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As an amalgamation of chill comic-book talks and intense theological debates, I consider West Union Building to be an apt metaphor for my life- a hub of diversity, a bridge between heritage and progression. In Trinity, I'd be found enjoying Prof Chandrasekharan's lectures on Fermion-Bag approach, taking the notoriously challenging PHYSICS655, involving myself in the Super-K project and, of course, spamming Instagram with #DevilDays during Duke2023 student takeovers. Like the magnificent sunsets at Marine Lab, my days at Duke would definitely leave me wanting for more. I believe if I can impact even a single person's life positively, I must do it. In applying for DukeEngage, I see opportunities to transform hundreds of lives. I even hope to leave my mark on the student body by establishing 'Duke Astronomy Society'. I choose Trinity because when the Wallace Wade Stadium chants 'Go Go Duke', my heart starts pumping the Devil Blue.

As an amalgamation of chill comic-book talks and intense theological debates, I consider West Union Building to be an apt metaphor for my life- a hub of diversity, a bridge between heritage and progression. In Trinity, I'd be found enjoying Prof Chandrasekhar an's lectures on Fermion-Bag approach, taking the notoriously challenging PHYSICS655, involving myself in the Super-K project and, of course, spamming Instagram with #DevilDays during Duke2023 student takeovers. Like the magnificent sunsets at Marine Lab, my days at Duke would definitely leave me wanting for more. I believe if I can impact even a single person's life positively, I must do it. In applying for Disengage, I see opportunities to transform hundreds of lives. I even hope to leave my mark on the student body by establishing 'Duke Astronomy Society'. I choose Trinity because when the Wallace Wade Stadium chants 'Go Duke', my heart starts pumping the Devil Blue.

My Response:- I was in grade 10 when I participated in my first Mock United Nations assembly. I was selected as one of the youngest representatives from my school as I had developed good communication skills. I was a good public speaker and had recently secured first rank in inter school debate competition. I had come prepared with a lot of facts and figures and was well versed with all current happenings about the topic which was given to me, that is "Human Rights Violation in Sri Lanka". Our first session started and I grabbed opportunities to present my facts and challenge other delegates on their stand. What went wrong was not the speech or confidence but the diplomacy. I had neglected who my real time allies were and whom to defend. It taught me that when to speak and what to speak was more important than how to speak. My ardent desire to learn and improve did pay off in the next Mock United Nations Assembly where I was the delegate of United Kingdom and the topic was "Cybersecurity and Cybercrime". I was appreciated by my mentor and even the chairperson for my performance. I had finally learned the art of diplomacy.(Actual word count-201 words)

My Response:- I was in grade 10 when I participated in my first Mock United Nations assembly. I was selected as one of the youngest representatives from my school as I had developed good communication skills. I was a good public speaker and had recently secured first rank in interschool debate competition. Furthermore, I had come prepared with a lot of facts and figures and was well versed with all current happenings about the topic which was given to me, that is "Human Rights Violation in Sri Lanka". Our first session started, and I grabbed opportunities to present my facts and challenge other delegates on their stand. What went wrong was not the speech or confidence but the diplomacy. I had neglected who my real time allies were and whom to defend. It taught me that when to speak and what to speak was more important than how to speak. My ardent desire to learn and improve did pay off in the next Mock United Nations Assembly where I was the delegate of the United Kingdom and the topic was "Cybersecurity and Cybercrime". I was appreciated by my mentor and even the chairperson for my performance. I had finally learned the art of diplomacy.(Actual word count-201 words)

Kannan Jagannathan, Professor ofPhysics, Amherst College Amidst plastic dinosaurs and chess pieces, the 9-year-old me rolled a Hot-Wheels car I recently rescued from the crevice of a sofa. My intense high-speed pursuit on the floor was bluntly disrupted by a glossy slab of metal. A magnet! I wondered, perhaps, a proper magnetic arrangement could propel my car like an invisible engine. I taped a pencil to my car, suspended the magnet from the pencil using rubber bands and decided what I'll wear during my interview titled '4th Grader Solves Global Fuel-Crisis'. To the wildest of my amazement, it didn't move. So, I quickly embedded a lump of play-dough to the back of my car hoping it would rectify the weight distribution irregularities only to encounter further disappointment. The payload turned too bulky for my wee magnet and no amount of convincing could get my mother to buy me an 8kg neodymium one. Between insufficient apparatus and an unending pile of schematics, I vaguely realised that true insight is the sole needle which penetrates the bubble of empirical confinements, beyond which lies the vastness of pure science. Blank papers and sketch-pens, ever since, have turned into my research companions with whose help I've design multiple universes of my own. Years later, I did learn how Laws of Thermodynamics disallow a perpetual motion machine but my adventures with the impossible magnet-car rendered me with the epiphany that my interests were in exploring (and occasionally bending) the nature of reality using theoretical physics. I would travel to black-holes and dive in subatomic worlds all in the same day, with merely sketch-pens and a creative aptitude. Gradually, rigorous reasoning has developed an organised space for my creativity to stroll in but my inherent nature to solve global-problems with insights I find in my 'toy-boxes', beyond normative places, has definitely not been altered.

Kennan Jagannath, Professor physics, Amherst College Amidst plastic dinosaurs and chess pieces, the 9-year-old me rolled a Hot-Wheels car I recently rescued from the crevice of a sofa. My intense high-speed pursuit on the floor was bluntly disrupted by a glossy slab of metal. A magnet! I wondered, perhaps, a proper magnetic arrangement could propel my car like an invisible engine. I taped a pencil to my car, suspended the magnet from the pencil using rubber bands and decided what I'll wear during my interview titled '4th Grader Solves Global Fuel-Crisis'. To the wildest of my amazement, it didn't move. So, I quickly embedded a lump of play-dough to the back of my car hoping it would rectify the weight distribution irregularities only to encounter further disappointment. The payload turned too bulky for my wee magnet and no amount of convincing could get my mother to buy me a 8 kg neodymium one. Between insufficient apparatus and an unending pile of schematics, I vaguely realized that true insight is the sole needle which penetrates the bubble of empirical confinements, beyond which lies the vastness of pure science. Blank papers and sketch-pens, ever since, have turned into my research companions with whose help I've design multiple universes of my own. Years later, I did learn how Laws of Thermodynamics disallow a perpetual motion machine but my adventures with the impossible magnet-car rendered me with the epiphany that my interests were in exploring (and occasionally bending) the nature of reality using theoretical physics. I would travel to black-holes and dive in subatomic worlds all in the same day, with merely sketch-pens and a creative aptitude. Gradually, rigorous reasoning has developed an organized space for my creativity to stroll in but my inherent nature to solve global-problems with insights I find in my 'toy-boxes', beyond normative places, has definitely not been altered.

Hey I was just wondering if you guys could read over my responses to the short answer questions in the Syracuse University application. However, it was weeks later when my interest had really piqued. I was searching online for other people's opinion on Syracuse when I came across a youtube channel where a student was videotaping his day-to-day experiences at Syracuse and I was absolutely mesmerized I must have watched 6 videos that night. And the more I watched the more I fell in love with what I saw: a school where you could feel comfortable having a conversation with a complete stranger as though you've known each other for years. I thrive in an environment where people can feel free to be themselves without judgment, whether its what you choose to study, or what extracurricular activities you participate in. And when I saw Syracuse through the eyes of that student on youtube, I could feel a sense of unity that comes from being a student at Syracuse that I want to be a part of. Thanks in advance, any advice you have for me would be greatly appreciated

Hey I was just wondering if you guys could read over my responses to the short answer questions in the Syracuse University application. However, it was weeks later when my interest had really piqued. I was searching online for other people's opinion on Syracuse when I came across a YouTube channel where a student was videotaping his day-to-day experiences at Syracuse, and I was absolutely mesmerized I must have watched 6 videos that night. And the more I watched, the more I fell in love with what I saw: a school where you could feel comfortable having a conversation with a complete stranger as though you've known each other for years. I thrive in an environment where people can feel free to be themselves without judgment, whether It's what you choose to study, or what extracurricular activities you participate in. And when I saw Syracuse through the eyes of that student on YouTube, I could feel a sense of unity that comes from being a student at Syracuse that I want to be a part of. Thanks in advance, any advice you have for me would be greatly appreciated

"Why would you want your hair to turn grey while staring at a problem which you might never even solve?" These words by Prof. Sanjit Mitra, a brilliant grey-haired researcher at IUCAA (Inter-University Centre for Astronomy and Astrophysics), did not lead up to the conversation I expected before walking in his room. Only several sleepless nights and retrospection episodes later, did I realize the significance of this much ignored question. ... after gazing at a globe and then up in his father's russet brown eyes, a kindergartner exclaimed, 'I can't believe the Earth is not flat Dad! I'll become an astronaut one day and find out the truth". Fascinatingly enough, one small moment of awe and arbitrary scepticism influenced that kindergartner's life for years to come. Whether it was irresolutely choosing 'Popular Science' in bookstores over 'Spectacular Spiderman', or watching Carl Sagan's Cosmos on repeat instead of Power Rangers, I never stopped to ask myself- why? Were fictional worlds not as appealing to me as the mind-boggling quantum realms? Did my overwhelmed self consider pondering over life decisions rather than the array of ideas I had, irrational? Regardless of the cause, my intense craving to understand this clockwork universe fuelled my spacecraft of imagination and my expeditions in the realms of astronomy continued. During summers, I worked at prestigious observatories with brilliant scholars to push my horizons of knowledge astronomical distances away. Every spectrum I analysed, and every other research forum I participated in, made me feel as if pieces of a puzzle were falling beautifully in place. However, all this changed when I stammered while answering Prof. Mitra. I walked home feeling terrified by the fact that I stood unaware of the reasons why I've devoted half of my life doing things that I did. If watching a globe for the first time was my 'falling-apple moment', then my 'Eureka moment' happened 12 years later when I stood under the massive 3.6m Devasthal Telescope. The dome loudly slid open to expose the magnificent winter sky of Nainital. And it struck me- I'm nothing but a neat yet highly insignificant arrangement of stardust amidst the vast enveloping universe. I chose to explore this humbling idea every night for the same reason why I take out telescopes to freezing cold roofs instead of sleeping peacefully at 3 a.m. My abstraction was not just humbling, but also inspiring. From that point of time, science became a symbol of the robustness of our lives. Science became an opportunity for me to keep contributing towards a brighter future even long after I'm gone. If it wasn't for the unexpected question and my frankensteinish reply at IUCAA, I might have parted ways with science by now. Because I studied enough physics to explain most of the questions an average Joe would throw at me, I would have felt something which a true scientist should never feel: satisfaction. Fortunately, my days at IUCAA were a reminder that my story was never about answering the most complex questions. It was about questioning the most obvious answers. It was, and will always be, about transforming lives. Last August, after my finger-style guitar performance in an inter-school competition, a member from the judging panel asked me, "What is it that you want to do in your future?". My instantaneous reply, 'ASTROPHYSICS!', came as a surprising answer to many. He raised an eyebrow and followed with a familiar sounding question, "You can tour the world with your guitar if you remain dedicated, but you want to spend your life inside a room stuffed with redolent old books. Why?" Facing the bright lights and the packed auditorium, I smiled. This time I knew exactly what I'd say- "Yes. Maybe it does mean I'll spend my life behind closed doors. But if it also means I could be opening portals of knowledge for generations to come, count me all in for it."

"Why would you want your hair to turn gray while staring at a problem which you might never even solve?" These words by Prof. Bandit Mira, a brilliant reappeared researcher at NCAA (Inter-University Center for Astronomy and Astrophysics), did not lead up to the conversation I expected before walking in his room. Only several sleepless nights and retrospection episodes later, did I realize the significance of this much ignored question. ... after gazing at a globe and then up in his father's russet brown eyes, a kindergartner exclaimed, 'I can't believe the Earth is not flat Dad! I'll become an astronaut one day and find out the truth". Fascinatingly enough, one small moment of awe and arbitrary skepticism influenced that kindergartner's life for years to come. Whether it was irresolutely choosing 'Popular Science' in bookstores over 'Spectacular Spider-Man', or watching Carl Sagan's Cosmos on repeat instead of Power Rangers, I never stopped to ask myself-why? We're fictional worlds not as appealing to me as the mind-boggling quantum realms? Did my overwhelmed self consider pondering over life decisions rather than the array of ideas I had, irrational? Regardless of the cause, my intense craving to understand this clockwork universe fuelled my spacecraft of imagination and my expeditions in the realms of astronomy continued. During summers, I worked at prestigious observatories with brilliant scholars to push my horizons of knowledge astronomical distances away. Every spectrum I analyzed, and every other research forum I participated in, made me feel as if pieces of a puzzle were falling beautifully in place. However, all this changed when I stammered while answering Prof. Mira. I walked home feeling terrified by the fact that I stood unaware of the reasons why I've devoted half of my life doing things that I did. If watching a globe for the first time was my 'falling-apple moment', then my 'Eureka moment' happened 12 years later when I stood under the massive 3.6 m Devastate Telescope. The dome loudly slid open to expose the magnificent winter sky of Capital. And it struck me- I'm nothing but a neat yet highly insignificant arrangement of stardust amidst the vast enveloping universe. I chose to explore this humbling idea every night for the same reason why I take out telescopes to freezing cold roofs instead of sleeping peacefully at 3 a.m. My abstraction was not just humbling, but also inspiring. From that point of time, science became a symbol of the robustness of our lives. Science became an opportunity for me to keep contributing towards a brighter future even long after I'm gone. If it wasn't for the unexpected question and my Frankensteinian reply at NCAA, I might have parted ways with science by now. Because I studied enough physics to explain most of the questions an average Joe would throw at me, I would have felt something which a true scientist should never feel: satisfaction. Fortunately, my days at NCAA were a reminder that my story was never about answering the most complex questions. It was about questioning the most obvious answers. It was, and will always be, about transforming lives. Last August, after my finger-style guitar performance in an interschool competition, a member from the judging panel asked me, "What is it that you want to do in your future?". My instantaneous reply, 'ASTROPHYSICS!', came as a surprising answer to many. He raised an eyebrow and followed with a familiar sounding question, "You can tour the world with your guitar if you remain dedicated, but you want to spend your life inside a room stuffed with redolent old books. Why?" Facing the bright lights and the packed auditorium, I smiled. This time I knew exactly what I'd say- "Yes. Maybe it does mean I'll spend my life behind closed doors. But if it also means I could be opening portals of knowledge for generations to come, count me all in for it."

Within my tenure as an undergraduate student at Indiana University, I plan to further my expertise in business by earning a degree in marketing at the Kelley School of Business, and specifically honing in on the foundations of becoming a successful Marketing Manager. The success, that the marketing department at Indiana historically has had, intrigues me as I look forward to being a part of a well-grounded and cutting-edge major field. I envision myself as a master of the fundamentals of marketing. I can achieve this by utilizing the resources that IU offers, such as the relationships with current corporate partners, like Nestle and Hertz, as they offer a variety of meaningful knowledge concerning sales and marketing approaches. Another resource I look forward to taking advantage of is the internationally renowned faculty members at IU because they can help me develop my creativity and my analytical skills when it comes to marketing. Additionally, IU's Customer Interface Laboratory is something I am extremely fascinated with as it is especially beneficial to someone like me, as it can allow me to directly view consumer behavior, which in turn can lead me to develop an enhanced marketing approach. I believe this form of study is going to become more prevalent in the future and the fact that Indiana is already ahead of the game, with this research tool, makes the school stand out in a positive way. I plan to work diligently within my courses at IU while also exploring outside availabilities, in Bloomington and the surrounding cities, for increased learning opportunities and experience through offered internships, available job opportunities, and voluntary community projects. I feel as if Indiana's outstanding network of faculty, peers, and alumni will help me tremendously while at the school as well as in my life afterwards. In time, I plan to use the skills I mastered while at IU to aid in either the development of my own company, or the advancement of another established company. After my years at IU, I look forward to having a great alumni base, like Indiana has, and establishing lifelong friendships with my peers within the marketing field. I have always held Indiana University in a high regard when it comes to academics, athletics, as well as the school as a whole. All things considered, I truly hope to be able to join the Hoosier family.

Within my tenure as an undergraduate student at Indiana University, I plan to further my expertise in business by earning a degree in marketing at the Kelley School of Business, and specifically honing in on the foundations of becoming a successful Marketing Manager. The success, that the marketing department at Indiana historically has had, intrigues me as I look forward to being a part of a well-grounded and cutting-edge major field. I envision myself as a master of the fundamentals of marketing. I can achieve this by utilizing the resources that IU offers, such as the relationships with current corporate partners, like Nestle and Hertz, as they offer a variety of meaningful knowledge concerning sales and marketing approaches. Another resource I look forward to taking advantage of is the internationally renowned faculty members at IU because they can help me develop my creativity and my analytical skills when it comes to marketing. Additionally, IU's Customer Interface Laboratory is something I am extremely fascinated with as it is especially beneficial to someone like me, as it can allow me to directly view consumer behavior, which in turn can lead me to develop an enhanced marketing approach. I believe this form of study is going to become more prevalent in the future and the fact that Indiana is already ahead of the game, with this research tool, makes the school stand out positively. I plan to work diligently within my courses at IU while also exploring outside availabilities, in Bloomington and the surrounding cities, for increased learning opportunities and experience through offered internships, available job opportunities, and voluntary community projects. Furthermore, I feel as if Indiana's outstanding network of faculty, peers, and alumni will help me tremendously while at the school as well as in my life afterwards. In time, I plan to use the skills I mastered while at IU to aid in either the development of my own company, or the advancement of another established company. After my years at IU, I look forward to having a great alumni base, like Indiana has, and establishing lifelong friendships with my peers within the marketing field. I have always held Indiana University in a high regard when it comes to academics, athletics, as well as the school as a whole. All things considered, I truly hope to be able to join the Hoosier family.

