineer major. To be a successful student and be successful in a career, a person must have that drive that makes them go on in the toughest times. In my junior year of high school my mother lost her job. My super-hero mom finally had an "Achilles heel;" her happiness was in jeopardy at her job and she could not hide it from her boss. During her period of unemployment, even in desperation of getting hand-outs from family, my mother seemed happier. She was happier to not have to report to a job that she was not passionate about. I look back to the childhood memory of the night watching the space shuttle launch and realized I have passion to engage in what I want to do. Passion is what drives a person to pursue their aspirations. Having that "a-ha!" moment in my life gave me the desire to pursue a career in aerospace engineering. Having a thirst for learning gives me an advantage in my studies. This thirst will not let me give up so easily or just say "forget it." My mentality of "no surrender" during my academic path of becoming an aerospace engineer will make me a beneficial contribution to the University of Florida campus. My passion for knowledge will make my college experience a great one by making my academic studies a pleasure; not a chore. The University of Florida is a snug fit for a person pursuing a career in engineering and for a person who holds academics in high regard. | Describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the OF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school. As I look up into the bright sky, illuminated by the immense fire from the engines of the space shuttle, I realized I wanted to know everything about the great machine that glides through the emptiness of space. I desired to know how and what made this marvel go into such an unforgiving place. The knowledge of how to make a complex and wondrous space vehicle compels me. Holding my mother's hand and feeling the rumble of the ground beneath me while I watch alters my dreams. I have been a good student in math and science, but that launch showed me what I can do with my skill. When I told my counselor about this experience, she told me engineering would be a perfect fit. Researching engineering made me realize that this was for me. The memory of how I felt and what I wanted to do with my life on my first space shuttle launch drives me to become an aerospace engineer major. To be a successful student and be successful in a career, a person must have that drive that makes them go on in the toughest times. In my junior year of high school my mother lost her job. My super-hero mom finally had an "Achilles heel;" her happiness was in jeopardy at her job and she could not hide it from her boss. During her period of unemployment, even in desperation of getting hand-outs from family, my mother seemed happier. She was happier to not have to report to a job that she was not passionate about. I look back to the childhood memory of the night watching the space shuttle launch and realized I have passion to engage in what I want to do. Passion is what drives a person to pursue their aspirations. Having that "a-ha!" moment in my life gave me the desire to pursue a career in aerospace engineering. Having a thirst for learning gives me an advantage in my studies. This thirst will not let me give up so easily or just say "forget it." My mentality of "no surrender" during my academic path of becoming an aerospace engineer will make me a beneficial contribution to the University of Florida campus. My passion for knowledge will make my college experience a great one by making my academic studies a pleasure; not a chore. The University of Florida is a snug fit for a person pursuing a career in engineering and for a person who holds academics in high regard. |
There I am standing in the Florida summer heat, sandwiched between numerous buildings, and in what seems to be a massive campus with no end in sight; I see hundreds of faces walking around, hauling bags, laptops, books, and Starbucks cups. Caroline, our "Admissions Ambassador" was presenting our group everything this great university had to offer. All I could think of was: "This is where I want to be." I was overwhelmed; the environment was amazing and it was completely different from what I was used to. I attended Devry University where I got an Associate's degree in computer networking; the environment there was basically go to class, do your work, and go home. I was the youngest student in all my classes; I felt a sense of dullness every time I went to school. This was not exactly the kind of environment that I would feel very enthusiastic in; it was the complete opposite. I missed the school spirit, pep rallies, football games, and the overall vibrant environment I was used to in high school; I was also involved in student government, so I got to experience everything, and I loved it. The change from high school to Devry really got me down; however I'm a dedicated person and I always finish what I start, so I concentrated in finishing at Devry so I could move on. I've always been an analytical, and problem solving person; this is what I believe led me to have a passion for computers and technology as a whole. I remember when my father purchased our first computer back when I was 10 years old; I actually researched several computers and made a decision from what I learned. Ever since that day, I have been a technology aficionado. From its beginning back when it was the Florida Technological University, UCF has always been a leader in engineering and technology; after all these were its founding goals. In order to be successful you need to have a passion and love what you do; this has been proven numerous times. UCF offers everything I need in order to be successful; it has an impressive academic curriculum and the extraordinary environment to top it off. | There I am standing in the Florida summer heat, sandwiched between numerous buildings, and in what seems to be a massive campus with no end in sight; I see hundreds of faces walking around, hauling bags, laptops, books, and Starbucks cups. Caroline, our "Admissions Ambassador" was presenting our group everything this great university had to offer. All I could think of was: "This is where I want to be." I was overwhelmed; the environment was amazing, and it was completely different from what I was used to. I attended Decry University where I got an Associate's degree in computer networking; the environment there was basically go to class, do your work, and go home. Furthermore, I was the youngest student in all my classes; I felt a sense of dullness every time I went to school. This was not exactly the kind of environment that I would feel very enthusiastic in; it was the complete opposite. I missed the school spirit, pep rallies, football games, and the overall vibrant environment I was used to in high school; I was also involved in student government, so I got to experience everything, and I loved it. The change from high school to Decry really got me down; however I'm a dedicated person and I always finish what I start, so I concentrated in finishing at Decry, so I could move on. I've always been an analytical, and problem-solving person; this is what I believe led me to have a passion for computers and technology as a whole. I remember when my father purchased our first computer back when I was 10 years old; I actually researched several computers and made a decision from what I learned. Ever since that day, I have been a technology aficionado. From its beginning back when it was the Florida Technological University, UCF has always been a leader in engineering and technology; after all these were its founding goals. In order to be successful you need to have a passion and love what you do; this has been proven numerous times. UCF offers everything I need in order to be successful; it has an impressive academic curriculum and the extraordinary environment to top it off. |
My family environment influenced my personality by providing me with the confidence to succeed in a challenging environment. I have two younger sisters that assisted me in maturing and understanding that my attitude and actions outside of school are essential too. I have learned to look at myself from other people's perspective and to change my behavior accordingly. The family environment molded me into a more understanding person and helped me to perform at my best. My family gives their total support both in swimming competitions and school activities and has helped me significantly during my school career. My mom was the most influential factor in creating the person I am today. Her unfailing support guided me on a straight and narrow throughout my school career and pushed me to put my best effort into each assignment. She helped me develop effective study techniques to prepare for swimming competitions and tests. She taught me to set aside a hour and a half each night for studying to avoid the stress of cramming. I enjoy exceeding expectations that my parents place upon me and view them as a challenge to overcome. They force me to find ways to reflect up on myself which allows me to pinpoint small problems before they worsen. During my junior year, I felt intimidated by Chemistry AP and wanted to drop it in favor of an easier class. However, my mother refused to allow me give up and encouraged me to improve my grades by attending extra help sessions and spending extended time on Chemistry material. I rebounded from a slow start and improved my grades by setting aside a small amount of study time each night to over prepare. After completing Chemistry AP, I felt full of pride after ultimately succeeding in that course but put most of the credit to my refusal to switch classes. I arrived early each and every swim practice in rain or shine in order to prepare for swim meets. However, my success in swimming was owed to a large part to my mom's consistency in driving me to swim practice and assisted me in performing well academically. I study for small and large tests the same and view them as equal in importance. I complete homework at all times and understand that excessive preparation will always yield high test scores. After understanding how much I took attending a private school for granted, I changed my attitude and wanted to succeed in each respective year. Now, I am using this top notch education to my advantage and strive to perform well in all my classes no matter the difficulty. The overall relief and joy that I experience when I get an "A" on a test cannot be matched. Taking pride in my work has been my biggest step in embracing my work and allotting different tasks for each period of time during the day in order to make sure I will be able to complete work to the best of my ability. Being raised under strict standards, I understand the importance of setting goals to provide guidance and confidence when shooting for a goal that is far off. Thank you in advance. I was wondering if it answered the question and if you had any ideas that would make it more interesting and appealing. This is my first draft and it is due on Wed. so I am working a lot on it. How i can expand it maybe? | My family environment influenced my personality by providing me with the confidence to succeed in a challenging environment. I have two younger sisters that assisted me in maturing and understanding that my attitude and actions outside of school are essential too. I have learned to look at myself from other people's perspective and to change my behavior accordingly. The family environment molded me into a more understanding person and helped me to perform at my best. My family gives their total support both in swimming competitions and school activities and has helped me significantly during my school career. My mom was the most influential factor in creating the person I am today. Her unfailing support guided me on a straight and narrow throughout my school career and pushed me to put my best effort into each assignment. She helped me develop effective study techniques to prepare for swimming competitions and tests. She taught me to set aside an hour and a half each night for studying to avoid the stress of cramming. I enjoy exceeding expectations that my parents place upon me and view them as a challenge to overcome. They force me to find ways to reflect up on myself which allows me to pinpoint small problems before they worsen. During my junior year, I felt intimidated by Chemistry AP and wanted to drop it in favor of an easier class. However, my mother refused to allow me give up and encouraged me to improve my grades by attending extra help sessions and spending extended time on Chemistry material. I rebounded from a slow start and improved my grades by setting aside a small amount of study time each night to over prepare. After completing Chemistry AP, I felt full of pride after ultimately succeeding in that course but put most of the credit to my refusal to switch classes. I arrived early each and every swim practice in rain or shine in order to prepare for swim meets. However, my success in swimming was owed to a large part to my mom's consistency in driving me to swim practice and assisted me in performing well academically. I study for small and large tests the same and view them as equal in importance. I complete homework at all times and understand that excessive preparation will always yield high test scores. After understanding how much I took attending a private school for granted, I changed my attitude and wanted to succeed in each respective year. Now, I am using this top-notch education to my advantage and strive to perform well in all my classes no matter the difficulty. The overall relief and joy that I experience when I get an "A" on a test cannot be matched. Taking pride in my work has been my biggest step in embracing my work and allotting different tasks for each period of time during the day in order to make sure I will be able to complete work to the best of my ability. Being raised under strict standards, I understand the importance of setting goals to provide guidance and confidence when shooting for a goal that is far off. Thank you in advance. I was wondering if it answered the question and if you had any ideas that would make it more interesting and appealing. This is my first draft, and it is due on Wed. So I am working a lot on it. How I can expand it maybe? |
I woke up to the sound of music blaring near my ear. I quickly turned it down. It was pitch black outside and everyone in my house was asleep. My alarm clock read 3:40 am. I had to be at work in twenty minutes because we were doing our monthly floor set. I thought about what would happen if I just did not show up. As much as I wanted to, I could not do it. I said I would be there and I intended on doing so. I am loyal, dependable, and hard-working. Ever since I can remember I have wanted a job. So two months after I turned sixteen I got a job at a "Limited Too." I am still employed there a year and a half later. Since I have been working there I have seen many people hired and many people quit. I am one of the longest standing employees and I believe this is because of my loyalty. Once I make a decision to do something, I stick to it. On the schedule I usually have the most hours, after the managers, of course. I believe this is because of my dependability. I always report to work, on time, on my scheduled days. I have only called in sick once. On days they need extra help, they call me because they know I will help them out. I will also come in earlier or stay later if they need me to. My managers know I am dependable. I am also one of the only associates who work floor sets. I believe this is because I am hard-working. Floor sets are generally done only by the managers before or after store hours, but I have been doing it since I started working there. Generally, getting up at four in the morning for a floor set is not my ideal Sunday, but I know my managers have asked me because I work hard. I almost think of it as a privilege to be there with them. My reward for all my hard work was a pay raise. My reward in college will be a diploma. I plan on applying to the College of Nursing and I know I have to work hard to be accepted. I plan on attending every class and working my hardest. Whether it is completing my degree or rooting for the sports teams, I plan to be a loyal Knight. And when it comes to making friends and becoming involved in campus activities I will be dependable. For me, I know that academic achievement is the direct result of hard-work. I don't know how to end it or if it's even decent.Please help. | I woke up to the sound of music blaring near my ear. I quickly turned it down. It was pitch black outside and everyone in my house was asleep. My alarm clock read 3:40 am. I had to be at work in twenty minutes because we were doing our monthly floor set. I thought about what would happen if I just did not show up. As much as I wanted to, I could not do it. I said I would be there, and I intended on doing so. I am loyal, dependable, and hard-working. Ever since I can remember I have wanted a job. So two months after I turned sixteen I got a job at a "Limited Too." I am still employed there a year and a half later. Since I have been working there I have seen many people hired and many people quit. I am one of the longest standing employees and I believe this is because of my loyalty. Once I make a decision to do something, I stick to it. On the schedule I usually have the most hours, after the managers, of course. I believe this is because of my dependability. I always report to work, on time, on my scheduled days. Furthermore, I have only called in sick once. On days, they need extra help, they call me because they know I will help them out. I will also come in earlier or stay later if they need me to. My managers know I am dependable. I am also one of the few associates who work floor sets. I believe this is because I am hard-working. Floor sets are generally done only by the managers before or after store hours, but I have been doing it since I started working there. Generally, getting up at four in the morning for a floor set is not my ideal Sunday, but I know my managers have asked me because I work hard. I almost think of it as a privilege to be there with them. My reward for all my hard work was a pay raise. My reward in college will be a diploma. I plan on applying to the College of Nursing and I know I have to work hard to be accepted. I plan on attending every class and working my hardest. Whether it is completing my degree or rooting for the sports teams, I plan to be a loyal Knight. And when it comes to making friends and becoming involved in campus activities I will be dependable. For me, I know that academic achievement is the direct result of hard-work. I don't know how to end it or if it's even decent. Please help. |
As I stepped foot on stage, I took a glance at the crowd in the Auditorium. There my parents were, roaring my name and expressing how proud they were of me. I could feel my heartbeat thumping harder and harder as I approached my fifth grade teacher. She presented me with a trophy in one hand and a firm handshake with the other while congratulating me on the completion of the program. With an enormous smile on my face, I turned to raise my trophy and at that instant I realized that I would soon be a part of the Excite family. Summer had arrived and the time had come for people to fill out their applications to be a part of the Excite staff. Anxiety took over my mind as I completed the application. Crossing my fingers, I placed the packet down in the box at the council corner in church and let out a sigh of relief. It would take approximately two weeks to receive a response from the national Excite team but little did I know that it would be worth the wait. I was ecstatic by hearing the news of being picked to be the seventh grade teacher. Training had begun the following Saturday and it seemed to be very instructive, the team had been very specific on telling us the main objectives of Excite and how to accomplish them. Upon the arrival of the first Excite day, my assistant and I were very eager to see how the students would respond to our lesson plans. As the day came to an end, we had already seen such a drastic change in attitude and a new love for reading. The students continued to enhance their critical thinking skills and had fun while doing it. Whenever it was time to think of new activities for the next session, my assistant and I would never procrastinate. Noticing the difference we made in the students lives helped motivate us and think of creative new lesson plans. The five weeks had passed and graduation day was around the corner. Parents and all teachers were both invited to celebrate the students accomplishments. Speeches were made by the national Excite team and later each grade went up stage to collect their certificate and trophy. After the students had graduate, teachers received a standing ovation. In that moment, I felt as if I had made a big difference in the lives' of not just the students but the parents as well. It was the same feeling I had felt at my own Excite graduation. I am very well aware that the University of Florida only accepts the best of the best and I can assure the staff that they won't be disappointed in me. In each community service project I have done, I have learned a different lesson in each and every one of them, which only makes me grow as a person. Doing these projects made me realize that my passion is to help people in any way possible, that is why my dream would be to become a doctor. With my determination and academic skills, I know I can overcome any obstacle that comes in my way. As years go by and my name comes up, the University will not dig their heads to the ground in shame, but will stand up tall with heads high and smile. This is my first draft and I would really appreciate it if you gave me some feedback to see if I'm on the right track or going off topic or anything. Also, it seems a little bit too long so if you could tell me what isn't needed in the essay, that would be great. | As I stepped foot on stage, I took a glance at the crowd in the Auditorium. There my parents were, roaring my name and expressing how proud they were of me. I could feel my heartbeat thumping harder and harder as I approached my fifth grade teacher. She presented me with a trophy in one hand and a firm handshake with the other while congratulating me on the completion of the program. With an enormous smile on my face, I turned to raise my trophy and at that instant I realized that I would soon be a part of the Excite family. Summer had arrived, and the time had come for people to fill out their applications to be a part of the Excite staff. Anxiety took over my mind as I completed the application. Crossing my fingers, I placed the packet down in the box at the council corner in church and let out a sigh of relief. It would take approximately two weeks to receive a response from the national Excite team but little did I know that it would be worth the wait. I was ecstatic by hearing the news of being picked to be the seventh grade teacher. Training had begun the following Saturday, and it seemed to be very instructive, the team had been very specific on telling us the main objectives of Excite and how to accomplish them. Upon the arrival of the first Excite day, my assistant and I were very eager to see how the students would respond to our lesson plans. As the day came to an end, we had already seen such a drastic change in attitude and a new love for reading. The students continued to enhance their critical thinking skills and had fun while doing it. Whenever it was time to think of new activities for the next session, my assistant and I would never procrastinate. Noticing the difference we made in the students lives helped motivate us and think of creative new lesson plans. The five weeks had passed, and graduation day was around the corner. Parents and all teachers were both invited to celebrate the students accomplishments. Speeches were made by the national Excite team and later each grade went up stage to collect their certificate and trophy. After the students had graduate, teachers received a standing ovation. At that moment, I felt as if I had made a big difference in the lives' of not just the students but the parents as well. It was the same feeling I had felt at my own Excite graduation. I am very well aware that the University of Florida only accepts the best of the best and I can assure the staff that they won't be disappointed in me. In each community service project I have done, I have learned a different lesson in each one of them, which only makes me grow as a person. Doing these projects made me realize that my passion is to help people in any way possible, that is why my dream would be to become a doctor. With my determination and academic skills, I know I can overcome any obstacle that comes in my way. As years go by and my name comes up, the University will not dig their heads to the ground in shame, but will stand up tall with heads high and smile. This is my first draft and I would really appreciate it if you gave me some feedback to see if I'm on the right track or going off-topic or anything. Also, it seems a little too long so if you could tell me what isn't needed in the essay, that would be great. |
Here is what I came up with: Graphic design has developed into an art that can be seen everywhere, from magazines to billboards. The graphic design field is very competitive and to learn the skills needed to compete. I would like to be admitted into Miami International University of Art and Design. I have been interested in this field since high school, where I took classes in digital design and I also attended a tech school for graphic design where I worked with different community organizations such as the Orange County Medical Foundation, the Association for Healthcare Documentation Integrity, and Orange County Public Schools to help design logos, letter heads, and building banners. The knowledge gained from working with these real world clients has made me grow not only in my artistic and technological abilities but also intellectually. I expect that through attending Miami International University of Art and Design my knowledge, creativity, and unique ability will continue to grow because of the technical experiences and as the result of working with other students. This will not only help me become a better artist but also build a solid foundation to start my Graphic Design career. | Here is what I came up with: Graphic design has developed into an art that can be seen everywhere, from magazines to billboards. The graphic design field is very competitive and to learn the skills needed to compete. I would like to be admitted into Miami International University of Art and Design. I have been interested in this field since high school, where I took classes in digital design and I also attended a tech school for graphic design where I worked with different community organizations such as the Orange County Medical Foundation, the Association for Healthcare Documentation Integrity, and Orange County Public Schools to help design logos, letter heads, and building banners. The knowledge gained from working with these real world clients has made me grow not only in my artistic and technological abilities but also intellectually. I expect that through attending Miami International University of Art and Design my knowledge, creativity, and unique ability will continue to grow because of the technical experiences and as the result of working with other students. This will not only help me become a better artist but also build a solid foundation to start my Graphic Design career. |
Florida State University's motto is Vires, Artes, Mores or strength, skill, and character. When I first read this motto I was confused. I wasn't sure how these concepts could be embodied in my life. But I then thought about my passion, music. I have studied, lived and been immersed with music since I can remember. When I thought about my passion for music and the FSU motto, I found an immediate bound. My life is completely lived by the philosophy of Vires, Artes, Mores. Strength is usually seen as being a man with huge biceps but is also found in morals. When I think of strength I think about being able to stand for what I want against those who disagree. Musical theater has become my passion and has been my guideline in school which is why I want to study it in college. Because this is my passion, I have become so strong due to the very little support out there. I have heard the word "No" enough to crush someone's dreams but not mine. Instead I have become strong enough to use "no" as a way to get closer to "yes". I have kept my attitude positive. I have learned to look into the future rather than the present and think of the reward. My mind has been set on music and no one can keep me away. Never before had I ever thought to myself that I could fail because I simply know that what ever I want is obtainable. I have already accomplished goals in my life that have changed me and am ready to achieve the harder ones that are to come, first being college. | Florida State University's motto is Virus, Arts, Mores or strength, skill, and character. When I first read this motto I was confused. I wasn't sure how these concepts could be embodied in my life. But I then thought about my passion, music. I have studied, lived and been immersed with music since I can remember. When I thought about my passion for music and the FSU motto, I found an immediate bound. My life is completely lived by the philosophy of Virus, Arts, Mores. Strength is usually seen as being a man with huge biceps but is also found in morals. When I think of strength I think about being able to stand for what I want against those who disagree. Musical theater has become my passion and has been my guideline in school which is why I want to study it in college. Because this is my passion, I have become so strong due to the very little support out there. I have heard the word "No" enough to crush someone's dreams but not mine. Instead, I have become strong enough to use "no" as a way to get closer to "yes". I have kept my attitude positive. I have learned to look into the future rather than the present and think of the reward. My mind has been set on music and no one can keep me away. Never before had I ever thought to myself that I could fail because I simply know that what ever I want is obtainable. I have already accomplished goals in my life that have changed me and am ready to achieve the harder ones that are to come, first being college. |
[my name aligned to left][my address aligned to left] I have always been fascinated by my mother's ambitious and resolute character and her capacious competence in a variety of disciplines. She has encouraged and pushed me to not just pursue my goals but always strive to do my best. I think the most obvious influence my mother has had on who I am, is that I have grown to have an on-going interest and thirst for education. She has instilled patience in me and so I am determined to put the spotlight on each thing in its own time, in order to accomplish my goals. As a result I have grown to become the determined and persistent man I am today. When I was younger, I have always been curious and fascinated about how electronics work. I would take things apart such as a RC toy car or my mother's stereo, in order to figure out how they work. In the process I drove my mother crazy and usually ended up with non-functional Electronics and pieces all over the place. After I discovered the computer, I immediately fell in love with it. With the advent of the Internet, I found out how to do stuff like develop web sites and etc. While researching for a possible degree program that combines both Computer Engineering and Electronic Electronics, I discovered Electrical and Computer Engineering. I felt relieved. I knew from then that's what I'd not like, but love to do. I believe the education offered here in Florida, at University of Central Florida is the best because of its strong academic curriculum. My desire to attend University of Central Florida has only gotten stronger the more I learned of it. There I will pursue my existing divers interests, explore new ones, and contribute meaningfully to the community. I know that no university will simply help me learn and grow. I must put in my own efforts and be prepared to do better than what I am expected to do. If that's the cost, I'm ready for the challenge. | [my name aligned to left][my address aligned to left] I have always been fascinated by my mother's ambitious and resolute character and her capacious competence in a variety of disciplines. She has encouraged and pushed me to not just pursue my goals but always strive to do my best. I think the most obvious influence my mother has had on who I am, is that I have grown to have an ongoing interest and thirst for education. She has instilled patience in me, and so I am determined to put the spotlight on each thing in its own time, in order to accomplish my goals. As a result I have grown to become the determined and persistent man I am today. When I was younger, I have always been curious and fascinated about how electronics work. I would take things apart such as an RC toy car or my mother's stereo, in order to figure out how they work. In the process I drove my mother crazy and usually ended up with non-functional Electronics and pieces all over the place. After I discovered the computer, I immediately fell in love with it. With the advent of the Internet, I found out how to do stuff like develop websites etc. While researching for a possible degree program that combines both Computer Engineering and Electronic Electronics, I discovered Electrical and Computer Engineering. I felt relieved. I knew from then that's what I'd not like, but love to do. Furthermore, I believe the education offered here in Florida, at University of Central Florida is the best because of its strong academic curriculum. My desire to attend University of Central Florida has only gotten stronger the more I learned of it. There I will pursue my existing divers interests, explore new ones, and contribute meaningfully to the community. I know that no university will simply help me learn and grow. I must put in my own efforts and be prepared to do better than what I am expected to do. If that's the cost, I'm ready for the challenge. |