Looking into colleges, for me, started with UW Madison. While a beautiful campus, the city it is integrated in to just created a hectic stage in my mind. One of the most important things I got out of that tour was that I did want to spend my years of education following high school to be in a huge city. These criteria was essentially met and surpassed when I toured UW Eau Claire. I fell in love with the layout and the separation between the city and university. What I'm going to be learning will mean a lot to me in the coming years. I intend to participate in the Actuarial Science program as well as the University Honors Program. I have always attended accelerated classes because the speed and difficulty of said classes challenged me and kept me interested, but my future plays a big part as well. This means the teaching staff that will help me acquire my actuarial science major need to be up to standards, which is exactly what UW Eau Claire provides. One of my main issues with certain classes is that teachers most of the time don't explain how the material we go over will pertain to real life. The actuarial science professors provide exactly those real-life examples that will help me in my future job. I believe that a big part of the college experience is creating bonds and getting involved in the community. Eau Claire offering 250+ organizations gives the perfect balance of both by giving me a wide variety of activities to join and find my place in the student body. This campus is the perfect fit for me and I will be able to enhance the community as it will do to me. *Thanks for any feedback this is my first college essay.*

Looking into colleges, for me, started with UW Madison. While a beautiful campus, the city it is integrated in to just created a hectic stage in my mind. One of the most important things I got out of that tour was that I did want to spend my years of education following high school to be in a huge city. These criteria were essentially met and surpassed when I toured UW Eau Claire. I fell in love with the layout and the separation between the city and university. What I'm going to be learning will mean a lot to me in the coming years. I intend to participate in the Actuarial Science program as well as the University Honors Program. I have always attended accelerated classes because the speed and difficulty of said classes challenged me and kept me interested, but my future plays a big part as well. This means the teaching staff that will help me acquire my actuarial science major need to be up to standards, which is exactly what UW Eau Claire provides. One of my main issues with certain classes is that teachers most of the time don't explain how the material we go over will pertain to real life. The actuarial science professors provide exactly those real-life examples that will help me in my future job. I believe that a big part of the college experience is creating bonds and getting involved in the community. Eau Claire offering 250+ organizations gives the perfect balance of both by giving me a wide variety of activities to join and find my place in the student body. This campus is the perfect fit for me and I will be able to enhance the community as it will do to me. *Thanks for any feedback this is my first college essay.*

It often seems that 'cooking' is synonymous with 'one chef', but in Ukrainian culture, food is a communal experience. On snowy winter nights after skiing, my family and friends gather to shape Вареники dumplings while sharing stories, filling everyone with warm food and a feeling of accomplishment. These memories of community and happiness are what fill me with pride and joy when I cook. Being able to use my hands to learn, mix, knead, and bake, then watch others feel comforted by what I create, makes me love cooking: although food disappears in minutes, the memories last for a lifetime.

It often seems that 'cooking' is synonymous with 'one chef', but in Ukrainian culture, food is a communal experience. On snowy winter nights after skiing, my family and friends gather to shape Вареники dumplings while sharing stories, filling everyone with warm food and a feeling of accomplishment. These memories of community and happiness are what fill me with pride and joy when I cook. Being able to use my hands to learn, mix, knead, and bake, then watch others feel comforted by what I create, makes me love cooking: although food disappears in minutes, the memories last for a lifetime.

Throughout my college search, one thing became very apparent to me: Finding a school that shares your values is incredibly difficult. When I found that Tulane cares about community service so much that it has become part of the curriculum, I was blown away. I have always been passionate about helping others, and service has been a large influence in my life. Being able to give back to a community as culturally rich as New Orleans would be a dream come true. With the culture of New Orleans comes a lot of diversity, which we don't see a lot of in Indiana. The student body at Tulane would allow me to learn from people of all kinds of backgrounds. Furthermore, the ratio of students to teachers ensures that among all of the opinions and ideas, my voice will still be heard. When I visited, the sense of community was almost tangible, even over the summer. I also appreciate the flexibility that Tulane offers. Being able to take classes from any of the 5 schools would make it possible to not only explore my current interests, but to develop new interests. The opportunities for undergraduate research provide an even more enriching educational experience. I love that Tulane does not expect me to have my life figured out at 17 years old, but gives me the chance to discover what I want to do. Tulane was my top choice of school from the first glance. It embodies everything that I want in a school - a commitment to community service, diversity, and countless chances to explore and experiment. This is my first draft, and the word count is currently at 265. What can I expand on? Am I addressing the right things?

Throughout my college search, one thing became very apparent to me: Finding a school that shares your values is incredibly difficult. When I found that Tulane cares about community service so much that it has become part of the curriculum, I was blown away. I have always been passionate about helping others, and service has been a large influence in my life. Being able to give back to a community as culturally rich as New Orleans would be a dream come true. With the culture of New Orleans comes a lot of diversity, which we don't see a lot of in Indiana. The student body at Tulane would allow me to learn from people of all kinds of backgrounds. Furthermore, the ratio of students to teachers ensures that among all the opinions and ideas, my voice will still be heard. When I visited, the sense of community was almost tangible, even over the summer. I also appreciate the flexibility that Tulane offers. Being able to take classes from any of the 5 schools would make it possible to not only explore my current interests, but to develop new interests. The opportunities for undergraduate research provide an even more enriching educational experience. I love that Tulane does not expect me to have my life figured out at 17 years old, but gives me the chance to discover what I want to do. Tulane was my top choice of school from the first glance. It embodies everything that I want in a school - a commitment to community service, diversity, and countless chances to explore and experiment. This is my first draft, and the word count is currently at 265. What can I expand on? Am I addressing the right things?

"Matt, I love you. Thank you for being my rock all these years. Try not to grieve when I'm gone- find comfort in the fact that I am free." I skimmed over the first line of the letter I had just received from my best friend, Brooks. His handwriting was messy, but his message to me quickly became clear. Realization and panic washed over me as tears seared the corners of my eyes. My heart began to beat out of my chest as I scrambled for my phone and began to dial his number. One time. Two times. Six times. Every call went unanswered. When I finally got a hold of his brother thirty minutes later, he was gone. The day of Brooks' suicide was the worst that I've ever lived through - yet it has taught me more about myself than I could have ever learned on my own. During the first few weeks after Brooks died, my world crumbled around me. My grades suffered dramatically during the hardest year of high school and I became severely disconnected from those I was closest to. However, as weeks passed, it became easier to reread his note and begin to try and understand the burdens that he carried before his death. The ways in which he described his struggles coming to terms with his identity as a young queer person have had the biggest impact on the way that I perceive others and the struggles they may face behind closed doors. I spent dozens of hours reading research journals documenting suicide and depression and visited the psychiatric wing of my local hospital as often as I could to speak with the patients there. As I uncovered just a few of the complicated intricacies of the human mind, the effects of my destructive emotional state weakened and my passion for psychiatry and mental health grew into what could only be described as an obsession. Brooks' suicide not only taught me the importance of ending the stigma surrounding mental health in America but also helped me realize my love of psychology. Studying the human brain is a passion that I cannot wait to turn into a career and I know that in the future, I will be able to change thousands of lives through my research and be able to prevent thousands of deaths through my compassion and connections with others.

"Matt, I love you. Thank you for being my rock all these years. Try not to grieve when I'm gone-find comfort in the fact that I am free." I skimmed over the first line of the letter I had just received from my best friend, Brooks. His handwriting was messy, but his message to me quickly became clear. Realization and panic washed over me as tears seared the corners of my eyes. My heart began to beat out of my chest as I scrambled for my phone and began to dial his number. One time. Two times. Six times. Every call went unanswered. When I finally got a hold of his brother thirty minutes later, he was gone. The day of Brooks' suicide was the worst that I've ever lived through - yet it has taught me more about myself than I could have ever learned on my own. During the first few weeks after Brooks died, my world crumbled around me. My grades suffered dramatically during the hardest year of high school and I became severely disconnected from those I was closest to. However, as weeks passed, it became easier to reread his note and begin to try and understand the burdens that he carried before his death. The ways in which he described his struggles coming to terms with his identity as a young queer person have had the biggest impact on the way that I perceive others and the struggles they may face behind closed doors. I spent dozens of hours reading research journals documenting suicide and depression and visited the psychiatric wing of my local hospital as often as I could to speak with the patients there. As I uncovered just a few of the complicated intricacies of the human mind, the effects of my destructive emotional state weakened and my passion for psychiatry and mental health grew into what could only be described as an obsession. Brooks' suicide not only taught me the importance of ending the stigma surrounding mental health in America but also helped me realize my love of psychology. Studying the human brain is a passion that I cannot wait to turn into a career and I know that in the future, I will be able to change thousands of lives through my research and be able to prevent thousands of deaths through my compassion and connections with others.

Half of my writing process is watching the black line of a cursor blink rhythmically back at me against the screen of a pristine word document. It lies in wait, in silent judgment, and reminds me that every time I put pen to paper (or fingers to keyboard) I am continuing a never-ending process. The editing process is breath, not death, I often remind myself. A heavy hand of procrastination is a necessary ingredient in any unfinished work, and I mark each of mine with the stain of my lengthy deliberation. My pause is palpable; it is who I am. The story I write for myself must include the stories inside of me, and my life-long penchant for the written word. It lies in the margins of my unfinished work, in between the white spaces of typed words and on the untouched word documents that lie collecting figurative dust. I exist between the spaces that my words make, underneath, above and all around what I create. My story? It is the Invisible Ink, my influence that exists just beneath the visible, painting and shaping the fact and fiction that I carefully pen, or the words that lie silent, tucked away and waiting for eventual exposure.

Half of my writing process is watching the black line of a cursor blink rhythmically back at me against the screen of a pristine Word document. It lies in wait, in silent judgment, and reminds me that every time I put pen to paper (or fingers to keyboard) I am continuing a never-ending process. The editing process is breath, not death, I often remind myself. A heavy hand of procrastination is a necessary ingredient in any unfinished work, and I mark each of mine with the stain of my lengthy deliberation. My pause is palpable; it is who I am. The story I write for myself must include the stories inside me, and my life-long penchant for the written word. It lies in the margins of my unfinished work, in between the white spaces of typed words and on the untouched Word documents that lie collecting figurative dust. I exist between the spaces that my words make, underneath, above and all around what I create. My story? It is the Invisible Ink, my influence that exists just beneath the visible, painting and shaping the fact and fiction that I carefully pen, or the words that lie silent, tucked away and waiting for eventual exposure.

Hello! I will be applying ED to Barnard College and could use an opinion on the first of two required personal statements. The prompt is a pretty basic "Why Us?". Please be as honest as you can be! For as long as I can remember, I've been surrounded by herd mentalities. From a predominantly white city with an average income of over $100,000 to a small town with a school that banned the Confederate flag only after students refused to attend, I feel like I have always had ideas that transcended the environment I lived in. By going to Barnard, I know I will be surrounding myself with women who speak their minds regardless of the circumstances and who are determined to create possibilities for themselves by doing the impossible. Along with the incredible women at the school, resources like the Barnard Psychology Society and the opportunities for independent research with renowned faculty within the psychology department align flawlessly with my goal to run a private therapy practice. To me, being a Barnard Woman means constantly aspiring to inspire others- and attending a school where my intelligence and ideas are valued would be a perfect environment for me to live, learn, and thrive in.

Hello! I will be applying ED to Barnard College and could use an opinion on the first of two required personal statements. The prompt is a pretty basic "Why Us?". Please be as honest as you can be! For as long as I can remember, I've been surrounded by herd mentalities. From a predominantly white city with an average income of over $100,000 to a small town with a school that banned the Confederate flag only after students refused to attend, I feel like I have always had ideas that transcended the environment I lived in. By going to Barnard, I know I will be surrounding myself with women who speak their minds regardless of the circumstances and who are determined to create possibilities for themselves by doing the impossible. Along with the incredible women at the school, resources like the Barnard Psychology Society and the opportunities for independent research with renowned faculty within the psychology department align flawlessly with my goal to run a private therapy practice. To me, being a Barnard Woman means constantly aspiring to inspire others- and attending a school where my intelligence and ideas are valued would be a perfect environment for me to live, learn, and thrive in.

On a hot and humid summer day in Taipei, my brother and I headed over to our favorite spring rider that was shaped like a car. I decided that I wanted both of us to ride it at the same time, even though we weren't supposed to. As we were rocking back and forth, I suddenly heard a CRACK sound and before I knew it, me and Maddix did a flip and fell onto the floor. I glanced over at him and noticed he had a gushing wound on his left cheek from scraping it on the broken spring. I remember in that moment, all I could feel was guilt. My little brother who I was supposed to cherish and take care of, was the one who I had hurt. He had done nothing to me other than show me unconditional love and I hurt him. How could I forgive myself? I remember hearing his wailing outside the surgery room while I waited outside because I couldn't bring myself to see my brother in more pain for what I did. He soon came out of the room with tears in his big brown eyes and told me "Don't worry Jai, I still love you". Even after all the pain I had caused him, my little brother was not even the slightest bit mad at me, he was so forgiving. And from then on, my brother and I were inseparable. It started with little things, where I helped tend to his stitches and went to fetch some new bandages, to helping him color his Winnie the Pooh art project for homework. I always made sure to go out of my way to make my little brother happy and to show him that I loved him because that is what he had done for me. From this experience, I have learned the importance of being a responsible big sister. Being a big sister includes responsibilities such as being a role model and living up to expectations. I needed to make sure I was fulfilling my duties as an older sister, to ensure that my brother had someone to look up to. The little scar on his left cheek reminded me of so many things bad, but also of the moment where everything changed. He taught me the meaning of loving someone unconditionally and the meaning of forgiving. I was going to be a better person for him, his role model, so I could teach him like when he taught me.

On a hot and humid summer day in Taipei, my brother and I headed over to our favorite spring rider that was shaped like a car. I decided that I wanted both of us to ride it at the same time, even though we weren't supposed to. As we were rocking back and forth, I suddenly heard a CRACK sound, and before I knew it, me and Maddox did a flip and fell onto the floor. I glanced over at him and noticed he had a gushing wound on his left cheek from scraping it on the broken spring. I remember At that moment, all I could feel was guilt. My little brother who I was supposed to cherish and take care of, was the one who I had hurt. He had done nothing to me other than show me unconditional love and I hurt him. How could I forgive myself? I remember hearing his wailing outside the surgery room while I waited outside because I couldn't bring myself to see my brother in more pain for what I did. He soon came out of the room with tears in his big brown eyes and told me "Don't worry JAI, I still love you". Even after all the pain I had caused him, my little brother was not even the slightest bit mad at me, he was so forgiving. And from then on, my brother and I were inseparable. It started with little things, where I helped tend to his stitches and went to fetch some new bandages, to helping him color his Winnie the Pooh art project for homework. I always made sure to go out of my way to make my little brother happy and to show him that I loved him because that is what he had done for me. From this experience, I have learned the importance of being a responsible big sister. Being a big sister includes responsibilities such as being a role model and living up to expectations. I needed to make sure I was fulfilling my duties as an older sister, to ensure that my brother had someone to look up to. The little scar on his left cheek reminded me of so many things bad, but also of the moment where everything changed. He taught me the meaning of loving someone unconditionally and the meaning of forgiving. I was going to be a better person for him, his role model, so I could teach him like when he taught me.

Just watching what is in front of me, I love to run without worrying about anything.It is my nature to make people who is running ahead of me my rival and run past them to feel a little success.When my legs get heavier, I realize not only that i am almost reaching my physical limit, but also that my opponent are far from over as their faces aren't showing the least tiredness. But i am pretty sure they haven't any hint of idea that they have blazen my passion for running.

Just watching what is in front of me, I love to run without worrying about anything. It is my nature to make people who are running ahead of me my rival and run past them to feel a little success. When my legs get heavier, I realize not only that I am almost reaching my physical limit, but also that my opponent are far from over as their faces aren't showing the least tiredness. But I am pretty sure they haven't any hint of idea that they have blaze my passion for running.

Personally, I want to attend a Christian university to not only further my education but to grow in my own faith as well. I've grown up in a Catholic household and have attended church for most of my life. In middle school, I made my own personal decision to follow Jesus after attending a Christian Summer Camp at Hume Lake. Because of this decision, I have grown so much as a person and strengthened my relationship with God. I attribute most of my own personal religious growth to the support and relationships I've made with the girls and leaders in my youth group. My youth group has supported me through all of the hardships and challenges I've faced in both middle school and high school. We've also have had numerous amazing and fun experiences together at church, school, and at summer camps. All of my youth group leaders have also been amazing role models. Each of them has helped me deepen my faith through Bible studies, discussions, and through personal one on one conversations. When I attend college, I hope to go to school in a community with a positive environment. I hope I will be able to find a new group of friends and that we will be able to grow in our religion and experience college together.

Personally, I want to attend a Christian university to not only further my education but to grow in my own faith as well. I've grown up in a Catholic household and have attended church for most of my life. In middle school, I made my own personal decision to follow Jesus after attending a Christian Summer Camp at Hume Lake. Because of this decision, I have grown so much as a person and strengthened my relationship with God. I attribute most of my own personal religious growth to the support and relationships I've made with the girls and leaders in my youth group. My youth group has supported me through all the hardships and challenges I've faced in both middle school and high school. We've also had had numerous amazing and fun experiences together at church, school, and at summer camps. All of my youth group leaders have also been amazing role models. Each of them has helped me deepen my faith through Bible studies, discussions, and through personal one on one conversations. When I attend college, I hope to go to school in a community with a positive environment. I hope I will be able to find a new group of friends and that we will be able to grow in our religion and experience college together.

How can society's standards shape one's schema? Why do our surroundings affect the way we feel and act? Being older and a bit more cognizant, I often ask myself these questions to help familiarize myself with the world. I grew up in a small town called Peachtree City, nicknamed "The Bubble", because of the idea that nothing bad ever happens in Peachtree City and everyone is good, accepting, and indistinguishable. However, without even being aware of it, I was an anomaly being 1 of only 4% of 1st generation African Americans and 1 of less than 1% of Muslims in a population of roughly 35000+ people. I was a normal kid, a bit mischievous, but for the most I was just like my peers. We all watched the same shows, played the same games, and had the same mannerisms so this was all of what I knew outside of my home. My mother and my father originated from Senegal and Niger, respectively, so I was exposed to two vastly different cultures. Despite this, I never really thought of how different I was from my classmates until one day in the fifth grade when a new boy, named Tony, moved into town and joined my class. I noticed our apparent similarities, both of us being black, not knowing to think much of it; in spite of the fact that we were the only two black students in the class. My classmates were used to me and like I said before I never truly thought of myself as different, but this new student, Tony, he wasn't anything like a lot of us. At this point in the year we were learning about the Jim Crow laws and about the Civil Rights movement, so a few of my peers, noting that he talked a bit different and dressed a bit funny, decided to start calling him Crowe Boy. This gave me a sick feeling in my gut, conscious of the fact that they called him this because of the color of his skin. I was afraid that they saw me the same way, so like everybody else in the class, I joined in. I let my fear of being different, dictate how I treated this boy knowing it was wrong. When I got home that night, I explained the whole ordeal to my mother who proceeded to ask me why I participated. I told her because everyone else was doing it. She then explained to me that I am not "everybody else", that the majority of the students in the class would never have to endure the hardships that I will have to face as a young black man in America. She elucidated the fact that, like the boy I made fun of and unlike most of my peers, we did not have the same means as most of the children I went to school with and that to earn my place in this world I would have to work two times as hard as my peers. From then on, following my mother's ideology, I decided that I would be friends with Tony and that nobody would scare me into conforming or being ashamed of who I am. She helped me recognize my self-worth and pride in being different. The pride and comfort she felt in her own skin, only emanated how proud she was to be who she is and that stuck with me. Essentially, I did not grow up with the same means as my peers, but I feel like my mother gifted me with something much more valuable than anything money could buy: self-respect. My parents never allowed me to believe that I could not be as successful or even more successful than my peers, despite the different lives we lead. They sacrificed too much to make sure that we were in the best environment to succeed. My mother has had the most profound effect on me, sometimes neglecting her own well-being to give me and my siblings a stable upbringing, whether it be delaying a loan payment to keep the lights on or skipping lunch at work to be able to afford dinner for us. My mother was a prime example for me, teaching me that success takes hard work and sacrifice. This has helped me become a more self-conscious and empathetic person, because I live in an environment where nobody has experienced what I have and that allows me to politely contribute a contrasting point of view during discussions bringing to light perspectives that many of my classmates might not have thought of. This served as the foundation of my inspiration to start a club at my school called MHS TALENT, to help accentuate the idea that everybody has different experiences and skills that might change way we view a certain topic.

How can society's standards shape one's schema? Why do our surroundings affect the way we feel and act? Being older and a bit more cognizant, I often ask myself these questions to help familiarize myself with the world. I grew up in a small town called Peachtree City, nicknamed "The Bubble", because of the idea that nothing bad ever happens in Peachtree City and everyone is good, accepting, and indistinguishable. However, without even being aware of it, I was an anomaly being 1 of only 4% of 1st generation African Americans and 1 of less than 1% of Muslims in a population of roughly 35000+ people. I was a normal kid, a bit mischievous, but for the most I was just like my peers. We all watched the same shows, played the same games, and had the same mannerisms, so this was all of what I knew outside my home. My mother and my father originated from Senegal and Niger, respectively, so I was exposed to two vastly different cultures. Despite this, I never really thought of how different I was from my classmates until one day in the fifth grade when a new boy, named Tony, moved into town and joined my class. I noticed our apparent similarities, both of us being black, not knowing to think much of it; in spite of the fact that we were the only two black students in the class. My classmates were used to me and like I said before I never truly thought of myself as different, but this new student, Tony, he wasn't anything like a lot of us. At this point in the year we were learning about the Jim Crow laws and about the Civil Rights movement, so a few of my peers, noting that he talked a bit different and dressed a bit funny, decided to start calling him Crowe Boy. This gave me a sick feeling in my gut, conscious of the fact that they called him this because of the color of his skin. I was afraid that they saw me the same way, so like everybody else in the class, I joined in. I let my fear of being different, dictate how I treated this boy knowing it was wrong. When I got home that night, I explained the whole ordeal to my mother who proceeded to ask me why I participated. I told her because everyone else was doing it. She then explained to me that I am not "everybody else", that the majority of the students in the class would never have to endure the hardships that I will have to face as a young black man in America. She elucidated the fact that, like the boy I made fun of and unlike most of my peers, we did not have the same means as most of the children I went to school with and that to earn my place in this world I would have to work two times as hard as my peers. From then on, following my mother's ideology, I decided that I would be friends with Tony and that nobody would scare me into conforming or being ashamed of who I am. She helped me recognize my self-worth and pride in being different. The pride and comfort she felt in her own skin, only emanated how proud she was to be who she is and that stuck with me. Essentially, I did not grow up with the same means as my peers, but I feel like my mother gifted me with something much more valuable than anything money could buy: self-respect. My parents never allowed me to believe that I could not be as successful or even more successful than my peers, despite the different lives we lead. They sacrificed too much to make sure that we were in the best environment to succeed. My mother has had the most profound effect on me, sometimes neglecting her own well-being to give me and my siblings a stable upbringing, whether it be delaying a loan payment to keep the lights on or skipping lunch at work to be able to afford dinner for us. My mother was a prime example for me, teaching me that success takes hard work and sacrifice. This has helped me become a more self-conscious and empathetic person, because I live in an environment where nobody has experienced what I have and that allows me to politely contribute a contrasting point of view during discussions bringing to light perspectives that many of my classmates might not have thought of. This served as the foundation of my inspiration to start a club at my school called MHS TALENT, to help accentuate the idea that everybody has different experiences and skills that might change way we view a certain topic.

Please help! I would really appreciate it. The prompt was to state why ISU is fit for your educational goals and to identify and explain your academic strengths and weaknesses. I would have to admit, I have visited plenty of colleges but no other college stood out to me like Illinois State University. The second I stepped foot on campus I knew that Illinois State University is where I am meant to go. I fell in love with the campus of course, but also all the academic opportunities I would be exposed to. For my major Business Management minoring in Marketing, I had a lot of school options. After looking deeper into each school Illinois State University stood out the most. I feel as though ISU would provide all the educational support and guidance I need to start the next chapter of my life. With ISU's prestige standards and knowledgeable professors I feel as though I would get the support needed to make me successful in my career. I feel as though ISU would be the perfect place for me to grow as a student and as a person. The academic curriculum at ISU is not easy, but that is one of the many reasons I was drawn to the school. It will push me to do my very best, and that I feel is one of ISU's best qualities. When I was ten years old my moms work had a bring your kid to work day. Her job as a marketer for Royal Canin fascinated me even that young. While all the other kids were off doing the activities they had planned for us, I prefered to watch my mom work. Before watching her at work I didn't really think business marketing was that important. As I grew up I became more aware of what goes into being a business marketer. Having my mom there to explain the field to me has really helped me become acquainted with the work I would be expecting with this major. That is why I am looking forward to Illinois State University because it will further my knowledge and give me the teaching and experiences I will need to be prepared and successful after college. In school I have always been a hard worker. I feel as though school is very important and slacking off is one of the worst things you can do. Along with being a hard worker, I am also a leader. In group projects or discussions I am always first to take the lead. My weakness academically is that school has never come easy to me. I feel as though I have to work twice as hard as most students to keep my grades up and succeed in school. Although it is a weakness it fuels my biggest strength. Not having school come easy to me has really motivated me to work even harder in order to accomplish my academic goals. That is why ISU made the biggest impact on me. It will push me to work hard to achieve my goals academically. I am so grateful I found a school like Illinois State University that I fell in love with. I am so excited to have the opportunity to call ISU's campus home. I am looking forward to all the amazing life long memories ISU will help me make and the person it will help me become. I cannot wait to become a Redbird!

Please help! I would really appreciate it. The prompt was to state why ISU is fit for your educational goals and to identify and explain your academic strengths and weaknesses. I would have to admit, I have visited plenty of colleges but no other college stood out to me like Illinois State University. The second I stepped foot on campus I knew that Illinois State University is where I am meant to go. I fell in love with the campus of course, but also all the academic opportunities I would be exposed to. For my major Business Management minoring in Marketing, I had a lot of school options. After looking deeper into each school Illinois State University stood out the most. I feel as though ISU would provide all the educational support and guidance I need to start the next chapter of my life. With ISU's prestige standards and knowledgeable professors I feel as though I would get the support needed to make me successful in my career. I feel as though ISU would be the perfect place for me to grow as a student and as a person. The academic curriculum at ISU is not easy, but that is one of the many reasons I was drawn to the school. It will push me to do my very best, and that I feel is one of ISU's best qualities. When I was ten years old my moms work had a Brine your kid to work day. Her job as a marketer for Royal Canin fascinated me even that young. While all the other kids were off doing the activities they had planned for us, I preferred to watch my mom work. Before watching her at work I didn't really think business marketing was that important. As I grew up I became more aware of what goes into being a business marketer. Having my mom there to explain the field to me has really helped me become acquainted with the work I would be expecting with this major. That is why I am looking forward to Illinois State University because it will further my knowledge and give me the teaching and experiences I will need to be prepared and successful after college. In school, I have always been a hard worker. I feel as though school is very important and slacking off is one of the worst things you can do. Along with being a hard worker, I am also a leader. In group projects or discussions I am always first to take the lead. My weakness academically is that school has never come easy to me. I feel as though I have to work twice as hard as most students to keep my grades up and succeed in school. Although it is a weakness it fuels my biggest strength. Not having school come easy to me has really motivated me to work even harder in order to accomplish my academic goals. That is why ISU made the biggest impact on me. It will push me to work hard to achieve my goals academically. I am so grateful I found a school like Illinois State University that I fell in love with. I am so excited to have the opportunity to call ISU's campus home. Furthermore, I am looking forward to all the amazing lifelong memories ISU will help me make and the person it will help me become. Furthermore, I cannot wait to become a Redbird!

My first memory of life is sitting in a hospital cafeteria, eating chocolate chip waffles drenched in syrup while my mom was giving birth to my little brother. I was four years old at the time and life seemed to be great, considering my age. When I was seven my parents separated and I started to learn more about relationships and their real meanings. I don't hate my dad but I hate the things he has done and as I got older I realized how manipulating people can be, but I pushed through with my mom by my side. I would normally visit my dad on Wednesdays and every other weekends but growing up as a girl, it was getting harder for me to bring clothes, makeup, and shoes every time I would switch houses and I was just honestly tired of the lifestyle I was living. I eventually chose to live with my mom because it was easier and I didn't want to be around or see my dad anymore. Now, we are a family of three, my mom, stepdad, and brother. My brother is fourteen and he has been through a lot for his age but I am proud to say I am there for him if he ever wants to talk to me because I understand what he goes through sometimes. My mom, stepdad, and I have a complicated bond. I know my mom means no harm, but she's been through so much she can't notice that sometimes the things she does are wrong. She has taught me to be hardworking, strong, and most of all, independent. Everyday I learn something new about my mom and I strive to be as experienced as she is one day. My stepdad is an interesting person, I've learned a lot from him even though we barely talk. We are both stubborn and our personalities always clash, but my mom is always behind us, quickly sweeping everything up to make sure nothing goes wrong, like moms do. Going through so much change in my life has helped me adapt to things better whether it's at school or work. My parents, my mom and stepdad, are proud of the woman I have become and I would not be the same if it wasn't for them and how they raised me to show compassion and integrity in everything I do. I love making people proud, especially my parents, because sometimes they question my abilities, but once I succeed, it's always a joy telling them that you made it, or anyone for that matter. Growing up in one family and then going through the transition of joining another has taught me the value of family and has carved my identity so precisely. All of my past experiences, negative or positive, have molded me into the person that I am today. As a seventeen year old, I know very little about life. However, my parents have driven me into the right path and made sure I feel confident in every decision that I make. I know that I will succeed throughout my whole life because I am driven and know that following my dreams no matter what is the most important.

My first memory of life is sitting in a hospital cafeteria, eating chocolate chip waffles drenched in syrup while my mom was giving birth to my little brother. I was four years old at the time and life seemed to be great, considering my age. When I was seven my parents separated, and I started to learn more about relationships and their real meanings. I don't hate my dad, but I hate the things he has done and as I got older I realized how manipulating people can be, but I pushed through with my mom by my side. I would normally visit my dad on Wednesdays and every other weekends but growing up as a girl, it was getting harder for me to bring clothes, makeup, and shoes every time I would switch houses, and I was just honestly tired of the lifestyle I was living. Furthermore, I eventually chose to live with my mom because it was easier, and I didn't want to be around or see my dad anymore. Now, we are a family of three, my mom, stepdad, and brother. My brother is fourteen, and he has been through a lot for his age, but I am proud to say I am there for him if he ever wants to talk to me because I understand what he goes through sometimes. My mom, stepdad, and I have a complicated bond. I know my mom means no harm, but she's been through so much she can't notice that sometimes the things she does are wrong. She has taught me to be hardworking, strong, and most of all, independent. Every day, I learn something new about my mom and I strive to be as experienced as she is one day. My stepdad is an interesting person, I've learned a lot from him even though we barely talk. We are both stubborn and our personalities always clash, but my mom is always behind us, quickly sweeping everything up to make sure nothing goes wrong, like moms do. Going through so much change in my life has helped me adapt to things better whether it's at school or work. My parents, my mom and stepdad, are proud of the woman I have become, and I would not be the same if it wasn't for them and how they raised me to show compassion and integrity in everything I do. I love making people proud, especially my parents, because sometimes they question my abilities, but once I succeed, it's always a joy telling them that you made it, or anyone for that matter. Growing up in one family and then going through the transition of joining another has taught me the value of family and has carved my identity so precisely. All of my experiences, negative or positive, have molded me into the person that I am today. As a seventeen-year-old, I know very little about life. However, my parents have driven me into the right path and made sure I feel confident in every decision that I make. I know that I will succeed throughout my whole life because I am driven and know that following my dreams no matter what is the most important.

Hi, this is my first undergrad supplement, so any specific advice to this essay or general advice on how to tackle future supplements would be greatly appreciated. Thanks! One of my favorite programs is the Sound of Sorting. It's a simple program: using sorting algorithms that I didn't quite understand, blocks of varying heights went from randomized to a pretty staircase. The visuals, however, were not alone. It was almost overshadowed by its own musical accompaniment. Each block played its own distinct pitch when moved or accessed, resulting in a melody of electronic beeps. There was something beautiful about how the chaotic song was brought about by its polar opposite: order. Through this elementary program, I saw (and heard) the versatility of computer science, combining itself with my passion for music. I realized how essential modeling could be to bridge the gap between any programmer with its audience. With Georgia Tech's Threads program, I could indulge my interest for modeling immediately during freshman year, being able to combine it with a traditional CS theory track. This would give me the ability to explore traffic flow, a problem that I am reminded of in a grueling cyclic fashion. Commuting stands as a global timewaster. I would like to not only see it, but show it as efficiently as possible. This goal is feasible with the multitude of research opportunities on campus, allowing for my own individualized pursuit. This would take my ideas from personal ambitions to potential implementation. Georgia Tech would give me an alarming rate of education, serving as the best use of my time and allow a seamless transition into workforce.

Hi, this is my first undergrad supplement, so any specific advice to this essay or general advice on how to tackle future supplements would be greatly appreciated. Thanks! One of my favorite programs is the Sound of Sorting. It's a simple program: using sorting algorithms that I didn't quite understand, blocks of varying heights went from randomized to a pretty staircase. The visuals, however, were not alone. It was almost overshadowed by its own musical accompaniment. Each block played its own distinct pitch when moved or accessed, resulting in a melody of electronic beeps. There was something beautiful about how the chaotic song was brought about by its polar opposite: order. Through this elementary program, I saw (and heard) the versatility of computer science, combining itself with my passion for music. I realized how essential modeling could be to bridge the gap between any programmer with its audience. With Georgia Tech's Threads program, I could indulge my interest for modeling immediately during freshman year, being able to combine it with a traditional CS theory track. This would give me the ability to explore traffic flow, a problem that I am reminded of in a grueling cyclic fashion. Commuting stands as a global time waster. I would like to not only see it, but show it as efficiently as possible. This goal is feasible with the multitude of research opportunities on campus, allowing for my own individualized pursuit. This would take my ideas from personal ambitions to potential implementation. Georgia Tech would give me an alarming rate of education, serving as the best use of my time and allow a seamless transition into workforce.

Respected members of admissions committee, I would like to convey my greatest gratitude to give me the chance to write this brief letter to express my interest in the Radiology program at Kerman University of Medical Sciences. For as long as I can remember, my passion for photography has evolved around me like a moth attracted by a light. This passion has given me the opportunity to view the world from a different angle. Growing up everyone around me asked what I wanted to be when I grow up and as a little kid I always said, an explorer like Ibn Battuta, so while kids my age were passionate about video games I was reading through the world atlas to fascinate myself with the countries that exist in our world. To this day, I remember very well the essay I had to write in middle school about my ambitions particularly, my career choice, as puzzled as I was writing that essay I was still very confident about my career choices at that age. Back then, at the age of twelve, my father had recently been in an accident where his right foot was severely injured and we had to constantly go back and forth to the hospital for his treatment, during those hard times I discovered my passion for Radiology. As an amateur photographer at that time I had this opportunity to see a new form of photography called X-Ray where a human body is captured without even breaking the skin, this was my most fascinating moment at that age for me. I am certain I was the only kid in school with a career choice as Radiographer while writing that essay and, by then photography was only a hobby but Radiology was something I had to pursue further. While in High School, I was always interested in sciences especially in subjects like Physics and Biology, as they were aligned with my future career as a Radiographer. The process of viewing a human body using radiant energy which take the form of X-Rays was the most interesting part of my Physics class. During my senior year in High School I had this great opportunity to work part-time at a clinic in my city, I was to be a personal assistant to the physician's office where I was responsible to do regular tasks associated with an assistant such as patient care. I was very fortunate and grateful to be mentored by a great team of physicians while working there because they personally took the time to introduce me to their Imaging facility at the clinic once they discovered my interests, this opportunity was a great blessing as I learned more about different types of equipment and modalities used in an Imaging facility. I've come to the conclusion that diagnostic imaging is a very evolving field and there is much to be discover yet, even though this technology has been discovered hundreds of years ago. This facility is always needed in every hospital, clinic and any other medical facility because it is the go-to diagnostic tool for a physician to examine a patient throughly. Unfortunately in my home country, Pakistan, there is a great shortage of qualified Radiographers because the current youth are not aware of this wonderful field, this has resulted in many unqualified people conducting the imaging procedure which can pose a great risk. By educating myself in this field I plan to volunteer my time where there is a great shortage of qualified Radiographers in my country. During the last six months of my high school I started my quest to find a reputable university with an exceptional curriculum and seasoned professors, I looked as far as America, Europe and Australia but only found a few universities that would fit my needs. I wanted to spend my four years of life in a country where I would both enjoy traveling and, get well-educated, I remembered my father telling me his travel stories where he spent two years of working and traveling in Iran, he always prided the hospitable Persians he met during his stay. As I was already very fond of Persian culture and architecture in my young age, I saw this as a perfect opportunity for me to complete one of my dreams, traveling like the late Ibn Battuta and getting educated. This quest has resulted in a selection of nine medical sciences universities in Iran which includes your institution. I believe your university provides one of the best Radiology program in the region with exceptional teaching staff. The opportunity to be a part of your university will never be taken for granted. I personally commit myself to provide the best patient comfort with the highest professional experience. After completing my program I would like to volunteer my expertise in the rural parts of my home country, helping to bring better medical imaging facilities where they are the most needed. I hope this letter suffices my intentions in these two pages, please do not hesitate to contact me for any information needed. I would like to conclude this letter with my personal favorite quote "The most complete gift of god is a life based on knowledge" - Hazret Imam Ali (AS).