Prompt #1 Describe the world you come from ď for example, your family, community or school ď and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. Being the first United States citizen in my family, I knew my life would be different from my parents who moved from Taiwan. My mom had only up to high school education and barely spoke English. My dad was an engineer and came home from work late every day. In my world, it is always do well in school and trample anyone getting in your way. I grew up getting bad grades, bullied, manipulated, and punished, always living in an unhealthy state. There was little friendship and social activity for me while living in Fremont; I was mostly lonely and isolated. During elementary school, nothing in the community inspired me nor gave me a dream. When it looked like there was no hope, I was introduced to Jesus Christ, who is now my Savior. After accepting Him, things began to change. My mom introduced me to Doctor Wei. To me, he looked like an average doctor, nothing extraordinary. As he greeted me, my mom told him of my struggles. Looking at me with a gentle smile, he said, "William, you will do great things. You have a purpose and you will find your dream." You do not hear that from a doctor every once in a while. That saying literally pierced my hard and cold heart. He was the first person outside my family to encourage me and give me hope. Originally a surgeon, he later practiced acupuncture and opened up his own small office. After numerous treatments with the needle-sticking process, my grades, behavior, and health began to improve. I was no longer considered a midget. I began to stand up for myself. I no longer needed tutoring that stuck with me for seven years. Through Doctor Wei, God restored me, lifted the blackness shrouding my mind and revealed the dream He put inside me. He transformed my world, which encouraged peace, embraced love, and supported gentleness. It became easier to make friends with a set of certain boundaries. However, I was ignorant and stubborn. I thought I was wise enough to handle any situation placed in front of me. I was oblivious to any advice given from my friends and parents. This came to my attention when I was in seventh grade and half of the school year had already zipped by like a bullet. I then knew that if I keep up like this, I would end up the way I was back at elementary school. To take action, I began to make amends with my parents and friends. Endless days of disciplining myself was well worth it for tearing down the walls of ignorance and stubbornness that surrounded me. Being able to listen in an understanding way is one of the many important factors of being a doctor. Seeing how Doctor Wei changed my life, I want to change the lives of others, especially those of the children. I want to give them hope when there seems to be none. I want to carry on his legacy and keep his dream alive. Prompt #2 Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are? Making the school varsity soccer team was one of the goals I had in mind when I started my junior year. During the first week of practice, the coach told us that next week, which was Christmas vacation, we would be conditioning. By the sound of it, hearing the rumors from returning players, and from the experience during the first day of practice, I was heading for seven days of hell. Looking at the past years, I did not run several miles without walking or stopping to catch a breath. The coming week came faster than expected. "We are running the hills today, boys," said the coach. Feeling my heartbeat at its normal pace, I double-knotted my tennis shoes and we began to walk toward the mountain track. Then the pace began to pick up. After couple of minutes, my muscles began to harden. My ankles began to break, slowly crying out in pain. My heart began to beat faster and louder, thumping against my chest. The sun, out in the open, scorched my perspiring skin. I thought I was about to get a heat stroke. Running up a hill was the last thing I wanted to do when most of my energy was already spent. The gravity pulled me down as I dragged my concrete body up the road. Ounces of my strength were seeping out of my skin as I went up and down the hill. Looking ahead, my teammates were a distance away. I was alone with no shade and the bright star burning my cells. Liquid salt drenched my clothes. My legs were numb with pain. When I finished half of the run, I was spent and on the verge of collapse. "Do not give up," I heard a small voice say to me. Soon my hard fibers began to loosen. This effect pervaded throughout my structure. Soon small, cool breezes began to blow on my face as I continued to run. With no water bottle in hand, I had nothing but God to lean on. I felt His being running beside me, encouraging me to finish what I have started. Crossing the bridge and finally able to see the street leading to the campus, I smiled and started down toward my school. Reaching the soccer field, I took out my water bottle and drank refreshingly. I was the last one to make it back. My legs were still a bit hard from the running. My chest was heaving for air. Later on, reflecting upon this experience, I did not give up while running the hills. I do not plan to take shortcuts and end the run early. I knew if I had taken the wide road, I would not reap any benefits. If I start giving up now, I would not succeed in life. The trials have only just begun and I am going to finish the tasks given to me. I will not backed down so easily. | Prompt #1 Describe the world you come from ď for example, your family, community or school ď and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. Being the first United States citizen in my family, I knew my life would be different from my parents who moved from Taiwan. My mom had only up to high school education and barely spoke English. My dad was an engineer and came home from work late every day. In my world, it is always done well in school and trample anyone gets in your way. I grew up getting bad grades, bullied, manipulated, and punished, always living in an unhealthy state. There was little friendship and social activity for me while living in Fremont; I was mostly lonely and isolated. During elementary school, nothing in the community inspired me nor gave me a dream. When it looked like there was no hope, I was introduced to Jesus Christ, who is now my Savior. After accepting Him, things began to change. My mom introduced me to Doctor Wei. To me, he looked like an average doctor, nothing extraordinary. As he greeted me, my mom told him of my struggles. Looking at me with a gentle smile, he said, "William, you will do great things. You have a purpose, and you will find your dream." You do not hear that from a doctor every once in a while. That saying literally pierced my hard and cold heart. He was the first person outside my family to encourage me and give me hope. Originally a surgeon, he later practiced acupuncture and opened up his own small office. After numerous treatments with the needle-sticking process, my grades, behavior, and health began to improve. I was no longer considered a midget. I began to stand up for myself. Furthermore, I no longer needed tutoring that stuck with me for seven years. Through Doctor Wei, God restored me, lifted the blackness shrouding my mind and revealed the dream He put inside me. He transformed my world, which encouraged peace, embraced love, and supported gentleness. It became easier to make friends with a set of certain boundaries. However, I was ignorant and stubborn. I thought I was wise enough to handle any situation placed in front of me. I was oblivious to any advice given from my friends and parents. This came to my attention when I was in seventh grade and half of the school year had already zipped by like a bullet. I then knew that if I keep up like this, I would end up the way I was back at elementary school. To take action, I began to make amends with my parents and friends. Endless days of disciplining myself was well worth it for tearing down the walls of ignorance and stubbornness that surrounded me. Being able to listen in an understanding way is one of the many important factors of being a doctor. Seeing how Doctor Wei changed my life, I want to change the lives of others, especially those of the children. I want to give them hope when there seems to be none. I want to carry on his legacy and keep his dream alive. Prompt #2 Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are? Making the school varsity soccer team was one of the goals I had in mind when I started my junior year. During the first week of practice, the coach told us that next week, which was Christmas vacation, we would be conditioning. By the sound of it, hearing the rumors from returning players, and from the experience during the first day of practice, I was heading for seven days of hell. Looking at the past years, I did not run several miles without walking or stopping to catch a breath. The coming week came faster than expected. "We are running the hills today, boys," said the coach. Feeling my heartbeat at its normal pace, I double-knotted my tennis shoes, and we began to walk toward the mountain track. Then the pace began to pick up. After a couple of minutes, my muscles began to harden. My ankles began to break, slowly crying out in pain. My heart began to beat faster and louder, thumping against my chest. The sun, out in the open, scorched my perspiring skin. I thought I was about to get a heat stroke. Running up a hill was the last thing I wanted to do when most of my energy was already spent. The gravity pulled me down as I dragged my concrete body up the road. Ounces of my strength were seeping out of my skin as I went up and down the hill. Looking ahead, my teammates were a distance away. I was alone with no shade and the bright star burning my cells. Liquid salt drenched my clothes. My legs were numb with pain. When I finished half of the run, I was spent and on the verge of collapse. "Do not give up," I heard a small voice say to me. Soon my hard fibers began to loosen. This effect pervaded throughout my structure. Soon small, cool breezes began to blow on my face as I continued to run. With no water bottle in hand, I had nothing but God to lean on. I felt His being running beside me, encouraging me to finish what I have started. Crossing the bridge and finally able to see the street leading to the campus, I smiled and started down toward my school. Reaching the soccer field, I took out my water bottle and drank refreshingly. I was the last one to make it back. My legs were still a bit hard from the running. My chest was heaving for air. Later on, reflecting upon this experience, I did not give up while running the hills. I do not plan to take shortcuts and end the run early. I knew if I had taken the wide road, I would not reap any benefits. If I start giving up now, I would not succeed in life. The trials have only just begun, and I am going to finish the tasks given to me. I will not back down so easily. |
I dont really feel I did that great on this essay so please be brutally honest! Im not really sure if this is good enough for an acceptance essay (im applying to texas a&M) please just revise in any way necessary! thank you! my essay... Everyone has to go through it, it all depends on when. The first time I lost someone I was six years old, then eight, followed by thirteen, and the hardest of all when I was sixteen. It is ironic how someone can lose another person forever and all it could take is a second. A person could go crazy just thinking about that second. Nicole and I met in eighth grade when we played against each other during districts. After making it onto the varsity team my freshman year of high school I was glad to find out that she had made it on varsity too. Being the only freshman, and being a little scared of the upper classmen, we stuck together. We became close friends as the years went on, I was only comfortable venting to her after practice about teammates or about our coach because I could trust her. We were close with our team but when it came time to pairing up for practice it was always Nicole and I. Our scores were always neck and neck and that gave us a healthy competition. We were always proud of each other after a tournament and never had any bad competitive vibes. There was never any jealousy between us, we truly only wanted the best for one another. We were in our junior year of high school when I had to face the toughest challenge of my life. We had golf practice at Pine Forest that day and our coach was working with us on the range to help prepare us for our upcoming tournament. Everyone was in an exceptionally lighthearted mood, considering the freezing November weather. Nicole was there keeping our spirits up by making jokes whenever an opportunity came. Our coach was feeling considerate so he let us go a little early for a change. At the stop light coming home I waved goodbye to Nicole, she gave me a big smile and waved back before she took a right onto the highway. Almost three minutes later, she drove under the freeway, ran the light, and was hit by a mail carrier vehicle. No one knows what she was doing at the time, maybe she did not see the light, or perhaps she was changing her music. They life lighted her to the nearest hospital and from there only time could tell. The next day at school, I did not know what to believe. Everyone began to spread rumors of her condition. I had anticipated seventh period all day, knowing that our coach would know the truth of how she was doing. However, it was far worse than I had let myself believe. Our coach told us that earlier that day at around noon Nicole had passed away. It only took a second for the news to hit me and I began sobbing on one of my teammates shoulder. I never thought that it would become this serious, I suppose I built up a wall inside me thinking that she would be back in no time and ready to play in our next tournament. After talking with her parents, I found out that when she was hit she became instantly brain dead and at the hospital there was nothing they could do but wait. It took me awhile to realize that I would no longer be able to walk down the fairway with her anymore. For a while, I began thinking about quitting the team, I did not have the drive to keep going anymore. Though after giving it some thought I decided that I would finish out the year, I did not think it would be fair to my coach nor to my teammates if I were to quit on them after already losing a teammate. It took all my strength to continue going to practice and to even joke around with my other teammates. I felt so lonely without her there beside me and all the sympathy from my other teammates would just make it worse. However, as the months went by I learned to accept that she was gone and struggled to learn to live without her. Nicole was always so full of life and spirit; she never dwelled on the bad things. She knew exactly what to say to make our coach smile when he was angry with us, and she knew how to make me feel better when I had a bad round. She was loved by so many because she had the ability to make friends wherever she went. One of her dreams was to go to A&M, and she had everything it took to be an aggie. I try to tell myself it all happened for a reason but I cannot think of a single reason as to why this would happen to such a loving girl like Nicole. Overcoming this obstacle was more than I thought I would be able to handle. I struggled with my faith, with my team, and with myself. Knowing that I can overcome such a challenge has helped me see what I am capable of accomplishing. I have become stronger now to take on my next obstacle. | I don't really feel I did that great on this essay, so please be brutally honest! I'm not really sure if this is good enough for an acceptance essay (I'm applying to Texas camp;M) please just revise in any way necessary! Thank you! My essay... Everyone has to go through it, it all depends on when. The first time I lost someone I was six years old, then eight, followed by thirteen, and the hardest of all when I was sixteen. It is ironic how someone can lose another person forever and all it could take is a second. A person could go crazy just thinking about that second. Nicole and I met in eighth grade when we played against each other during districts. After making it onto the varsity team my freshman year of high school I was glad to find out that she had made it on varsity too. Being the only freshman, and being a little scared of the upper classmen, we stuck together. We became close friends as the years went on, I was only comfortable venting to her after practice about teammates or about our coach because I could trust her. We were close with our team but when it came time to pairing up for practice it was always Nicole and me. Our scores were always neck and neck and that gave us a healthy competition. Furthermore, we were always proud of each other after a tournament and never had any bad competitive vibes. There was never any jealousy between us, we truly only wanted the best for one another. We were in our junior year of high school when I had to face the toughest challenge of my life. We had golf practice at Pine Forest that day and our coach was working with us on the range to help prepare us for our upcoming tournament. Everyone was in an exceptionally lighthearted mood, considering the freezing November weather. Nicole was there keeping our spirits up by making jokes whenever an opportunity came. Our coach was feeling considerate, so he let us go a little early for a change. At the stop light coming home I waved goodbye to Nicole, she gave me a big smile and waved back before she took a right onto the highway. Almost three minutes later, she drove under the freeway, ran the light, and was hit by a mail carrier vehicle. No one knows what she was doing at the time, maybe she did not see the light, or perhaps she was changing her music. They live lighted her to the nearest hospital and from there only time could tell. The next day at school, I did not know what to believe. Everyone began to spread rumors of her condition. I had anticipated seventh period all day, knowing that our coach would know the truth of how she was doing. However, it was far worse than I had let myself believe. Our coach told us that earlier that day at around noon Nicole had passed away. It only took a second for the news to hit me and I began sobbing on one of my teammates shoulder. I never thought that it would become this serious, I suppose I built up a wall inside me thinking that she would be back in no time and ready to play in our next tournament. After talking with her parents, I found out that when she was hit she became instantly brain-dead and at the hospital there was nothing they could do but wait. It took me awhile to realize that I would no longer be able to walk down the fairway with her anymore. For a while, I began thinking about quitting the team, I did not have the drive to keep going anymore. Though after giving it some thought I decided that I would finish out the year, I did not think it would be fair to my coach nor to my teammates if I were to quit on them after already losing a teammate. It took all my strength to continue going to practice and to even joke around with my other teammates. I felt so lonely without her there beside me and all the sympathy from my other teammates would just make it worse. However, as the months went by I learned to accept that she was gone and struggled to learn to live without her. Nicole was always so full of life and spirit; she never dwelled on the bad things. She knew exactly what to say to make our coach smile when he was angry with us, and she knew how to make me feel better when I had a bad round. She was loved by so many because she had the ability to make friends wherever she went. One of her dreams was to go to Camp;M, and she had everything it took to be an Aggie. I try to tell myself it all happened for a reason, but I cannot think of a single reason as to why this would happen to such a loving girl like Nicole. Overcoming this obstacle was more than I thought I would be able to handle. I struggled with my faith, with my team, and with myself. Knowing that I can overcome such a challenge has helped me see what I am capable of accomplishing. I have become stronger now to take on my next obstacle. |
Describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school. The essay I wrote happens to be a rather personal moment that I haven't shared with many people, therefore I was hoping for some feedback on it. Are there any grammatical errors? Is it clear and precise? Does the conclusion end on a weak note? If, so any suggestions with how to improve it? Any and all suggestions will be greatly appreciated. Like most children, I have always idolized my mother. Even though she can never find her car keys in the morning, and was always an hour or two late when it came to picking me up, she was always the quintessential example of a prosperous person in my eyes. According to the Business Advisory Council, she is the Businesswoman of the Year, but to me she is simply the woman who got up early to help me glue my project poster together and the woman who made sure that my pig tails were even for the first day of school. The consistent optimist and boundless energy that made up her personality has always inspired me, and I have always come to her with all my problems. Until I was 14, it never dawned on me to ask my mom about her own troubles. She was my "super-mom", my best friend; I always assumed that if she needed someone to talk to, she would come to me. But she never did. The moment that truly changed my outlook on life was the day that she had a panic attack in front of me. Being a mere freshman, I had no real life experience with mental breakdowns, so I started to cry along with her. She kept repeating "I can't breathe" and had to pull over on the side of the road. I was trembling almost as much as she was, and once we both managed to calm down, I bombarded her with questions. Over time, I found out that she's been struggling with panic attacks and periods of severe depression her entire life. Getting professional help always seemed like too much of an investment for her, so to this day she suppresses her issues. After uncovering my mother's anxiety issues, I started doing fanatic research, and was appalled at how common it really was, and how few people actually get any treatment for it. It made me realize that my mom was just one of the millions of people suffering from unresolved emotional distress. Main excuses for avoiding treatment were the huge expanses and how health insurance usually doesn't cover it. Therefore, ever since that traumatic moment, I have decided that my lifelong goal is to earn my Clinical Psychology degree, and then open up my own Research Clinic that will further the borders of knowledge of disorders while at the same time offering free treatment to those in need. The fact that University of Florida has one the nation's most renowned psychology departments is what drew me in, and UF is now my number one choice. Even though I have a demanding job, I also have a stimulating psychology internship and have kept up my grades in a challenging biomedical magnet program. My determination and clear cut plan for the future is what makes me an excellent contribution to the campus community. | Describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the OF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school. The essay I wrote happens to be a rather personal moment that I haven't shared with many people, therefore I was hoping for some feedback on it. Are there any grammatical errors? Is it clear and precise? Does the conclusion end on a weak note? If, so any suggestions with how to improve it? Any and all suggestions will be greatly appreciated. Like most children, I have always idolized my mother. Even though she can never find her car keys in the morning, and was always an hour or two late when it came to picking me up, she was always the quintessential example of a prosperous person in my eyes. According to the Business Advisory Council, she is the Businesswoman of the Year, but to me, she is simply the woman who got up early to help me glue my project poster together and the woman who made sure that my pigtails were even for the first day of school. The consistent optimist and boundless energy that made up her personality has always inspired me, and I have always come to her with all my problems. Until I was 14, it never dawned on me to ask my mom about her own troubles. She was my "super-mom", my best friend; I always assumed that if she needed someone to talk to, she would come to me. But she never did. The moment that truly changed my outlook on life was the day that she had a panic attack in front of me. Being a mere freshman, I had no real life experience with mental breakdowns, so I started to cry along with her. She kept repeating "I can't breathe" and had to pull over on the side of the road. I was trembling almost as much as she was, and once we both managed to calm down, I bombarded her with questions. Over time, I found out that she's been struggling with panic attacks and periods of severe depression her entire life. Getting professional help always seemed like too much of an investment for her, so to this day she suppresses her issues. After uncovering my mother's anxiety issues, I started doing fanatic research, and was appalled at how common it really was, and how few people actually get any treatment for it. It made me realize that my mom was just one of the millions of people suffering from unresolved emotional distress. Main excuses for avoiding treatment were the huge expanses and how health insurance usually doesn't cover it. Therefore, ever since that traumatic moment, I have decided that my lifelong goal is to earn my Clinical Psychology degree, and then open up my own Research Clinic that will further the borders of knowledge of disorders while at the same time offering free treatment to those in need. The fact that University of Florida has one the nation's most renowned psychology departments is what drew me in, and OF is now my number one choice. Even though I have a demanding job, I also have a stimulating psychology internship and have kept up my grades in a challenging biomedical magnet program. My determination and clear-cut plan for the future is what makes me an excellent contribution to the campus community. |
p.s. i need to shorten it a lot, 400 to 500 word max ""The awareness of the ambiguity of one's highest achievements (as well as one's deepest failures) is a definite symptom of maturity", said Paul Tillich US (German-born) Protestant theologian (1886 - 1965). It was a prosperous week for me, school had ended, and I felt I saw the world from a whole new perspective, and it was time for 247 entertainment. Thoughts began to materialize in mind, things I had never thought to think. "Mom gone= party;" that was what went on in my right brained self. My popularity was blossoming and I met new people with each audacious day. Some were tall and lanky, some short and fat, and other medium and average. They came in doses as well, some large and some small. There were good eggs and there were bad eggs, both intrigued me. The minute I had made word of it, and I don't know what mechanism all teenagers have in their brain, but the same ludicrous idea hit us all. "Party at Dom's house!" Before I could tap into the mature, righteous person I thought myself to be, the party was on and I was full of adrenaline and raging hormones egging me on. It was as if the little angel that used to reside on my left shoulder had gone on leave, and the only resident lay on my right, dressed in red, with a pitchfork in hand. Thursday. Time to start planning. "Who do we invite?" someone said, and names were bellowed out by each and every person ; it sounded busier than the stock brokers on Wall Street. From this turmoil hollering came a list. 17 names, 17 people, and this list slanted toward women of course. So there I stood, paper in hand with a list if names with numbers beside them all bubbled up to 17. "No", it was my conscience speaking, my good conscience. This squeaky, almost inaudible voice was telling me the right thing to do, which was tear up the paper and call the whole thing off. However, before I could think what to do, that voice was once again muted by my teenage instincts, which were telling me to "party, party, and party some more" Friday morning today was the day. On this morning I woke up around the same time I do every summer morning, and ate the same Grape Nuts cereal I ate every morning. Something was different that day; there was something in the air. My breakfast tasted better than it ever had, cleaning the dishes felt more like a cheer than a chore, and those 20 steps to the trash room with numerous recyclables and trash bags felt like a walk in the park. I felt like a king, and I should, because on this night I was throwing a party, and it was going to trump all others. Saturday morning, "17 year old dies in fatal, single car accident after leaving party under the influence of alcohol." I arrived home that day at around 2pm, feeling as fly as Miles Davis in his heyday. I greeted my pops and proceeded to my room to take a much-needed post-party-nap after a sleepless night and a morning of cleaning. My dad called me. "Domenic", I scurried back to the kitchen where he sat reading the Saturday paper. "Can you believe this?" he asked. A 17-year-old girl had died last night when she smashed head on into a tree; she had no seatbelt on and was killed instantly. My heart began to pound so loud I could hear it; my color began to fade, and my knees weakened... had someone left my party drunk? Had died? My inner persona, my goodness and maturity suddenly surfaced and I began thinking about all the bad things, the horrible things that could have happened. Needless to say, I would be grounded for a very long time, but what if they found out the party was mine? My parents could be sued for all they have, I could be sent to juvenal hall, arrested, who knows. Suddenly every phone call, every single disturbing ring, made my heart stop because I kept thinking that the person on the other line could be either the cops or someone who knew this girl. I immediately regretted the whole thing, this whole party that I had. I wished I never had it. I felt completely and utterly responsible for the death of this girl. This whole situation left a knot in my stomach; food tasted terrible, TV was horrendous. As I washed the dishes I stared at the scum left on the ceramic plate and I felt myself to be lower than that scum. That night I did not catch a wink of sleep; I was up all night thinking about this girl. I immediately jumped out of bed and scrammed to the kitchen. I had to read that article, I had to walk the plank and see whether she was a friend of mine, or someone who was at my party. I took the newspaper under my arm and took the most disturbing 20 steps back to my room, flipped the light on and read the article. Following Friday, my mother's discovery. She came to the conclusion from the long colorful jubilee of hairs in her pool filter and the scuffed tile floor, that I had had a fiesta at her home while she was away. I was ready for the punishment, for I knew what the consequences could have been if some left my party drunk and then drove, or if someone stole from the house, or even if someone slipped and fell. The consequences of having an unsupervised party with alcohol aboard is headed for trouble in the future, or better yet now. I am much more mature than the child that submitted to peer pressure that week following the end of the school year. I had also learned that it was wrong what I did to my parents. They trusted me and I went behind their backs and had a party that could have ruined everything; I mean people were drinking, and bad things could have happened. It was a miracle something did not. Integrity and maturity are the two most important things we have, and without either of those you are an incomplete person. What I am trying to express is that on the UF campus I will not be a party animal. I am going to be the guy that takes your keys away if I see you drinking, or calling you a cab, or driving you home. I'm going to be the guy that never drinks, and never falls for peer pressure. I am going to be the good influence on the UF campus community. Because when you get down to brass tacks, UF is a college and there are parties with drinking every single week. Most of the campus will put off their studies for the following day, get drunk, and make some bad decision. However, if you have one person, an influential guy that every one looks to as the man on campus and he is the only one not drunk, that is the influence people will see. Although I cannot stop all the parties, I mean people have to keep their sanity, but I will help it all from getting out of control, because I felt what it is like when the consequences arrive and I do not want to see that happen again. Accept me and I will contribute integrity and maturity to you UF campus community." | p.s. I need to shorten it a lot, 400 to 500 word max ""The awareness of the ambiguity of one's highest achievements (as well as one's deepest failures) is a definite symptom of maturity", said Paul Tillich US (German-born) Protestant theologian (1886 - 1965). It was a prosperous week for me, school had ended, and I felt I saw the world from a whole new perspective, and it was time for 247 entertainment. Thoughts began to materialize in mind, things I had never thought to think. "Mom gone= party;" that was what went on in my right brained self. My popularity was blossoming, and I met new people with each audacious day. Some were tall and lanky, some short and fat, and other medium and average. They came in doses as well, some large and some small. There were good eggs and there were bad eggs, both intrigued me. The minute I had made word of it, and I don't know what mechanism all teenagers have in their brain, but the same ludicrous idea hit us all. "Party at DOM's house!" Before I could tap into the mature, righteous person I thought myself to be, the party was on, and I was full of adrenaline and raging hormones egging me on. It was as if the little angel that used to reside on my left shoulder had gone on leave, and the only resident lay on my right, dressed in red, with a pitchfork in hand. Thursday. Time to start planning. "Who do we invite?" someone said, and names were bellowed out by each and every person ; it sounded busier than the stockbrokers on Wall Street. From this turmoil hollering came a list. 17 names, 17 people, and this list slanted toward women of course. So there I stood, paper in hand with a list if names with numbers beside them all bubbled up to 17. "No", it was my conscience speaking, my good conscience. This squeaky, almost inaudible voice was telling me the right thing to do, which was torn up the paper and call the whole thing off. However, before I could think what to do, that voice was once again muted by my teenage instincts, which were telling me to "party, party, and party some more" Friday morning today was the day. On this morning I woke up around the same time I do every summer morning, and ate the same Grape Nuts cereal I ate every morning. Something was different that day; there was something in the air. My breakfast tasted better than it ever had, cleaning the dishes felt more like a cheer than a chore, and those 20 steps to the trash room with numerous recyclables and trash bags felt like a walk in the park. I felt like a king, and I should, because on this night I was throwing a party, and it was going to trump all others. Saturday morning, "17-year-old dies in fatal, single car accident after leaving party under the influence of alcohol." I arrived home that day at around 2pm, feeling as fly as Miles Davis in his heyday. I greeted my pops and proceeded to my room to take a much-needed post-party-nap after a sleepless night and a morning of cleaning. My dad called me. "Dominic", I scurried back to the kitchen where he sat reading the Saturday paper. "Can you believe this?" he asked. A 17-year-old girl had died last night when she smashed head on into a tree; she had no seatbelt on and was killed instantly. My heart began to pound so loud I could hear it; my color began to fade, and my knees weakened... had someone left my party drunk? Had died? My inner persona, my goodness and maturity suddenly surfaced, and I began thinking about all the bad things, the horrible things that could have happened. Needless to say, I would be grounded for a very long time, but what if they found out the party was mine? My parents could be sued for all they have, I could be sent to Juvenal hall, arrested, who knows. Suddenly every phone call, every single disturbing ring, made my heart stop because I kept thinking that the person on the other line could be either the cops or someone who knew this girl. I immediately regretted the whole thing, this whole party that I had. I wished I never had it. Furthermore, I felt completely and utterly responsible for the death of this girl. This whole situation left a knot in my stomach; food tasted terrible, TV was horrendous. As I washed the dishes I stared at the scum left on the ceramic plate and I felt myself to be lower than that scum. That night I did not catch a wink of sleep; I was up all night thinking about this girl. I immediately jumped out of bed and scrammed to the kitchen. I had to read that article, I had to walk the plank and see whether she was a friend of mine, or someone who was at my party. Furthermore, I took the newspaper under my arm and took the most disturbing 20 steps back to my room, flipped the light on and read the article. Following Friday, my mother's discovery. She came to the conclusion from the long colorful jubilee of hairs in her pool filter and the scuffed tile floor, that I had had a fiesta at her home while she was away. I was ready for the punishment, for I knew what the consequences could have been if some left my party drunk and then drove, or if someone stole from the house, or even if someone slipped and fell. The consequences of having an unsupervised party with alcohol aboard is headed for trouble in the future, or better yet now. I am much more mature than the child that submitted to peer pressure that week following the end of the school year. I had also learned that it was wrong what I did to my parents. They trusted me and I went behind their backs and had a party that could have ruined everything; I mean people were drinking, and bad things could have happened. It was a miracle something did not. Integrity and maturity are the two most important things we have, and without either of those you are an incomplete person. What I am trying to express is that on the OF campus I will not be a party animal. I am going to be the guy that takes your keys away if I see you drinking, or calling you a cab, or driving you home. I'm going to be the guy that never drinks, and never falls for peer pressure. Furthermore, I am going to be the good influence on the OF campus community. Because when you get down to brass tacks, OF is a college and there are parties with drinking every single week. Most of the campus will put off their studies for the following day, get drunk, and make some bad decision. However, if you have one person, an influential guy that every one looks to as the man on campus, and he is the only one not drunk, that is the influence people will see. Although I cannot stop all the parties, I mean people have to keep their sanity, but I will help it all from getting out of control, because I felt what it is like when the consequences arrive and I do not want to see that happen again. Accept me and I will contribute integrity and maturity to you OF campus community." |