Respected members of admissions committee, I would like to convey my greatest gratitude to give me the chance to write this brief letter to express my interest in the Radiology program at German University of Medical Sciences. For as long as I can remember, my passion for photography has evolved around me like a moth attracted by a light. This passion has given me the opportunity to view the world from a different angle. Growing up everyone around me asked what I wanted to be when I grow up and as a little kid I always said, an explorer like In Batista, so while kids my age were passionate about video games I was reading through the world atlas to fascinate myself with the countries that exist in our world. To this day, I remember very well the essay I had to write in middle school about my ambitions particularly, my career choice, as puzzled as I was writing that essay I was still very confident about my career choices at that age. Back then, at the age of twelve, my father had recently been in an accident where his right foot was severely injured, and we had to constantly go back and forth to the hospital for his treatment, during those hard times I discovered my passion for Radiology. As an amateur photographer at that time I had this opportunity to see a new form of photography called X-Ray where a human body is captured without even breaking the skin, this was my most fascinating moment at that age for me. I am certain I was the only kid in school with a career choice as Radiographer while writing that essay and, by then photography was only a hobby, but Radiology was something I had to pursue further. While in High School, I was always interested in sciences especially in subjects like Physics and Biology, as they were aligned with my future career as a Radiographer. The process of viewing a human body using radiant energy which take the form of X-Rays was the most interesting part of my Physics class. During my senior year in High School I had this great opportunity to work part-time at a clinic in my city, I was to be a personal assistant to the physician's office where I was responsible to do regular tasks associated with an assistant such as patient care. I was very fortunate and grateful to be mentored by a great team of physicians while working there because they personally took the time to introduce me to their Imaging facility at the clinic once they discovered my interests, this opportunity was a great blessing as I learned more about different types of equipment and modalities used in an Imaging facility. I've come to the conclusion that diagnostic imaging is a very evolving field and there is much to be discovered yet, even though this technology has been discovered hundreds of years ago. This facility is always needed in every hospital, clinic and any other medical facility because it is the go-to diagnostic tool for a physician to examine a patient thoroughly. Unfortunately in my home country, Pakistan, there is a great shortage of qualified Radiographers because the current youth are not aware of this wonderful field, this has resulted in many unqualified people conducting the imaging procedure which can pose a great risk. By educating myself in this field I plan to volunteer my time when there is a great shortage of qualified Radiographers in my country. During the last six months of my high school I started my quest to find a reputable university with an exceptional curriculum and seasoned professors, I looked as far as America, Europe and Australia but only found a few universities that would fit my needs. I wanted to spend my four years of life in a country where I would both enjoy traveling and, get well-educated, I remembered my father telling me his travel stories where he spent two years of working and traveling in Iran, he always prided the hospitable Persians he met during his stay. As I was already very fond of Persian culture and architecture in my young age, I saw this as a perfect opportunity for me to complete one of my dreams, traveling like the late In Batista and getting educated. This quest has resulted in a selection of nine medical sciences universities in Iran which includes your institution. I believe your university provides one of the best Radiology program in the region with exceptional teaching staff. The opportunity to be a part of your university will never be taken for granted. I personally commit myself to provide the best patient comfort with the highest professional experience. After completing my program I would like to volunteer my expertise in the rural parts of my home country, helping to bring better medical imaging facilities where they are the most needed. I hope this letter suffices my intentions in these two pages, please do not hesitate to contact me for any information needed. I would like to conclude this letter with my personal favorite quote "The most complete gift of god is a life based on knowledge" - Hamlet Imam Ali (AS).

The circumstances we are born into are not necessarily the ones we stay in. Our obstacles and disadvantages, while real, should not stop us from moving forward as people. I know this all too well as an undocumented boy not covered by DACA. This has been especially difficult when thinking about college, campus visits, and financial aid. The thought of the future frightened me to the point of emotional breakdowns, but I have always bounced back afterward. Each time I am brought to tears and headaches, I have also been filled with a yearning and push to create change. This need to learn about my situation and others in it as well as to help them made me break my shell of fear and frustration. Flying on a plane is something that I have never done or even thought about doing. To me, flying has always been something that didn't seem like a possibility given my circumstances. However, when my program, SEO (Sponsors for Educational Opportunity), nominated me for a wildlife preservation program in Montana, joy and excitement filled my body. These feelings quickly faded and left room for worry and confusion to enter. How big of a risk is this? Should I buy boots? What if I get caught? These questions raced through my mind and the possibility of trekking through grass plains was replaced with the possibility of getting deported. "Me nominaron a ir a Montana para el verano," I told this to my mom. I knew that me getting on that plane to Montana wasn't realistic, but I was optimistic and hoping she would be too. She played along often adding on to this fantasy, but when the date to get on the plane started getting closer she told me, "The risk is not worth it. Another chance will come." There were no tears. There was no anger. I understood why, as being robbed of opportunities wasn't uncommon. Having no independence because of my circumstances wasn't uncommon. I have learned how to deal with these losses-- I needed to. The plane had taken off and I was still on the ground. It is not my fault I wasn't born a citizen. Realizing that I had no program this summer I started searching for any that would accept me. Given the fact that it was late June, most applications were closed. However, this did not deter me from trying to find one and so I kept looking. Eventually, I found a photojournalism program named PROOF: Picture Justice. Chance was on my side since the only reason I got into the program was because someone had pulled out last minute. Going in I wasn't sure how to use a camera, what proper interview ethics were, or how to approach a random person, but within the first week, I became the face of the classroom. The three weeks spent in this program allowed me to step out my comfort zone, voice my opinions, and allow me to meet countless New York City activists. Not only this but PROOF introduced me to an organization ran by undocumented youth for undocumented youth called NYSYLC (New York State Youth Leader Council). No longer thinking of Montana, I was immersed in an environment where I felt safe and confident to speak my mind and not burdened by my status. The lessons and people I met in NYSYLC the opportunities I attained from them are all invaluable to me. That time spent in Canal street learning about topics from private prisons to reproductive justice and rights meant more to me than a plane ride. My summer was not what I expected it to be, but it is one I will always remember. Our circumstances do not dictate our lives, just as mine did not dictate my life. College will not be a dream for me regardless of my status. The time to act is now. (the final chain of sentences I am not so sure about)

The circumstances we are born into are not necessarily the ones we stay in. Our obstacles and disadvantages, while real, should not stop us from moving forward as people. I know this all too well as an undocumented boy not covered by DACA. This has been especially difficult when thinking about college, campus visits, and financial aid. The thought of the future frightened me to the point of emotional breakdowns, but I have always bounced back afterward. Each time I am brought to tears and headaches, I have also been filled with a yearning and push to create change. This need to learn about my situation and others in it as well as to help them made me break my shell of fear and frustration. Flying on a plane is something that I have never done or even thought about doing. To me, flying has always been something that didn't seem like a possibility given my circumstances. However, when my program, SEO (Sponsors for Educational Opportunity), nominated me for a wildlife preservation program in Montana, joy and excitement filled my body. These feelings quickly faded and left room for worry and confusion to enter. How big of a risk is this? Should I buy boots? What if I get caught? These questions raced through my mind and the possibility of trekking through grass plains was replaced with the possibility of getting deported. "Me nomination an IR a Montana para El Verano," I told this to my mom. I knew that me getting on that plane to Montana wasn't realistic, but I was optimistic and hoping she would be too. She played along often adding on to this fantasy, but when the date to get on the plane started getting closer she told me, "The risk is not worth it. Another chance will come." There were no tears. There was no anger. I understood why, as being robbed of opportunities wasn't uncommon. Having no independence because of my circumstances wasn't uncommon. I have learned how to deal with these losses-- I needed to. The plane had taken off, and I was still on the ground. It is not my fault I wasn't born a citizen. Realizing that I had no program this summer I started searching for any that would accept me. Given the fact that it was late June, most applications were closed. However, this did not deter me from trying to find one, and so I kept looking. Eventually, I found a photojournalism program named PROOF: Picture Justice. Chance was on my side since the only reason I got into the program was because someone had pulled out last minute. Going in I wasn't sure how to use a camera, what proper interview ethics were, or how to approach a random person, but within the first week, I became the face of the classroom. The three weeks spent in this program allowed me to step out my comfort zone, voice my opinions, and allow me to meet countless New York City activists. Not only this but PROOF introduced me to an organization ran by undocumented youth for undocumented youth called MYSELF (New York State Youth Leader Council). No longer thinking of Montana, I was immersed in an environment where I felt safe and confident to speak my mind and not burdened by my status. The lessons and people I met in MYSELF the opportunities I attained from them are all invaluable to me. That time spent in Canal street learning about topics from private prisons to reproductive justice and rights meant more to me than a plane ride. My summer was not what I expected it to be, but it is one I will always remember. Our circumstances do not dictate our lives, just as mine did not dictate my life. College will not be a dream for me regardless of my status. The time to act is now. (the final chain of sentences I am not so sure about)

I first became interested in computing at the age of six,when my father bought me a computer, I was one of a few people in the area where i born who owned their own computer at that time. I learned a lot of important things about the computer system, early in my life, such as installing software and games, solving technical problems, installing drivers, repairing and updating the system. then later after iraqi war in 2003, many people were able to buy their personal computers because of the improved financial situation in Iraq and the fact that most people have their own computers gave me a special feeling, because they were asking me for a help when i was just a kid with eight years old to solve their problems and teach them how to use computers correctly. This was a unique feeling I have not forgotten throughout my life gave me the belief that I belong to this field of science and I am talented in it. I was not interested enough with general lectures in school compared to lectures related to computer science because I was focusing with the computer stuff More than anything else. I was and still obsessed to computers . Where i learned at the age of fourteen how to build websites by using Vbulletin and programming helpful tools by visual basic 6 .This interest never left me, only growing more profound and passionate with every new discovery I made. After i got graduating from high school, the choice of studying undergraduate computer science degree was the best decision I made that time. I was in the place where I belong. I have gained a great knowledge of data structure,algorithms,Principles of Programming,Networks and Web Technologies. Furthermore i understood how that Computer Scientists playing a big role in the world and how programming is a language of future leaders. During the period of undergraduate study, i attended a lot of events and workshops about leadership and tech,the Most prominent events is 'startup weekend Baghdad' Powered by google,Facebook developer circle by Facebook in Baghdad and Innovation for Development Forum III by The United Nations Development Programme. also I am volunteered in many tech events such is ITlive 2018 in Iraq,it's one of the biggest tech events in Arab countries,happen every year in Baghdad, also i volunteered at Facebook developer circle : Baghdad and even with college events. i am self-motivated for the voluntary work in anywhere anytime. I worked as a freelance web developer, i was able to design and development a completely dynamic websites i had enough knowledge about Html5,css and WordPress even before studying at college. also i had an internship as a computer teacher in a secondary school for a one month. than later after my graduation from college i worked as a instructor at Iraqi association technology information teaching a recent graduates about content management system and search optimization engine (Seo) techniques. I believe that my work experience placement in Training at Iraqi association technology information,one of Scientific associations in Iraq, gave me a great insight into how academic's make their impact own society and students,how they can inspire Whole generation and teach them things that matter. that's what motivates me to looking for a opportunities to study postgraduate in UK,because I want to get the best education to reverse what I will learn later on for future generations. i found that Newcastle University has an perfect computer science Msc course with good Modules could make me better in that field,improve my career and increase my chances to play a big role in my country and whole the world. I'm looking forward with feeling excited to the challenges that studying for a postgraduate degree in computer science will bring.

I first became interested in computing at the age of six, when my father bought me a computer, I was one of a few people in the area where i was born who owned their own computer at that time. I learned a lot of important things about the computer system, early in my life, such as installing software and games, solving technical problems, installing drivers, repairing and updating the system. Then later after Iraqi war in 2003, many people were able to buy their personal computers because of the improved financial situation in Iraq and the fact that most people have their own computers gave me a special feeling, because they were asking me for a help when I was just a kid with eight years old to solve their problems and teach them how to use computers correctly. This was a unique feeling I have not forgotten throughout my life gave me the belief that I belong to this field of science, and I am talented in it. I was not interested enough with general lectures in school compared to lectures related to computer science because I was focusing with the computer stuff More than anything else. I was and still obsessed to computers. Where I learned at the age of fourteen how to build websites by using Bulletin and programming helpful tools by Visual Basic 6. This interest never left me, only growing more profound and passionate with every new discovery I made. After I got graduating from high school, the choice of studying undergraduate computer science degree was the best decision I made that time. I was in the place where I belong. I have gained a great knowledge of data structure, algorithms,Principles of Programming, Networks and Web Technologies. Furthermore, I understood how that Computer Scientists playing a big role in the world and how programming is a language of future leaders. During the period of undergraduate study, I attended a lot of events and workshops about leadership and tech, the Most prominent events is 'startup weekend Baghdad' Powered by google, Facebook developer circle by Facebook in Baghdad and Innovation for Development Forum III by The United Nations Development Program. Also I am volunteered in many tech events such is IT live 2018 in Iraq, it's one of the biggest tech events in Arab countries, happen every year in Baghdad, also I volunteered at Facebook developer circle : Baghdad and even with college events. I am self-motivated for the voluntary work in anywhere anytime. I worked as a freelance web developer, I was able to design and development a completely dynamic websites I had enough knowledge about Html5,CSS and WordPress even before studying at college. Also I had an internship as a computer teacher in a secondary school for a one month. Then later after my graduation from college I worked as an instructor at Iraqi association technology information teaching a recent graduate about content management system and search optimization engine (SEO) techniques. I believe that my work experience placement in Training at Iraqi association technology information, one of Scientific associations in Iraq, gave me a great insight into how academic's make their impact own society and students, how they can inspire Whole generation and teach them things that matter. That's what motivates me to looking for a opportunity to study postgraduate in UK, because I want to get the best education to reverse what I will learn later on for future generations. I found that Newcastle University has a perfect computer science MSC course with good Modules could make me better in that field, improve my career and increase my chances to play a big role in my country and whole the world. I'm looking forward with feeling excited to the challenges that studying for a postgraduate degree in computer science will bring.

At 2 years old, a child has a multitude of synapses; a direct result of the young mind processing all the information that this new life entails. As the child ages, the synapses that are not used on a daily bases are lost due to neural pruning and the ones that are kept continue to strengthen as the child grows. For as long as I can remember, learning has been second nature to me. When I was younger, my father was pursuing his degree in Nuclear Medicine and occasionally, when he would get me for visitation, my father would have to study for a course in which he would always enlist my aid. Together we would pour over diagrams and procedures for hours upon end or, at least, until my bedtime. When the time came my father took it upon himself to ensure that I knew how to read. We spent countless hours studying the great writings of Dr. Seuss as I tried to convert the content on the pages into my spoken language. "El conocimiento es poder" my father would say, "once you know how to read no one can ever take that away from you." It seems that although my young mind never retained any of the textbook information that I stared at while my father studied, what I did retain was the resolute knowledge that education was the key to freedom. This mentality echoed within me as I attempted to emulate it throughout my academic experiences and accomplishments. When I was in high school I pursued the International Baccalaureate Diploma. This pursuit required more than the satiation of the IB curriculum, it required that the student also pursue what it is to live a good life through our obligations to humanity. In exploring this portion of the IB Diploma I found myself meeting people from all walks of life whether it be in Texas or the Upper Peninsula of Michigan. Each person that I had the pleasure of meeting had a story to tell. To me, they were faces and names but to other people, they were wives, sons, nieces, uncles, granddaughters, fathers and friends. Throughout my experiences I couldn't help but feel bonded with the people I had met, they had allowed me to peek into their lives and be a part of their story, however small. It soon became clear to me that in exploring my obligation to humanity I had simultaneously stumbled upon a desire to ensure the wellbeing of the people that I came across. In doing this I came to the realization that, while knowledge is power, an education is best used when it is used to benefit others. The University of Texas at Austin's groundbreaking medical branch provides me with a set of diverse options, infinite possibilities to grant myself an education through whatever outlet I opt. More importantly, to study and work alongside one of America's leading research institutions will provide me with what I have been taught to seek out my entire life: the beginning steps towards the freedom that a higher education can provide.