------------------------------------------------------ The vast pantheon of film and literature is home to many diverse characters. There are those presented as amalgamations of humanity's evils, men like Hannibal Lecter, figures so sinister, they can scarcely be called human. These beasts are entities of malice, evil incarnate. Conversely, there are those which are the embodiment of our dearest values, men like Atticus Finch. These personae posses infinite benevolence and wisdom that make them seem more saint than man. They likewise transcend humanity, albeit in a different way than their lucifrian counterparts. However, rather than try to emulate either unobtainable extreme, I prefer to follow the more "middle-of-the-road" Luke Skywalker (and not just because it means having a light saber and piloting an X-Wing). The key to Skywalker's immortality is his identifiability. He is a rebellious teenager whose head is filled with dreams of greater things. He is neither an angel nor a demon; he is a normal adolescent trying to grow up in a world too small for his potential. However, Skywalker matures, grows stronger, and overcomes steep challenges to protect what is dear to him and become the man he always aspired to be. In Skywalker I have always found a role model who I could identify with, yet still emulate. In sophomore year I joined the wrestling team and endured one of the harshest experiences of my life. I was subjected to physical torture by my coaches. My back still aches upon recalling how, weighing 154 pounds, I was forced to run up flights of stairs while carrying a 220 pound wrestler. I think of being hungry for three and a half months, forced to subsist on a diet of nectarines, water, and curds. In junior year I took three AP courses. I studied for hours every night, often returning late from rehearsals or practice and having to study through the early hours of the morning. I remember the shock of receiving my first ever D on an AP chemistry test, despite my hours of studying. However, the challenge of these experiences made me reflect back on Skywalker's journey. Surely if Luke Skywalker could shoot a proton torpedo into a two meter exhaust pipe, destroying the Death Star, I could run one more flight of stairs or do ten more chemistry problems. I survived wrestling season and achieved an A in chemistry one quarter. Witnessing Skywalker's displays of conviction instilled in me a fierce sense of determination and a belief that I could not only get past hardships, but be made stronger by them. Skywalker's most important aspect however is not his own power, but his ability to inspire and instill strength in others. In 2004, my friends and I entered a worldwide problem solving competition that tested our logical and creative abilities. Our task was to create an 8 minute skit, set, and props to solve this "long term" problem with a budget of only $150. We would also solve a smaller problem, called a Spontaneous, given to us at the competition. As we neared the deadline of the contest, stress in the group lead to infighting. Some group members wanted to give up; they felt we were not ready to compete. In response, I scheduled extra skit and Spontaneous practices. I gave everyone, including myself, a job so that they could contribute to the bettering of our skit and be too busy to fight. I compared our practice scores to the ones from the beginning of the year to motivate my team mates through visible improvement. To avoid a dispute, when time came to pick the Spontaneous team (5 of 7 could participate), I chose which members would compete based on the strengths that they had displayed. We placed 1st in the state and 3rd at the world finals in Colorado. Just as Luke led the victory against the empire; through inspired teamwork we had accomplished an equally impressive feat. I hope that I can one day become a man who can overcome any challenge with sufficient drive, one who helps all those around him through his efforts, just like Skywalker. Skywalker may one day fade from the public memory, but his force will be with me, always. | ------------------------------------------------------ The vast pantheon of film and literature is home to many diverse characters. There are those presented as amalgamations of humanity's evils, men like Hannibal Lecter, figures so sinister, they can scarcely be called human. These beasts are entities of malice, evil incarnate. Conversely, there are those which are the embodiment of our dearest values, men like Atticus Finch. These personae posses infinite benevolence and wisdom that make them seem more saint than man. They likewise transcend humanity, albeit differently than their Lucian counterparts. However, rather than try to emulate either unobtainable extreme, I prefer to follow the more "middle-of-the-road" Luke Skywalker (and not just because it means having a lightsaber and piloting an X-Wing). The key to Skywalker's immortality is his identifiability. He is a rebellious teenager whose head is filled with dreams of greater things. He is neither an angel nor a demon; he is a normal adolescent trying to grow up in a world too small for his potential. However, Skywalker matures, grows stronger, and overcomes steep challenges to protect what is dear to him and become the man he always aspired to be. In Skywalker, I have always found a role model who I could identify with, yet still emulate. In sophomore year I joined the wrestling team and endured one of the harshest experiences of my life. I was subjected to physical torture by my coaches. My back still aches upon recalling how, weighing 154 pounds, I was forced to run up flights of stairs while carrying a 220 pound wrestler. I think of being hungry for three and a half months, forced to subsist on a diet of nectarines, water, and curds. In junior year I took three AP courses. I studied for hours every night, often returning late from rehearsals or practice and having to study through the early hours of the morning. I remember the shock of receiving my first ever D on an AP chemistry test, despite my hours of studying. However, the challenge of these experiences made me reflect back on Skywalker's journey. Surely if Luke Skywalker could shoot a proton torpedo into a two-meter exhaust pipe, destroying the Death Star, I could run one more flight of stairs or do ten more chemistry problems. I survived wrestling season and achieved an A in chemistry one quarter. Witnessing Skywalker's displays of conviction instilled in me a fierce sense of determination and a belief that I could not only get past hardships, but be made stronger by them. Skywalker's most important aspect however is not his own power, but his ability to inspire and instill strength in others. In 2004, my friends and I entered a worldwide problem-solving competition that tested our logical and creative abilities. Our task was to create an 8-minute skit, set, and props to solve this "long term" problem with a budget of only $150. We would also solve a smaller problem, called a Spontaneous, given to us at the competition. As we neared the deadline of the contest, stress in the group lead to infighting. Some group members wanted to give up; they felt we were not ready to compete. In response, I scheduled extra skit and Spontaneous practices. I gave everyone, including myself, a job so that they could contribute to the bettering of our skit and be too busy to fight. I compared our practice scores to the ones from the beginning of the year to motivate my teammates through visible improvement. To avoid a dispute, when time came to pick the Spontaneous team (5 of 7 could participate), I chose which members would compete based on the strengths that they had displayed. We placed 1st in the state and 3rd at the world finals in Colorado. Just as Luke led the victory against the empire; through inspired teamwork we had accomplished an equally impressive feat. I hope that I can one day become a man who can overcome any challenge with sufficient drive, one who helps all those around him through his efforts, just like Skywalker. Skywalker may one day fade from the public memory, but his force will be with me, always. |
Describe a meanigful event; experiencs or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contributionto the UF campus community My Essay: July 2nd, 1999 was by far the most life changing moment I had ever experienced. On that sad day the Gwinnett county police contacted my mom to let her know that her husband, my father, had died of a heart attack around three thirty that afternoon. By the look on my mothers face I could tell what had happened. My mother immediately took my sister and me to our babysitter's house and went to go see her now deceased husband. While waiting for the predictable news so many things were running through my head. Things like, "This is probably all a dream, this can not be happening", or like, "How will I survive the rest of my life without the man who raised me". A knock on the door was heard, my heart had never beat so fast until this day. My mother walked in crying, and I just knew it, my prediction was right, he was gone forever. The last thing I ever said to my father was "I love you", and gave him a hug. Even though my father is gone he is my inspiration to do well in everything I do. Ever since that tragic day I see everything different now. I do not take life for granted and always try my hardest to live life to the fullest, because life is just to short not to. I think The University of Florida community would appreciate someone like me. I am someone who is determined, responsible, and hard working. For example, during second semester English I was having a lot of troubling keeping a good grade in that class. I started to feel as if there was no hope, I just thought about my father and how much of a hard worker he was, and I felt that if I gave up I would let him down. I buckled down and started studying harder and doing the readings, and with time my grade was were it needed to be to pass the class When I put my mind to something rest assured it WILL come out the way I want it to. I understand The University of Florida has many brilliant students in every field of education, and to be honest I may or may not be one of those excellent students. I can assure you though that I will work hard to become one. By the time I graduate from college and am looking for some type of job, I don't want The University to be embarrassed to recommend me. I want you guys to be able to brag about me, be happy to talk about me. I truly believe that with my determination to succeed in life, my personality, responsibility, and my hard work ethic I will fit in perfectly with the University of Florida community mentally and most importantly academically. | Describe a meaningful event; experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the OF campus community My Essay: July 2nd, 1999 was by far the most life-changing moment I had ever experienced. On that sad day the Gwinnett County police contacted my mom to let her know that her husband, my father, had died of a heart attack around three thirty that afternoon. By the look on my mothers face I could tell what had happened. My mother immediately took my sister and me to our babysitter's house and went to go see her now deceased husband. While waiting for the predictable news, so many things were running through my head. Things like, "This is probably all a dream, this can not be happening", or like, "How will I survive the rest of my life without the man who raised me". A knock on the door was heard, my heart had never beat so fast until this day. My mother walked in crying, and I just knew it, my prediction was right, he was gone forever. The last thing I ever said to my father was "I love you", and gave him a hug. Even though my father is gone he is my inspiration to do well in everything I do. Ever since that tragic day I see everything different now. I do not take life for granted and always try my hardest to live life to the fullest, because life is just to short not to. I think The University of Florida community would appreciate someone like me. Furthermore, I am someone who is determined, responsible, and hardworking. For example, during second semester English I was having a lot of troubling keeping a good grade in that class. I started to feel as if there was no hope, I just thought about my father and how much of a hard worker he was, and I felt that if I gave up I would let him down. I buckled down and started studying harder and doing the readings, and with time my grade was where it needed to be to pass the class When I put my mind to something rest assured it WILL come out the way I want it to. I understand The University of Florida has many brilliant students in every field of education, and to be honest I may or may not be one of those excellent students. Furthermore, I can assure you though that I will work hard to become one. By the time I graduate from college and am I looking for some type of job, I don't want The University to be embarrassed to recommend me. I want you guys to be able to brag about me, be happy to talk about me. I truly believe that with my determination to succeed in life, my personality, responsibility, and my hard work ethic I will fit in perfectly with the University of Florida community mentally and most importantly academically. |
I walked into the ESL classroom, for the first time, with my homeroom teacher. My homeroom teacher introduced me to everyone--at least that's what I think she did--and left. Next thing I know, I was sitting with another English-speaking, not-understandable teacher talking to me. Of course, I did not understand a word, and after tries and tries, the teacher called in an English-speaking Korean student. And that, was Jennifer Lim. A tall, skinny, smart-looking girl who spoke almost perfect English. Although I did not speak English, I sensed that she was one of the favorite students of the teacher. She talked to the ESL teacher, and translated the words to me in Korean. It might have been nothing to Jennifer, but that was when I felt a rivalship between the two of us--the teacher had treated me like a baby, talking very slow, and there was Jennifer, who had fluently spoke with the teacher. When I think about it now, it seems silly--me trying and trying to beat Jennifer, and Jennifer who probably didn't even notice it. However, I think it was that very rivalship that made me do my best in not just studies, but in everything. After I met Jennifer, I had goals. I had many goals--to study harder, to be more atheletic, to be more friendlier--to be more like Jennifer. I was desperate to be like her and everybody else. I wanted to speak infront of the whole fourth grade, I wanted to have someone, anyone, understand me when I spoke English. I recall that I always thought, "Only if I spoke English," a lot of times. I thought that I could do as much or a whole lot better if, only if, I spoke English. It was always that Jennifer was the first to answer a question, or finish an assignment. And next, Jennifer was the first student of the year who became a non-ESL student. When she did become a regular, main-stream student, I felt more desperate and worked harder. Although I was desperate to be like Jennifer, I didn't always feel "jealous." Sometimes, I felt hopeless. I remember crying once after school in the school parking lot, telling my mother how I was the only one who didn't speak one bit of English. I couldn't imagine myself speaking or writing any of the language without a dictionary. However, with my father and mother's encouragements and my other abilities, such as math, music and Korean, I was able to be more "jealous." Now, this "jealousy" didn't lead to hatred. I had no reason to hate a person who tried hard enough, and paid the price to become a voluble English-speaker. It was more of an admirement. If I recall right, I eventually wanted to be more than Jennifer, and more than any other student. I wished, as anybody would, of being complimented and recognized. For the next few years, I studied English, and although I'm not as perfect as others, and did not learn English as fast as others, I like to think that I've reached my goals and am successful. However, surly, my studies for English will not stop till the rest of my life. If there was no rivalship between me and Jennifer, I would never have succeeded, or at least as fast as I did. I am content that I met Jennifer and that I tried to be like her. I really want to thank her if I meet her again. | I walked into the ESL classroom, for the first time, with my homeroom teacher. My homeroom teacher introduced me to everyone--at least that's what I think she did--and left. Next thing I know, I was sitting with another English-speaking, not-understandable teacher talking to me. Of course, I did not understand a word, and after tries and tries, the teacher called in an English-speaking Korean student. And that, was Jennifer LIM. A tall, skinny, smart-looking girl who spoke almost perfect English. Although I did not speak English, I sensed that she was one of the favorite students of the teacher. She talked to the ESL teacher, and translated the words to me in Korean. It might have been nothing to Jennifer, but that was when I felt a rival ship between the two of us--the teacher had treated me like a baby, talking very slow, and there was Jennifer, who had fluently spoked with the teacher. When I think about it now, it seems silly--me trying and trying to beat Jennifer, and Jennifer who probably didn't even notice it. However, I think it was that very rival ship that made me do my best in not just studies, but in everything. After I met Jennifer, I had goals. I had many goals--to study harder, to be more athletic, to be more friendlier--to be more like Jennifer. I was desperate to be like her and everybody else. Furthermore, I wanted to speak in front of the whole fourth grade, I wanted to have someone, anyone, understand me when I spoke English. Furthermore, I recall that I always thought, "Only if I spoke English," a lot of times. Furthermore, I thought that I could do as much or a lot better if, only if, I spoke English. It was always that Jennifer was the first to answer a question, or finish an assignment. And next, Jennifer was the first student of the year who became a non-ESL student. When she did become a regular, main-stream student, I felt more desperate and worked harder. Although I was desperate to be like Jennifer, I didn't always feel "jealous." Sometimes, I felt hopeless. I remember crying once after school in the school parking lot, telling my mother how I was the only one who didn't speak one bit of English. I couldn't imagine myself speaking or writing any of the language without a dictionary. However, with my father and mother's encouragements and my other abilities, such as math, music and Korean, I was able to be more "jealous." Now, this "jealousy" didn't lead to hatred. I had no reason to hate a person who tried hard enough, and paid the price to become a voluble English-speaker. It was more of an advisement. If I recall right, I eventually wanted to be more than Jennifer, and more than any other student. I wished, as anybody would, of being complimented and recognized. For the next few years, I studied English, and although I'm not as perfect as others, and did not learn English as fast as others, I like to think that I've reached my goals and am successful. However, surly, my studies for English will not stop till the rest of my life. If there was no rival ship between me and Jennifer, I would never have succeeded, or at least as fast as I did. I am content that I met Jennifer and that I tried to be like her. I really want to thank her if I meet her again. |
Throughout my high school career I have learned more about myself than I can ever remember. I have participated in varsity and junior varsity football which developed my strengths, taught me skills and brought out the very best of my character. I am more confident about myself, especially when meeting new people and when I find myself in new situations. The training, coaching I received and commitments I have made to these teams have also assisted me in developing and organizing my school life. I have definitely become a much better student and the results are evident. Vires, Artes, Mores is much more than what it says. They are characteristics that I posses and are important to me. The Strength that I have obtained both physically and mentally is Vires. When I joined the football team freshman year, I knew there would be much more to it then just the sport itself. The first thing I did as a member of these teams was exercise and work out. Besides giving me the physical strength necessary to compete, the weight room developed my body both physically and mentally as well. I became strong mentally and developed a confident attitude. . On that last sprint, when I was physically drained I had to overpower my fatigue, I let my mind take control knowing that I could do that last sprint. I knew that if I set my mind to do something, I could! Being a part of these teams has taught me to be strong in so many more ways then I knew how to be before. In 2007, I was voted best all around athlete, during my junior year football season, for one reason. My attitude. I believed nothing could stop me and whatever I set my mind to is certainly attainable. This is Mores. I have learned characteristics such as respect, honesty, team work, time management and discipline. The motivation that football has taught me, has also carried off the field and into the classroom. There have been numerous times when I needed to perform in the classroom, so I could reach my goal of having immaculate grades. I buckled down, did what was necessary and accomplished my goals. It may seem that football is a big part of my life, well it is. I know that without football in my life, it is possible that I might have been involved with persons or situations bad for me. The coaches became mentors and the camaraderie of my teammates is something I'll remember forever. They've all helped me to develop and mature into the individual that I am. It is one of the reasons that I dream of becoming a Seminole. I know that I posses the same Vires, Artes and Mores, as all Seminoles at Florida State University. Before applying to FSU I had never heard of Vires, Artes, Mores, but over the course of writing this essay I realized how much this Latin phrase really applies to me. I am a hard working and motivated student, both intellectually and physically. Being accepted to Florida State University and becoming a Seminole would be a dream come true. | Throughout my high school career I have learned more about myself than I can ever remember. I have participated in varsity and junior varsity football which developed my strengths, taught me skills and brought out the very best of my character. I am more confident about myself, especially when meeting new people and when I find myself in new situations. The training, coaching I received and commitments I have made to these teams have also assisted me in developing and organizing my school life. I have definitely become a much better student and the results are evident. Virus, Arts, Mores is much more than what it says. They are characteristics that I possess and are important to me. The Strength that I have obtained both physically and mentally is Virus. When I joined the football team freshman year, I knew there would be much more to it than just the sport itself. The first thing I did as a member of these teams was exercise and work out. Besides giving me the physical strength necessary to compete, the weight room developed my body both physically and mentally as well. I became strong mentally and developed a confident attitude. . On that last sprint, when I was physically drained I had to overpower my fatigue, I let my mind take control knowing that I could do that last sprint. I knew that if I set my mind to do something, I could! Being a part of these teams has taught me to be strong in so many more ways than I knew how to be before. In 2007, I was voted best all around athlete, during my junior year football season, for one reason. My attitude. I believed nothing could stop me and whatever I set my mind to is certainly attainable. This is Mores. I have learned characteristics such as respect, honesty, team work, time management and discipline. The motivation that football has taught me, has also carried off the field and into the classroom. There have been numerous times when I needed to perform in the classroom, so I could reach my goal of having immaculate grades. I buckled down, did what was necessary and accomplished my goals. It may seem that football is a big part of my life, well it is. I know that without football in my life, it is possible that I might have been involved with persons or situations bad for me. The coaches became mentors and the camaraderie of my teammates is something I'll remember forever. They've all helped me to develop and mature into the individual that I am. It is one of the reasons that I dream of becoming a Seminole. I know that I possess the same Virus, Arts and Mores, as all Seminoles at Florida State University. Before applying to FSU I had never heard of Virus, Arts, Mores, but over the course of writing this essay I realized how much this Latin phrase really applies to me. I am a hardworking and motivated student, both intellectually and physically. Being accepted to Florida State University and becoming a Seminole would be a dream come true. |
what does this essay really ask for? what should i write about? most importantly i can't think of a good way to open the essay using the "vires artes mores" and then transition into how i am strong, etc. EssayFor almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life. Here's what i'm thinking (can someone correctcritique this pleasee): The base of Florida State's Motto: "Vires, Artes, Mores" combines strength, the arts, and tradition. As I inch closer to entering adulthood, it becomes ever more apparent that strength is an essential asset to have in my life. The moral strength I have attained over my teenage years is a valuable virtue not everyone is lucky enough to have: people become followers throughout high school and begin to follow trends and listen and agree with what other people say. I have remained morally strong and persisted in keeping my own ideas, making my own decisions, and forming my own opinions. I do not let other people make choices that could impact my life. In spite of my family telling me it was impossible for me to attend St. Thomas for my senior year due to family and financial difficulties, I strayed away from the discouragement and persevered in trying to manage a way to finish out my senior year. I tried everything possible until I found a way to get past all the barracades blocking me from the senior year I have been awaiting since I was just a freshman. My intellectual strength has helped me survive not only the curriculum at St. Thomas, but also proved useful in dealing with my everyday life. Being intellectually and mentally strong has helped me reason my way through difficulties in my life such as the divorce of my parents and help me see the silver lining. Over my high school years I really have evolved into a strong, confident, persistent person who doesn't let anyone get in the way of my goals. I know what I want to do with my life, and with the power of the strength I have I feel confident I will be able to take on anything that comes my way. | What does this essay really ask for? What should I write about? Most importantly I can't think of a good way to open the essay using the "virus arts mores" and then transition into how I am strong, etc. Essayer almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Virus, Arts, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Virus signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Arts alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life. Here's what I'm thinking (can someone correct critique this please): The base of Florida State's Motto: "Virus, Arts, Mores" combines strength, the arts, and tradition. As I inch closer to entering adulthood, it becomes ever more apparent that strength is an essential asset to have in my life. The moral strength I have attained over my teenage years is a valuable virtue not everyone is lucky enough to have: people become followers throughout high school and begin to follow trends and listen and agree with what other people say. I have remained morally strong and persisted in keeping my own ideas, making my own decisions, and forming my own opinions. I do not let other people make choices that could impact my life. In spite of my family telling me it was impossible for me to attend St. Thomas for my senior year due to family and financial difficulties, I strayed away from the discouragement and persevered in trying to manage a way to finish out my senior year. I tried everything possible until I found a way to get past all the barricades blocking me from the senior year I have been awaiting since I was just a freshman. My intellectual strength has helped me survive not only the curriculum at St. Thomas, but also proved useful in dealing with my everyday life. Being intellectually and mentally strong has helped me reason my way through difficulties in my life such as the divorce of my parents and help me see the silver lining. Over my high school years I really have evolved into a strong, confident, persistent person who doesn't let anyone get in the way of my goals. I know what I want to do with my life, and with the power of the strength I have I feel confident I will be able to take on anything that comes my way. |
The pillars of Florida State University are "Vires, Artes, Mores". Which when translated into Latin mean "Strength, Intellect, Character". They are all excellent qualities one would love to possess. More specifically, who I am is embodied in Vires, because I am a strong person in every matter of the word. Physically, I believe I can help lift heavy objects with ease. Morally, I fight for what I believe in even if everyone around me begs to differ. I will not change who I am for others. Mentally I am I am sure that I am abundantly strong. This did not come easily, however. Recently I had to have a lot of strength to go through a dramatic shift in my life. I quickly evolved from a teenager who thinks she is invincible; to someone who was holding on by a string. During just a normal day of happiness, I had a seizure-so everyone says. During this troubling time, I cracked my skull, slept for five days in the hospital, and awoke wondering where I was. I was completely confused about what had happened over those days and I was in absolute denial of the possibility that this first seizure could also be an early manifestation of Epilepsy. So was everyone in my family. How could I have Epilepsy? Months later this diagnosis was confirmed. Feeling depressed, hopeless, and different, I felt I was doomed to have an awful life. I reminded myself not to be naive, and believe I am immune to anything. During this past year, I have learned a lot about my own disorder. I was left with anti-seizure medications, but no instruction manual on how to deal with my newfound vulnerability. I worry every day about seizures, because they are spontaneous. It is with strength that I have the ability to realize the positive things this disorder has brought onto me. It has taught me to enjoy life more, and to take it for what it is worth. Life is precious and it can vanish at any moment. I may have to endure something in which the average person has been spared, but that does not mean I cannot have as good a life as the average person. It made me come to the realization that this is me, this disorder is a part of me in which I cannot erase but does not define me. I would blush whenever my Mother had mentioned it to anyone, but now I can casually tell people if they ask. It is just like telling someone I have a dog and a cat. It took "Vires", but I was able to overcome my hardships. I hope that I can be an inspiration to others who are stricken with Epilepsy. I want to be able to teach others that without strength to push through and remain positive, it is going to be hard to obtain happiness in this life. I believe Florida State University is a place I could receive a strong education. IS THE CONTENT OKAY? Did I answer the question validly.. or is it like a pity-fest? Thanks. | The pillars of Florida State University are "Virus, Arts, Mores". Which when translated into Latin mean "Strength, Intellect, Character". They are all excellent qualities one would love to possess. More specifically, who I am is embodied in Virus, because I am a strong person in every matter of the word. Physically, I believe I can help lift heavy objects with ease. Morally, I fight for what I believe in even if everyone around me begs to differ. I will not change who I am for others. Mentally I am sure that I am abundantly strong. This did not come easily, however. Recently I had to have a lot of strength to go through a dramatic shift in my life. I quickly evolved from a teenager who thinks she is invincible; to someone who was holding on by a string. During just a normal day of happiness, I had a seizure-so everyone says. During this troubling time, I cracked my skull, slept for five days in the hospital, and awoke wondering where I was. I was completely confused about what had happened over those days, and I was in absolute denial of the possibility that this first seizure could also be an early manifestation of Epilepsy. So was everyone in my family. How could I have Epilepsy? Months later this diagnosis was confirmed. Feeling depressed, hopeless, and different, I felt I was doomed to have an awful life. I reminded myself not to be naive, and believe I am immune to anything. During this past year, I have learned a lot about my own disorder. I was left with anti-seizure medications, but no instruction manual on how to deal with my newfound vulnerability. I worry every day about seizures, because they are spontaneous. It is with strength that I have the ability to realize the positive things this disorder has brought onto me. It has taught me to enjoy life more, and to take it for what it is worth. Life is precious, and it can vanish at any moment. I may have to endure something in which the average person has been spared, but that does not mean I cannot have as good a life as the average person. It made me come to the realization that this is me, this disorder is a part of me in which I cannot erase but does not define me. I would blush whenever my Mother had mentioned it to anyone, but now I can casually tell people if they ask. It is just like telling someone I have a dog and a cat. It took "Virus", but I was able to overcome my hardships. I hope that I can be an inspiration to others who are stricken with Epilepsy. I want to be able to teach others that without strength to push through and remain positive, it is going to be hard to obtain happiness in this life. Furthermore, I believe Florida State University is a place I could receive a strong education. IS THE CONTENT OKAY? Did I answer the question validly. Or is it like a pity-fest? Thanks. |
EDIT: is it okay to ask a question in the intro as a sort of grabber? | EDIT: is it okay to ask a question in the intro as a sort of grabber? |
Here it is: "Objection Your Honor! The defense council is leading my client""I'm going to overrule that objection.""Thank You Your Honor"As I sat in front of a real judge, in a live courtroom at Queens Criminal Court, sweatpoured down the side of my face. I hoped that my witness was able to continue as she faced a barrage of the defense attorney's questions. Having my last objection overruled accelerated my anxiety to an extent where I was almost certain that I was going to lose my case. "Does the prosecution have a closing argument?" the judge asked."Yes, Your Honor". I answered.As I stood in front of the podium with my papers, the palms of my hands perspired and trembled with excessive fear, aware that these very last words was my only and final chance to get the verdict and win the competition. "After reviewing the evidence, I found the defendant to be guilty and sustaining all charges", said the judge, concluding the trial. Overwhelmed with excitement and bliss, I shook my opponent's hand-proud of myself because of the victory, but more importantly, because I realized that I had a voice-a voice that was heard by a judge and accepted because of its strength and persuasiveness. Until I joined the Long Island City High school Mock Trial team, I never could have imagined myself in a courtroom unless I was an average person watching in the back. I joined the team during my junior year of high school. After three months of practice, each team competes against another school's team. As a member of this group, I became more than just an observer in a courtroom; I was one of three prosecution attorneys. Every Tuesday during mid- November through March, the team met at a law firm in lower Manhattan. We spent approximately three to four hours editing our work. Those days were the most chaotic days of the year. When I arrived home later than usual, my parents grew worried and concerned. Initially, they supported and gave me the opportunity to join the team, despite secretly hoping that I would quit. They were afraid that it would interfere with my academics and of what people thought when they heard that my grades abated. My parents kept reminding me to maintain my high GPA and to devote more time to my school work. Frankly, I never allowed anything to hinder my academic success, the constituent that determine whether I graduate from high school or not. However, I constantly found myself defending my interest in the team as well as the experience that I gained. Most of the people that I know developed a negative image of the team, and I find it difficult, if not, impossible to rectify. Each time I performed, whether it was in court or in my classroom, a feeling of authority saturated my mind. Teachers, principles, and students awaited the verdict as they watched me during the trial. Although the defense councils deprecated my opinions, my confidence level was stationed, helping me play the game by its rules. Plainly, I became so attached to the case and the team itself-as though we were a family. I lived the role of the lawyer in and out of the courtroom: at home, at the dinner table, in the mirror, and in my sleep. This experience has helped me become a more open-minded individual. I express my opinions without reservation and am open to any new ideas and viewpoints. I learned to accept what others think of me. However, I do not intend to desist what I find pleasure in doing because of its misconceptions. Although I did not necessarily win the championship that year, I won what has a greater meaning. I won knowledge, knowledge of how an actual trial processes, courtroom etiquette, and most importantly, a loud, persuasive, confident, and assertive voice that states its opinion when necessary. With one year remaining in high school, I seek to convince my friends and family of the way the experience has impacted my life. | Here it is: "Objection Your Honor! The defense council is leading my client""I'm going to overrule that objection."" Thank You Your Honor"As I sat in front of a real judge, in a live courtroom at Queens Criminal Court, sweat poured down the side of my face. I hoped that my witness was able to continue as she faced a barrage of the defense attorney's questions. Having my last objection overruled accelerated my anxiety to an extent where I was almost certain that I was going to lose my case. "Does the prosecution have a closing argument?" the judge asked." Yes, Your Honor". I answered. As I stood in front of the podium with my papers, the palms of my hands perspired and trembled with excessive fear, aware that these very last words was my only and final chance to get the verdict and win the competition. "After reviewing the evidence, I found the defendant to be guilty and sustaining all charges", said the judge, concluding the trial. Overwhelmed with excitement and bliss, I shook my opponent's hand-proud of myself because of the victory, but more importantly, because I realized that I had a voice-a voice that was heard by a judge and accepted because of its strength and persuasiveness. Until I joined the Long Island City High school Mock Trial team, I never could have imagined myself in a courtroom unless I was an average person watching in the back. I joined the team during my junior year of high school. After three months of practice, each team competes against another school's team. As a member of this group, I became more than just an observer in a courtroom; I was one of three prosecution attorneys. Every Tuesday during mid-November through March, the team met at a law firm in Lower Manhattan. We spent approximately three to four hours editing our work. Those days were the most chaotic days of the year. When I arrived home later than usual, my parents grew worried and concerned. Initially, they supported and gave me the opportunity to join the team, despite secretly hoping that I would quit. They were afraid that it would interfere with my academics and of what people thought when they heard that my grades abated. My parents kept reminding me to maintain my high GPA and to devote more time to my school work. Frankly, I never allowed anything to hinder my academic success, the constituent that determine whether I graduate from high school or not. However, I constantly found myself defending my interest in the team as well as the experience that I gained. Most of the people that I know developed a negative image of the team, and I find it difficult, if not, impossible to rectify. Each time I performed, whether it was in court or in my classroom, a feeling of authority saturated my mind. Teachers, principles, and students awaited the verdict as they watched me during the trial. Although the defense councils deprecated my opinions, my confidence level was stationed, helping me play the game by its rules. Plainly, I became so attached to the case and the team itself-as though we were a family. I lived the role of the lawyer in and out of the courtroom: at home, at the dinner table, in the mirror, and in my sleep. This experience has helped me become a more open-minded individual. I express my opinions without reservation and am open to any new ideas and viewpoints. I learned to accept what others think of me. However, I do not intend to desist what I find pleasure in doing because of its misconceptions. Although I did not necessarily win the championship that year, I won what has a greater meaning. I won knowledge, knowledge of how an actual trial processes, courtroom etiquette, and most importantly, a loud, persuasive, confident, and assertive voice that states its opinion when necessary. With one year remaining in high school, I seek to convince my friends and family of the way the experience has impacted my life. |