At 2 years old, a child has a multitude of synapses; a direct result of the young mind processing all the information that this new life entails. As the child ages, the synapses that are not used on a daily basis are lost due to neural pruning and the ones that are kept continue to strengthen as the child grows. For as long as I can remember, learning has been second nature to me. When I was younger, my father was pursuing his degree in Nuclear Medicine and occasionally, when he would get me for visitation, my father would have to study for a course in which he would always enlist my aid. Together we would pour over diagrams and procedures for hours upon end or, at least, until my bedtime. When the time came my father took it upon himself to ensure that I knew how to read. We spent countless hours studying the great writings of Dr. Seuss as I tried to convert the content on the pages into my spoken language. "El conocimiento BS power" my father would say, "once you know how to read no one can ever take that away from you." It seems that although my young mind never retained any of the textbook information that I stared at while my father studied, what I did retain was the resolute knowledge that education was the key to freedom. This mentality echoed within me as I attempted to emulate it throughout my academic experiences and accomplishments. When I was in high school I pursued the International Baccalaureate Diploma. This pursuit required more than the satiation of the IB curriculum, it required that the student also pursue what it is to live a good life through our obligations to humanity. In exploring this portion of the IB Diploma I found myself meeting people from all walks of life whether it be in Texas or the Upper Peninsula of Michigan. Each person that I had the pleasure of meeting had a story to tell. To me, they were faces and names but to other people, they were wives, sons, nieces, uncles, granddaughters, fathers and friends. Throughout my experiences I couldn't help but feel bonded with the people I had met, they had allowed me to peek into their lives and be a part of their story, however small. It soon became clear to me that in exploring my obligation to humanity I had simultaneously stumbled upon a desire to ensure the wellbeing of the people that I came across. In doing this I came to the realization that, while knowledge is power, an education is best used when it is used to benefit others. The University of Texas at Austin's groundbreaking medical branch provides me with a set of diverse options, infinite possibilities to grant myself an education through whatever outlet I opt. More importantly, to study and work alongside one of America's leading research institutions will provide me with what I have been taught to seek out my entire life: the beginning steps towards the freedom that a higher education can provide.

So here is my essay: When I was a child, I wanted to become a vet, a violinist, a private detective, a chocolate factory director, a penguin-lift-man in the North (seriously), an ice cream man, an interpreter. However, at some point, I had wanted to become a writer, and it changed all my life. My story began 20 years ago when my parents started to teach me how to read. That period of time was absolutely awful for me, I cried a lot, with tears on the eyes said aloud words on syllables, then I learned to read not only proposals but an entire paragraphs and pages. And I have not noticed when I could not fall asleep anymore without another read stories, when in as a gift to on any particular celebration I asked a book when I became spend on reading all my free time. Literature fascinated me from childhood. I liked not only to read, but also to invent my own short stories. So I wanted to write my own book someday. Being in high school and worrying about the unknown future of my own, I discovered the simple word "journalist" - which was just a word for me - and realized that I can combine business with pleasure. So began my self-determination. My mother never forced me to study, never demanded from me the best results and assessments, but despite this, I always tried to learn well. Got into elementary school, I clearly realized that education is not necessary for my parents, namely me. Since junior school and up to the graduation my favorite school subjects were country language and literature. I loved to read, I loved to write about what I read even more. Essentially, any works I met with delight and gladness in the eyes unlike most of my classmates. I liked to talk to my teachers, discussing another read book, expressing my point of view. In the 10th grade I had the opportunity to write not only for myself, but also for someone. My school, where I was studying at that time, was a part of the university, which had its own newspaper. And in this newspaper there was a small column devoted to life of our school. And in this column wrote we, school students. So I had my first experience of publishing. This newspaper will appear in my life yet. In the 10th grade, I also took my first internship in the local city newspaper, during which I learned a lot for myself and started to be even more convinced of my desire to connect my life with journalism. If earlier the sphere of public relations for me was only a set of words, beautifully built into a text, now the boundaries of this sphere have expanded greatly. I discovered not only journalism but also marketing, SMM, branding, promotion, advertising and much more. I was a kid who looks at a huge candy store and can't choose only one. It turned out that I need to learn still a lot of unknown things. But despite all this, when it came time to decide on my profession, I entered the university on the "Management" major. Why? I recognized that I want not just to write texts and articles, but I want to create and implement my own projects, I want to promote them, improve and present to the people. In the second year, I joined the "media technology workshop" (one of the mandatory electives), which organized information support of events taking place in our course. We wrote articles complemented within colorful photos, shot and edited videos, promoted social networks, organized events. While participating in that workshop I gained not only much new knowledge and experience but also confidence that devoting myself to the public relations was the right decision. During that year, my knowledge has expanded. And the next year I became the head of this workshop. Suddenly, I was not just a student who follows his master, but this very master. It was necessary to transfer the knowledge and experience to new participants of a workshop, to organize them, to teach, help, to point to mistakes, to answer all their questions. And it was difficult. But when I was taking heading the workshop, I was struckby how I truly love to talk about journalism sphere, how I enjoy teaching new students, how I fond of making video projects, events, how I love to elicit the appropriate response by articles. Despite everything, I enjoyed it. In parallel, I took the post of head of the press service of my university. My responsibilities included information support of all our structures: kindergarten - school - university. I became the editor of a corporate newspaper, where just a couple of years ago I only wrote short articles, we published information digests, organized events, engaged in attracting new customers, worked with them, cooperated with partners - it was not only interesting but also very informative. Since I did not have an appropriate education in the field of public relations, I had to learn many things without the help of teachers, something I learned in practice, something on my own failures. When I was set tasks that need to be resolved just me - I learned how to work independently. Communicating with partners, colleagues, as well as with clients, I have improved my communication skills, both written and speaking. All that year I have been working, learning from my own mistakes: memorizing the failed situations and projects, analyzing them, finding out why that scheme of work was ineffective, correcting them so that in the future not to step on the same rake. At the beginning of the third year, I got acquainted with Korean culture. My best friend is studying Japanese and is interested in Korea, she is the one who is "guilty" of the birth of my love for this country. When I started studying Korean culture, I realized that it is very different from country. Some small things delighted me, and every day I wanted to learn more and more new things. Once I watched a Korean drama called Pinocchio. The two main characters got a job in a television company and became journalists. When I looked at how they were looking for material for articles, how they investigate cases, how they spend all their time forgetting to eat and sleep to make the best article - I really wanted to be in their place. It seems that watching this drama has only increased my desire to work in the field of public relations. At the same time, I began to pay attention to how Korean companies carry out promotion, what ways they put the product on the market, what they use in their marketing company and how the public reacts to it. Unfortunately, at that moment so there were circumstances that I had to leave my university. I was very depressed and overwhelmed, but I had to accept it. It was necessary to move on. Later I learned about the Korean education system. The most amazing thing for me was the variety of specialties. In Korean universities, you could find something that was not in country. I have read and watched various blogs of people on the Internet who live and study in South Korea and at some point, I realized that my little desire to study there was not just a desire, but became a dream and a goal. To my mind, it is of key importance to have a possibility to obtain an excellent education and I consider studies at Korea as the next professional stepping stone in my career. If I managed to enter the Korean university for the aspired specialization, the knowledge received during the study I would very much like to use in my work in country. For example, the processes of marketing in country and Korea are very different from each other, but I think that if you combine them - you get a very effective thing. And I really want to apply this in practice, I want to introduce to the country society the culture of Korea, so that they, like me, bring something new, interesting and informative to their lives with its help. I want people to be able to find a new goal, a new dream, as I was lucky to do.

So here is my essay: When I was a child, I wanted to become a vet, a violinist, a private detective, a chocolate factory director, a penguin-lift-man in the North (seriously), an ice cream man, an interpreter. However, at some point, I had wanted to become a writer, and it changed all my life. My story began 20 years ago when my parents started to teach me how to read. That period of time was absolutely awful for me, I cried a lot, with tears on the eyes said aloud words on syllables, then I learned to read not only proposals but an entire paragraphs and pages. And I have not noticed when I could not fall asleep anymore without another read stories, when in as a gift to on any particular celebration I asked a book when I became spend on reading all my free time. Literature fascinated me from childhood. I liked not only to read, but also to invent my own short stories. So I wanted to write my own book someday. Being in high school and worrying about the unknown future of my own, I discovered the simple word "journalist" - which was just a word for me - and realized that I can combine business with pleasure. So began my self-determination. My mother never forced me to study, never demanded from me the best results and assessments, but despite this, I always tried to learn well. Got into elementary school, I clearly realized that education is not necessary for my parents, namely me. Since junior school and up to the graduation my favorite school subjects were country language and literature. I loved to read, I loved to write about what I read even more. Essentially, any works I met with delight and gladness in the eyes unlike most of my classmates. I liked to talk to my teachers, discussing another read book, expressing my point of view. In the 10th grade I had the opportunity to write not only for myself, but also for someone. My school, where I was studying at that time, was a part of the university, which had its own newspaper. And in this newspaper there was a small column devoted to life of our school. And in this column wrote we, school students. So I had my first experience of publishing. This newspaper will appear in my life yet. In the 10th grade, I also took my first internship in the local city newspaper, during which I learned a lot for myself and started to be even more convinced of my desire to connect my life with journalism. If earlier the sphere of public relations for me was only a set of words, beautifully built into a text, now the boundaries of this sphere have expanded greatly. I discovered not only journalism but also marketing, SMM, branding, promotion, advertising and much more. I was a kid who looks at a huge candy store and can't choose only one. It turned out that I need to learn still a lot of unknown things. But despite all this, when it came time to decide on my profession, I entered the university on the "Management" major. Why? I recognized that I want not just to write texts and articles, but I want to create and implement my own projects, I want to promote them, improve and present to the people. In the second year, I joined the "media technology workshop" (one of the mandatory electives), which organized information support of events taking place in our course. We wrote articles complemented within colorful photos, shot and edited videos, promoted social networks, organized events. While participating in that workshop I gained not only much new knowledge and experience but also confidence that devoting myself to the public relations was the right decision. During that year, my knowledge has expanded. And the next year I became the head of this workshop. Suddenly, I was not just a student who follows his master, but this very master. It was necessary to transfer the knowledge and experience to new participants of a workshop, to organize them, to teach, help, to point to mistakes, to answer all their questions. And it was difficult. But when I was taking heading the workshop, I was struck by how I truly love to talk about journalism sphere, how I enjoy teaching new students, how I found of making video projects, events, how I love to elicit the appropriate response by articles. Despite everything, I enjoyed it. In parallel, I took the post of head of the press service of my university. My responsibilities included information support of all our structures: kindergarten - school - university. I became the editor of a corporate newspaper, where just a couple of years ago I only wrote short articles, we published information digests, organized events, engaged in attracting new customers, worked with them, cooperated with partners - it was not only interesting but also very informative. Since I did not have an appropriate education in the field of public relations, I had to learn many things without the help of teachers, something I learned in practice, something on my own failures. When I was set tasks that need to be resolved just me - I learned how to work independently. Communicating with partners, colleagues, as well as with clients, I have improved my communication skills, both written and speaking. All that year I have been working, learning from my own mistakes: memorizing the failed situations and projects, analyzing them, finding out why that scheme of work was ineffective, correcting them so that in the future not to step on the same rake. At the beginning of the third year, I got acquainted with Korean culture. My best friend is studying Japanese and is interested in Korea, she is the one who is "guilty" of the birth of my love for this country. When I started studying Korean culture, I realized that it is very different from country. Some small things delighted me, and every day I wanted to learn more and more new things. Once I watched a Korean drama called Pinocchio. The two main characters got a job in a television company and became journalists. When I looked at how they were looking for material for articles, how they investigate cases, how they spend all their time forgetting to eat and sleep to make the best article - I really wanted to be in their place. It seems that watching this drama has only increased my desire to work in the field of public relations. At the same time, I began to pay attention to how Korean companies carry out promotion, what ways they put the product on the market, what they use in their marketing company and how the public reacts to it. Unfortunately, at that moment so there were circumstances that I had to leave my university. I was very depressed and overwhelmed, but I had to accept it. It was necessary to move on. Later I learned about the Korean education system. The most amazing thing for me was the variety of specialties. In Korean universities, you could find something that was not in country. I have read and watched various blogs of people on the Internet who live and study in South Korea and at some point, I realized that my little desire to study there was not just a desire, but became a dream and a goal. To my mind, it is of key importance to have a possibility to obtain an excellent education and I consider studies at Korea as the next professional stepping stone in my career. If I managed to enter the Korean university for the aspired specialization, the knowledge received during the study I would very much like to use in my work in country. For example, the processes of marketing in country and Korea are very different from each other, but I think that if you combine them - you get a very effective thing. And I really want to apply this in practice, I want to introduce to the country society the culture of Korea, so that they, like me, bring something new, interesting and informative to their lives with its help. I want people to be able to find a new goal, a new dream, as I was lucky to do.

As Antonia acts like an eponymous protagonist in the nostalgic novel My Antonia, similarly there is a character in my life that has trod on the same path as her - my mother. The day I read the book, Antonia's adventures powerfully resonated with my mother's experiences. There are innumerable instances with her in my life that truly define my personality and the way it has come out to be in this society. However, among the several exemplars in the portfolio of memorable moments, I recall a period of my life that throws some light on the crucial phase of metamorphosis. My family had been living with my father's five brothers and their families in a five-storeyed building. By far, we have spent our worst times at that place. Ostracism and condescension were one of the many reasons which serve as a concrete foundation for extreme, unpleasant feelings from our hearts. My oldest uncle gave us bare shillings to get adequate staples and fulfill our other basic needs. - quite similar to the situation Antonia faced during her stay at a fragile sod house in Nebraska. We were completely helpless due to my father's economic dependency on his oldest brother and my mother's confinement to the kitchen. Regardless of the situation, my mother stepped up and emancipated us from the brutal life of servitude. Her boldness has taught me to be fearless, her struggle has motivated me to seek things that really matter in my life, and her perseverance has prepared me to work relentlessly for the passion I am striving for. Nevertheless, the most important thing I learned from her attitude was the simplification of things for a better, smooth functioning of subsequent events. Though we had a tough time after disassociating ourselves with the relatives yet, eventually, we managed to gut it out and scoop up the treasure life had in offer for us. Things eased out purely because of the unrestrained freedom from the shackles of bearing forced relationships. I always look back at that time of mental awakening as the most important of my life, mainly because of the life lessons it entails. Almost anything I do has an element of simplicity, passion, and vigor to excel in it. As long as I obey these principles in my life, I invite everything but implications.

As Antonia acts like an eponymous protagonist in the nostalgic novel My Antonia, similarly there is a character in my life that has trod on the same path as her - my mother. The day I read the book, Antonia's adventures powerfully resonated with my mother's experiences. There are innumerable instances with her in my life that truly define my personality and the way it has come out to be in this society. However, among the several exemplars in the portfolio of memorable moments, I recall a period of my life that throws some light on the crucial phase of metamorphosis. My family had been living with my father's five brothers and their families in a five-story building. By far, we have spent our worst times at that place. Ostracism and condescension were one of the many reasons which serve as a concrete foundation for extreme, unpleasant feelings from our hearts. My oldest uncle gave us bare shillings to get adequate staples and fulfill our other basic needs. - quite similar to the situation Antonia faced during her stay at a fragile sod house in Nebraska. We were completely helpless due to my father's economic dependency on his oldest brother and my mother's confinement to the kitchen. Regardless of the situation, my mother stepped up and emancipated us from the brutal life of servitude. Her boldness has taught me to be fearless, her struggle has motivated me to seek things that really matter in my life, and her perseverance has prepared me to work relentlessly for the passion I am striving for. Nevertheless, the most important thing I learned from her attitude was the simplification of things for a better, smooth functioning of subsequent events. Though we had a tough time after disassociating ourselves with the relatives yet, eventually, we managed to gut it out and scoop up the treasure life had in offer for us. Things eased out purely because of the unrestrained freedom from the shackles of bearing forced relationships. I always look back at that time of mental awakening as the most important of my life, mainly because of the life lessons it entails. Almost anything I do has an element of simplicity, passion, and vigor to excel in it. As long as I obey these principles in my life, I invite everything but implications.

- Extracurricular activities such as club activities, community service activities or work experiences- If applicable, describe awards you have received, publications you have made, or skills you have acquired, etc. Watching movies has become more than a hobby for me. It grew into an experience where I can explore places, discover new culture, and witness people in their woe and victory. Aside from actors and their compelling acting on screen, I have always admired the people behind the camera for their amazing storytelling using their talents, technical skills and equipment. This made me dream to be a filmmaker and make my own films in the future. I was in grade 9 when I volunteered to be a director in a short film for a small film festival in our school. The experience sparked my interest and passion for filmmaking. I immediately became interested in video editing. However, coming from a financially challenged family, I started teaching myself how to edit videos in just a small low-end laptop by watching YouTube tutorials. My talents and skills were honed in a media arts-centered senior high school. I was mentored by professional media practitioners and immersed in work in one of the leading broadcast stations in the Philippines. These improved my directing, editing, and other related skill sets a lot. Moreover, it also strengthened my passion for filmmaking and made me realize that I was born to make films. Inspired by our mentors' stories of journey in the media industry, I worked hard in my studies and persevered to be competent enough and be one of the top students. I was motivated even more when I graduated with honors and special awards. This made me dream bigger dreams and take higher risks. The globally competitive educational system of South Korea is one of the main reasons why I want to pursue this scholarship. Furthermore, the nation is known for its brilliant, high-grossing, high quality movies that audiences all around the world look forward to see. With its rich history and a lot of stories to tell, South Korea is the best place to study film. I want to immerse myself with the country's film industry, know its secrets of filmmaking, and why is its storytelling and delivery so effective. I also want to know how films contribute and affect the Korean society and how these films help in nourishing their culture. I also want to address certain social issues, most especially in the Philippines, through the films that I will make. I aspire to educate and awaken the audiences, make them reflect on what is really happening in the society they live in, raise awareness and hope that we all change for the better. I know that with the right education, skill mastery and competence, I would be able to do this and influence a lot of people. Through South Korea's expertise in filmmaking, I can push myself even beyond limits. To study in a different country with highly competitive education is both a challenge and a privilege. It will make me get out of my comfort zone and will open myself to a new environment full of great opportunities that will provide a better future for me. I would also be able to integrate the ideas of the Philippine and South Korean film industry to provide a wider scope of concepts. With high aspirations and burning passion, KGSP will help me materialize these dreams and take not one, but two steps closer to it.

- Extracurricular activities such as club activities, community service activities or work experiences- If applicable, describe awards you have received, publications you have made, or skills you have acquired, etc. Watching movies has become more than a hobby for me. It grew into an experience where I can explore places, discover new culture, and witness people in their woe and victory. Aside from actors and their compelling acting on screen, I have always admired the people behind the camera for their amazing storytelling using their talents, technical skills and equipment. This made me dream to be a filmmaker and make my own films in the future. I was in grade 9 when I volunteered to be a director in a short film for a small film festival in our school. The experience sparked my interest and passion for filmmaking. I immediately became interested in video editing. However, coming from a financially challenged family, I started teaching myself how to edit videos in just a small low-end laptop by watching YouTube tutorials. My talents and skills were honed in a media arts-centered senior high school. I was mentored by professional media practitioners and immersed in work in one of the leading broadcast stations in the Philippines. These improved my directing, editing, and other related skill sets a lot. Moreover, it also strengthened my passion for filmmaking and made me realize that I was born to make films. Inspired by our mentors' stories of journey in the media industry, I worked hard in my studies and persevered to be competent enough and be one of the top students. I was motivated even more when I graduated with honors and special awards. This made me dream bigger dreams and take higher risks. The globally competitive educational system of South Korea is one of the main reasons why I want to pursue this scholarship. Furthermore, the nation is known for its brilliant, high-grossing, high quality movies that audiences all around the world look forward to seeing. With its rich history and a lot of stories to tell, South Korea is the best place to study film. I want to immerse myself with the country's film industry, know its secrets of filmmaking, and why is its storytelling and delivery so effective. I also want to know how films contribute and affect the Korean society and how these films help in nourishing their culture. Furthermore, I also want to address certain social issues, most especially in the Philippines, through the films that I will make. Furthermore, I aspire to educate and awaken the audiences, make them reflect on what is really happening in the society they live in, raise awareness and hope that we all change for the better. Furthermore, I know that with the right education, skill mastery and competence, I would be able to do this and influence a lot of people. Through South Korea's expertise in filmmaking, I can push myself even beyond limits. To study in a different country with highly competitive education is both a challenge and a privilege. It will make me get out of my comfort zone and will open myself to a new environment full of great opportunities that will provide a better future for me. I would also be able to integrate the ideas of the Philippine and South Korean film industry to provide a wider scope of concepts. With high aspirations and burning passion, KGSP will help me materialize these dreams and take not one, but two steps closer to it.

I've noticed that when people talk about obstacles, they talk about the superficial and external difficulties that come across their lives. People tend to focus on how they are affected by what others do to them and how this doesn't let them progress to achieve something. Whenever I had a disagreement with someone, I never blamed it on myself. I focused on what that other person was saying or doing that offended me. This made me react in a poor manner that didn't let me manage the situation to fix my problems. Through time and experience, I assimilated that I had to solve my own internal obstacles before focusing on others. The importance of self-eassurance and having emotional control is by far one of the most precious aspect someone can posses. After several conflicts that I've encountered with the different relationships in my life, I've come to realize that putting myself in the shoe of others, listening to what they have to say and letting my selfishness aside helped me control my feelings and gave me a different perspective that allowed me to have the assertiveness and self confidence to solve any type of conflict that I encountered. Realizing this has given me the tools to establish better relationships, becoming more tolerant and opening myself to others.

I've noticed that when people talk about obstacles, they talk about the superficial and external difficulties that come across their lives. People tend to focus on how they are affected by what others do to them and how this doesn't let them progress to achieve something. Whenever I had a disagreement with someone, I never blamed it on myself. I focused on what that other person was saying or doing that offended me. This made me react in a poor manner that didn't let me manage the situation to fix my problems. Through time and experience, I assimilated that I had to solve my own internal obstacles before focusing on others. The importance of self-eassurance and having emotional control is by far one of the most precious aspect someone can possess. After several conflicts that I've encountered with the different relationships in my life, I've come to realize that putting myself in the shoe of others, listening to what they have to say and letting my selfishness aside helped me control my feelings and gave me a different perspective that allowed me to have the assertiveness and self-confidence to solve any type of conflict that I encountered. Realizing this has given me the tools to establish better relationships, becoming more tolerant and opening myself to others.

I was an average student throughout my school, and I was not much about grades, but about progression. My family didn't like how I was strolling away from my education when I finally decided that I was taking a gap year and going on to plan a startup or doing anything else but books. Furthermore, I was unsure about what I would go on to be, I wanted to discover more about my interests and future options. The 15 years that I spent in classrooms couldn't actually help me decide what I wanted to do and what I wished to achieve. I wanted to do something on my own, something that most teens would not do in Nepal. I wanted recognition. So, I went on and planned a startup and am working on it during my gap year. So I got the perfect reason to skip a year off my education - personal growth. These few months that I've been off school has really been fruitful for me. The sole factor that I've learnt to talk to different people in different manner has been a really helpful skill and will remain an asset till the very end. The methods of coordination with people I've been working with, and changes in attitude that had to be brought in to deal with my producers and customers has taught me that life doesn't exist just within four walls of a classroom. And I'm really happy that I chose to take a year off!

I was an average student throughout my school, and I was not much about grades, but about progression. My family didn't like how I was strolling away from my education when I finally decided that I was taking a gap year and going on to plan a startup or doing anything else but books. Furthermore, I was unsure about what I would go on to be, I wanted to discover more about my interests and future options. The 15 years that I spent in classrooms couldn't actually help me decide what I wanted to do and what I wished to achieve. I wanted to do something on my own, something that most teens would not do in Nepal. I wanted recognition. So, I went on and planned a startup and am I working on it during my gap year. So I got the perfect reason to skip a year off my education - personal growth. These few months that I've been off school has really been fruitful for me. The sole factor that I've learned to talk to different people in different manner has been a really helpful skill and will remain an asset till the very end. The methods of coordination with people I've been working with, and changes in attitude that had to be brought in to deal with my producers and customers has taught me that life doesn't exist just within four walls of a classroom. And I'm really happy that I chose to take a year off!

The effort required to heave my shipmate's entire weight up a hill was extraordinary. Back and legs burning, I realized that if this simulation at the Naval Academy Summer Seminar were a real-life scenario someone's life would be dependent on me. Succeeding in the body-drag portion of the team relays, I gained a sense of awareness of the responsibility those who serve hold in protecting the lives of the American people. My step-brother and Grandfather both have served in the navy, with my step-brother currently serving on the USS Charlotte. With their service experience and my knowledge about the navy through JROTC, I found the naval service to be the most exemplary in the military. For myself, this summer experience expound upon my initial interest introduced by my family, as to why I have decided to become a leader as a commissioned officer of the United States Navy. In attending the Academy, I will achieve my goals of military service, completing secondary education, traveling the world, and contributing to my countries prosperity. In the long term, I look to pursue a military career of service in the Navy and earn my Masters degree, so that over time I have opportunities to continue to climb in rank and responsibility. My experiences with character building and integrity are numerous; however, one influential experience was in my JROTC program where I had the opportunity to be the Commander of the Women's Physical Fitness Team. This was my first official leadership position in the program, and I was a new student at my high school. I had to lead fellow students whom I didn't know, in addition to balancing an after-school schedule of club swimming, armed drill team, the physical fitness team, and academics. Additionally, the female fitness team had a reputation for mediocre performance and was not taken very seriously within the program. As the new commander I was competitive and wanted a successful team, so I proceeded to push the girls under my command to their limits, but never faltered to do the same myself. I lead by example, doing my best in practice and competitions, earning first place individually at every one. Along with implementing new exercises and instilling physical discipline, I bonded with my team members as their commander, fellow student, and confidant. Bonding with my team on a personal level gave me their trust and respect, making me even more responsible for their contributions to the team. Leading these girls was a learning experience, I had to command their attention, encourage them when they struggled-sometimes in tears, and continuously evaluate my actions to ensure I was doing what was best for my team. At the end of the year, every girl under my command had improved to achieve personal bests, and the female Physical Fitness Team placed for the first time in the State competition. This experience was not merely a challenge, but an opportunity to grow as a leader of character and help develop those around me.

The effort required to heave my shipmate's entire weight up a hill was extraordinary. Back and legs burning, I realized that if this simulation at the Naval Academy Summer Seminar were a real-life scenario someone's life would be dependent on me. Succeeding in the body-drag portion of the team relays, I gained a sense of awareness of the responsibility those who serve hold in protecting the lives of the American people. My step-brother and Grandfather both have served in the navy, with my step-brother currently serving on the USS Charlotte. With their service experience and my knowledge about the navy through ROTC, I found the naval service to be the most exemplary in the military. For myself, this summer experience expound upon my initial interest introduced by my family, as to why I have decided to become a leader as a commissioned officer of the United States Navy. In attending the Academy, I will achieve my goals of military service, completing secondary education, traveling the world, and contributing to my countries' prosperity. In the long term, I look to pursue a military career of service in the Navy and earn my Master’s degree, so that over time I have opportunities to continue to climb in rank and responsibility. My experiences with character building and integrity are numerous; however, one influential experience was in my ROTC program where I had the opportunity to be the Commander of the Women's Physical Fitness Team. This was my first official leadership position in the program, and I was a new student at my high school. I had to lead fellow students whom I didn't know, in addition to balancing an after-school schedule of club swimming, armed drill team, the physical fitness team, and academics. Additionally, the female fitness team had a reputation for mediocre performance and was not taken very seriously within the program. As the new commander I was competitive and wanted a successful team, so I proceeded to push the girls under my command to their limits, but never faltered to do the same myself. I lead by example, doing my best in practice and competitions, earning first place individually at every one. Along with implementing new exercises and instilling physical discipline, I bonded with my team members as their commander, fellow student, and confidant. Bonding with my team on a personal level gave me their trust and respect, making me even more responsible for their contributions to the team. Leading these girls was a learning experience, I had to command their attention, encourage them when they struggled-sometimes in tears, and continuously evaluate my actions to ensure I was doing what was best for my team. At the end of the year, every girl under my command had improved to achieve personal bests, and the female Physical Fitness Team placed for the first time in the State competition. This experience was not merely a challenge, but an opportunity to grow as a leader of character and help develop those around me.

School has never come easy for me. It wasn't any different when it came to AP US History. I decided to take AP US History with a load of doubt, from my peers, my old teachers,and even my school counselor. They saw that I had never taken an AP class and I really didn't know much about our country's history. Our first test was at the end of August. It was hard knowing how much to prepare or what it was going to be like. I got a D on the first test. I felt the weight of everyone's opinions but more so of how disappointed I felt in myself. For me, it was just another roadblock I needed to overcome. From that point on I took matters into my own hands. I found myself a stellar tutor, bought books on books of study preparation material, even watched videos on how to take notes. Everyone in my class thought I was crazy for doing so much work. Little did they know, my work paid off and I got a B on the second test. My motivation kept on growing until I was able to truly succeed. Second semester I ended up getting the highest grade in my class on a test. Something I realized later on is that this was the first time I loved learning history. It wasn't the time period, or my teacher, it was that I had a problem I needed to overcome. Problem solving in my own life is true motivation for me. Proving everyone that I can do what I set my mind to is motivation for me. Seeing that I am able to accomplish anything is motivation. "Failure is simply the opportunity to begin again, this time more intelligently." Henry Ford

School has never come easy for me. It wasn't any different when it came to AP US History. I decided to take AP US History with a load of doubt, from my peers, my old teachers, and even my school counselor. They saw that I had never taken an AP class and I really didn't know much about our country's history. Our first test was at the end of August. It was hard knowing how much to prepare or what it was going to be like. I got a D on the first test. I felt the weight of everyone's opinions but more so of how disappointed I felt in myself. For me, it was just another roadblock I needed to overcome. From that point on I took matters into my own hands. I found myself a stellar tutor, bought books on books of study preparation material, even watched videos on how to take notes. Everyone in my class thought I was crazy for doing so much work. Little did they know, my work paid off, and I got a B on the second test. My motivation kept on growing until I was able to truly succeed. Second semester I ended up getting the highest grade in my class on a test. Something I realized later on is that this was the first time I loved learning history. It wasn't the time period, or my teacher, it was that I had a problem I needed to overcome. Problem-solving in my own life is true motivation for me. Proving everyone that I can do what I set my mind to is motivation for me. Seeing that I am able to accomplish anything is motivation. "Failure is simply the opportunity to begin again, this time more intelligently." Henry Ford

Pa-rth Foundation Scholarship Motivational LetterWhy do you chose to study Nursing and how will you give back to your community after a degree in Nursing.Minimum of one page. I am applying for the Pa-rth Foundation Scholarship Program. Presently, i am a post senior secondary school science student, working towards a bachelor's degree in nursing. A passion for science is not usually the main force behind my decision to pursuer nursing, but rather something that compliment my desire to help others. Throughout my life, i have participated in extracurricular activities including valuable volunteer experience. I have striven for academic excellence, always wishing to make the most out of my education. In addition, volunteering 30 hours a week. I am committed and will strive for excellence to making my time as an undergraduate as productive and beneficial as possible. Education has always been an important aspect of my life. While in secondary school, I managed to take challenging subjects such as Further Mathematic, Physics, Chemistry and Biology, and also took first in biology competition in the Inter School Community Competition, the price was geared towards the payment of my West African Senior School Certificate Exam (WASSCE) . I joined the School football team, as the captain, i make out time to pass information across to my fellow team mates. I enjoyed playing wing seven and despite the time consuming training, I was able to make a CGPA of 4.05, accounting 81% of my academic performance. Not only was i involved in academic activities, I also work as a school cleaner, approximately 6 hours a week. After two academic section, I was promoted to a key holding position, where I supervise the other employees. This has taught me much about myself and others. I have learned how to work hard and how to motivate others. In addition to my employment, I continue to volunteer for community services. I assisted in a kindergarten class every Saturday at Little Angels Home. I have tied shoes, put on name tags, sang songs and help the children make apple muffins. I help the teacher with lessons, art projects, supervising during "play time", testing and many other aspects of a carrier I hope to have one day. I am also involved with my local church, i teach catechism classes of 3-6 year old kids. When other teachers are unable to teach Sunday classes, i do not hesitate to their aid. I have participated in church clean up, nursery duty and choir as well. I feel that by aiding in church related activities, I am setting a positive example within the church to follow. This is the most rewording experience at this point in my life. Furthermore, I am involved in a Community Health Development Program. We were taught maintaining healthy environment and how to promoting good health in my community. I was voted to lead a team of seven persons to educate Amadulu-Umuevulike Ukopi clan in my community. I took the task and led the team. Within the available evidence, I draw my hypothesis that my community Ukopi Ekwegbe, is ignorance of keeping a healthy life, as modern medicine is the enemy of most people in my community. Looking forward, this raised a quest in me to pursue a curse in Nursing. A profession which makes sure and guide patient to achieving a better health. Citing from a vivid incidence, my grand¬father was diagnosed of diabetes mellitus. He was ignorance to adhere to the prescription of the physician. To stop eating carbohydrate food as this could worsen his situation and may course death. Out of ignorance, he stopped taking his drugs and continue to eat a lot of carbohydrate. I took time to research on diabetes mellitus and taught him the need to adhere to the physician instructions. He listened, and never stop telling people how my supportive advice made him to be in good health. In addition, a set of family in my community, will always despise the use of modern medicine, but rather continue to go herbal in medication. I advised them on the implication of herbal drugs as most of the herbal drugs can cause liver, kidney problem and stomach ulceration. And can cause death, as herbal drugs do not have dosage. I am committed to give back to my community, after a Bachelor's degree in nursing and participating in the Pa-rth Foundation Scholarship Program, in the bellows: I will present health material on framework for healthy living and health choice. I will conduct sex and HIV education classes in school and village square. This is aimed to preventing unwanted pregnancy, spread of sexual transmitted disease. I will hold seminar and classes on diabetic management. This aims for preventive healthcare. In addition, I will join a group of health researchers. To collect useful evidence to execute a positive change for better health. This is done to validate funding for health programs, reduced inequality in health care and increase access to services. I will use evidence collected in research to implement policy and quality based practice. I will lead collective effort to produce successful health and social service in my countrycommunity. Also, I will take part in prenatal care, educate expectant mothers on maternal nutrition, referrals for childbirth classes and postpartum assistance. This provides parents with information on proper childhood development and discipline technics. Furthermore, I will advocate on the local, state and federal level in my country to provide better access to health. Protect funding for health programs, by eliminating health disparities. I will arrange assistance through social service program. Such as the Special Supplement Nutrition Program for Woman, Infants and Children (WIC). This will help provide health and material services for low-income pregnant women, breast feeding mother and children under age 5. I would like to thank you in advance for considering my application.