My dad frequently told me about his job experience; what it was like and how it took several challenges and how they were a part of his life. He also want me to become business and he said " Keep in your mind to succeed in general business, How?, in participating in marketing with companies like Nike that you will pick a group that will help you get what you are looking for." Hence, he made me interested in world business, international business, and marketing. I made the decision to pick business as my career in the future. I love building trust and relationships and seeing how I can help others. In addition, this is a great way to stay visible and give back to groups that have helped me in the past. I believe in myself that I will be successful in business in the future. Because I am confident and have abilities in organizing connections in world business. Otherwise, This is my strong desired to be business person as career as I want. Hi, EditorI am not really good at this and was trying my best to do:) | My dad frequently told me about his job experience; what it was like and how it took several challenges and how they were a part of his life. He also wants me to become business, and he said" Keep in your mind to succeed in general business, How?, in participating in marketing with companies like Nike that you will pick a group that will help you get what you are looking for." Hence, he made me interested in world business, international business, and marketing. I made the decision to pick business as my career in the future. I love building trust and relationships and seeing how I can help others. In addition, this is a great way to stay visible and give back to groups that have helped me in the past. I believe in myself that I will be successful in business in the future. Because I am confident and have abilities in organizing connections in world business. Otherwise, This is my strong desired to be business person as career as I want. Hi, Editor am not perfect at this and was trying my best to do:) |
The University of Central Florida is recognized for its outstanding educational system and many programs that are ranked highly across the nation. This is a school that is always expanding and trying to become more advanced for its students. Knowing that the staff cares about its students, exemplified through their persistent and constant upscaling of the school, highly influenced my decision of applying your school. I chose to apply to the University of Central Florida because I believe that it is more then just a school I'm applying for; UCF will become my home for the next 4 years and the diverse culture and comforting atmosphere of your school is something I would be proud to associate myself with. While going on college tours throughout high school, UCF has been the one school that drew me in the most. I have said since freshman year that one of my biggest dreams is to be able to call myself a Golden Knight and proudly wear Black and Gold. This university offers me many different opportunities and resources that other schools could not offer. Located in such a popular city, UCF is able to offer me and other students the experiences and job opportunities necessary to help us become successful. Your school is partnered with some of the biggest corporations and companies throughout the Orlando area which increases chances of job opportunities for all students. Throughout high school I was vigorously involved and committed to SGA in order to help my school become more active and school spirited; I would love to bring my drive and hard work to your school's SGA. If I had the chance to attend UCF it would be a wonderful learning experience. Your school offers me all the challenges and opportunities that colleges are supposed to. UCF is my first choice school and I hope that I am able to attend your school next year! | The University of Central Florida is recognized for its outstanding educational system and many programs that are ranked highly across the nation. This is a school that is always expanding and trying to become more advanced for its students. Knowing that the staff cares about its students, exemplified through their persistent and constant upscaling of the school, highly influenced my decision of applying your school. I chose to apply to the University of Central Florida because I believe that it is more than just a school I'm applying for; UCF will become my home for the next 4 years and the diverse culture and comforting atmosphere of your school is something I would be proud to associate myself with. While going on college tours throughout high school, UCF has been the one school that drew me in the most. I have said since freshman year that one of my biggest dreams is to be able to call myself a Golden Knight and proudly wear Black and Gold. This university offers me many opportunities and resources that other schools could not offer. Located in such a popular city, UCF is able to offer me and other students the experiences and job opportunities necessary to help us become successful. Your school is partnered with some of the biggest corporations and companies throughout the Orlando area which increases chances of job opportunities for all students. Throughout high school I was vigorously involved and committed to SGA in order to help my school become more active and school spirited; I would love to bring my drive and hard work to your school's SGA. If I had the chance to attend UCF it would be a wonderful learning experience. Your school offers me all the challenges and opportunities that colleges are supposed to. UCF is my first choice school and I hope that I am able to attend your school next year! |
For the last ten year of my life i have dedicate my time to help others. i always go out of my way to make sure my family and friend succeed at what they wanted to accomplish, as time has passed i have realize that i have put my goals of going back to school aside.I did not finish school when i had a opportunitie to do it.i made a choice of going to work to help my family because of neccesaties.I started working at a Dunkin Donuts,from there i have been working in office cleaning.When i was working i use to feel ashamed when other people use to tell me for a young women you should not be doing this kind of job,but i kept my head up cause i knew one day i will have the opportunitie. throughtout all my accomplishment and dissapointment in life,i have found out for myself that there will always be obstacle that will come in the way and i have to be able to fight these obstacle to reach my goal of going to college. I have two son which i am so proud of, my young one has austism and this had motivated me to work harder for them, I want them to be proud of me and let them know how important it is for them to have an education because if i dont have it what kind of influece it will be for them and i don't want that for them to struggle because they did not finish school. I want to be able to help them as they grow.i feel by getting my diploma i will show my sons and other its never to late to finish school and with hard work and perseverance and you set a goal for yourself everything can be achieved it all depend on me. | For the last ten year of my life I have dedicated my time to help others. I always go out of my way to make sure my family and friend succeed at what they wanted to accomplish, as time has passed I have realized that I have put my goals of going back to school aside. I did not finish school when I had an opportunities to do it.I made a choice of going to work to help my family because of necessities. I started working at a Dunkin' Donuts, from there I have been working in office cleaning. When I was working I use to feel ashamed when other people used to tell me for a young woman you should not be doing this kind of job, but I kept my head up because I knew one day I will have the opportunities. Throughtout all my accomplishment and disappointment in life, i have found out for myself that there will always be obstacle that will come in the way and I have to be able to fight this obstacle to reach my goal of going to college. I have two sons which I am so proud of, my young one has autism and this had motivated me to work harder for them, I want them to be proud of me and let them know how important it is for them to have an education because if i don't have it what kind of influence it will be for them and I don't want that for them to struggle because they did not finish school. I want to be able to help them as they grow.I feel by getting my diploma I will show my sons and other It's never too late to finish school and with hard work and perseverance, and you set a goal for yourself everything can be achieved it all depend on me. |
From the time I was young I have always been taught to be independent. My parents always stressed the importance of education but knew I could only receive the knowledge if it was something I wanted and worked for. I was never pressured or pushed to do anything, I was just given direction. I took the initiative on my own to make intelligent decisions and to do what I thought was best. I believe with that sense of independence came responsibility. With not as much guidance as other kids, and a little more freedom I was able to acquire responsibility as well as morals and values. As a teenager I was exposed to situations which I knew were wrong; that responsibility helped me make the right decisions. Being a leader is one of the most important characteristics anyone can possess. I think it is very important to be a leader and a role model. People look up to you so you have to be trustworthy, responsible and honest. You also have to know when to step up and give a helping hand. It also means not following the crowd by making bad choices; leaders make good decisions and set examples for others by thinking for themselves. Leaders have strong personalities and are very level headed; they fight for what they believe in and don't buckle under pressure. I feel I have displayed all of this through my position as a Student Government officer and also though my involvement with my schools Student Government Association and other leadership organizations throughout Florida. My final quality is drive. To have determination is very important in trying to become successful; if you believe its possible and you have the drive to succeed, you can achieve your dreams. I have always tried to challenge myself in order to expand my range of intellect. I always make it my priority to do the best I can because I know the only failure is the one you didn't attempt. Anytime I take on a project or join a club or involve myself in a higher level class I give it my all. I take my involvement very seriously because I know it's part my responsibility to make things succeed; and when they do succeed it makes me feel accomplished to know that I did the best I could and tried my hardest. I always have confidence in myself to do my best and I settle for nothing less. I would contribute these three characteristics not only in my classes, but around the UCF community as well. I would like to get involved in your community and these qualities would help me do so. I believe these qualities are important to possess throughout any college experience because they are the vital keys to being successful and I could bring them to your school. | From the time I was young I have always been taught to be independent. My parents always stressed the importance of education but knew I could only receive the knowledge if it was something I wanted and worked for. I was never pressured or pushed to do anything, I was just given direction. I took the initiative on my own to make intelligent decisions and to do what I thought was best. Furthermore, I believe with that sense of independence came responsibility. With not as much guidance as other kids, and a little more freedom I was able to acquire responsibility as well as morals and values. As a teenager I was exposed to situations which I knew were wrong; that responsibility helped me make the right decisions. Being a leader is one of the most important characteristics anyone can possess. I think it is very important to be a leader and a role model. People look up to you so you have to be trustworthy, responsible and honest. You also have to know when to step up and give a helping hand. It also means not following the crowd by making bad choices; leaders make good decisions and set examples for others by thinking for themselves. Leaders have strong personalities and are very level-headed; they fight for what they believe in and don't buckle under pressure. I feel I have displayed all of this through my position as a Student Government officer and also though my involvement with my schools Student Government Association and other leadership organizations throughout Florida. My final quality is drive. To have determination is very important in trying to become successful; if you believe its possible, and you have the drive to succeed, you can achieve your dreams. I have always tried to challenge myself in order to expand my range of intellect. I always make it my priority to do the best I can because I know the only failure is the one you didn't attempt. Anytime I take on a project or join a club or involve myself in a higher level class I give it my all. I take my involvement very seriously because I know it's part my responsibility to make things succeed; and when they do succeed it makes me feel accomplished to know that I did the best I could and tried my hardest. I always have confidence in myself to do my best and I settle for nothing less. Furthermore, I would contribute these three characteristics not only in my classes, but around the UCF community as well. Furthermore, I would like to get involved in your community and these qualities would help me do so. Furthermore, I believe these qualities are important to possess throughout any college experience because they are the vital keys to being successful, and I could bring them to your school. |
During the first week of summer, I walked slowly up to my new swim team coach. His thin frame paced back and forth on the pool deck giving words of encouragement to his swimmers. Many of the swimmers were gasping for air and had red faces heated from exhaustion. I was new to the team and was intimidated by such a show of pain and effort. A swimmer next to me reached for his water bottle and got the coach's attention. Coach David glanced at me and told me to get in the water for a small warm up. He gave me a test set to evaluate my swimming skills. I hastily introduced myself to some of my lane mates and slipped into the pristine, blue water. After that practice, I felt more tired and sore than ever before because Coach David constructed hard sets to prepare the mind for races and physical pain. I adapted myself to the grueling work and viewed every set as a challenge. In no time, I was making intervals that had seemed impossible a month ago. Coach David worked us until our bodies began to tighten up but his constant encouragement allowed us to pull ourselves together and swim harder. He would give extra sets to those swimmers who tested his patience by swimming slow and rewarded those who put their best effort forward. After each practice, he would remind us that racing team mates collectively improves the performance of the team. Toward the end of the season, I was in the best shape of my life and waited anxiously for a chance to see the results of my hard work. The Junior Olympics was the last and most important competition of the season and I anticipated solid races. The starter announces that my heat can now enter the water. I slid carefully into the water and tried to curb my excitement. I gripped tightly to the bars under the swimming block and waited for the beep. Take your mark, beep, and the swimmers are off! The swimmers looked like a floating bridge spanning the pool with foamy water jetting from their feet. I kicked and pulled fast to pass the swimmer next to me and slowly slipped ahead of the bunch. After the first fifty yards, my legs began to swell with pain as the lactic acid built up. I could see Coach David move his arms over his head and encourage me from the deck and pushed harder than ever before. Despite the horrible pain, I pushed myself harder than ever before and encouraged myself to keep a constant speed. Slowly, some of the swimmers in the outer lanes began to tire and dropped behind but I stayed in the same position. After passing the flags signaling the finish was near, I sprinted the last few yards to beat some of my competitors. I snatched third place in that race and was pleased by how well I did. I walked up to Coach David and he gave me a pat on the back and complemented me on my race. I also earned a spot on the Florida Gold Coast All-Star team by earning top three in most of my swims. I was privileged enough to accompany Coach David at the All Star meet to race against the best swimmers in the state. He recognized my potential and gave me the best advice. He said that "trying harder in practice is better than striving for unreachable goals". This quote means that more effort should be put into preparation rather than striving to be a perfectionist. At the beginning of the next season, I wondered why Coach David was not teaching our group and was told he left for personal reasons. He kept our team together through the whole season and built a swimming powerhouse. The last couple of years after he left we had been finishing towards the top Gold Coast team standings and were the big kids on the block. Coach David's absence deeply saddened me because I did not realize how much he helped me until he was gone. He was an inspiring leader and a hardworking swim coach that put his swimmers first. TY for reading over my essay and correcting it in advance. I had my mom read it over a couple of times and she said it was alright other than the Conclusion. I was wondering what your thoughts were about to improve the conclusion and any grammar issues and extraneous details. Thank you again. | During the first week of summer, I walked slowly up to my new swim team coach. His thin frame paced back and forth on the pool deck giving words of encouragement to his swimmers. Many of the swimmers were gasping for air and had red faces heated from exhaustion. I was new to the team and was intimidated by such a show of pain and effort. A swimmer next to me reached for his water bottle and got the coach's attention. Coach David glanced at me and told me to get in the water for a small warm up. He gave me a test set to evaluate my swimming skills. I hastily introduced myself to some of my lane mates and slipped into the pristine, blue water. After that practice, I felt more tired and sore than ever before because Coach David constructed hard sets to prepare the mind for races and physical pain. I adapted myself to the grueling work and viewed every set as a challenge. In no time, I was making intervals that had seemed impossible a month ago. Coach David worked us until our bodies began to tighten up, but his constant encouragement allowed us to pull ourselves together and swim harder. He would give extra sets to those swimmers who tested his patience by swimming slow and rewarded those who put their best effort forward. After each practice, he would remind us that racing teammates collectively improves the performance of the team. Toward the end of the season, I was in the best shape of my life and waited anxiously for a chance to see the results of my hard work. The Junior Olympics was the last and most important competition of the season and I anticipated solid races. The starter announces that my heat can now enter the water. I slid carefully into the water and tried to curb my excitement. I gripped tightly to the bars under the swimming block and waited for the beep. Take your mark, beep, and the swimmers are off! The swimmers looked like a floating bridge spanning the pool with foamy water jetting from their feet. I kicked and pulled fast to pass the swimmer next to me and slowly slipped ahead of the bunch. After the first fifty yards, my legs began to swell with pain as the lactic acid built up. I could see Coach David move his arms over his head and encourage me from the deck and pushed harder than ever before. Despite the horrible pain, I pushed myself harder than ever before and encouraged myself to keep a constant speed. Slowly, some swimmers in the outer lanes began to tire and dropped behind, but I stayed in the same position. After passing the flags signaling the finish was near, I sprinted the last few yards to beat some of my competitors. I snatched third place in that race and was pleased by how well I did. I walked up to Coach David, and he gave me a pat on the back and complemented me on my race. Furthermore, I also earned a spot on the Florida Gold Coast All-Star team by earning top three in most of my swims. Furthermore, I was privileged enough to accompany Coach David at the Star meet to race against the best swimmers in the state. He recognized my potential and gave me the best advice. He said that "trying harder in practice is better than striving for unreachable goals". This quote means that more effort should be put into preparation rather than striving to be a perfectionist. At the beginning of the next season, I wondered why Coach David was not teaching our group and was told he left for personal reasons. He kept our team together through the whole season and built a swimming powerhouse. The last couple of years after he left we had been finishing towards the top Gold Coast team standings and were the big kids on the block. Coach David's absence deeply saddened me because I did not realize how much he helped me until he was gone. He was an inspiring leader and a hardworking swim coach that put his swimmers first. TY for reading over my essay and correcting it in advance. I had my mom read it over a couple of times, and she said it was alright other than the Conclusion. I was wondering what your thoughts were about to improve the conclusion and any grammar issues and extraneous details. Thank you again. |
A meaningful event that will affect my contribution to the UF campus community was the death of my grandpa, Bernie. Throughout my life, he had been a teacher to me and always encouraged me to do the best in school. He helped baby sit me during my times as a toddler and served as a role model in my early childhood. During the times he would visit me in South Florida, I would ask him about his life in the army at the time of WWII and after. He would spend almost an entire afternoon telling me about different sorties and major battles that he experienced as a Seabee and engineer. In addition to his duties in the army, he began a major leader in a construction company in Cleveland, Ohio and helped build many of the corporate buildings there. During my middle school and my first year of high school, he helped me keep track on my schoolwork during a hard divorce with a lot of fighting within the family. However, Grandpa Bernie supported me and encouraged me to improve my attitude toward life and to live life as a hard worker. Even though he was retired he would go through his most trying and painful years of his life as he was diagnosed with Kidney cancer had to be treated with chemotherapy and surgery. However, even these attempts to cure him of his cancer failed as it returned after the medication wore off. This turned into the most trying years of both his and my life. Each Friday at Temple services I would pray that G-d would answer my prayers and help Grandpa Bernie win against the cancer that sucked all the life out of him. I was almost reduced to tears when I saw him reliant upon a respirator with a hard time breathing. On my last visit to him, I went to my grandparent's apartment in Cleveland as the snow was falling and felt determined to help my grandpa overcome his sickness. I even sent him a touching poem that he admired and kept it pinned to the wall as something to keep him fighting for the small chance he had. He had just had chemotherapy done and the little hair that he had simply fell out. His health changed from being a healthy active person to being one who was sick and reduced to almost the same room in his apartment. Even walking between rooms presented difficulties and during the last months of his life almost was confined to one room. He had trouble feeding himself and had to have a feeding tube to get his daily nutrition. His body due to the quick progression of the disease was quickly reduced to skin and bones. He had a permanent paleness to his face and seemed almost like a ghost. I could not help but think how such a friendly person can be taken so fast from me. I would bring my hard work and diligence to the University of Florida and seek to strive for my full potential. This tragic death broke the protective shell of childhood and threw me into the real world. After his death, I force myself to do the best that I can in all aspects of life. In swimming, I pushed myself harder by coming to every practice with the mindset of being the best swimmer I could be. I no longer wanted to hesitate myself and prevent myself from achieving greatness that had seemed far off before. Instead, I toppled the wall of uncertainty and inaction and instead strived for greatness and let myself free. I noticed how fragile life and can be and the sheer quickness fortune can change. During this time, I forced myself to try my hardest in school and to strive for my best potential. He served as beacon to me and helped me push through hard times both academically and socially and focus on a bright future. Most importantly, his kindness to other people and his wisdom served to inspire me to volunteer at places outside of school. As a result, I volunteered at a hospital for the three months of summer and sought to help others in the same circumstances as my grandfather. I spend over 250 service hours helping to cheer up sick people and making their lives more convenient and happier.. I would use my past experiences with the loss of a close family member to help others in similar situations. I would help them learn from their experiences and grow stronger as a person. Over the subsequent years of reflection, I have changed into a mature person and enjoy helping others that are experiencing pain in their life. Could you just tell me whether i am on the right track and how i can elaborate.don't go over the grammar yet!!!. i have not checked it yet. this is just an essay off the top of my head. Can you tell me whether this essay could be a good answer to the question asked?. Thank You so much. Today i seemed to have been touched by the writing angel or something. I have been getting a lot of ideas. Thank you a lot anyways. | A meaningful event that will affect my contribution to the OF campus community was the death of my grandpa, Bernie. Throughout my life, he had been a teacher to me and always encouraged me to do the best in school. He helped baby sit me during my times as a toddler and served as a role model in my early childhood. During the times he would visit me in South Florida, I would ask him about his life in the army at the time of WWII and after. He would spend almost an entire afternoon telling me about different sorties and major battles that he experienced as a Seabed and engineer. In addition to his duties in the army, he began a major leader in a construction company in Cleveland, Ohio and helped build many of the corporate buildings there. During my middle school and my first year of high school, he helped me keep track on my schoolwork during a hard divorce with a lot of fighting within the family. However, Grandpa Bernie supported me and encouraged me to improve my attitude toward life and to live life as a hard worker. Even though he was retired he would go through his most trying and painful years of his life as he was diagnosed with Kidney cancer had to be treated with chemotherapy and surgery. However, even these attempts to cure him of his cancer failed as it returned after the medication wore off. This turned into the most trying years of both his and my life. Each Friday at Temple services I would pray that G-d would answer my prayers and help Grandpa Bernie win against the cancer that sucked all the life out of him. I was almost reduced to tears when I saw him reliant upon a respirator with a hard time breathing. On my last visit to him, I went to my grandparent's apartment in Cleveland as the snow was falling and felt determined to help my grandpa overcome his sickness. I even sent him a touching poem that he admired and kept it pinned to the wall as something to keep him fighting for the small chance he had. He had just had chemotherapy done and the little hair that he had simply fallen out. His health changed from being a healthy active person to being one who was sick and reduced to almost the same room in his apartment. Even walking between rooms presented difficulties and during the last months of his life almost was confined to one room. He had trouble feeding himself and had to have a feeding tube to get his daily nutrition. His body due to the quick progression of the disease was quickly reduced to skin and bones. He had a permanent paleness to his face and seemed almost like a ghost. I could not help but think how such a friendly person can be taken so fast from me. I would bring my hard work and diligence to the University of Florida and seek to strive for my full potential. This tragic death broke the protective shell of childhood and threw me into the real world. After his death, I force myself to do the best that I can in all aspects of life. In swimming, I pushed myself harder by coming to every practice with the mindset of being the best swimmer I could be. I no longer wanted to hesitate myself and prevent myself from achieving greatness that had seemed far off before. Instead, I toppled the wall of uncertainty and inaction and instead strived for greatness and let myself free. I noticed how fragile life and can be and the sheer quickness fortune can change. During this time, I forced myself to try my hardest in school and to strive for my best potential. He served as beacon to me and helped me push through hard times both academically and socially and focus on a bright future. Most importantly, his kindness to other people and his wisdom served to inspire me to volunteer at places outside of school. As a result, I volunteered at a hospital for the three months of summer and sought to help others in the same circumstances as my grandfather. I spend over 250 service hours helping to cheer up sick people and making their lives more convenient and happier. I would use my experiences with the loss of a close family member to help others in similar situations. Furthermore, I would help them learn from their experiences and grow stronger as a person. Over the subsequent years of reflection, I have changed into a mature person and enjoy helping others that are experiencing pain in their life. Could you just tell me whether I am on the right track and how I can elaborate. Don't go over the grammar yet!!!? I have not checked it yet. This is just an essay off the top of my head. Can you tell me whether this essay could be a good answer to the question asked?. Thank You so much. Today I seemed to have been touched by the writing angel or something. I have been getting a lot of ideas. Thank you a lot anyway. |
I choose to apply to University of Central Florida because of its aerospace engineering program and proximity to Orlando. From the age of nine, I wanted to become an aerospace engineer after watching the military jets at the air show. The aerospace engineering department at UCF owns many wind tunnels and numerous laboratories that help students learn to use the equipment. The sports program also attracted me to apply to UCF because of its exciting Division I athletics. I am a major sports fan and need a college with strong sports teams to cheer for. I live in South Florida and plan to stay in the state for my college education. The University plans to expand their campus and improve its quality of education with an affordable tuition. I wanted to apply for the Burnett's Honors College because it offers honors college courses with fewer than twenty five students per class. The university offers various programs that allow undergraduate students to conduct research on their areas of interest with their professor guiding them. The student council supports a motley group of clubs and the creation of new clubs to get UCF students involved. The engineering college at UCF offers a combined mechanical and aerospace bachelorette program allowing students to complete dual degrees in about five years. The advantages of having two bachelors' degrees are higher starting salaries and being more employable. In that aspect, almost all of the engineering students from UCF have jobs immediately after graduation. The university offers master degrees in aerospace engineering and encourages students to pursue higher education. The top quality sports program that UCF possesses also entices me to apply for admission. The numerous intramural sports clubs offered will allow me to participate in many sports without the constant stress of having to win every game. I have competed on the Plantation Swim Team for over thirteen years in South Florida and earned a host of medals and ribbons from the Gold Coast meets. In addition, I broke numerous team records and many still stand today. The team competes in USA Swimming meets throughout Florida and locally. I joined the varsity swim team at my high school and was in a relay that qualified for the State Championship meet in Sebastian, Florida. I have become more of a sports enthusiast as I got older. I enjoy watching games of all kinds from rugby to football. I would definitely attend all of the home football and basketball games and cheer for the Knights! The University of Central Florida offers many complimentary amenities to keep their students physically fit. The facilities include a large state of the art recreational complex that contains exercise machines and a weight room. The University also has an indoor track that can be used to escape from the hot weather outside. The University of Central Florida runs a free shuttle system in order to provide convenient transportation around the campus. I like the university's location which is close to both my family and potential job opportunities. It is located about three hours from my house in South Florida, a more convenient trip for family members to visit. The university is also located close to theme parks in Orlando that would be ideal for entertainment and fun during free time. Major companies offer cooperative education and internships to UCF's engineering students because of its proximity to offices in Orlando. Boeing, Lockheed Martin, and Aerotek CE have headquarters close to the university making internship opportunities for summer employment and future job opportunities. The large alumnae community works together with the students at the university to offer jobs, mentoring and learning opportunities. In addition, UCF has the tools needed to give students the edge in the engineering industry. Thank you for looking over my essay. Just making sure the grammar is okay and it is on topic. | I choose to apply to University of Central Florida because of its aerospace engineering program and proximity to Orlando. From the age of nine, I wanted to become an aerospace engineer after watching the military jets at the air show. The aerospace engineering department at UCF owns many wind tunnels and numerous laboratories that help students learn to use the equipment. The sports program also attracted me to apply to UCF because of its exciting Division I athletics. I am a major sports fan and need a college with strong sports teams to cheer for. I live in South Florida and plan to stay in the state for my college education. The University plans to expand their campus and improve its quality of education with an affordable tuition. I wanted to apply for the Burnett's Honors College because it offers honors college courses with fewer than twenty-five students per class. The university offers various programs that allow undergraduate students to conduct research on their areas of interest with their professor guiding them. The student council supports a motley group of clubs and the creation of new clubs to get UCF students involved. The engineering college at UCF offers a combined mechanical and aerospace bachelorette program allowing students to complete dual degrees in about five years. The advantages of having two bachelors' degrees are higher starting salaries and being more employable. In that aspect, almost all the engineering students from UCF have jobs immediately after graduation. The university offers master degrees in aerospace engineering and encourages students to pursue higher education. The top quality sports program that UCF possesses also entices me to apply for admission. The numerous intramural sports clubs offered will allow me to participate in many sports without the constant stress of having to win every game. I have competed on the Plantation Swim Team for over thirteen years in South Florida and earned a host of medals and ribbons from the Gold Coast meets. In addition, I broke numerous team records and many still stand today. The team competes in USA Swimming meets throughout Florida and locally. I joined the varsity swim team at my high school and was in a relay that qualified for the State Championship meet in Sebastian, Florida. I have become more of a sports enthusiast as I got older. Furthermore, I enjoy watching games of all kinds from rugby to football. Furthermore, I would definitely attend all the home football and basketball games and cheer for the Knights! The University of Central Florida offers many complimentary amenities to keep their students physically fit. The facilities include a large state of the art recreational complex that contains exercise machines and a weight room. The University also has an indoor track that can be used to escape from the hot weather outside. The University of Central Florida runs a free shuttle system in order to provide convenient transportation around the campus. I like the university's location which is close to both my family and potential job opportunities. It is located about three hours from my house in South Florida, a more convenient trip for family members to visit. The university is also located close to theme parks in Orlando that would be ideal for entertainment and fun during free time. Major companies offer cooperative education and internships to UCF's engineering students because of its proximity to offices in Orlando. Boeing, Lockheed Martin, and Aerated CE have headquarters close to the university making internship opportunities for summer employment and future job opportunities. The large alumnae community works together with the students at the university to offer jobs, mentoring and learning opportunities. In addition, UCF has the tools needed to give students the edge in the engineering industry. Thank you for looking over my essay. Just making sure the grammar is okay, and it is on topic. |
Being the youngest in the family, I am hyperactive. As a kid, all I do at home is play. I don't take things seriously. It's as if the only thing that matters is to have fun. I was never afraid of me getting scolded by my naughtiness. I was never afraid of getting hurt. I do whatever I want to. I was simply acting myself. I am totally a different person in school. I don't belong to a big group. I was never part of a school team. Worse, I don't participate in class. I don't excel at anything. I've always been the shy type, the kid who never starts conversations, the kid who remains silent, and the kid who's afraid of getting hurt. I am fully aware that a usual kid acts the same way both in school and at home. I act different. I wasn't like any other kid. I was like a kid who's fully equipped with a raincoat and an umbrella on a hot summer day. I was afraid of the rain. I was afraid of strange things that may come my way. I was afraid of doing things on my own. Afraid of not doing the right thing. This only shows that the word trust wasn't easy to find in my dictionary. It is hard for me to trust other people. Hard, because even I don't trust myself. It's hard for me to believe in myself. It is hard to believe that I am capable of doing extraordinary things. That doing what you love to do makes you feel special. That doing what you want to makes you unique. But the sad truth is that I don't think that way. I fear rejection. I'm afraid of what others think about me. I'm afraid of not reaching their expectations. I'm afraid of failures. I fear a lot of things. Things changed when I tried auditioning for the school paper. This experience is not extraordinary but still it has managed to influence me in many ways I cannot describe. It made me realize that there's no harm in trying. I became a stronger person because I wanted to. I started to believe in myself. Now, I appreciate the things that I can do. Only by taking risks and doing absurd things, I can achieve the impossible. It has pushed me to go and reach my dreams. Aim higher, achieve higher. And my dream? I want to go to college. I want to go to a good university that'll help me reach the impossible. I want to be extraordinary. I can do this if only I'd believe in myself. So I'd end this with a line from a song most of us know, "And finally I believe." | Being the youngest in the family, I am hyperactive. As a kid, all I do at home is play. I don't take things seriously. It's as if the only thing that matters is to have fun. I was never afraid of me getting scolded by my naughtiness. I was never afraid of getting hurt. Furthermore, I do whatever I want to. Furthermore, I was simply acting myself. Furthermore, I am totally a different person in school. Furthermore, I don't belong to a big group. Furthermore, I was never part of a school team. Worse, I don't participate in class. I don't excel at anything. I've always been the shy type, the kid who never starts conversations, the kid who remains silent, and the kid who's afraid of getting hurt. Furthermore, I am fully aware that a usual kid acts the same way both in school and at home. Furthermore, I act different. Furthermore, I wasn't like any other kid. Furthermore, I was like a kid who's fully equipped with a raincoat and an umbrella on a hot summer day. Furthermore, I was afraid of the rain. Furthermore, I was afraid of strange things that may come my way. Furthermore, I was afraid of doing things on my own. Afraid of not doing the right thing. This only shows that the word trust wasn't easy to find in my dictionary. It is hard for me to trust other people. Hard, because even I don't trust myself. It's hard for me to believe in myself. It is hard to believe that I am capable of doing extraordinary things. That doing what you love to do makes you feel special. That doing what you want to makes you unique. But the sad truth is that I don't think that way. I fear rejection. I'm afraid of what others think about me. Furthermore, I'm afraid of not reaching their expectations. Furthermore, I'm afraid of failures. Furthermore, I fear a lot of things. Things changed when I tried auditioning for the school paper. This experience is not extraordinary but still it has managed to influence me in many ways I cannot describe. It made me realize that there's no harm in trying. I became a stronger person because I wanted to. I started to believe in myself. Now, I appreciate the things that I can do. Only by taking risks and doing absurd things, I can achieve the impossible. It has pushed me to go and reach my dreams. Aim higher, achieve higher. And my dream? I want to go to college. I want to go to a good university that'll help me reach the impossible. Furthermore, I want to be extraordinary. Furthermore, I can do this if only I'd believe in myself. So I'd end this with a line from a song most of us know, "And finally I believe." |
In addition, I like socializing with my friends and meeting new people to learn from their experiences. To stay involved in the community and also participate in social activities, I became certified in Zumba (Latin Fusion DanceFitness). I consider having a balanced life; a person who enjoys a pleasurable night out; yet understands prioritization and the significance of education and employment. My best friend describes me as an opinionated, trustworthy and a pleasant individual who has strong moral values. I also consider myself as an over-achiever and believe in myself for accomplishing my goals no matter how challenging the objective is. My previous experiences have enabled me to be independent, organized and self-disciplined person which is a preparation for the forthcoming student life at the university. I look forward to becoming a successful socio-ecologist in order to address issues involved in the relationship between human populations and their environment. | In addition, I like socializing with my friends and meeting new people to learn from their experiences. To stay involved in the community and also participate in social activities, I became certified in Zumba (Latin Fusion DanceFitness). I consider having a balanced life; a person who enjoys a pleasurable night out; yet understands prioritization and the significance of education and employment. My best friend describes me as an opinionated, trustworthy and a pleasant individual who has strong moral values. I also consider myself as an over-achiever and believe in myself for accomplishing my goals no matter how challenging the objective is. My previous experiences have enabled me to be independent, organized and self-disciplined person which is a preparation for the forthcoming student life at the university. I look forward to becoming a successful socio-ecologist in order to address issues involved in the relationship between human populations and their environment. |
While struggling with societal issues of life and working towards accomplishing my educational goal, I started volunteering for The Revolutionary Association of the Women of Afghanistan (RAWA), a women's organization in Afghanistan that promotes women's rights and secular democracy. The main purpose of the organization is to fight for equal rights of women in Afghanistan and to involve them in both political and social activities. While volunteering for the organization, I came across women whose given equal rights were denied and abused. Apart from my main responsibility of teaching English Language to children ages seven to fourteen, I was involved in providing educational guidelines for women who were illiterate enabling them to address their problems proficiently using their limited resources. During this social work, I noticed the diversity of cultures, traditions, values and morals among Afghan refugees in Pakistan which caused the majority of their issues within their environment. This further encouraged me to explore and gain additional information about social classes, their life style, their multiplicity and ecological problems. I felt rewarded by attempting to assist the civilians so I started my next volunteer assignment at Mïdecins du monde (MDM), also known as Doctors of the World, a non-governmental humanitarian aid organization created in March 1980 by 15 French doctors. My tasks consisted of assisting the doctors from France in arranging their travel itineraries and translating the letters from women who were not permitted to leave their homes to seek medical aid. In addition, I was responsible for gathering all the reports on the families who were victims of mutual, environmental and governmental cruelty. The reports were used for short-term emergency aid, reconstruction, and rehabilitation aid as well as long-term development projects. Then, I was offered an opportunity in United Nations, World Food Program Afghanistan organization. Working full time as an assistant in this organization for two years was an exposure to many cultures, customs, languages, traditions and values from employees around the world. Shockingly, the one common thing I realized was the socio-ecological problems disrupting the normal routine of all of my co-workers. The most disturbing point I found was their indifferent behavior toward their problems, ignoring the concept of discussion and accepting the fact that it was part of their life. One of the most powerful moments of my life occurred while working for the United Nations. I first discovered my affinity for social ecology when I started developing a keen interest in obtaining information about humanity and their struggles around the globe. I found a topic that was often overlooked that almost all our current ecological problems occur from deep-rooted social problems. Therefore, I discovered that I enjoyed researching socio-ecological problems as well as helping those with limited knowledge and where additional insights to their behavior could become beneficial. I worked with my colleagues in pinpointing the importance of providing people with a sense of dignity in society regardless of their social status. This philosophy was endorsed by my colleagues while discussing their life experiences in their countries and abroad. While many of these people were on missions working hard to resolve social issues around the world, they provided a sense of hope to civilians. Since then their efforts have underscored my accomplishments in my professional and personal life, this has driven me to excel as a leader in the field of social ecology. I truly accept as true that present ecological problems cannot be visibly understood and determined without purposefully dealing with problems within society. I look forward to a career in social ecology field as a life-long exercise in learning from people who are sometimes very different from me as I believe that we will teach each other by addressing the issues more often. | While struggling with societal issues of life and working towards accomplishing my educational goal, I started volunteering for The Revolutionary Association of the Women of Afghanistan (RAW), a women's organization in Afghanistan that promotes women's rights and secular democracy. The main purpose of the organization is to fight for equal rights of women in Afghanistan and to involve them in both political and social activities. While volunteering for the organization, I came across women whose given equal rights were denied and abused. Apart from my main responsibility of teaching English Language to children ages seven to fourteen, I was involved in providing educational guidelines for women who were illiterate enabling them to address their problems proficiently using their limited resources. During this social work, I noticed the diversity of cultures, traditions, values and morals among Afghan refugees in Pakistan which caused the majority of their issues within their environment. This further encouraged me to explore and gain additional information about social classes, their lifestyle, their multiplicity and ecological problems. I felt rewarded by attempting to assist the civilians, so I started my next volunteer assignment at Medicine Du mode (MDM), also known as Doctors of the World, a non-governmental humanitarian aid organization created in March 1980 by 15 French doctors. My tasks consisted of assisting the doctors from France in arranging their travel itineraries and translating the letters from women who were not permitted to leave their homes to seek medical aid. In addition, I was responsible for gathering all the reports on the families who were victims of mutual, environmental and governmental cruelty. The reports were used for short-term emergency aid, reconstruction, and rehabilitation aid as well as long-term development projects. Then, I was offered an opportunity in United Nations, World Food Program Afghanistan organization. Working full time as an assistant in this organization for two years was an exposure to many cultures, customs, languages, traditions and values from employees around the world. Shockingly, the one common thing I realized was the socio-economical problems disrupting the normal routine of all of my co-workers. The most disturbing point I found was their indifferent behavior toward their problems, ignoring the concept of discussion and accepting the fact that it was part of their life. One of the most powerful moments of my life occurred while working for the United Nations. I first discovered my affinity for social ecology when I started developing a keen interest in obtaining information about humanity and their struggles around the globe. I found a topic that was often overlooked that almost all our current ecological problems occur from deep-rooted social problems. Therefore, I discovered that I enjoyed researching socio-economical problems as well as helping those with limited knowledge and where additional insights to their behavior could become beneficial. I worked with my colleagues in pinpointing the importance of providing people with a sense of dignity in society regardless of their social status. This philosophy was endorsed by my colleagues while discussing their life experiences in their countries and abroad. While many of these people were on missions working hard to resolve social issues around the world, they provided a sense of hope to civilians. Since then their efforts have underscored my accomplishments in my professional and personal life, this has driven me to excel as a leader in the field of social ecology. I truly accept as true that present ecological problems cannot be visibly understood and determined without purposefully dealing with problems within society. I look forward to a career in social ecology field as a life-long exercise in learning from people who are sometimes very different from me as I believe that we will teach each other by addressing the issues more often. |
Along with my high school studies, I attended the NICON Institute of Computer Science in Pakistan where I obtained my Network Engineering certification. I continued my journey of acquiring further computer certifications from Microsoft Company such as Microsoft Certified Professional, Microsoft Certified System Administrator, and Microsoft Certified System Engineer. On spring of 2003, I volunteered at United Nations World Food Program, Afghanistan located in Pakistan. I was selected as a team leader based on my computer education and skills for a project for collection and distribution of donation across the Afghanistan provinces. Initially I was given a contract for one month, but the seniors staff involved in this project were impressed by my reports and database that I created. They extended my contract and assigned me additional tasks. I was in charge of training new temporarily employees and organizing reports for senior management. After my immigration to California, I was appointed by IO Magic Company which deals with import and export of computer parts. The experience I gained in United Nation was handy and gave me another opportunity to gain a real insight into the workings of a successful company. I was the founder of collection database for the company for scanning the barcodes of the computer parts. The database was attached to wireless barcode scanners to scan the codes and import the data directly into the system. I was nominated a great team player for building such a compact at the same time user friendly database which mainly sped up the process of shipping and receiving. I was given the chance to proven my computer skills and experience in generating similar database for collecting products in warehouse for the new company Cisco Linksys that I was employed at. In addition to developing this database I was challenged to create website for the finance department. This experience has taught me adoptability, self-sufficiency and developed my skills of presenting a presentation and public speaking. My other computer classes at Irvine Valley College, Image editing techniques, networking CCNA, helped me to develop my networking and web designing skills. In February 2006 I was selected in Stars Behavioral Health Group, a community based service which serves children, adolescents, and adults with serious emotional disorders in their respective communities, among sixty interviewees being the youngest, qualified and experienced individual. My main responsibility is to provide desktop support to all the Southern California facilities which have got an approximate of eight hundred users. Working in this company has made me learn others life experiences and be grateful persona for all the minor achievements that I have done in my life. I feel rewarded being part of such a unique organization that employs behavioral health workers including psychologists, psychiatrists, medical doctors, nurses, rehab therapists, social workers, counselors, aides teachers, and a range of paraprofessional members. I have chosen to apply for a degree course in informatics, which is a bridge connecting information technology to other particular fields of study such as telecommunication, business, biology, and economics, etc. Based on my current work experience which emphasize on problem solving, innovation, communication, and team work together with technical skills and acquaintance. In my opinion informatics is an effective method of using information technology to resolve certain dilemmas in diverse areas. With pursuing a recognize degree in informatics, my long term goal is to provide further assistance through technology to strengthen the mission of our human-centered and problem solving curriculum. Prompt # 2 For the last eight years, playing soccer in high school, local leagues and tournaments has been one of the most fascinating moments in my life. At the beginning of my high school year, I used to play other sports and games like volleyball, badminton, running track and chess, but I had little knowledge of soccer since I used to go and watch my best friend playing it. I remember my first try out days to join the school soccer team. I was selected based on my running speed and stamina. Soccer came a little hard to me, as I was not accustomed to the rules and field tactics but once I started, my strong aim to learning the game was set; even though, my first year of playing soccer was not as successful as I expected. I achieved more knowledge of the game, and used that knowledge to reach to the required standard level as other soccer players. Soon I became part of a victorious team whose defeat was almost impossible among other high school teams in our city. I really enjoyed playing the game with my other teammates in various leagues and tournaments. In spite of the fact that we lost many games in tournaments, we still believed in the spirit of our team and our victory. We attempted to learn from our mistakes and turn our weaknesses to our strengths. As a right striker, I was preplanning for each game with a new challenge to lead my team to victory, and I believe this was the hardest aspect of soccer. In many ways the games felt like preparing for an unexpected exam where students study for hours memorizing the terminology of a subject. We were no different from those students as we all spent hours practicing in sunny afternoons, learning new field strategies, understanding the mindset of the opposite teams, building up defensive and offensive tricks and spending numerous hours watching professional learning soccer movies. I believe soccer has polished many hidden qualities in my personality such as teamwork, communication skills, self-determination, self-assurance, trustworthiness, and positive attitude through which I have faith in myself that if given an chance, I would transcend to a new level in a university to pave the way for unlimited possibilities for my future. | Along with my high school studies, I attended the ICON Institute of Computer Science in Pakistan where I obtained my Network Engineering certification. I continued my journey of acquiring further computer certifications from Microsoft Company such as Microsoft Certified Professional, Microsoft Certified System Administrator, and Microsoft Certified System Engineer. On spring of 2003, I volunteered at United Nations World Food Program, Afghanistan located in Pakistan. I was selected as a team leader based on my computer education and skills for a project for collection and distribution of donation across the Afghanistan provinces. Initially I was given a contract for one month, but the seniors staff involved in this project were impressed by my reports and database that I created. They extended my contract and assigned me additional tasks. I was in charge of training new temporarily employees and organizing reports for senior management. After my immigration to California, I was appointed by IO Magic Company which deals with import and export of computer parts. The experience I gained in United Nation was handy and gave me another opportunity to gain a real insight into the workings of a successful company. I was the founder of collection database for the company for scanning the barcodes of the computer parts. The database was attached to wireless barcode scanners to scan the codes and import the data directly into the system. I was nominated a great team player for building such a compact at the same time user-friendly database which mainly sped up the process of shipping and receiving. I was given the chance to proven my computer skills and experience in generating similar database for collecting products in warehouse for the new company Cisco Links that I was employed at. In addition to developing this database I was challenged to create website for the finance department. This experience has taught me adaptability, self-sufficiency and developed my skills of presenting a presentation and public speaking. My other computer classes at Irvine Valley College, Image editing techniques, networking CCNA, helped me to develop my networking and web designing skills. In February 2006 I was selected in Stars Behavioral Health Group, a community based service which serves children, adolescents, and adults with serious emotional disorders in their respective communities, among sixty interviewees being the youngest, qualified and experienced individual. My main responsibility is to provide desktop support to all the Southern California facilities which have got an approximate of eight hundred users. Working in this company has made me learn others life experiences and be grateful persona for all the minor achievements that I have done in my life. I feel rewarded being part of such a unique organization that employs behavioral health workers including psychologists, psychiatrists, medical doctors, nurses, rehab therapists, social workers, counselors, aides teachers, and a range of paraprofessional members. I have chosen to apply for a degree course in informatics, which is a bridge connecting information technology to other particular fields of study such as telecommunication, business, biology, and economics, etc. Based on my current work experience which emphasize on problem-solving, innovation, communication, and team work together with technical skills and acquaintance. In my opinion informatics is an effective method of using information technology to resolve certain dilemmas in diverse areas. With pursuing a recognized degree in informatics, my long term goal is to provide further assistance through technology to strengthen the mission of our human-centered and problem-solving curriculum. Prompt # 2 For the last eight years, playing soccer in high school, local leagues and tournaments has been one of the most fascinating moments in my life. At the beginning of my high school year, I used to play other sports and games like volleyball, badminton, running track and chess, but I had little knowledge of soccer since I used to go and watch my best friend playing it. I remember my first try out days to join the school soccer team. I was selected based on my running speed and stamina. Soccer came a little hard to me, as I was not accustomed to the rules and field tactics but once I started, my strong aim to learning the game was set; even though, my first year of playing soccer was not as successful as I expected. I achieved more knowledge of the game, and used that knowledge to reach to the required standard level as other soccer players. Soon I became part of a victorious team whose defeat was almost impossible among other high school teams in our city. I really enjoyed playing the game with my other teammates in various leagues and tournaments. In spite of the fact that we lost many games in tournaments, we still believed in the spirit of our team and our victory. We attempted to learn from our mistakes and turn our weaknesses to our strengths. As a right striker, I was preplanning for each game with a new challenge to lead my team to victory, and I believe this was the hardest aspect of soccer. In many ways the games felt like preparing for an unexpected exam where students study for hours memorizing the terminology of a subject. We were no different from those students as we all spent hours practicing in sunny afternoons, learning new field strategies, understanding the mindset of the opposite teams, building up defensive and offensive tricks and spending numerous hours watching professional learning soccer movies. I believe soccer has polished many hidden qualities in my personality such as teamwork, communication skills, self-determination, self-assurance, trustworthiness, and positive attitude through which I have faith in myself that if given a chance, I would transcend to a new level in a university to pave the way for unlimited possibilities for my future. |
Everything started with the peso devaluation followed by my parents' divorce in the 80s. After the separation, my parents lost their only source of income, Helen Keller and were forced to make budget adjustments that included my dad to move to Chicago and for us to change schools. For the first time, at the age of 12, I was transferred to a public school. I will never forget my first day; it was devastating. I had mixed emotions and feelings such as fear, cold sweats, and dizziness. Growing up at my parents' school was pretty normal, but the transition to a public school was not smooth and by the time I was 14 became a very difficult child forcing my mom to send me to Chicago. In Chicago my dad was working as an elementary teacher aid in a public school. Upon my arrival, he was so afraid to send me to High School that decided to keep me on 8th grade in a bilingual program. His philosophy was that I was not prepared to face a foreign culture, language and high school all at once. I was an easy target to become a trouble maker especially with the list of misconduct references that mom gave him. After six months, I could not handle to live away from mom, my friends and my two little sisters, so was sent back to Mexico with the condition that I would behave and work hard to help mom. Since I lost a school year in Chicago, I decided to enroll in "Preparatoria Abierta" which is sort of taking the GED. Oh my God! I have to admit that those were the most challenging educational years. Once I obtained my high school diploma, I could not wait to go to the University, so I registered at a private University in Mexico called Universidad Tecnologica de Mexico (UNITEC). I felt so important, but have to admit that it was overwhelming to walk through the halls full of students going to different directions. Sitting in a class with a professor lecturing was a privilege especially after taking high school classes on my own. A year passed, and to my surprise my mom announced that we were moving to Chicago to live as a family again. What? After all these years! I had mixed feelings; I wanted them to get back, but at the same time, this was another adjustment in my life. What about school? Mom convinced me that moving to Chicago will open up new opportunities by learning a second language, culture, etc. After all, politicians were talking about NAFTA and it seemed to be a positive change. MacCormac College located in downtown Chicago had an excellent reputation for its English as a Second Language (ESL) program. There were five levels and the placement test rated me as a level three student which meant to spend a year in the ESL program before going back to College. After completing the ESL program, I decided to go back to Mexico and apply for jobs after all; I was bilingual and old enough to be on my own. To my surprise, Mexico did not see as the place I left, things felt different, the subways, the buses, the pollution seemed to bother me, so I packed and went back to Chicago. I registered at MacCormac College as a College student for an Associate Degree in International Business. It was perfect, NAFTA was booming and a two year college seemed to be the right choice to get a feeling of what the big Universities have to offer. I successfully completed my two year program and not only that, I was a Phi Theta Kappa member and received the "Gordon C. Borchardt International Business Award" as the best student for the Class of 1996. Things seemed to be going very well and decided to pursue a Bachelor degree with emphasis in Marketing at DePaul University. After one year attending school, I married. I remember very well my dad telling me that I was not going to finish school. I am not sure if he said it to challenge me or for me not to get married, but I looked at it as a personal goal. The following year, I had my first baby. Working full-time, being a mom, a wife and going to school at night was not an easy task, but once again, I am proud to say that I completed my Bachelor degree in 2000 with a 3.0 gpa. Helen Keller famous quote always inspired me to move forward throughout my educational goals "We can do anything we want to do if we stick to it long enough". Perseverance has been one of my strengths, learning how to manage the obstacles and use them to my advantage has made the ride a lot easier. Through my experiences and the wonderful support not only from my family, but also professors, supervisors and co-workers, I have acquired the necessary values to form a foundation. I have the burning desire to mentor others, but I still need the sophistication, knowledge, and wisdom necessary to reach that goal. I feel that NAU can guide me not only to inspire others, but provide me with the tools to help them build a strong foundation. | Everything started with the peso devaluation followed by my parents' divorce in the 80s. After the separation, my parents lost their only source of income, Helen Keller and were forced to make budget adjustments that included my dad to move to Chicago and for us to change schools. For the first time, at the age of 12, I was transferred to a public school. I will never forget my first day; it was devastating. I had mixed emotions and feelings such as fear, cold sweats, and dizziness. Growing up at my parents' school was pretty normal, but the transition to a public school was not smooth and by the time I was 14 became a very difficult child forcing my mom to send me to Chicago. In Chicago my dad was working as an elementary teacher aid in a public school. Upon my arrival, he was so afraid to send me to High School that decided to keep me on 8th grade in a bilingual program. His philosophy was that I was not prepared to face a foreign culture, language and high school all at once. I was an easy target to become a troublemaker especially with the list of misconduct references that mom gave him. After six months, I could not handle to live away from mom, my friends and my two little sisters, so was sent back to Mexico with the condition that I would behave and work hard to help mom. Since I lost a school year in Chicago, I decided to enroll in "Preparatory Alberta" which is sort of taking the GED. Oh my God! I have to admit that those were the most challenging educational years. Once I obtained my high school diploma, I could not wait to go to the University, so I registered at a private University in Mexico called Universidad Tecnologica de Mexico (UNITED). I felt so important, but have to admit that it was overwhelming to walk through the halls full of students going to different directions. Sitting in a class with a professor lecturing was a privilege especially after taking high school classes on my own. A year passed, and to my surprise my mom announced that we were moving to Chicago to live as a family again. What? After all these years! I had mixed feelings; I wanted them to get back, but at the same time, this was another adjustment in my life. What about school? Mom convinced me that moving to Chicago will open up new opportunities by learning a second language, culture, etc. After all, politicians were talking about NAFTA, and it seemed to be a positive change. McCormack College located in downtown Chicago had an excellent reputation for its English as a Second Language (ESL) program. There were five levels and the placement test rated me as a level three student which meant to spend a year in the ESL program before going back to College. After completing the ESL program, I decided to go back to Mexico and apply for jobs after all; I was bilingual and old enough to be on my own. To my surprise, Mexico did not see as the place I left, things felt different, the subways, the buses, the pollution seemed to bother me, so I packed and went back to Chicago. I registered at McCormack College as a College student for an Associate Degree in International Business. It was perfect, NAFTA was booming, and a two-year college seemed to be the right choice to get a feeling of what the big Universities have to offer. I successfully completed my two-year program and not only that, I was a Phi Theta Kappa member and received the "Gordon C. Orchards International Business Award" as the best student for the Class of 1996. Things seemed to be going very well and decided to pursue a Bachelor degree with emphasis in Marketing at DePaul University. After one year attending school, I married. I remember very well my dad telling me that I was not going to finish school. I am not sure if he said it to challenge me or for me not to get married, but I looked at it as a personal goal. The following year, I had my first baby. Working full-time, being a mom, a wife and going to school at night was not an easy task, but once again, I am proud to say that I completed my Bachelor degree in 2000 with a 3.0 GPA. Helen Keller famous quote always inspired me to move forward throughout my educational goals "We can do anything we want to do if we stick to it long enough". Perseverance has been one of my strengths, learning how to manage the obstacles and use them to my advantage has made the ride a lot easier. Through my experiences and the wonderful support not only from my family, but also professors, supervisors and co-workers, I have acquired the necessary values to form a foundation. I have the burning desire to mentor others, but I still need the sophistication, knowledge, and wisdom necessary to reach that goal. I feel that NAU can guide me not only to inspire others, but provide me with the tools to help them build a strong foundation. |