Part Foundation Scholarship Motivational Letter do you chose to study Nursing and how will you give back to your community after a degree in Nursing. Minimum of one page. I am applying for the Part Foundation Scholarship Program. Presently, I am a post senior secondary school science student, working towards a bachelor's degree in nursing. A passion for science is not usually the main force behind my decision to pursuer nursing, but rather something that compliment my desire to help others. Throughout my life, I have participated in extracurricular activities including valuable volunteer experience. I have striven for academic excellence, always wishing to make the most out of my education. In addition, volunteering 30 hours a week. I am committed and will strive for excellence to making my time as an undergraduate as productive and beneficial as possible. Education has always been an important aspect of my life. While in secondary school, I managed to take challenging subjects such as Further Mathematic, Physics, Chemistry and Biology, and also took first in biology competition in the Inter School Community Competition, the price was geared towards the payment of my West African Senior School Certificate Exam (WASSCE). I joined the School football team, as the captain, I make out time to pass information across to my fellow teammates. I enjoyed playing wing seven and despite the time-consuming training, I was able to make a CGPA of 4.05, accounting 81% of my academic performance. Not only was I involved in academic activities, I also work as a school cleaner, approximately 6 hours a week. After two academic sections, I was promoted to a key holding position, where I supervise the other employees. This has taught me much about myself and others. I have learned how to work hard and how to motivate others. In addition to my employment, I continue to volunteer for community services. I assisted in a kindergarten class every Saturday at Little Angels Home. I have tied shoes, put on name tags, sang songs and help the children make apple muffins. Furthermore, I help the teacher with lessons, art projects, supervising during "play time", testing and many other aspects of a carrier I hope to have one day. Furthermore, I am also involved with my local church, I teach catechism classes of 3-6 year old kids. When other teachers are unable to teach Sunday classes, I do not hesitate to their aid. I have participated in church clean up, nursery duty and choir as well. I feel that by aiding in church related activities, I am setting a positive example within the church to follow. This is the most rewording experience at this point in my life. Furthermore, I am involved in a Community Health Development Program. We were taught maintaining healthy environment and how to promote good health in my community. I was voted to lead a team of seven persons to educate Amadulu-Umuevulike UPI clan in my community. I took the task and led the team. Within the available evidence, I draw my hypothesis that my community UPI Squeeze, is ignorance of keeping a healthy life, as modern medicine is the enemy of most people in my community. Looking forward, this raised a quest in me to pursue a curse in Nursing. A profession which makes sure and guide patient to achieving a better health. Citing from a vivid incidence, my grandfather was diagnosed of diabetes mellitus. He was ignorance to adhere to the prescription of the physician. To stop eating carbohydrate food as this could worsen his situation and may course death. Out of ignorance, he stopped taking his drugs and continue to eat a lot of carbohydrate. I took time to research on diabetes mellitus and taught him the need to adhere to the physician instructions. He listened, and never stop telling people how my supportive advice made him to be in good health. In addition, a set of family in my community, will always despise the use of modern medicine, but rather continue to go herbal in medication. I advised them on the implication of herbal drugs as most of the herbal drugs can cause liver, kidney problem and stomach ulceration. And can cause death, as herbal drugs do not have dosage. I am committed to give back to my community, after a Bachelor's degree in nursing and participating in the Part Foundation Scholarship Program, in the bellows: I will present health material on framework for healthy living and health choice. I will conduct sex and HIV education classes in school and village square. This is aimed to preventing unwanted pregnancy, spread of sexual transmitted disease. I will hold seminar and classes on diabetic management. This aims for preventive healthcare. In addition, I will join a group of health researchers. To collect useful evidence to execute a positive change for better health. This is done to validate funding for health programs, reduced inequality in health care and increase access to services. I will use evidence collected in research to implement policy and quality based practice. I will lead collective effort to produce successful health and social service in my country community. Also, I will take part in prenatal care, educate expectant mothers on maternal nutrition, referrals for childbirth classes and postpartum assistance. This provides parents with information on proper childhood development and discipline technics. Furthermore, I will advocate on the local, state and federal level in my country to provide better access to health. Protect funding for health programs, by eliminating health disparities. I will arrange assistance through social service program. Such as the Special Supplement Nutrition Program for Woman, Infants and Children (WIC). This will help provide health and material services for low-income pregnant women, breastfeeding mother and children under age 5. I would like to thank you in advance for considering my application.

I was raised by parents who came to the United states at a young age to have a better life for themselves and future kids. My parents didn't get to finish high school, so they have very little knowledge about the college system. Growing up, my parents would often switch me to different schools; for example I started going to pre-K at Mount Auburn, a bilingual elementary, for one year, and soon after I switched to Kiest, also a bilingual school, and only stayed two years. I was then moved to an Uplift school in 2nd grade not knowing much English. Going to an all english school I remember was a very nerve-racking feeling for me, because I was afraid of not being able to fit in. Moving so much as a child made me feel insecure when I was being surrounded by different people. My parents had no clue how much their actions had an affect on myself. It was hard having to leave from one place to another after just barely getting used to the environment. Moving from school to school made me isolate myself and become a shy little girl always afraid to speak up. But as I look back at it today, my parents actions did not have such a bad effect on myself. Most young kids don't experience having to move frequently from school to school but I did and it has taught me to embrace my differences. Now, I am a senior in high school with an ambition to keep going no matter what. To me my education is everything. I understand the importance of embracing where my parents come from and learning and loving others differences.

I was raised by parents who came to the United States at a young age to have a better life for themselves and future kids. My parents didn't get to finish high school, so they have very little knowledge about the college system. Growing up, my parents would often switch me to different schools; for example I started going to pre-K at Mount Auburn, a bilingual elementary, for one year, and soon after I switched to Waist, also a bilingual school, and only stayed two years. I was then moved to an Uplift school in 2nd grade not knowing much English. Going to an all English school I remember was a very nerve-racking feeling for me, because I was afraid of not being able to fit in. Moving so much as a child made me feel insecure when I was being surrounded by different people. My parents had no clue how much their actions had an effect on myself. It was hard having to leave from one place to another after just barely getting used to the environment. Moving from school to school made me isolate myself and become a shy little girl always afraid to speak up. But as I look back at it today, my parents actions did not have such a bad effect on myself. Most young kids don't experience having to move frequently from school to school, but I did, and it has taught me to embrace my differences. Now, I am a senior in high school with an ambition to keep going no matter what. To me my education is everything. I understand the importance of embracing where my parents come from and learning and loving others differences.

As an incoming Freshman at the University Of Texas at San Antonio, I'd like to pursue a career geared towards the medical field however, I am restricted in my extra curricular activities in the San Antonio area due to the low demand of job and volunteer opportunities in the medical field. The University of Texas at Austin provides many distinguished and exceptional opportunities for students like me that are geared towards the medical field. In the future, I would like to pursue a career geared towards medical research to help society and Austin opens many opportunities, such as volunteering at Dell Seton Medical Center which will help build the foundation to achieve my goals in the future of helping not just my community but society as a whole. Fall Semester is right around the corner and the environment I've lived in for the past year have prepared me for success not only physically but mentally. As a victim of Hurricane Harvey, I learned that to succeed, one must move past the broken state and enter the recovery state as quickly as possible or else they will forever remain in the broken state. As the only child from my family present during Hurricane Harvey's recovery, I enhanced my skills on how to prioritize and organize duties while continuing school in a busy environment. To aid my father in recovery, I earned a local job and donated my savings towards the recovery effort. From this event, I have learned how to balance school, work, and recovery during hardship, all while retaining 100% effort in all my classes. I intend to apply what I've learned from this hardship at the University of Texas at Austin. As an undergraduate studying Public Health, I would like to continue studying in this field so that in the next few years, I can create a positive impact on not just a few, but thousands of lives on this globe. Although the coursework will be rigorous, I am prepared knowing that without struggle and failure, nothing can be accomplished. Although Public Health is a new major at the University of Texas at San Antonio, why do I want to make the switch over to the University of Texas? Because I want to step in a different direction where I will be open towards more open and diverse opportunities that are lacking in San Antonio. As a younger brother of a current Pre-Med major at the University of Texas, I've been exposed to numerous and diverse job and volunteer opportunities that will enhance my goals and visions of helping society as a whole. San Antonio offers a short ceiling for growth when it comes to research opportunities compared to the numerous academic opportunities offered at the University of Texas at Austin. I would like to transfer to the University of Texas at Austin because I would like to pursue my goals of helping society while being surrounded by endless opportunities such as Dell Seton Medical Center, Priscilla Pond Flawn Child and Family Laboratory, and many other opportunities. In addition, I would like to work in an academic environment surrounded by exceptional, award-winning professors in a diverse environment and city, something not present at the University of Texas at San Antonio. Lastly, I would like to attend the University of Texas at Austin so that I can also participate in the Naval ROTC program in hopes of commissioning as an officer in the U.S Navy or United States Marine Corps. The opportunity to participate in Naval ROTC is lacking at the University of Texas at San Antonio. Although managing ROTC, academics, and volunteering may seem like a challenge for some, I'm ready for it because I know I'll be surrounded by a tremendous and diverse environment in Austin, something that no other university in Texas possesses.

As an incoming Freshman at the University of Texas at San Antonio, I'd like to pursue a career geared towards the medical field however, I am restricted in my extracurricular activities in the San Antonio area due to the low demand of job and volunteer opportunities in the medical field. The University of Texas at Austin provides many distinguished and exceptional opportunities for students like me that are geared towards the medical field. In the future, I would like to pursue a career geared towards medical research to help society and Austin opens many opportunities, such as volunteering at Dell Seton Medical Center which will help build the foundation to achieve my goals in the future of helping not just my community but society as a whole. Fall Semester is right around the corner and the environment I've lived in for the past year have prepared me for success not only physically but mentally. As a victim of Hurricane Harvey, I learned that to succeed, one must move past the broken state and enter the recovery state as quickly as possible or else they will forever remain in the broken state. As the only child from my family present during Hurricane Harvey's recovery, I enhanced my skills on how to prioritize and organize duties while continuing school in a busy environment. To aid my father in recovery, I earned a local job and donated my savings towards the recovery effort. From this event, I have learned how to balance school, work, and recovery during hardship, all while retaining 100% effort in all my classes. I intend to apply what I've learned from this hardship at the University of Texas at Austin. As an undergraduate studying Public Health, I would like to continue studying in this field so that in the next few years, I can create a positive impact on not just a few, but thousands of lives on this globe. Although the coursework will be rigorous, I am prepared knowing that without struggle and failure, nothing can be accomplished. Although Public Health is a new major at the University of Texas at San Antonio, why do I want to make the switch over to the University of Texas? Because I want to step in a different direction where I will be open towards more open and diverse opportunities that are lacking in San Antonio. As a younger brother of a current Pre-Med major at the University of Texas, I've been exposed to numerous and diverse job and volunteer opportunities that will enhance my goals and visions of helping society as a whole. San Antonio offers a short ceiling for growth when it comes to research opportunities compared to the numerous academic opportunities offered at the University of Texas at Austin. I would like to transfer to the University of Texas at Austin because I would like to pursue my goals of helping society while being surrounded by endless opportunities such as Dell Seton Medical Center, Priscilla Pond Flown Child and Family Laboratory, and many other opportunities. In addition, I would like to work in an academic environment surrounded by exceptional, award-winning professors in a diverse environment and city, something not present at the University of Texas at San Antonio. Lastly, I would like to attend the University of Texas at Austin so that I can also participate in the Naval ROTC program in hopes of commissioning as an officer in the U.S. Navy or United States Marine Corps. The opportunity to participate in Naval ROTC is lacking at the University of Texas at San Antonio. Although managing ROTC, academics, and volunteering may seem like a challenge for some, I'm ready for it because I know I'll be surrounded by a tremendous and diverse environment in Austin, something that no other university in Texas possesses.

Below is my response, any notescomments are greatly appreciated!! Blackout. You hesitate, anticipation flowing through your veins, as you perch on the edge of your seat, awaiting what's to come. Faintly, you hear 9 sets of feet shuffling silently in the darkness, the sound ending as suddenly as it started. Gradually the lights come up, and before you stands a cluster of dancers, placed and posed precisely in their starting positions. The music begins, and you watch in awe as the ensemble moves gracefully along with the melody, perfectly in sync. The choreography is mesmerizing, and as the song fades out, you are ecstatic with what you just witnessed, yet disappointed it couldn't last longer. Another blackout comes, and the sound of shuffling feet as the dancers exit the stage is drowned out by the deafening applause from the audience. The performers, however, have no time to revel in their approval. Some rush to the dressing room, having only 3 minutes to change their costume, hair, and makeup for another dance. Others sit miserably, thinking of their mistake of stepping with the left foot, when the choreography emphasized the right. One rests with her ankle iced and elevated, as she had injured it the week prior, but couldn't afford to miss the performance. Dance is not as effortless as dancers make it seem on stage, and instead takes years of pain and perseverance. I have danced, both recreationally and competitively, for nearly 11 years. My mother says that I was always meant to perform, and through dance I can express this calling. However, when she signed me up all those years ago, she probably didn't realize all the blood, sweat, and tears, I would, literally, put into my training everyday. The endless stretching and conditioning is a constant discomfort, as I force my leg to extend higher than what should be humanly possible. Pointe shoes are another great example, as they force the wearer to balance all of their weight on the very small tip of the big toe, and yes, it's as excruciatingly painful as it sounds. Dance is a demanding pastime on the body, and few have the strength to persevere through its demands. However, in my years of training, I have not only learned the difference between a jeté and a saut de chat, but I've learned to push through pain for the fruit it bears in the end. From the uncomfortable stretching and conditioning came immense flexibility and strength, two qualities that are necessary to be a successful dancer, and I eventually learned ways to alleviate pain while en pointe, to be a stronger ballerina. I believe this quality of persistence is rare, yet crucial to achieve one's goals. Because of this, I think my perseverance would be a tremendous asset to Rice, as I refuse to give up when the going gets tough. Even when it seems like everything is against me, I know that what's on the other side will make all of the struggling worth it in the end.

Below is my response, any notes comments are greatly appreciated!! Blackout. You hesitate, anticipation flowing through your veins, as you perch on the edge of your seat, awaiting what's to come. Faintly, you hear 9 sets of feet shuffling silently in the darkness, the sound ending as suddenly as it started. Gradually the lights come up, and before you stands a cluster of dancers, placed and posed precisely in their starting positions. The music begins, and you watch in awe as the ensemble moves gracefully along with the melody, perfectly in sync. The choreography is mesmerizing, and as the song fades out, you are ecstatic with what you just witnessed, yet disappointed it couldn't last longer. Another blackout comes, and the sound of shuffling feet as the dancers exit the stage is drowned out by the deafening applause from the audience. The performers, however, have no time to revel in their approval. Some rush to the dressing room, having only 3 minutes to change their costume, hair, and makeup for another dance. Others sit miserably, thinking of their mistake of stepping with the left foot, when the choreography emphasized the right. One rests with her ankle iced and elevated, as she had injured it the week prior, but couldn't afford to miss the performance. Dance is not as effortless as dancers make it seem on stage, and instead takes years of pain and perseverance. I have danced, both recreationally and competitively, for nearly 11 years. My mother says that I was always meant to perform, and through dance I can express this calling. However, when she signed me up all those years ago, she probably didn't realize all the blood, sweat, and tears, I would, literally, put into my training every day. The endless stretching and conditioning is a constant discomfort, as I force my leg to extend higher than what should be humanly possible. Point shoes are another great example, as they force the wearer to balance all of their weight on the very small tip of the big toe, and yes, it's as excruciatingly painful as it sounds. Dance is a demanding pastime on the body, and few have the strength to persevere through its demands. However, in my years of training, I have not only learned the difference between a jeté and a salt de chat, but I've learned to push through pain for the fruit it bears in the end. From the uncomfortable stretching and conditioning came immense flexibility and strength, two qualities that are necessary to be a successful dancer, and I eventually learned ways to alleviate pain while en point, to be a stronger ballerina. I believe this quality of persistence is rare, yet crucial to achieve one's goals. Because of this, I think my perseverance would be a tremendous asset to Rice, as I refuse to give up when the going gets tough. Even when it seems like everything is against me, I know that what's on the other side will make all the struggling worth it in the end.

Chemistry is something that fascinated me since I first faced this subject in 7th grade. Although my friends didn't understand why I love chemistry so much, the chemical reactions and the chemistry behind them attracted me. When I first took a high school chemistry class in 10th grade, I dreamed of myself studying more complex and fascinating chemistry in university and having a job related to it. As I chose chemistry as my higher level subject and wrote an extended essay on chemistry, my interest and affection towards this subject got even bigger. I googled universities that have chemistry courses, and I found Georgia Tech. When I opened "Georgia Tech Chemistry and Biochemistry" page, a video grabbed my attention. It was about a chemistry graduate student who works on metabolites to better detect cancer before it reaches a critical stage. My aunt, who is also my best friend, suffered from cancer and I was distressed for not being able to help her. After watching this video, I undoubtedly thought that I want to study at Georgia Tech. As I searched in depth about Georgia Tech, I realized it has systematic and organized programs that will support me after graduation. What I have learned at Georgia Tech will definitely help me pursue my passion in chemistry and grab the opportunity after graduation. I want to be a proud Georgia Tech Yellow Jacket.

Chemistry is something that fascinated me since I first faced this subject in 7th grade. Although my friends didn't understand why I love chemistry so much, the chemical reactions and the chemistry behind them attracted me. When I first took a high school chemistry class in 10th grade, I dreamed of myself studying more complex and fascinating chemistry in university and having a job related to it. As I chose chemistry as my higher level subject and wrote an extended essay on chemistry, my interest and affection towards this subject got even bigger. I googled universities that have chemistry courses, and I found Georgia Tech. When I opened "Georgia Tech Chemistry and Biochemistry" page, a video grabbed my attention. It was about a chemistry graduate student who works on metabolites to better detect cancer before it reaches a critical stage. My aunt, who is also my best friend, suffered from cancer, and I was distressed for not being able to help her. After watching this video, I undoubtedly thought that I want to study at Georgia Tech. As I searched in depth about Georgia Tech, I realized it has systematic and organized programs that will support me after graduation. What I have learned at Georgia Tech will definitely help me pursue my passion in chemistry and grab the opportunity after graduation. I want to be a proud Georgia Tech Yellow Jacket.

Education, in my opinion, is a subjective experience. You can make learning from laughter, pain, science or space and restricting yourself to a particular field without having the opportunity to experience different disciplines seems almost malevolent to me; which is why a liberal arts program is perfect. Its multifarious courses allow for a wholesome development, enriching the required skills for the fast-paced world we live in. Taking NYU's study away program, for example, would allow me to wholly immerse myself in a completely foreign culture and adapt to their surroundings. Moreover, NYUAD's diverse student body of more than 88 nationalities will open my mind and heart to the cultures and traditions that co-exist with mine; this is where diversity converges into unity. NYUAD challenges students to evolve their thinking pattern to foster curiosity, creativity and critical reflection, this was evident when I leafed through past capstone projects of the various disciplines NYUAD accommodates. I was awe-struck at the immense learning possibilities NYUAD provides, and it doesn't end there. Learning at NYUAD as I have seen, is not limited to the end of the final year capstone project, it happens throughout every moment of the four years spent through discussions in tight-knit classrooms, outdoor activities involving teamwork and co-ordination, volunteer workshops such as GEN and SNAP and so on. Studying in an institution that mirrors my ideologies would be an unparalleled experience. It means being able to pursue courses that go beyond our everyday subject matter and more to the fundamentals of human behaviour, thus honing my skills as an individual who is empathetic and inquisitive. NYUAD, if I would say, is a constellation of hope nurturing brilliant stars that will empower the future; it would be an honour to become a part of this distinct university.