TOPIC: What qualities or characteristics do you posses that will allow you to contribute to the UCF community. Many people tell me I have an amazing personality, a smile of oars, and spunk in me that is unexplainable. In my eyes anyone can show these qualities as a false image. Qualities are something that makes you who you are. Going to a High School in a high income neighborhood was never very easy for me. Day to day I felt that I had to show a certain image and act a certain way to be well liked. Materialism in my eyes is a huge problem in society today. It makes people think that having the best cars, the newest fashion of clothing, and the most expensive jewelry makes them a better person. I did not find this out until I entered the first day of high school. From that day on I decided to change that image, I started a club at school called stirring it up. Where kids from all different types of nationality would join together and socialize about religion, their family, and interest. I believe I have showed these people that beauty comes from within. I consider my greatest quality that I could contribute to the UCF campus will be my determination to make society a better place. I have a desire to change the way people look at life and their future, to encourage focusing on education rather then materialism. I hope to encourage people to look at someone from the inside out, and not by their appearance or nationality. UCF's very diverse campus has also led me to believe I can change the stereotypical image of certain cultures. With my determination and courage I know I can better the UCF community. | TOPIC: What qualities or characteristics do you possess that will allow you to contribute to the UCF community. Many people tell me I have an amazing personality, a smile of oars, and spunk in me that is unexplainable. In my eyes anyone can show these qualities as a false image. Qualities are something that makes you who you are. Going to a High School in a high income neighborhood was never very easy for me. Day to day I felt that I had to show a certain image and act a certain way to be well liked. Materialism in my eyes is a huge problem in society today. It makes people think that having the best cars, the newest fashion of clothing, and the most expensive jewelry makes them a better person. I did not find this out until I entered the first day of high school. From that day on I decided to change that image, I started a club at school called stirring it up. Where kids from all different types of nationality would join together and socialize about religion, their family, and interest. I believe I have showed these people that beauty comes from within. I consider my greatest quality that I could contribute to the UCF campus will be my determination to make society a better place. Furthermore, I have a desire to change the way people look at life and their future, to encourage focusing on education rather than materialism. Furthermore, I hope to encourage people to look at someone from the inside out, and not by their appearance or nationality. UCF's very diverse campus has also led me to believe I can change the stereotypical image of certain cultures. With my determination and courage I know I can better the UCF community. |
PLEASE REVISE and tell me anything i need to change, or if i should just start over TOPIC: If there has been some obstacle in the road in your personal life, please explain the circumstances People say after hard times you learn and you mature from it, times in life wont always be picture perfect. I've learned this first hand. Ill never forget sitting in the back seat of my friend's mother's car with my best friend screaming the words to "Before he cheats" on the radio. It was a picture perfect scene, until I got a phone call that would forever change our lives. [..] | PLEASE REVISE and tell me anything I need to change, or if I should just start over TOPIC: If there has been some obstacle in the road in your personal life, please explain the circumstances People say after hard times you learn, and you mature from it, times in life won't always be picture-perfect. I've learned this first hand. I'll never forget sitting in the back seat of my friend's mother's car with my best friend screaming the words to "Before he cheats" on the radio. It was a picture-perfect scene, until I got a phone call that would forever change our lives. [.] |
i. How your proposed study is related to your work experience; andii. What specific skills and knowledge you hope to gain from this study. Help me revise and commend the ideas are not good, thank you very much indeed.Population growth, rapid urbanization, and increasing water supply and sanitation provision will all generate increased problems from wastewater pollution and water scarcity. In order to overcome these challenges, it is essential for Vietnam providing suitable water and wastewater management plans and having well trained environmental engineers and managers. Therefore, I want to pursue the Master programme in Water and Wastewater Management to obtain both theoretical abilities and applicable skills on a higher level that I can broaden and deepen my knowledge. Working at the Department of Environment where we train students to be professional environmental managers and engineers. I always have to continuously improve myself by obtaining the knowledge and skills of modern environmental management systems to become an excellent teacher and an expert in this field. Participating in this course is the best chance for me to fulfill my goals. Moreover, I really want this program not only provides me with specialised training in sustainable water and wastewater management but also equips me with the required knowledge in the planning, design, implementation and management of projects in water and wastewater industries. Besides, I have gained many experiences through my involvement in researching on wastewater treatment and projects such as: Strengthen the capacity of Vietnamese communities to facilitate and promote community-based environmental management to protect Tan Hoa - Lo Gom canal, Research on the applicability of Life Cycle Management in the shrimp processing enterprises in Ho Chi Minh City Vietnam, and researching on Applying biological technology combined with the up-flow sludge blanket filter (USBF) to treat municipal wastewater...etc. With skills and knowledge I had learned, I strongly believe that I can easily cope with the MSc programme in Water and Wastewater Management. | i. How your proposed study is related to your work experience; and ii. What specific skills and knowledge you hope to gain from this study. Help me revise and commend the ideas are not good, thank you very much indeed. Population growth, rapid urbanization, and increasing water supply and sanitation provision will all generate increased problems from wastewater pollution and water scarcity. In order to overcome these challenges, it is essential for Vietnam providing suitable water and wastewater management plans and having well-trained environmental engineers and managers. Therefore, I want to pursue the Master program in Water and Wastewater Management to obtain both theoretical abilities and applicable skills on a higher level that I can broaden and deepen my knowledge. Working at the Department of Environment where we train students to be professional environmental managers and engineers. I always have to continuously improve myself by obtaining the knowledge and skills of modern environmental management systems to become an excellent teacher and an expert in this field. Participating in this course is the best chance for me to fulfill my goals. Moreover, I really want this program not only provides me with specialized training in sustainable water and wastewater management but also equips me with the required knowledge in the planning, design, implementation and management of projects in water and wastewater industries. Besides, I have gained many experiences through my involvement in researching on wastewater treatment and projects such as: Strengthen the capacity of Vietnamese communities to facilitate and promote community-based environmental management to protect Tan HOA - Lo Go canal, Research on the applicability of Life Cycle Management in the shrimp processing enterprises in Ho Chi Minh City Vietnam, and researching on Applying biological technology combined with the up-flow sludge blanket filter (USAF) to treat municipal wastewater...etc. With skills and knowledge I had learned, I strongly believe that I can easily cope with the M.Sc. program in Water and Wastewater Management. |
"Business has always been my niche; something that has always been apart of me ever since I was a child. I remember back in 3rd grade, I used to draw pictures of cartoon characters and sell for them a quarter. Twelve years have passed and my thirst for business is still very prevalent. In November 2007, six months after I moved from Washington to California, I began my new position at Bank of America. With the recession, it seems that jobs are hard to come by and businesses are all going downhill because no one has the funds to keep out of debt anymore. I have noticed that the bank has also been having a very difficult year in meeting its goals. Amy Woods Brinkley an Executive at the bank stated that "as a company - and as individuals - we are learning, making changes, leveraging our strengths and we will get better and stronger." This quote is very important because it shows that even during tough times; a company or an individual can weather the storm. For the past eight months at this position, I have seen the ups and the downs which have been affected by the downfall of the US economy. This is where my interest in business economics began. I believe that economics is very important in the business setting because it aids in the decisions that a company must make to endure tough times. It also allows businesses to satisfy their goals even though resources are scarce. Through these harsh times, I have come to realize that the economy is a very important aspect of how a business is run. Especially with my involvement at the bank, the failing economy has not aided in much profit. However, even during these times, it is important that we still are optimistic about the outcomes of the future base on economist's beliefs because if not then we as individuals and as the bank are doomed to fail. I have also learned that you cannot let hardships cloud your goals because if you are able to endure the storm then you are just that much stronger. Working at Bank of America, I have come to realize the affect of the economy on a corporation which has given me more inside about the current economic status of our country. The knowledge that I am gaining from working with the bank has been both about business and how a corporation is ran and about the effects of the economy on the business." I'm not really sure if i am following the prompt. The difficult thing about writing this essay is figuring out how to tie in my job with my intended major. HELP PLEASE :( | "Business has always been my niche; something that has always been a part of me ever since I was a child. I remember back in 3rd grade, I used to draw pictures of cartoon characters and sell for them a quarter. Twelve years have passed and my thirst for business is still very prevalent. In November 2007, six months after I moved from Washington to California, I began my new position at Bank of America. With the recession, it seems that jobs are hard to come by and businesses are all going downhill because no one has the funds to keep out of debt anymore. I have noticed that the bank has also been having a very difficult year in meeting its goals. Amy Woods Brinkley an Executive at the bank stated that "as a company - and as individuals - we are learning, making changes, leveraging our strengths, and we will get better and stronger." This quote is very important because it shows that even during tough times; a company or an individual can weather the storm. For the past eight months at this position, I have seen the ups and the downs which have been affected by the downfall of the US economy. This is where my interest in business economics began. I believe that economics is very important in the business setting because it aids in the decisions that a company must make to endure tough times. It also allows businesses to satisfy their goals even though resources are scarce. Through these harsh times, I have come to realize that the economy is a very important aspect of how a business is run. Especially with my involvement at the bank, the failing economy has not aided in much profit. However, even during these times, it is important that we still are optimistic about the outcomes of the future base on economist's beliefs because if not then we as individuals and as the bank are doomed to fail. I have also learned that you cannot let hardships cloud your goals because if you are able to endure the storm then you are just that much stronger. Working at Bank of America, I have come to realize the effect of the economy on a corporation which has given me more inside about the current economic status of our country. The knowledge that I am gaining from working with the bank has been both about business and how a corporation is run and about the effects of the economy on the business." I'm not really sure if I am following the prompt. The difficult thing about writing this essay is figuring out how to tie in my job with my intended major. HELP PLEASE :( |
My backyard is very significant to making my house a fun and relaxing place to live. The backyard is not any ordinary backyard, it's a place to take it easy by the pool, have barbeques and to host family gatherings. The finest thing about my backyard is my swimming pool. On warm summer days, hopping into my pool is like sitting down in your big cozy chair after a long exhausting hike. On these hot summer days, it is also convenient to call some friends to come over and swim. Our pool has a stunning view, under the baking hot sun twinkles akin to a crystal. The barbeque is also very significant to making my backyard complete. It's superb to settle down for the evening with some hot dogs and hamburgers. Every time for a family gathering, everyone wants to have it in our backyard. We have an adequate amount of room to fit everyone in. Outside everyone can socialize abd munch on the barbequed food. You can smell the barbeques smoke drifting in the evening sky. My backyard really is an important part of our home because without the twinkling water in the pool, the smoke scent from the barbeque, and my great-uncle and my aunt arguing over who gets the last piece of steak, our house is far from pleasant. | My backyard is very significant to making my house a fun and relaxing place to live. The backyard is not any ordinary backyard, it's a place to take it easy by the pool, have barbecues and to host family gatherings. The finest thing about my backyard is my swimming pool. On warm summer days, hopping into my pool is like sitting down in your big cozy chair after a long exhausting hike. On these hot summer days, it is also convenient to call some friends to come over and swim. Our pool has a stunning view, under the baking hot sun twinkles akin to a crystal. The barbecue is also very significant to making my backyard complete. It's superb to settle down for the evening with some hot dogs and hamburgers. Every time for a family gathering, everyone wants to have it in our backyard. We have an adequate amount of room to fit everyone in. Outside everyone can socialize ABD munch on the barbecued food. You can smell the barbecues smoke drifting in the evening sky. My backyard really is an important part of our home because without the twinkling water in the pool, the smoke scent from the barbecue, and my great-uncle and my aunt arguing over who gets the last piece of steak, our house is far from pleasant. |
I am applying for MFA in Broadcast design and Motion graphic, however I am not quite sure how far should I describe my experience in art and design. because my background was in design then I took Animation as BFA then I am currently working as broadcast designer. Should I start with how I felt in love with art, or talk straight on why I choose broadcast design without starting from the very beginning. Thank you! | I am applying for MFA in Broadcast design and Motion graphic, however I am not quite sure how far should I describe my experience in art and design. Because my background was in design then I took Animation as BFA then I am currently working as broadcast designer. Should I start with how I felt in love with art, or talk straight on why I choose broadcast design without starting from the very beginning? Thank you! |
I chose Florida State University: My Essay: "Were you born here?" Abashment slapped me right in the face as I struggled to sputter out a reply. Coyness permitted me to only manage a nod, though I greatly desired to explain to my classmate that, despite my pale appearance, I have never even left the islands. My classmate's inquiry did not aid the apprehension that had plagued me since I signed up for the class as I knew fully well this was going to be out of my comfort zone, that I would be away from well-known classmates and friends, and would most likely stick out like a sore thumb. Uneasiness sloshed about in my stomach as I sat in my seat, feeling severely out of place: the first day of Hula class was pure agony. I longed to quit... to transfer to another class where I could bury my face in a textbook, to blend in and stay out of sight. As these anxieties continued to haunt me for the next few weeks, my thirst to learn lent me strength to suppress my apprehension enough for me to make it through each class. The torment was worth it. My regret for enrolling in the class transformed into appreciation for the experiences and friendships that it gave to me. But most importantly, it gave me the opportunity to prove to myself that I possess the courage and drive to try new things, as daunting as they may seem. | I chose Florida State University: My Essay: "Were you born here?" Abashment slapped me right in the face as I struggled to sputter out a reply. Coyness permitted me to only manage a nod, though I greatly desired to explain to my classmate that, despite my pale appearance, I have never even left the islands. My classmate's inquiry did not aid the apprehension that had plagued me since I signed up for the class as I knew fully well this was going to be out of my comfort zone, that I would be away from well-known classmates and friends, and would most likely stick out like a sore thumb. Uneasiness sloshed about in my stomach as I sat in my seat, feeling severely out of place: the first day of Hula class was pure agony. I longed to quit... to transfer to another class where I could bury my face in a textbook, to blend in and stay out of sight. As these anxieties continued to haunt me for the next few weeks, my thirst to learn lent me strength to suppress my apprehension enough for me to make it through each class. The torment was worth it. My regret for enrolling in the class transformed into appreciation for the experiences and friendships that it gave to me. But most importantly, it gave me the opportunity to prove to myself that I possess the courage and drive to try new things, as daunting as they may seem. |
Essay TopicIn the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school. My essay is about a time I was at a youth leadership conference, where I performed a song in front of a large audience. It's about me overcoming hesitation and anxiety to get the job done and enjoy it, as well as not being afraid to try new things. I'll be updating this with the essay once it's complete enough, but I'd like to know if starting off the introduction with a quote is a bad idea, as well as IF I should do so. I'm looking at Shakespears quote"Be not afraid of greatness; some are born great, some achieve greatness, and others have greatness thrust upon them."Mainly concerning having greatness thrust upon you, as me performing the song was a volunteered effort to give our skit some substance. Could you help me? Thanks. | Essay Topic In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the OF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school. My essay is about a time I was at a youth leadership conference, where I performed a song in front of a large audience. It's about me overcoming hesitation and anxiety to get the job done and enjoy it, as well as not being afraid to try new things. I'll be updating this with the essay once it's complete enough, but I'd like to know if starting off the introduction with a quote is a bad idea, as well as IF I should do so. I'm looking at Shakespeare quote"Be not afraid of greatness; some are born great, some achieve greatness, and others have greatness thrust upon them." Mainly concerning having greatness thrust upon you, as me performing the song was a volunteered effort to give our skit some substance. Could you help me? Thanks. |
~~~~AND~~~~~ Please leave comments as to how to make it better! It was not until I met my mentor that I realized that it only takes one act of kindness to forever change the life any one person. My sister and I had recently moved from Mississippi to Florida to live with my father. It was our first time in Florida, as well as meeting our dad. My sister and I were finally with him, and all was well. As time progressed, we began to less of our father. During this time, we had been introduced to our biological mother who had just quit her drug addiction. One day at her boyfriend's apartment, my mother asked my sister and me to sit in the living room. There, she explained that she had had the HIVAIDS virus for 16 years. Looking at me, she began to cry and apologize because I was 15 at the time. She explained that she did not know she had the virus at the time of my conception. My mother then told me that at birth, I had tested positive. I was hurt, and began to feel immediate self-pity. Later, I walked in my home, only to find out that none of the bills had been paid. This was the beginning of 2-month period without a telephone, cable, electricity, and water. I then realized that my father had started back his crack addiction. This addiction would be his demise in the subsequent year. A month had passed, and things had seemed to have gotten progressively worse. I had just taken an HIV test, and the wait was by far one of the most excruciating emotional pains I had ever felt. I had no where to reside but with my father, even under such inhumane conditions. At school, I had been acquainted with a school teacher, her name was Ms. Stephanpoulos. She was there to lend a helping hand during the time when I felt isolated from the world and destined for failure. I felt that no one would want to be around me if I had HIV. She was not repulsed by my current conditions, but instead, she was comforting. Thankfully, I had tested negative. Being that she was an educator, she spent time making sure that I never gave up on life, and that I continue to excel in my studies and become a successful and philanthropic person. I eventually joined the International Baccalaureate program at Rickards High School. At times when I felt discouraged, she was there making sure that I persevered. As of today, I remain in the top 10% of my graduating class, in addition to striving to obtain my IB diploma among other achievements. My meaningful experience was meeting my mentor because of the tremendous impact she has had on me and the people I have helped. My mentor's tender acts of kindness have propelled my desire to help others at no expense. She was there for me, and I intend on doing the same for my fellow undergraduates, staff, and faculty at the University of Florida. I have dedicated my time to helping others, especially during difficult moments of their lives. I have committed over 550 community service hours, helping and providing motivation for people who believed that hope was a thing of the past. This is the attitude I hope to bring the University of Florida campus. People go through rough experiences in there life, but, one thing that always helps is to have someone there to aid during a time of need. It is these acts of kindness that help promote prosperity and the love for humanity. As a UF Gator, I will help to contribute to the success of the campus community by helping others whenever and wherever. | ~~~~AND~~~~~ Please leave comments as to how to make it better! It was not until I met my mentor that I realized that it only takes one act of kindness to forever change the life any one person. My sister and I had recently moved from Mississippi to Florida to live with my father. It was our first time in Florida, as well as meeting our dad. My sister and I were finally with him, and all was well. As time passed, we began to less of our father. During this time, we had been introduced to our biological mother who had just quit her drug addiction. One day at her boyfriend's apartment, my mother asked my sister and me to sit in the living room. There, she explained that she had had the HIV AIDS virus for 16 years. Looking at me, she began to cry and apologize because I was 15 at the time. She explained that she did not know she had the virus at the time of my conception. My mother then told me that at birth, I had tested positive. I was hurt, and began to feel immediate self-pity. Later, I walked in my home, only to find out that none of the bills had been paid. This was the beginning of 2-month period without a telephone, cable, electricity, and water. I then realized that my father had started back his crack addiction. This addiction would be his demise in the subsequent year. A month had passed, and things had seemed to have gotten progressively worse. I had just taken an HIV test, and the wait was by far one of the most excruciating emotional pains I had ever felt. I had nowhere to reside but with my father, even under such inhumane conditions. At school, I had been acquainted with a school teacher, her name was Ms. Stephanpoulos. She was there to lend a helping hand during the time when I felt isolated from the world and destined for failure. I felt that no one would want to be around me if I had HIV. She was not repulsed by my current conditions, but instead, she was comforting. Thankfully, I had tested negative. Being that she was an educator, she spent time making sure that I never gave up on life, and that I continue to excel in my studies and become a successful and philanthropic person. I eventually joined the International Baccalaureate program at Richards High School. At times when I felt discouraged, she was there making sure that I persevered. As of today, I remain in the top 10% of my graduating class, in addition to striving to obtain my IB diploma among other achievements. My meaningful experience was meeting my mentor because of the tremendous impact she has had on me and the people I have helped. My mentor's tender acts of kindness have propelled my desire to help others at no expense. She was there for me, and I intend on doing the same for my fellow undergraduates, staff, and faculty at the University of Florida. I have dedicated my time to helping others, especially during difficult moments of their lives. I have committed over 550 community service hours, helping and providing motivation for people who believed that hope was a thing of the past. This is the attitude I hope to bring the University of Florida campus. People go through rough experiences in there life, but, one thing that always helps is to have someone there to aid during a time of need. It is these acts of kindness that help promote prosperity and the love for humanity. As a OF Gator, I will help to contribute to the success of the campus community by helping others whenever and wherever. |
topics are How has your family history, culture, or environment influenced who you are? and Why did you choose to apply at UCF? max at 250 words My environment is a compilation of different cultures which have molded the type of person I am today. I was born in Peru and was raised in a catholic family, church every Sunday was a given and even went to catholic school as a child. This type of education is very strict and teaches young individuals to act with respect to others, respect authority figures, and keep an effective work schedule to accomplish all tasks. These are qualities I plan to carry with me throughout my life. My ability to communicate in English and Spanish allow me to be a part of two very diverse ethnic group. This is very important to thrive in today's multicultural world. The qualities and values that I have received over the years have helped me realize how important it is to be able to treat all people with the respect that they deserve, without letting prejudices or stereotypes get in the way of my actions. I have had the chance to learn from and coexist with many people, each with their own combination of different cultures. I believe it is a person's culture that defines who they are. I am very grateful for my diversified background and look forward to not only sharing my qualities and ways, but also plan on learning from new diverse experiences that I will encounter in the future. and I am applying to UCF is to find my independence. I was born in Peru and moved to the United States in 1998 when I was only eleven; I have lived in South Florida since then. I have made a lot of friends here and even some of my family has moved to the surrounding areas. When I finished high school I decided to attend my local community college rather than starting at a university. I did this because I didn't feel ready to be on my own and this way I could still get a head start on my education, while I readied myself to move to Orlando. Now that I've completed my Associates Degree. I feel the need to start the next chapter of my life. I choose UCF because it is largest undergraduate school in the state of Florida, as well as the sixth largest university in the nation. UCF is also listed in "The Best 361 Colleges: 2006 Edition", by the Princeton Review. I tend to rise under pressure which is why I set my sights on UCF. I am going into the business world and I know UCF will give me the foundation I need to succeed in this competitive world. The second one i feel needs the most work because i just cant think of good writable reasons to go. i just want to move to orlando while still going to school :( Thanks for any suggestions Jaime | Topics are How has your family history, culture, or environment influenced who you are? And Why did you choose to apply at UCF? Max at 250 words My environment is a compilation of different cultures which have molded the type of person I am today. I was born in Peru and was raised in a catholic family, church every Sunday was a given and even went to catholic school as a child. This type of education is very strict and teaches young individuals to act with respect to others, respect authority figures, and keep an effective work schedule to accomplish all tasks. These are qualities I plan to carry with me throughout my life. My ability to communicate in English and Spanish allow me to be a part of two very diverse ethnic groups. This is very important to thrive in today's multicultural world. The qualities and values that I have received over the years have helped me realize how important it is to be able to treat all people with the respect that they deserve, without letting prejudices or stereotypes get in the way of my actions. I have had the chance to learn from and coexist with many people, each with their own combination of different cultures. I believe it is a person's culture that defines who they are. Furthermore, I am very grateful for my diversified background and look forward to not only sharing my qualities and ways, but also plan on learning from new diverse experiences that I will encounter in the future. And I am applying to UCF is to find my independence. I was born in Peru and moved to the United States in 1998 when I was only eleven; I have lived in South Florida since then. I have made a lot of friends here and even some of my family has moved to the surrounding areas. When I finished high school I decided to attend my local community college rather than starting at a university. I did this because I didn't feel ready to be on my own and this way I could still get a head start on my education, while I readied myself to move to Orlando. Now that I've completed my Associates Degree. I feel the need to start the next chapter of my life. I choose UCF because it is the largest undergraduate school in the state of Florida, as well as the sixth-largest university in the nation. UCF is also listed in "The Best 361 Colleges: 2006 Edition", by the Princeton Review. I tend to rise under pressure which is why I set my sights on UCF. I am going into the business world and I know UCF will give me the foundation I need to succeed in this competitive world. The second one I feel needs the most work because I just can't think of good writable reasons to go. I just want to move to Orlando while still going to school :(Thanks for any suggestions Jaime |
Tell us about an experience which at the time really felt like the end of the world ... but had it not happened , you would not be who you are today . Describe the process through which you discovered value in the negative.(word limit 500) I regarded an end of the world as a very unfortunate experience I hope I am on the right track, because I am scared I deviated. Also, my essay has I think between 510 and 516 words . Thus,I would appreciate it if you could remove parts which arent that important so that I can get below the 500 word limit. I have never posted an essay before and this is my first time. I would like you to look especially at my tenses, punctuation, and vocabulary. If there is any part of my essay that can be put in a better way please dont hesitate to do so. I am not that confident of this essay so if it is not good enough please tell me. Anxious and fidgety, I rolled on the bed the whole night. After months of rigorous studying, I was finally going to take the SAT.When I arrived at the center the following morning, the proctors had already started inspecting passports. When it was my turn, I confidently handed the proctor my passport and admission ticket. He asked, "Name?". "Kwame Tawia" I responded."What". "Kwa..ame Ta..wia", I reiterated".I am sorry youngman, you cannot take the test today. You will have to wait till May"."Why'', I asked. The name on your ticket is inconsistent with that on your passport. Apparently, my father had registered me with a name I no longer used. I tried covincing him that I was the same person, but it was to no avail. at this point, all attention was on me. Sullen-faced, I winced at the background stares and hurried my feet out the gate. Not writing the test that day meant I had to apply for the next academic year. I was going to spend a year out of school. My relatives told me to forget about the whole thing. I was in a quandary whether to go ahead or forget it. Noticing how distraught I was, my mom tried to console me. As we conversed, two statements she made struck a chord in me. The first was a popular saying in my local Ewe dialect which in English reads, "Everything that happens in life is good". I thought it ws very cruel of her to say this at that moment. Instead of her saying something to soothe my sadness, she was rather mocking me. The second was part of a quote by Enrico Fermi,"Whatever Nature has in store unpleasnt as it may be, men must accept it". I recognized it because it was my favourite quote. The latter transformed my anguish into determination. I decided to continue with the process. After three long months, I took the test. A month later I checked my scores and whoa! I breathed a sigh of relief. My scores were okay; they were good. I thought of the things that had happened in retrospect. Most of my friends who had taken the test three months earlier came out with scores that were abysmal. I could have been in their shoes."Was my experience nature's way of helping me?"I thought. It all made perfect sense now. Laughing really hard, I ran to give my mother the good news. "Mom! Everything that happens in life is good", I yelled. If there is one thing this experience taught me, then it is that nature has great plans for everyone. However, those who impetuously give up after seeing one signpost of failure miss this opportunity. Some months ago, I would have been very upset if anything unfortunate happened to me. Today, I am not at all perturbed when things seem to go wrong in my life, because I know everything that happens in life is good. | Tell us about an experience which at the time really felt like the end of the world ... but had it not happened, you would not be who you are today. Describe the process through which you discovered value in the negative.(word limit 500) I regarded an end of the world as a very unfortunate experience I hope I am on the right track, because I am scared I deviated. Also, my essay has I think between 510 and 516 words. Thus, I would appreciate it if you could remove parts which aren't that important so that I can get below the 500-word limit. I have never posted an essay before and this is my first time. I would like you to look especially at my tenses, punctuation, and vocabulary. If there is any part of my essay that can be put in a better way please don't hesitate to do so. I am not that confident of this essay so if it is not good enough please tell me. Anxious and fidgety, I rolled on the bed the whole night. After months of rigorous studying, I was finally going to take the SAT. When I arrived at the center the following morning, the proctors had already started inspecting passports. When it was my turn, I confidently handed the proctor my passport and admission ticket. He asked, "Name?". "Kwame Tania" I responded." What". "CWA.AME Ta.WIA", I reiterated". I am sorry young man, you cannot take the test today. You will have to wait till May"." Why'', I asked. The name on your ticket is inconsistent with that on your passport. Apparently, my father had registered me with a name I no longer used. I tried convincing him that I was the same person, but it was to no avail. At this point, all attention was on me. Sullen-faced, I winced at the background stares and hurried my feet out the gate. Not writing the test that day meant I had to apply for the next academic year. I was going to spend a year out of school. My relatives told me to forget about the whole thing. I was in a quandary whether to go ahead or forget it. Noticing how distraught I was, my mom tried to console me. As we conversed, two statements she made struck a chord in me. The first was a popular saying in my local Ewe dialect which in English reads, "Everything that happens in life is good". I thought it WS very cruel of her to say this at that moment. Instead of her saying something to soothe my sadness, she was rather mocking me. The second was part of a quote by Enrico Fermi,"Whatever Nature has in store unpleasant as it may be, men must accept it". I recognized it because it was my favorite quote. The latter transformed my anguish into determination. I decided to continue with the process. After three long months, I took the test. A month later I checked my scores and whoa! I breathed a sigh of relief. My scores were okay; they were good. I thought of the things that had happened in retrospect. Most of my friends who had taken the test three months earlier came out with scores that were abysmal. I could have been in their shoes." Was my experience nature's way of helping me?" I thought. It all made perfect sense now. Laughing really hard, I ran to give my mother the good news. "Mom! Everything that happens in life is good", I yelled. If there is one thing this experience taught me, then it is that nature has great plans for everyone. However, those who impetuously give up after seeing one signpost of failure miss this opportunity. Some months ago, I would have been very upset if anything unfortunate happened to me. Today, I am not at all perturbed when things seem to go wrong in my life, because I know everything that happens in life is good. |
Throughout the university life, we, together, have been subsidizing a room, food and drink, electricity and water and the likes. we used to stay up harping zealously about Marxism and lénenism and the effect was crystal clear on the way we were leading our daily miserable life. University circumstances threw us in the laps of communism and while I held a neutral stance, my roommate imbided its culture and went the whole hog. We were sharing the polluted air, the bare bread, the yellowish books, the rotten food. What was mine was implicitly his and vice versa. We were exchanging our tattered attires and cheap ciggies. In a certain time, I was thinking if we can contribute in the expansion of communism with another bill that authorizes sharing the same girl, stipulating certain nationalities. Obseessed with this hope I replied "Ok, I pleasurably welcome our American friend, I will do the best within my power to make on her the impression that we are very kind and hospitable; I will raise the flags as we do in the national celebrations in camomorial for her arrival. Don't worry, I will honor you with the condition that you can enjoy her during the day and leave her to me at night. Isn't this the epitome of communism?" Karim burst out of laugh and said "Communism has its limits son and if you wade through the first section in the new constitution you will discover that it forbids you to spend the nights in this room as long as Catherine is here" . I commented " Is this what you were working on! so call it another thing, but a constitution because you are favouring a foreigner at the expense of the native, and your personal interest at the expense of your partner, so fuck today's laws that sacrifices its people for the amusement of an American; laws that turf and chuck its people out on the street like tramps for the sake of a harmful guest to revel and whoop in my room and wallow in my bed" he replied smoothing my anger " Don't have it all wrong; I won't be vicious and brutal with you to this extent. For your lodging, I have sorted the problem with our friends in the nearby room to host you as a refugee at nights and you are free to stay here as long as you wish during the day time. For the payment of this month's utilities, it will be on my account. Regarding the money I owe you, I will relinquish and blink at them if only you approve and admit the new constitution". I replied with downcast eyes "It seems that you have decided on everything as a proffesional authoritarian and all what you are seeking now is the execution" I sighed deeply and resumed. "Give me the paper... give me". Unlike I, he talked with confidence "I don't want to be obsessed by another thing, but Catherene. So, I will charge you with shopping, cooking and cleaning and from time to time keep flattering me and make on her the impression that I am a gallant and genteel man. Also do your utmost to enliven and invigorate our discussions with charming words and sweet speeches" suddenly, he raised his voice as he remembered something crucial " I warn you not to shift to those sterile discussions about American war on Iraq, and its stance on the Iranian nuclear projets or the zionist lobby in the American administartion. Any way, , I elaborated enough on this point in the third chapter. Please do have a look at". I replied " In brief, you want me as a servant who cares for you and your guest, as an animatator who inspires your days and a hypocrite who covers scandals with sugar-coated words". karim said trying to mollify me "Come on man! Don't be very sensitive. Things have changed chap. It is right that I believe in communist prinsiples which doesn't mean that I am against some liberal creeds. It is a harsh world where ideologies ally with each other to guarantee their existence. Remember that if you look only on one direction, your neck will be stiff". He jumped to his desk and beckoned me "Rid yourself of those worries and come here to have a look at these posters". There were two giant posters showing the beauty and loveliness of nature, six photos of some American celeberties and some wise and inspirational sayings of some Western figures. He added "We will pin them around the walls instead of those" He said while pointing to some photoes of Chi Guevara, Staline, Marx, Martin Luther King, Abdelkrim Elkhatabi, Ghandi...For all these personalities, we were favouring sustaining hunger so that we could afford to buy their photos for inspiration and their books for knowledge. "This is called changing the coat man! It is the the same as that anonymous fan who had been supporting FC Barcelona and, overnight, he turned to be a hooligan for Real Madrid" I was mourning. "Look my friend, Necessity is the mother of invention; Moreover, hosting a Westerner in our room is an opportunity not to be sneezed at to show the real image of our country and correct those erronous prejudices. We have to act and react in a honorable manner and show profuse respect and utter understanding at least in front of her. Take off this scowl and frown and put on a lovely smile. We should behave as people of modernity, romance and prestige. We should make on her that we are entrovert, civilized and tolerant enough to interact with foreigners and integrate into their community. Your discussion with her should focus only on the friendly and historic relationships between our great nations, the lovely spirit of the Moroccans and the American people who have nothing to do with their country's policy. Talk about Moroccan culture: our delicious dishes, our fascinating traditional female outfits, our touristic sights and cities. I hope you got it". "I thank God that I need not to wear a jellaba and a tarbouch, bow before your princess and after kissing her golved hand I have to stand motionless by the wall wearing a bleak smile...". I chipped in He started feverishly applying his own modifications. After altering the position of the furniture in the room, he collected all our tattered outfits, can them in cartons and hide beneath our beds. Then, he moved to the cupboard and scraped some books that he thought will have a great deal in reavealing his true character and therefore thwart his hopes to go to the never-never land. Then, he started replacing those books with others of different languages about feminism, democracy, freedom, women's rights, love...and arrange them along with some Western CDs in a splendid way in the cupboard. Karam was infamous for his slackness and complacency. He had never been in such enthusiasm and activeness. His mood changed upside-down the same as his beliefs. He was moving nimbly and briskly from corner to another: adjusting this and fixing that. Many ideas were springing to my mind while karam was moving as a bee. I was speculatiing lamentably on how beliefs change and how behaviour alter. How a person gives up everything he has been cherishing for decades to embrace another thing he has been struggling against to delight another person that he has a smathering of him. It must be of a wholesome power! Is it generosity or profuse hospitality? It is neither this, nor that. It is fecklessnes. I was thinking deplorably how that Yankee girl whose country has been decieving the whole world and rape them, would be dragged off from far away and ravished by Karim. I was thinking how that Yankee girl who has been raising herself majestically and vauntingly as the most civilized, powerful and superior creature on earth, will raise her legs in a servile manner to karim's shoulders as the most vile and base of girls. I found in these ideas some spiritual solace, and thus I felt a tickling happiness rolling in my inner world as our army have vanquished the unvanquishable. Why not being pleased! My intimate friend is on the verge of denuding the world's first power of its clothes of haughtiness and egotism. Karim is about to trample upon the Americans' dignity and retaliate and avenge their unpermited military trespasses and political intrusions My dear friend is about to defame the greatest power in the world without weapons of mass destruction or all those cross-continental missiles. It is only one missile, a biological one made of flesh and blood. I felt an unprecedented happiness leaking in my chest and unconsciously I stood up smilingly and dismissed for a week leaving my friend to enjoy his Yankee to his heart's content. | Throughout the university life, we, together, have been subsidizing a room, food and drink, electricity and water and the likes. We used to stay up harping zealously about Marxism and Leninism and the effect was crystal clear on the way we were leading our daily miserable life. University circumstances threw us in the laps of communism and while I held a neutral stance, my roommate imbibed its culture and went the whole hog. We were sharing the polluted air, the bare bread, the yellowish books, the rotten food. What was mine was implicitly his and vice versa. We were exchanging our tattered attires and cheap piggies. In a certain time, I was thinking if we can contribute in the expansion of communism with another bill that authorizes sharing the same girl, stipulating certain nationalities. Obsessed with this hope I replied "Ok, I pleasurably welcome our American friend, I will do the best within my power to make on her the impression that we are very kind and hospitable; I will raise the flags as we do in the national celebrations in memorial for her arrival. Don't worry, I will honor you with the condition that you can enjoy her during the day and leave her to me at night. Isn't this the epitome of communism?" Karim burst out of laugh and said "Communism has its limits son and if you wade through the first section in the new constitution you will discover that it forbids you to spend the nights in this room as long as Catherine is here". I commented" Is this what you were working on! So call it another thing, but a constitution because you are favoring a foreigner at the expense of the native, and your personal interest at the expense of your partner, so fuck today's laws that sacrifices its people for the amusement of an American; laws that turf and chuck its people out on the street like tramps for the sake of a harmful guest to revel and whoop in my room and wallow in my bed" he replied smoothing my anger" Don't have it all wrong; I won't be vicious and brutal with you to this extent. For your lodging, I have sorted the problem with our friends in the nearby room to host you as a refugee at nights, and you are free to stay here as long as you wish during the daytime. For the payment of this month's utilities, it will be on my account. Regarding the money I owe you, I will relinquish and blink at them if only you approve and admit the new constitution". I replied with downcast eyes "It seems that you have decided on everything as a professional authoritarian and all what you are seeking now is the execution" I sighed deeply and resumed. "Give me the paper... give me". Unlike I, he talked with confidence "I don't want to be obsessed by another thing, but Catherine. So, I will charge you with shopping, cooking and cleaning and from time to time keep flattering me and make on her the impression that I am a gallant and genteel man. Also do your utmost to enliven and invigorate our discussions with charming words and sweet speeches" suddenly, he raised his voice as he remembered something crucial" I warn you not to shift to those sterile discussions about American war on Iraq, and its stance on the Iranian nuclear projects or the Zionist lobby in the American administration. Any way,, I elaborated enough on this point in the third chapter. Please do have a look at". I replied" In brief, you want me as a servant who cares for you and your guest, as an animator who inspires your days and a hypocrite who covers scandals with sugar-coated words". Karim said trying to mollify me "Come on man! Don't be very sensitive. Things have changed chap. It is right that I believe in communist principles which doesn't mean that I am against some liberal creeds. It is a harsh world where ideologies ally with each other to guarantee their existence. Remember that if you look only on one direction, your neck will be stiff". He jumped to his desk and beckoned me "Rid yourself of those worries and come here to have a look at these posters". There were two giant posters showing the beauty and loveliness of nature, six photos of some American celebrities and some wise and inspirational sayings of some Western figures. He added "We will pin them around the walls instead of those" He said while pointing to some photos of Chi Guevara, Stalin, Marx, Martin Luther King, Abdelaziz Elkhatabi, Gandi... For all these personalities, we were favoring sustaining hunger so that we could afford to buy their photos for inspiration and their books for knowledge. "This is called changing the coat man! It is the same as that anonymous fan who had been supporting FC Barcelona and, overnight, he turned to be a hooligan for Real Madrid" I was mourning. "Look my friend, Necessity is the mother of invention; Moreover, hosting a Westerner in our room is an opportunity not to be sneezed at to show the real image of our country and correct those erroneous prejudices. We have to act and react in an honorable manner and show profuse respect and utter understanding at least in front of her. Take off this scowl and frown and put on a lovely smile. We should behave as people of modernity, romance and prestige. We should make on her that we are extrovert, civilized and tolerant enough to interact with foreigners and integrate into their community. Your discussion with her should focus only on the friendly and historic relationships between our great nations, the lovely spirit of the Moroccans and the American people who have nothing to do with their country's policy. Talk about Moroccan culture: our delicious dishes, our fascinating traditional female outfits, our touristic sights and cities. I hope you got it". "I thank God that I need not wear a djellaba and a through, bow before your princess and after kissing her solved hand I have to stand motionless by the wall wearing a bleak smile...". I chipped in He started feverishly applying his own modifications. After altering the position of the furniture in the room, he collected all our tattered outfits, can them in cartons and hide beneath our beds. Then, he moved to the cupboard and scraped some books that he thought will have a great deal in revealing his true character and therefore thwart his hopes to go to the never-never land. Then, he started replacing those books with others of different languages about feminism, democracy, freedom, women's rights, love...and arrange them along with some Western CDs in a splendid way in the cupboard. Karma was infamous for his slackness and complacency. He had never been in such enthusiasm and activeness. His mood changed upside-down the same as his beliefs. He was moving nimbly and briskly from corner to another: adjusting this and fixing that. Many ideas were springing to my mind while karma was moving as a bee. I was speculating lamentably on how beliefs change and how behavior alter. How a person gives up everything he has been cherishing for decades to embrace another thing he has been struggling against to delight another person that he has a smattering of him. It must be of a wholesome power! Is it generosity or profuse hospitality? It is neither this, nor that. It is fecklessness. I was thinking deplorably how that Yankee girl whose country has been deceiving the whole world and rape them, would be dragged off from far away and ravished by Karim. I was thinking how that Yankee girl who has been raising herself majestically and hauntingly as the most civilized, powerful and superior creature on earth, will raise her legs in a servile manner to Karim's shoulders as the most vile and base of girls. Furthermore, I found in these ideas some spiritual solace, and thus I felt a tickling happiness rolling in my inner world as our army have vanquished the unvanquishable. Why not being pleased! My intimate friend is on the verge of denuding the world's first power of its clothes of haughtiness and egotism. Karim is about to trample upon the Americans' dignity and retaliate and avenge their undermined military trespasses and political intrusions My dear friend is about to defame the greatest power in the world without weapons of mass destruction or all those cross-continental missiles. It is only one missile, a biological one made of flesh and blood. I felt an unprecedented happiness leaking in my chest, and unconsciously I stood up smilingly and dismissed for a week leaving my friend to enjoy his Yankee to his heart's content. |
"You cannot open a book without learning something," (Confucius). About two months before school started, the weather became extremely hot. I stayed at home to enjoy the air-conditioning and to do some reading. I grabbed an arbitrary book which had probably stayed on my shelf during the whole summer. On the cover, it read "Voices and Values: A Reader for Writers by Janet M.Goldstein and Beth Johnson." On the inside, a few carelessly folded pages indicated that the book had ever been used. This book, a collection of effective essays, was a requirement for one of my classes. It theoretically served as a key to succeed both in reading and writing, but I had only read ten essays in an attempt to finish my homework assignments enough to maintain a decent grade in the course. That was how I approached school, getting the highest possible grade with the lowest possible effort. However, after reading several more essays in "Voices and Values," my attitude toward studying changed. In my family, education plays a serious role. My parents taught me to study hard since that is the ultimate means to succeed in life. Nevertheless, I personally viewed these ideas childishly and impractically. I told myself that it would be a waste of time to try too hard and fully absorb any of the material I was studying. What I did was to study enough to gather the facts. I used to taste ideas, chew on them for as long as it took to survive in class, and then, after tests, spit them out. Grades, after all, had served as the most powerful element in my educational view. As a matter of fact, while my grades were thriving, my mind was stagnating. As I opened the book that day, looking for some interesting essays that I might have missed, I found more than that. This book is much more than an academic book designed to teach critical reading and writing skills. "Voices and Values," in some ways, introduces its readers to higher moral lessons. The essays, "Dare to Think Big," by Dr. Ben Carson, "From Nonreading to Reading," by Stacy Kelly Abbott, "Reading to Survive," by Paul Langan, and "Learning Survival Skills," by Jean Coleman, are different stories written by different authors, but they all exude the same ideasďresurrecting lost hope to people, encouraging people not to surrender, and imparting how important education is to people's lives. Their words did not so much sound new to me as they reminded me of some ideas that I had known, some concepts I had held. However, I had stored them somewhere in my head and never used them. "As I look back over the past for years, I see all the things that have happened to make me see how important reading is. I am not where I want to be yet, but I will be in a year or two," (Abbott). Abbott's words moved around and enlightened me. Looking back over twelve years in school, I found myself nothing more than a revolving machine: receiving data, keeping it in short-term memory to cope with the tests, and then removing it as soon as possible. What I did, indeed, never could be called "studying" or "learning," but using a basic skill to achieve the best grade possible. Chemistry, World History, National History, World Geography, National Geography, Agricultures, and Biology, these subjects never seemed strange to me. I had undertaken, struggled, and passed through them years before in Vietnam. Unfortunately, none of them managed to set up roots in my mind. These things, which were supposed to be general information for a long term student, had come and gone like a visitor. I did not change; I did not grow; I did not accumulate any useful knowledge for myself. Worse than that, I was still too innocent to realize I had been on the wrong path and had the wrong attitude. The misconception I had about education eventually prevented me from opening my eyes and my mind. "And that is how we have to learn to think about life! With a long-term view. A Big-Picture perspective!" (Carson). There are times, when a person's mind encounters the right philosophies, and self-discovery happens. In a flash, I visualized an uncertain future, where I could see myself was holding a materialistic Degree with spiritual ignorance, knowing nothing about the world, and being completely empty of practical knowledge. Then, I knew that if there were ever a time for me to abandon the misconception about education, it was at that moment. As Peck stated in his essay "Responsibility," "This is because we must accept responsibility for a problem before we can solve it. We cannot solve a problem by hoping that someone else will solve it for us." Using education as a key to succeed is my responsibility. I realized that I am the person who has to deal with my future, and it was time for me to solve it. "I feel passionately that all of us can control our own destinies. Students should plan for a realistic career, get themselves organized, learn to persist, be positive, and open themselves to growth." (Coleman). I determined to change, to create a new attitude. I wanted to learn not just for the grades, but also for the knowledge. From that moment, I told myself to be more concerned with the information than with the grades. The information is what education really is, while the grades are sometimes merely an outward factor. I began refusing to use the phrase "just study enough" as an excuse for not trying. However, several times, when I felt regretful for having held the wrong attitude for such a long time, again, I found my concerns reflected in "Voices and Values," Most of the people in that book started their education a little late and faced many difficulties. Even so, they were seriously struggling, combating, and they overcame their own obstacles. At the age of nineteen, I am ready to be a go-getter, to thrive with a new passion which has been redefined. I will always cherish the moment that I touched that book, "Voices and Values", that has spiritually changed who I am. | "You cannot open a book without learning something," (Confucius). About two months before school started, the weather became extremely hot. I stayed at home to enjoy the air-conditioning and to do some reading. I grabbed an arbitrary book which had probably stayed on my shelf during the whole summer. On the cover, it read "Voices and Values: A Reader for Writers by Janet M. Goldstein and Beth Johnson." On the inside, a few carelessly folded pages indicated that the book had ever been used. This book, a collection of effective essays, was a requirement for one of my classes. It theoretically served as a key to succeed both in reading and writing, but I had only read ten essays in an attempt to finish my homework assignments enough to maintain a decent grade in the course. That was how I approached school, getting the highest possible grade with the lowest possible effort. However, after reading several more essays in "Voices and Values," my attitude toward studying changed. In my family, education plays a serious role. My parents taught me to study hard since that is the ultimate means to succeed in life. Nevertheless, I personally viewed these ideas childishly and impractically. I told myself that it would be a waste of time to try too hard and fully absorb any of the material I was studying. What I did was to study enough to gather the facts. I used to taste ideas, chew on them for as long as it took to survive in class, and then, after tests, spit them out. Grades, after all, had served as the most powerful element in my educational view. As a matter of fact, while my grades were thriving, my mind was stagnating. As I opened the book that day, looking for some interesting essays that I might have missed, I found more than that. This book is much more than an academic book designed to teach critical reading and writing skills. "Voices and Values," in some ways, introduces its readers to higher moral lessons. The essays, "Dare to Think Big," by Dr. Ben Carson, "From Nonreading to Reading," by Stacy Kelly Abbott, "Reading to Survive," by Paul Lankan, and "Learning Survival Skills," by Jean Coleman, are different stories written by different authors, but they all exude the same ideasďresurrecting lost hope to people, encouraging people not to surrender, and imparting how important education is to people's lives. Their words did not so much sound new to me as they reminded me of some ideas that I had known, some concepts I had held. However, I had stored them somewhere in my head and never used them. "As I look back over the past for years, I see all the things that have happened to make me see how important reading is. I am not where I want to be yet, but I will be in a year or two," (Abbott). Abbott's words moved around and enlightened me. Looking back over twelve years in school, I found myself nothing more than a revolving machine: receiving data, keeping it in short-term memory to cope with the tests, and then removing it as soon as possible. What I did, indeed, never could be called "studying" or "learning," but using a basic skill to achieve the best grade possible. Chemistry, World History, National History, World Geography, National Geography, Agriculture's, and Biology, these subjects never seemed strange to me. I had undertaken, struggled, and passed through them years before in Vietnam. Unfortunately, none of them managed to set up roots in my mind. These things, which were supposed to be general information for a long term student, had come and gone like a visitor. I did not change; I did not grow; I did not accumulate any useful knowledge for myself. Worse than that, I was still too innocent to realize I had been on the wrong path and had the wrong attitude. The misconception I had about education eventually prevented me from opening my eyes and my mind. "And that is how we have to learn to think about life! With a long-term view. A Big-Picture perspective!" (Carson). There are times, when a person's mind encounters the right philosophies, and self-discovery happens. In a flash, I visualized an uncertain future, where I could see myself was holding a materialistic Degree with spiritual ignorance, knowing nothing about the world, and being completely empty of practical knowledge. Then, I knew that if there were ever a time for me to abandon the misconception about education, it was at that moment. As Peck stated in his essay "Responsibility," "This is because we must accept responsibility for a problem before we can solve it. We cannot solve a problem by hoping that someone else will solve it for us." Using education as a key to succeed is my responsibility. I realized that I am the person who has to deal with my future, and it was time for me to solve it. "I feel passionately that all of us can control our own destinies. Students should plan for a realistic career, get themselves organized, learn to persist, be positive, and open themselves to growth." (Coleman). I determined to change, to create a new attitude. I wanted to learn not just for the grades, but also for the knowledge. From that moment, I told myself to be more concerned with the information than with the grades. The information is what education really is, while the grades are sometimes merely an outward factor. I began refusing to use the phrase "just study enough" as an excuse for not trying. However, several times, when I felt regretful for having held the wrong attitude for such a long time, again, I found my concerns reflected in "Voices and Values," Most of the people in that book started their education a little late and faced many difficulties. Even so, they were seriously struggling, combating, and they overcame their own obstacles. At the age of nineteen, I am ready to be a go-getter, to thrive with a new passion which has been redefined. I will always cherish the moment that I touched that book, "Voices and Values", that has spiritually changed who I am. |
The Essay: "As Mr. Annan, I believe that to live is to choose. But to choose well, I must know who I am and what I stand for, where I want to go and why I want to get there. Because it is the ability to choose well what makes us special and determines our future, I have spent long critical time to make the right choice deciding on my future academic education. Applying for AUC is my first preferred choice when offered a scholarship. I chose AUC based on many critical reasons. Education quality, cultural diversity, location, and student life what attracts me the most to apply for AUC. What makes AUC unique among many other universities is, as recognized, its outstanding education excellence. The highly qualified faculties at AUC know what students should really learn. Besides, AUC's Cutting-edge instructional technology offers better understanding and greater problem solving and critical thinking skills. Also, AUC's libraries and other educational labs provide a great learning environment where research is a major part of education. Based on these all facts, I believe I will be inspired by this educational brilliance to do my utmost as long as I am in the place where I can express myself; where my thoughts, my opinions, my voice counts. As a result, I will be better equipped for my career goals and will have superior and further opportunities in the future. Another reason that forces me to choose AUC from other options is its cultural multiformity of the student body. Various nationalities of AUC's students make it very interesting to study and meet people from different spots of earth and know the different lifestyles of other cultures. This will expand my horizons and open my eyes to a new world in which I will live from different points of view. Therefore, the diverse student body of AUC makes it a great cultural bridge where different nationalities get together and understand each other. The AUC's location in the heart of Cairo city is another attracting thrust beyond applying to this extraordinary university. I have always dreamed to be in Egypt. The state-of-the-art campus of AUC located downtown the crowded city makes studying exciting with lots of things to do. When tired of books, going out will absolutely be the best breather. Cairo is a target for many stimulation seekers like me. With numerous activities to do, and places to go, studying will be more effective and enthusing. A key factor beyond students' success is the campus life experience in the university. One of AUC's main aims is to provide productive and creative atmosphere for students through its campus life's activities and student clubs. That makes it pretty interesting to exchange thoughts and view points, and get leadership skills. More to the point, it drives students to be more energetic, creative, and outfitted for achieving approaching future goals. Thus, life is more enjoyable in a campus that "never slows down." To cut a long story short, my smart choice was not based on shallow reasons, but on real vital rationales. I expressed my main reasons, although there are no enough words to describe my enthusiasm to study at the American University in Cairo (AUC). Remarkable education superiority, interesting cultural variety, the attention-grapping location, and the inspiring student life is what was the most appealing automotives to choosing AUC." | The Essay: "As Mr. Anna, I believe that to live is to choose. But to choose well, I must know who I am and what I stand for, where I want to go and why I want to get there. Because it is the ability to choose well what makes us special and determines our future, I have spent long critical time to make the right choice deciding on my future academic education. Applying for AUC is my first preferred choice when offered a scholarship. I chose AUC based on many critical reasons. Education quality, cultural diversity, location, and student life what attracts me the most to apply for AUC. What makes AUC unique among many other universities is, as recognized, its outstanding education excellence. The highly qualified faculties at AUC know what students should really learn. Besides, AUC's Cutting-edge instructional technology offers better understanding and greater problem-solving and critical thinking skills. Also, AUC's libraries and other educational labs provide a great learning environment where research is a major part of education. Based on these all facts, I believe I will be inspired by this educational brilliance to do my utmost as long as I am in the place where I can express myself; where my thoughts, my opinions, my voice counts. As a result, I will be better equipped for my career goals and will have superior and further opportunities in the future. Another reason that forces me to choose AUC from other options is its cultural uniformity of the student body. Various nationalities of AUC's students make it very interesting to study and meet people from different spots of earth and know the different lifestyles of other cultures. This will expand my horizons and open my eyes to a new world in which I will live from different points of view. Therefore, the diverse student body of AUC makes it a great cultural bridge where different nationalities get together and understand each other. The AUC's location in the heart of Cairo city is another attracting thrust beyond applying to this extraordinary university. I have always dreamed to be in Egypt. The state-of-the-art campus of AUC located downtown the crowded city makes studying exciting with lots of things to do. When tired of books, going out will absolutely be the best breather. Cairo is a target for many stimulation seekers like me. With numerous activities to do, and places to go, studying will be more effective and enthusing. A key factor beyond students' success is the campus life experience in the university. One of AUC's main aims is to provide productive and creative atmosphere for students through its campus life's activities and student clubs. That makes it pretty interesting to exchange thoughts and view points, and get leadership skills. More to the point, it drives students to be more energetic, creative, and outfitted for achieving approaching future goals. Thus, life is more enjoyable in a campus that "never slows down." To cut a long story short, my smart choice was not based on shallow reasons, but on real vital rationales. I expressed my main reasons, although there are no enough words to describe my enthusiasm to study at the American University in Cairo (AUC). Remarkable education superiority, interesting cultural variety, the attention-grabbing location, and the inspiring student life is what was the most appealing automotive to choosing AUC." |
Despite most our games were loses, I really enjoyed being playing with my teammates, every Friday night. As a team captain I enjoyed leading the varsity defensive line during football games. I understood that I may have to pick up the guy next to me if he is down, and make sacrifices for the interests of my team. Preparing for each game marked a new challenge for my team, and I believe this was the hardest aspect of football. In some ways it was similar to studying for a test. I could remember that for the many hours we were on the field practicing, our team was in the classroom studying the opposing teams offense, defense, and sets, as well as the countless hours spent in watching film. A flaw in a game plan could result in an embarrassing loss, however my teammates and I believed in the experience of our coaches. Playing football for the Cerritos Dons had allowed me to convey my potential to my best of my ability, and the learning experience I underwent was greater for me than any win in a football game. I hope to pass over the knowledge that I have gained from my coaches, teammates and opponents to my life after high school. From basic ethic of teamwork, football has taught me to be a better individual overall. I have been better able to work with others, while displaying the leadership skills that I learned in football. I believe that I also have learned to be more trustworthy of others, because I learned to trust my teammates in the heat of battle. Some of the ethics required for a successful football team are true about life: Determination, Teamwork Confidence, and a never say die attitude. Football has awaken these aspects in me. | Despite most our games were loses, I really enjoyed being playing with my teammates, every Friday night. As a team captain I enjoyed leading the varsity defensive line during football games. I understood that I may have to pick up the guy next to me if he is down, and make sacrifices for the interests of my team. Preparing for each game marked a new challenge for my team, and I believe this was the hardest aspect of football. In some ways it was similar to studying for a test. I could remember that for the many hours we were on the field practicing, our team was in the classroom studying the opposing teams' offense, defense, and sets, as well as the countless hours spent in watching film. A flaw in a game plan could result in an embarrassing loss, however my teammates and I believed in the experience of our coaches. Playing football for the Burritos Dons had allowed me to convey my potential to my best of my ability, and the learning experience I underwent was greater for me than any win in a football game. I hope to pass over the knowledge that I have gained from my coaches, teammates and opponents to my life after high school. From basic ethic of teamwork, football has taught me to be a better individual overall. I have been better able to work with others, while displaying the leadership skills that I learned in football. I believe that I also have learned to be more trustworthy of others, because I learned to trust my teammates in the heat of battle. Some ethics required for a successful football team are true about life: Determination, Teamwork Confidence, and a never say die attitude. Football has awakened these aspects in me. |
The prompt is: As a young child with my father in the military, an inevitable aspect of life was frequentreassignments around the country. Bouncing from state to state, I often encountered manynew places and met numerous friends, much contributing to experiences I will neverforget. Providing influence equally from hardships and unforgettable memories, it was thiscycle that shaped the foundations for the person I grew up to be present day; a lifecentered around intellectual growth, calling for independence, responsibility, andself-motivation. A primary consequence of often restationing was the effect upon having friends. Initially,it was always rare to come across nearby kids my own age while in military housing, oftenleaving me either alone or in the company of solely my family while at home.Furthermore, the few friendships that had grown were short-lived, lasting a year or two atbest as a result of myself moving; and in addition, my friends being in the same situationwere the ones to leave if not myself. Though it was always hard to say goodbye,friendships were very close and meaningful, etching in me everlasting memories withsome of the best friends I have ever had. Moreover, I also took on the beneficial trait of anindependent nature in which I became accustomed to problem solving and moreself-sufficient. Another major impact resulting from routine relocations was the fragmenting of myprimary education years throughout no less than half a dozen schools. As a result, initiallythe first few years of school progressed with hardship. Sometimes overnight I may findmyself in another classroom, demanding frequent changes in the pace of learning. Fromthis rapid shift in environments and multiple experiences, I developed a powerful qualityof flexibility and adaptability, soon allowing my full potential to begin to be extractedfrom school. As I adjusted to school, almost naturally I became remarkably attached to it. For one,whereas at home friends were scarce, at school I was always surrounded by other kids myown age which for me was significant. While able to make many friends and interact withothers, I always enjoyed myself most at school, and more importantly, grew highlycompetitive, striving to achieve above the average. With school becoming the place Ienjoyed attending the most, excitement for learning followed, leading me to challengemyself to pursue advanced GATE classes, reading programs, and even computer designearly on in elementary. Overall, the premature momentum in elementary school, purelydriven by self-motivated goals, contrived personal expectations for achievement,launching the drive for academic success that would carry me through junior high, andsustain me up to this point in high school. Altogether, though at times proving tough, unavoidable circumstances throughout my earlychildhood situation attributed to my character and favorable scholarly tendencies thatcontribute to success in the present. With my high school experience nearing an end, I nowlook to continue to utilize my full potential as I transcend to new heights in a University,paving the way for unlimited possibilities for my future. ~~Thanks for reading, and any input!~~ | The prompt is: As a young child with my father in the military, an inevitable aspect of life was frequent reassignments around the country. Bouncing from state to state, I often encountered many new places and met numerous friends, much contributing to experiences I will never forget. Providing influence equally from hardships and unforgettable memories, it was this cycle that shaped the foundations for the person I grew up to be present day; a life centered around intellectual growth, calling for independence, responsibility, andself-motivation. A primary consequence of often restationing was the effect upon having friends. Initially, it was always rare to come across nearby kids my own age while in military housing, often leaving me either alone or in the company of solely my family while at home. Furthermore, the few friendships that had grown were short-lived, lasting a year or two attest as a result of myself moving; and in addition, my friends being in the same situation were the ones to leave if not myself. Though it was always hard to say goodbye, friendships were very close and meaningful, etching in me everlasting memories with some of the best friends I have ever had. Moreover, I also took on the beneficial trait of an independent nature in which I became accustomed to problem-solving and moreself-sufficient. Another major impact resulting from routine relocations was the fragmenting of my primary education years throughout no less than half a dozen schools. As a result, initially the first few years of school progressed with hardship. Sometimes overnight I may find myself in another classroom, demanding frequent changes in the pace of learning. From this rapid shift in environments and multiple experiences, I developed a powerful quality of flexibility and adaptability, soon allowing my full potential to begin to be extracted from school. As I adjusted to school, almost naturally I became remarkably attached to it. For one, whereas at home friends were scarce, at school I was always surrounded by other kids my own age which for me was significant. While able to make many friends and interact with others, I always enjoyed myself most at school, and more importantly, grew highly competitive, striving to achieve above the average. With school becoming the place Enjoyed attending the most, excitement for learning followed, leading me to challenge myself to pursue advanced GATE classes, reading programs, and even computer design early on in elementary. Overall, the premature momentum in elementary school, purely driven by self-motivated goals, contrived personal expectations for achievement, launching the drive for academic success that would carry me through junior high, and sustain me up to this point in high school. Altogether, though at times proving tough, unavoidable circumstances throughout my early childhood situation attributed to my character and favorable scholarly tendencies that contribute to success in the present. With my high school experience nearing an end, I now look to continue to utilize my full potential as I transcend to new heights in a University, paving the way for unlimited possibilities for my future. ~~Thanks for reading, and any input!~~ |
Essay Question: "Peace Corps Volunteers must be open to ideas and cultures different from their own.Give an example of a significant experience that illustrates your ability to adapt crossculturally.You may draw from experiences in your work, school, or community in the U.S. or abroad. Please include the circumstances of the experience and dates." (500 Words) My Essay: Being a military brat requires you to get comfortable with the idea of moving around the country to be immersed in all types of domestic cultures. In my childhood I had moved from Hawaii to Nebraska, and on to California, but in all that time I was never confronted with so unique a culture as I was when I moved to moved to small town outside of San Antonio. In January of 1999, right in the middle of my sophomore year of high school I moved from a large city outside of San Francisco to a small town outside of San Antonio, and within a few weeks I understood that I had arrived in very different environment. The best example of the cultural difference was the place religion had at school. Vastly different from the veto my former school had on any religious presences at the school, my new school held a morning ritual where students formed a prayer circle around the flagpole. The religious presence at school was everywhere. People frequently discussed Christian religion at school which was something I was not at all used to. I found public discussion of religion to be difficult because I was taught religious talk but best left private. Then I began to realize that religious conversation was easy to discuss because an overwhelming amount of the students were Christian, no one was being offended because there was no religious diversity. It wasn't that there was a fundamental difference in our beliefs, but the environment lent itself to open discussion of religion. This was lesson to me about understanding a different point of view, without judging it. Religion is probably the best example of how this small town culture was different than I was used to, but it was by far not the only divergent belief. Every day was a new example of an opposing opinion; gun laws, sexual orientation issues, and race politics were just a few. I soon found the best solution to adjusting to this new culture was to listen more than I talked. When I was confronted with a less then liberal perspective I made every effort to get the other person's entire point of view before I said a single thing. All those conversations that were so uncomfortable became opportunities to expand my understanding of not only their beliefs, but my own as well. Sometimes I was wrong, sometimes I was right, but with each conversation I became better for the chance to bounce by beliefs of a different perspective. I draw an enormous amount of my confidence from my time living in Texas; it was a time that I tried new ideas and learned a lot about my beliefs. The new perspectives I will encounter abroad with the Peace Corps, will again offer me that opportunity to listen and learn about other people. In this process of learning about another culture I will have the opportunity to better myself. | Essay Question: "Peace Corps Volunteers must be open to ideas and cultures different from their own. Give an example of a significant experience that illustrates your ability to adapt cross culturally. You may draw from experiences in your work, school, or community in the U.S. or abroad. Please include the circumstances of the experience and dates." (500 Words) My Essay: Being a military brat requires you to get comfortable with the idea of moving around the country to be immersed in all types of domestic cultures. In my childhood I had moved from Hawaii to Nebraska, and on to California, but in all that time I was never confronted with so unique a culture as I was when I moved to small town outside of San Antonio. In January 1999, right in the middle of my sophomore year of high school I moved from a large city outside of San Francisco to a small town outside of San Antonio, and within a few weeks I understood that I had arrived in very different environment. The best example of the cultural difference was the place religion had at school. Vastly different from the veto my former school had on any religious presences at the school, my new school held a morning ritual where students formed a prayer circle around the flagpole. The religious presence at school was everywhere. People frequently discussed Christian religion at school which was something I was not at all used to. I found public discussion of religion to be difficult because I was taught religious talk but best left private. Then I began to realize that religious conversation was easy to discuss because an overwhelming amount of the students were Christian, no one was being offended because there was no religious diversity. It wasn't that there was a fundamental difference in our beliefs, but the environment lent itself to open discussion of religion. This was lesson to me about understanding a different point of view, without judging it. Religion is probably the best example of how this small town culture was different from I was used to, but it was by far not the only divergent belief. Every day was a new example of an opposing opinion; gun laws, sexual orientation issues, and race politics were just a few. I soon found the best solution to adjusting to this new culture was to listen more than I talked. When I was confronted with a less than liberal perspective I made every effort to get the other person's entire point of view before I said a single thing. All those conversations that were so uncomfortable became opportunities to expand my understanding of not only their beliefs, but my own as well. Sometimes I was wrong, sometimes I was right, but with each conversation I became better for the chance to bounce by beliefs of a different perspective. I draw an enormous amount of my confidence from my time living in Texas; it was a time that I tried new ideas and learned a lot about my beliefs. The new perspectives I will encounter abroad with the Peace Corps, will again offer me that opportunity to listen and learn about other people. In this process of learning about another culture I will have the opportunity to better myself. |
I have been nurtured within a family enterprise established a few decades ago. The group deals with the production and marketing of recycled based products to companies. By being able to work experience as a summer trainee in my mother's company has further strengthened my desire to learn more about the environment so that I can bring a comprehensive set of skills to traditional systems. This is the long-term, the future. To achieve this, I need to rely on relevant experiences that foray into a combination of experience, hard-work and initiative. Through the long hours spent in meetings and the research facilities, not only did I gain a significant exposure about the environment, I also learnt a lot about hard-work and dedication. I learnt about initiative and resourcefulness from my parents, who are my biggest motivation. Whether in school or at work, whenever I made a wrong choice or waited for someone else to make things happen, they always inspired me to take the initiative to get things done. Being a part of my family's enterprise has fuelled my interest in the effect of the world on the environment. In the future, I hope to see myself doing research in this field for the better development of recycled products. UT has an incredible environmental science program that can aid in the pursuit of my dreams. I would like nothing better than to seize the opportunity to contribute positively towards campus life in ways that I am capable of, and take advantage of the wealth that an UT education has to offer. I would really appreciate your view on this essay. Thanks! | I have been nurtured within a family enterprise established a few decades ago. The group deals with the production and marketing of recycled based products to companies. By being able to work experience as a summer trainee in my mother's company has further strengthened my desire to learn more about the environment so that I can bring a comprehensive set of skills to traditional systems. This is the long-term, the future. To achieve this, I need to rely on relevant experiences that foray into a combination of experience, hard-work and initiative. Through the long hours spent in meetings and the research facilities, not only did I gain a significant exposure about the environment, I also learned a lot about hard-work and dedication. I learned about initiative and resourcefulness from my parents, who are my biggest motivation. Whether in school or at work, whenever I made a wrong choice or waited for someone else to make things happen, they always inspired me to take the initiative to get things done. Being a part of my family's enterprise has fuelled my interest in the effect of the world on the environment. In the future, I hope to see myself doing research in this field for the better development of recycled products. UT has an incredible environmental science program that can aid in the pursuit of my dreams. I would like nothing better than to seize the opportunity to contribute positively towards campus life in ways that I am capable of, and take advantage of the wealth that a UT education has to offer. I would really appreciate your view on this essay. Thanks! |
My Essay:(350 Words) I knew the moment I had my business degree in hand that I would not be fulfilled by the traditional career paths of my peers, that I would use my degree for more than a corner office. I want to be of service in my life, to know that I spent my time being of public service. Knowing that I was after a unique direction I began searching for an opportunity that could satisfy my desire to help people, and to have a once in a lifetime adventure. It was in my search for that road less traveled that I found the Peace Corps. My motivation to help people is to be part of real change on a person to person level; to participate in action at the grass roots level. I want to be part of changing the circumstances that hold people of second and third world countries down. Not in an abstract way, but by getting my hands dirty, with real people. The Peace Corps represents what I think can be a positive force for change in those countries. In a time of wars, poverty, and general unrest around the world, I can be part of a collaborative effort to further peace. My second motivation to the join the Peace Corps is the sense of adventure that service in the Peace Corps produces. Being transplanted to a foreign land; absent of language with nothing but optimism and good intentions. The Peace Corps is a completely unique experience of immersion into a different world. It is an experience that offers an abundance of opportunities to see new places, learn new languages, and to above all inspire a new perspective. This new perspective will be immensely beneficial after my service is over. It will be of use first in my graduate studies in International Relations, where my first hand knowledge of a different culture will shape the scope of my studies. After my graduate education I can only imagine how my experiences abroad will shape my life's path as I develop my role as an agent for public betterment. | My Essay:(350 Words) I knew the moment I had my business degree in hand that I would not be fulfilled by the traditional career paths of my peers, that I would use my degree for more than a corner office. I want to be of service in my life, to know that I spent my time being of public service. Knowing that I was after a unique direction I began searching for an opportunity that could satisfy my desire to help people, and to have a once in a lifetime adventure. It was in my search for that road less traveled that I found the Peace Corps. My motivation to help people is to be part of real change on a person to person level; to participate in action at the grassroots level. I want to be part of changing the circumstances that hold people of second and Third World countries down. Not in an abstract way, but by getting my hands dirty, with real people. The Peace Corps represents what I think can be a positive force for change in those countries. In a time of wars, poverty, and general unrest around the world, I can be part of a collaborative effort to further peace. My second motivation to the join the Peace Corps is the sense of adventure that service in the Peace Corps produces. Being transplanted to a foreign land; absent of language with nothing but optimism and good intentions. The Peace Corps is a completely unique experience of immersion into a different world. It is an experience that offers an abundance of opportunities to see new places, learn new languages, and to above all inspire a new perspective. This new perspective will be immensely beneficial after my service is over. It will be of use first in my graduate studies in International Relations, where my first-hand knowledge of a different culture will shape the scope of my studies. After my graduate education I can only imagine how my experiences abroad will shape my life's path as I develop my role as an agent for public betterment. |
"Our greatest glory is not in never failing, but in rising up every time we fail." It's strange but my understanding of life has come from the Indian Classical Dance of Bharatnatyam. It has totally changed my attitude towards everything. The impact of other activities that I have participated in have also played a very significant role in the molding of my personality but this one has won me over. Dancing is not just about moving to the rhythm, it is much more than that. It has taught me that it doesn't matter how many times we fail, what matters is that we keep on trying. I recall one particular event that I participated in, the All-State bharatnatyam dance competition. I remember wondering if I'll ever win it considering I had never even made it to the final round even though I had participated in this competition for the last 5 years. As my name was called and I walked on to the stage, I realized that it didn't matter whether I won or lost. This was my passion and I was doing it for the love and satisfaction. I gave it my best effort, knowing that if I did what I enjoyed and gave it my best, the rest would be taken care off itself. Before I knew it, the competition was over and I had won! Whether it was my perseverance and experience I will never know, but that was my first lesson in life. Over the years, dancing and its experiences have helped me in other situations as well. Like during my freshman year in college, when I was new to everything, I let me GPA suffer. Looking at my grades, I felt like giving up. But I stayed committed and was determined to make things right and eventually my hard work paid off. I owe a lot to this dance, as every competition I win or lose; it taught me that it did not pay to lose heart. It is vital to do one's best irrespective of the end result. Being involved in this dance has encouraged me to tackle all my difficulties in life with courage and determination looking at them like a dance competition, you move to one beat at a time. | "Our greatest glory is not in never failing, but in rising up every time we fail." It's strange, but my understanding of life has come from the Indian Classical Dance of Bharatnatyam. It has totally changed my attitude towards everything. The impact of other activities that I have participated in have also played a very significant role in the molding of my personality, but this one has won me over. Dancing is not just about moving to the rhythm, it is much more than that. It has taught me that it doesn't matter how many times we fail, what matters is that we keep on trying. I recall one particular event that I participated in, the All-State bharatnatyam dance competition. I remember wondering if I'll ever win it considering I had never even made it to the final round even though I had participated in this competition for the last 5 years. As my name was called, and I walked on to the stage, I realized that it didn't matter whether I won or lost. This was my passion, and I was doing it for the love and satisfaction. I gave it my best effort, knowing that if I did what I enjoyed and gave it my best, the rest would be taken care off itself. Before I knew it, the competition was over, and I had won! Whether it was my perseverance and experience I will never know, but that was my first lesson in life. Over the years, dancing and its experiences have helped me in other situations as well. Like during my freshman year in college, when I was new to everything, I let me GPA suffer. Looking at my grades, I felt like giving up. But I stayed committed and was determined to make things right and eventually my hard work paid off. I owe a lot to this dance, as every competition I win or lose; it taught me that it did not pay to lose heart. It is vital to do one's best irrespective of the end result. Being involved in this dance has encouraged me to tackle all my difficulties in life with courage and determination looking at them like a dance competition, you move to one beat at a time. |
If I could travel through time to any period and place, I would choose the Independence Era in British India. The reason I would choose this time period is because it shows the resilience of the humankind. "Man never made any material as resilient as the human spirit." Bern William's once said, and I believe this to be very true. It amazes me that that in the midst of great overwhelming sorrow such great people have not only been born but still influence people today with their courage and perseverance. Look at Gandhi. Even though he held no official or political position he managed to bring the British Empire to its knees, all through his great moral courage and perseverance. As we read through our history books, we are transformed, at least temporarily, by the inspiration of such courage, and moved by such incredible acts of service and character. And it would be incredible to experience this for myself. Please let me know what you think. The word limit is 250. | If I could travel through time to any period and place, I would choose the Independence Era in British India. The reason I would choose this time period is that it shows the resilience of the humankind. "Man never made any material as resilient as the human spirit." Bern William's once said, and I believe this to be very true. It amazes me that in the midst of great overwhelming sorrow such great people have not only been born but still influence people today with their courage and perseverance. Look at Gandhi. Even though he held no official or political position he managed to bring the British Empire to its knees, all through his great moral courage and perseverance. As we read through our history books, we are transformed, at least temporarily, by the inspiration of such courage, and moved by such incredible acts of service and character. And it would be incredible to experience this for myself. Please let me know what you think. The word limit is 250. |
One needs to consider the health of the population in terms of non-communicable diseases such as hypertension, diabetes mellitus, sickle cell disease, asthma and other disease entities that are seen to be commonplace. We in this part of the world have not come to be able to sufficiently deal with or manage these entities effectively with minimal affectation of the health status of the people as a population. The ways to go about managing the above diseases and problems generally are the main concern of public health practitioners.I submit that the knowledge gathered from the training in public health in an institution like yours will broaden my views and knowledge further and give me an edge in taking decisions that will be beneficial to all concerned. I am prepared to work well and gain further knowledge in order to be useful to my society and country in this aspect.I have been out of school for a number of years practising in government, private and mission hospital establishments. In all these places, I have discharged my duties with all diligence. I have experiences in other areas of medical practice too, such as diagnostic medicine and ultrasonography. I had a good training in school and I will always be able to fit in into any academic establishment or training. Rewrite this sentence to something such as, "As a result of my excellent training in school, I am able to fit into any academic institution or training program successfully.) I am a person interested in working long hours buried in works and books.I am an affable, diligent, lovely person and have no dull moments. Learning is easy for me as I am very inquisitive and practical in my approach to things. I have had experiences as a medical practitioner in a tropical environment all the while I have been out of school. I believe these experiences could be passed on to course-mates who live in developed environments. I have been involved in the treatment of public health diseases like onchocerciasis, helminthiasis, dracunculus medinensis and a variety of protein energy malnutrition like kwashiorkor,marasmus, malaria typhoid enteritis and the like. I know my experiences would be useful to my classmates and even the teachers because I have the experiences first-hand having lived till now a in tropical environment. My experiences in the various hospitals that I have been to will come in handy for me as I have experiences in surgeries like appendicectomies, herniorrhaphies, ceasarian sections and the treatment of medical illnesses like tetanus, hypertension and diabetes and I can compare what is done in my environment with what my classmates do in their own environment which may obviously be more advanced than in mine environment I believe I would be useful to the MSc public health class.I am married though I don't have children yet.Thanks and God bless. come in handy for me as I have experiences in surgeries like appendicectomies, herniorrhaphies, ceasarian sections and the treatment of medical illnesses like tetanus, hypertension and diabetes and I can compare what is done in my environment with what my classmates do in their own environment which may obviously be more advanced than in mine environment I believe I would be useful to the MSc public health class. I am married though I don't have children yet. Thanks and God bless. | One needs to consider the health of the population in terms of non-communicable diseases such as hypertension, diabetes mellitus, sickle cell disease, asthma and other disease entities that are seen to be commonplace. We in this part of the world have not come to be able to sufficiently deal with or manage these entities effectively with minimal affectation of the health status of the people as a population. The ways to go about managing the above diseases and problems generally are the main concern of public health practitioners. I submit that the knowledge gathered from the training in public health in an institution like yours will broaden my views and knowledge further and give me an edge in taking decisions that will be beneficial to all concerned. I am prepared to work well and gain further knowledge in order to be useful to my society and country in this aspect. I have been out of school for a number of years practicing in government, private and mission hospital establishments. In all these places, I have discharged my duties with all diligence. I have experiences in other areas of medical practice too, such as diagnostic medicine and ultrasonography. I had a good training in school and I will always be able to fit in into any academic establishment or training. Rewrite this sentence to something such as, "As a result of my excellent training in school, I am able to fit into any academic institution or training program successfully.) I am a person interested in working long hours buried in works and books. I am an affable, diligent, lovely person and have no dull moments. Learning is easy for me as I am very inquisitive and practical in my approach to things. I have had experiences as a medical practitioner in a tropical environment all the while I have been out of school. I believe these experiences could be passed on to course-mates who live in developed environments. Furthermore, I have been involved in the treatment of public health diseases like onchocerciasis, helminthiasis, dracunculus medinensis and a variety of protein energy malnutrition like Kwashiorkor, marasmus, malaria typhoid enteritis and the like. Furthermore, I know my experiences would be useful to my classmates and even the teachers because I have the experiences first-hand having lived till now an in tropical environment. My experiences in the various hospitals that I have been to will come in handy for me as I have experiences in surgeries like appendectomies, herniorrhaphies, cesarean sections and the treatment of medical illnesses like tetanus, hypertension and diabetes and I can compare what is done in my environment with what my classmates do in their own environment which may obviously be more advanced than in mine environment I believe I would be useful to the M.Sc. public health class. I am married though I don't have children yet. Thanks and God bless. Come in handy for me as I have experiences in surgeries like appendectomies, herniorrhaphies, cesarean sections and the treatment of medical illnesses like tetanus, hypertension and diabetes and I can compare what is done in my environment with what my classmates do in their own environment which may obviously be more advanced than in mine environment I believe I would be useful to the M.Sc. public health class. I am married though I don't have children yet. Thanks and God bless. |
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