Education, in my opinion, is a subjective experience. You can make learning from laughter, pain, science or space and restricting yourself to a particular field without having the opportunity to experience different disciplines seems almost malevolent to me; which is why a liberal arts program is perfect. Its multifarious courses allow for a wholesome development, enriching the required skills for the fast-paced world we live in. Taking NYU's study away program, for example, would allow me to wholly immerse myself in a completely foreign culture and adapt to their surroundings. Moreover, NY UAD's diverse student body of more than 88 nationalities will open my mind and heart to the cultures and traditions that co-exist with mine; this is where diversity converges into unity. NY UAD challenges students to evolve their thinking pattern to foster curiosity, creativity and critical reflection, this was evident when I leafed through past capstone projects of the various disciplines NY UAD accommodates. I was awe-struck at the immense learning possibilities NY UAD provides, and it doesn't end there. Learning at NY UAD as I have seen, is not limited to the end of the final year capstone project, it happens throughout every moment of the four years spent through discussions in tight-knit classrooms, outdoor activities involving teamwork and co-ordination, volunteer workshops such as GEN and SNAP and so on. Studying in an institution that mirrors my ideologies would be an unparalleled experience. It means being able to pursue courses that go beyond our everyday subject and more to the fundamentals of human behavior, thus honing my skills as an individual who is empathetic and inquisitive. NY UAD, if I would say, is a constellation of hope nurturing brilliant stars that will empower the future; it would be an honor to become a part of this distinct university.

I will apply for Columbia and would thus appreciate if you could give me some feedback on my essays. Here is the first one: Discussing not only Science and its applications with the Frontiers of Science classes, but also Arts, History, Philosophy, and Literature as part of the Core Curriculum is what excites me the most about Columbia. In this context, while Columbia's curriculum aligns with my desire for a more holistic formation, indispensable for my actions as not only a researcher, but as a citizen concerned with our future challenges in both Biology and society, its Music Humanities classes offer me the prospect of continuing my piano and music composition studies, thus perfectly matching my academic and personal expectations. Moreover, Columbia's commitment to research - as shown by its more than 200 research centers -, its enormous variety of research areas, and excellent faculty members - specially Caleb Scharf, whose lecture "The Copernicus Complex: Are We Special in the Cosmos?" has recently drawn my interest to the field of Astrobiology and the prospects of extraterrestrial life - offer me a unique opportunity of exploring the field of the Fundamental Researches, which appeal to me as a transformative journey through understanding our Universe and how life ended up here. Finally, the enormous variety of Columbia's student body, with learners from the most diverse ethnics, religions and countries, offers me a enriching prospect of intellectual growth, as I am able to confront so distinct points of views during my four graduation years, learning from new cultures and life experiences, which my travelling through Europe and America - where I met people ranging from a witch to a former war prisoner whose favorite occupation was simply eating every day once more to a real witch - proved to be such an amazing experience. Thus, Columbia should be the best place for me to explore my curiosity and love for learning. Thanks a lot for your help! Best regards,Arthur.

I will apply for Columbia and would thus appreciate if you could give me some feedback on my essays. Here is the first one: Discussing not only Science and its applications with the Frontiers of Science classes, but also Arts, History, Philosophy, and Literature as part of the Core Curriculum is what excites me the most about Columbia. In this context, while Columbia's curriculum aligns with my desire for a more holistic formation, indispensable for my actions as not only a researcher, but as a citizen concerned with our future challenges in both Biology and society, its Music Humanities classes offer me the prospect of continuing my piano and music composition studies, thus perfectly matching my academic and personal expectations. Moreover, Columbia's commitment to research - as shown by its more than 200 research centers -, its enormous variety of research areas, and excellent faculty members - specially Caleb Scarf, whose lecture "The Copernicus Complex: Are We Special in the Cosmos?" has recently drawn my interest to the field of Astrobiology and the prospects of extraterrestrial life - offer me a unique opportunity of exploring the field of the Fundamental Researches, which appeal to me as a transformative journey through understanding our Universe and how life ended up here. Finally, the enormous variety of Columbia's student body, with learners from the most diverse ethnics, religions and countries, offers me an enriching prospect of intellectual growth, as I am able to confront so distinct points of views during my four graduation years, learning from new cultures and life experiences, which my travelling through Europe and America - where I met people ranging from a witch to a former war prisoner whose favorite occupation was simply eating every day once more to a real witch - proved to be such an amazing experience. Thus, Columbia should be the best place for me to explore my curiosity and love for learning. Thanks a lot for your help! Best regards, Arthur.

" Hello, I am from Taiwan. My name is Jia-Yun." Only after a split second of awkward silence when I add sheepishly, " but Jasmine will do." "Why do you have two names?", Leyla asked, somewhat confused.Whenever traveling overseas, I introduce myself as Jasmine, while my Chinese name is buried well within the page of my passport. Since almost everyone in Taiwan has an additional English name, being called both Jia-Yun and Jasmine seems perfectly normal. Ever since middle school, I could sense the teachers' anxieties of reaching my name on the roll call, nervous about pronouncing my name incorrectly. Every other student's name rolled swiftly off the tip of my teachers' tongues. As for mine? There had always been this pause before my name was called out. A short yet meaningful pause that I'd become a little too familiar with. When they do manage to call it out, Ho, Jia-Yun suddenly turns into a "Jia-Young" - or even better, just a "Jia" because they assumed the space afterward indicated that "Jia" was my middle name. As a child, I was afraid to prove them wrong because questioning teachers meant questioning an authority figure, and that was the last thing I wanted to do. Chinese names have inherent meanings. Families normally look through thousands of characters in the dictionary to think of a unique name with wishes for the newborn. The name signifies something greater than a mere combination of characters on a page. "Jia-Yun" is such a beautiful name with indications of being wonderful and talented, why would my parents give me another name in English? If societies are becoming more culturally aware, why is having an English name still such a common act among the Chinese? Usually, I explain to my foreign friends that having English names is an act of consideration to foreigners, for when names are difficult to pronounce or to remember. Given a more careful thought, the explanation seemed slightly racist, or even untrue. Never had I heard an English speaker say, "I can't remember the capital of China because it's in Chinese." Similarly, I'd never heard a Chinese say, "I'm from a city called Kaohsiung, but since foreigners can't pronounce it, we've chosen the English name 'Karol' instead." Truth be told, a part of me was utterly insecure about the name Jia-Yun when encountering foreigners. I didn't want to correct people repeatedly on how they pronounce my name, and I believe that it helps foreigners to remember me. I even prefer to be called Jasmine, for fear of being an outcast. " They are both given names from my parents. While Jia-Yun is my original name, Jasmine is my preferred name." I told Leyla.I then took a piece of paper and wrote my name down in Chinese. At the sight of my calligraphy, the "ooh" and "wow"s from unmistakably flipped on my confidence switch. I turned to see three pairs of eyes staring at the piece of paper with concentration. When I pronounced my name again, they repeated. Even though the familiar "Jia-Young" still popped out, I nodded in encouragement. Having an additional English name may be an act of consideration. However, having the patience and confidence to introduce myself as Ho, Jia-Yun is the act of sincerity and the recognition to my culture. Even though I still prefer the name Jasmine, never will I belittle my root, my name, and who I really am. "Hello everyone. My name is Ho, Jia-Yun." The name represents me, not only as a unique individual but also as a cultural group.

" Hello, I am from Taiwan. My name is mid-Jun." Only after a split second of awkward silence when I add sheepishly," but Jasmine will do." "Why do you have two names?", Leyla asked, somewhat confused. Whenever traveling overseas, I introduce myself as Jasmine, while my Chinese name is buried well within the page of my passport. Since almost everyone in Taiwan has an additional English name, being called both mid-Jun and Jasmine seems perfectly normal. Ever since middle school, I could sense the teachers' anxieties of reaching my name on the roll call, nervous about pronouncing my name incorrectly. Every other student's name rolled swiftly off the tip of my teachers' tongues. As for mine? There had always been this pause before my name was called out. A short yet meaningful pause that I'd become a little too familiar with. When they do manage to call it out, Ho, mid-Jun suddenly turns into a "Jae-young" - or even better, just a "Via" because they assumed the space afterward indicated that "Via" was my middle name. As a child, I was afraid to prove them wrong because questioning teachers meant questioning an authority figure, and that was the last thing I wanted to do. Chinese names have inherent meanings. Families normally look through thousands of characters in the dictionary to think of a unique name with wishes for the newborn. The name signifies something greater than a mere combination of characters on a page. "mid-Jun" is such a beautiful name with indications of being wonderful and talented, why would my parents give me another name in English? If societies are becoming more culturally aware, why is having an English name still such a common act among the Chinese? Usually, I explain to my foreign friends that having English names is an act of consideration to foreigners, for when names are difficult to pronounce or to remember. Given a more careful thought, the explanation seemed slightly racist, or even untrue. Never had I heard an English speaker say, "I can't remember the capital of China because it's in Chinese." Similarly, I'd never heard a Chinese say, "I'm from a city called Kaohsiung, but since foreigners can't pronounce it, we've chosen the English name 'Karol' instead." Truth be told, a part of me was utterly insecure about the name mid-Jun when encountering foreigners. I didn't want to correct people repeatedly on how they pronounce my name, and I believe that it helps foreigners to remember me. I even prefer to be called Jasmine, for fear of being an outcast. " They are both given names from my parents. While mid-Jun is my original name, Jasmine is my preferred name." I told Leyla. I then took a piece of paper and wrote my name down in Chinese. At the sight of my calligraphy, the "ooh" and "wow"s from unmistakably flipped on my confidence switch. I turned to see three pairs of eyes staring at the piece of paper with concentration. When I pronounced my name again, they repeated. Even though the familiar "Jae-young" still popped out, I nodded in encouragement. Having an additional English name may be an act of consideration. However, having the patience and confidence to introduce myself as Ho, mid-Jun is the act of sincerity and the recognition to my culture. Even though I still prefer the name Jasmine, never will I belittle my root, my name, and who I really am. "Hello everyone. My name is Ho, mid-Jun." The name represents me, not only as a unique individual but also as a cultural group.

My interest in engineering started at a young age for me, right when I began playing Minecraft. I began to use the computer every day, and I grew more and more fascinated with it every day. I slowly began to learn more about the computer I was using, and quickly realized it was not very good. I saved all the money I could and built myself my first computer at the age of 12, which marked the beginning of my obsession. As I progressed through the scouting program, I met numerous people who had made a career out of computer science, including a project manager and a senior firmware engineer, both working at AMD. These men helped show me how they used their computer science degrees to forge a life where they were comfortably able to support their families and loved ones, which is one of my biggest goals in life. As an engineering student, I want to learn the skills I need to become a successful software engineer after graduation. I intend to obtain a master's degree during my time at A&M, so that I may more easily find a job and become a better worker later on. I want to be challenged by my course work, so that I may grow even more as a student and engineer. After graduation, I want to become a software engineer so I can support myself and my loved ones to have a comfortable lifestyle where money is not a huge concern for us. I believe that if I attend A&M and push myself to work hard and learn as much as I can, then I can achieve these goals.

My interest in engineering started at a young age for me, right when I began playing Minecraft. I began to use the computer every day, and I grew more and more fascinated with it every day. I slowly began to learn more about the computer I was using, and quickly realized it was not very good. Furthermore, I saved all the money I could and built myself my first computer at the age of 12, which marked the beginning of my obsession. As I progressed through the scouting program, I met numerous people who had made a career out of computer science, including a project manager and a senior firmware engineer, both working at AMD. These men helped show me how they used their computer science degrees to forge a life where they were comfortably able to support their families and loved ones, which is one of my biggest goals in life. As an engineering student, I want to learn the skills I need to become a successful software engineer after graduation. I intend to obtain a master's degree during my time at Camp;M, so that I may more easily find a job and become a better worker later on. I want to be challenged by my course work, so that I may grow even more as a student and engineer. After graduation, I want to become a software engineer, so I can support myself and my loved ones to have a comfortable lifestyle where money is not a huge concern for us. I believe that if I attend Camp;M and push myself to work hard and learn as much as I can, then I can achieve these goals.

The opportunities of traveling and language learning are immense temptations to a language-learning enthusiast such as me. I have been a self-taught language learner since seven and have by now learned English, Spanish, German, and a little bit of Japanese. At the thought of the global outreach that I will be able to do, from having all these students plucked from around the world, will allow these insights that I think will be unparalleled. The continent-bridging Abu Dhabi offers me a multicultural environment and a window to people from all walks of life. I yearn to immerse myself with extensive knowledge and insights into a broad range of world cultures by studying away programs for my mind to flourish. I would be thrilled if I can do a study away at Madrid to immerse myself in Spanish culture and continue my journey as a Spanish learner since 7th grade. Hopefully, my horizon will be widened, my map will be full of questions. - What else haven't I seen? What else don't I know? -. I imagine courses in NYUAD bring a level of education that is really unparalleled in the Middle East. I'm attracted to the school especially because I think NYUAD has invariably prided itself on being both worldly and westernized, but at the same time, it reflects the fact that it is in Abu Dhabi. Taken the geographic advantage of NYUAD along with my interests in culture and language, I would like to take curriculums in Cultural Exploration and Analysis and to study Arabic. However, I am open to any future possibilities I might come across. I am looking forward to further exploring my aptitude during the first year in NYUAD. I learned in the final year of high school that being close to your teachers and being in a classroom with a smaller amount of bodies was really helpful for learning. So I am really excited about seeing that connection in action as NYUAD is so tightly knitted. I am convinced that it will be four daunting years, continually stepping out of my comfort zone. Nevertheless, it is precisely the environment I would like to put myself in; learning from the best, learning with the best. I can not wait to see the person I will come to be after these four thrilling, challenging years in NYUAD. I believed it to be just the university for me, and I will unquestionably choose NYUAD if I am offered an admission.

The opportunities of traveling and language learning are immense temptations to a language-learning enthusiast such as me. I have been a self-taught language learner since seven and have by now learned English, Spanish, German, and a bit of Japanese. At the thought of the global outreach that I will be able to do, from having all these students plucked from around the world, will allow these insights that I think will be unparalleled. The continent-bridging Abu Dhabi offers me a multicultural environment and a window to people from all walks of life. I yearn to immerse myself with extensive knowledge and insights into a broad range of world cultures by studying away programs for my mind to flourish. I would be thrilled if I can do a study away at Madrid to immerse myself in Spanish culture and continue my journey as a Spanish learner since 7th grade. Hopefully, my horizon will be widened, my map will be full of questions. - What else haven't I seen? What else don't I know? -. I imagine courses in NY UAD bring a level of education that is really unparalleled in the Middle East. I'm attracted to the school especially because I think NY UAD has invariably prided itself on being both worldly and Westernized, but at the same time, it reflects the fact that it is in Abu Dhabi. Taken the geographic advantage of NY UAD along with my interests in culture and language, I would like to take curriculums in Cultural Exploration and Analysis and to study Arabic. However, I am open to any future possibilities I might come across. I am looking forward to further exploring my aptitude during the first year in NY UAD. I learned in the final year of high school that being close to your teachers and being in a classroom with a smaller amount of bodies was really helpful for learning. So I am really excited about seeing that connection in action as NY UAD is so tightly knitted. I am convinced that it will be four daunting years, continually stepping out of my comfort zone. Nevertheless, it is precisely the environment I would like to put myself in; learning from the best, learning with the best. I can not wait to see the person I will come to be after these four thrilling, challenging years in NY UAD. I believed it to be just the university for me, and I will unquestionably choose NY UAD if I am offered an admission.

There's an old adage that "sometimes in life it just takes the influence of one person to see yourself in a completely different light." Although there are many influences in my life, one person stands out: my grandfather. Over the years, I have spent many hours listening to his words of wisdom, stories from "back-in-the-day", and ethical ways which have influenced me deeply. My grandfather always said that I was an "old soul" trapped in a young person's body. He said the empathy, warmth and understanding that I had towards others is something that could not be taught, but rather is buried deep in my soul. So, as you can imagine, when I was told that he had stage four pancreatic cancer, I was devastated. My grandfather passed away exactly 28 days after his diagnosis. I always heard the phrase that "you can will yourself to do anything", but I never thought it was true. He did, I watched him decline both mentally and physically everyday! My grandfather's passing made me realize that life can be taken away in a moment. He told me that we are only here for a short time, so we need to make the best choices, strive to meet our goals, and change the world one day at a time, all while doing it with a smile. My family struggled for quite a while with my grandfather's loss; he was our patriarch, and his presence had a strong influence on us all. We are fortunate enough to be a strong and close-knit family, and that got us through this incredibly trying time in our lives. My mother and father also have taught me to be an ethical person, always do the right thing, and follow my instincts. My brother has a lot of the qualities my grandfather possessed. He has been attending Blinn for the past two years and will now be attending Texas A&M this fall. He has taken me under his wing since my grandfather's death, which has helped ease the pain. We have gone to numerous Aggie football and basketball games as well as a few shows with current A&M students over the last couple of years. Our time together in College Station has brought us even closer. I have become a well-rounded and cultured person thanks to my family, friends, community, and school. I have a diverse group of friends that have taught me about their cultures, coping with learning disabilities, and self-awareness. My family has given me endless opportunities and unlimited boundaries to be the person I am and the person I want to become. My grandfather's legacy of his insatiable thirst for knowledge, strong-willed personality, and ethical beliefs will live on through me for generations to come.

There's an old adage that "sometimes in life it just takes the influence of one person to see yourself in a completely different light." Although there are many influences in my life, one person stands out: my grandfather. Over the years, I have spent many hours listening to his words of wisdom, stories from "back-in-the-day", and ethical ways which have influenced me deeply. My grandfather always said that I was an "old soul" trapped in a young person's body. He said the empathy, warmth and understanding that I had towards others is something that could not be taught, but rather is buried deep in my soul. So, as you can imagine, when I was told that he had stage four pancreatic cancer, I was devastated. My grandfather passed away exactly 28 days after his diagnosis. I always heard the phrase that "you can will yourself to do anything", but I never thought it was true. He did, I watched him decline both mentally and physically every day! My grandfather's passing made me realize that life can be taken away in a moment. He told me that we are only here for a short time, so we need to make the best choices, strive to meet our goals, and change the world one day at a time, all while doing it with a smile. My family struggled for quite a while with my grandfather's loss; he was our patriarch, and his presence had a strong influence on us all. We are fortunate enough to be a strong and close-knit family, and that got us through this incredibly trying time in our lives. My mother and father also have taught me to be an ethical person, always do the right thing, and follow my instincts. My brother has a lot of the qualities my grandfather possessed. He has been attending Blind for the past two years and will now be attending Texas Camp;M this fall. He has taken me under his wing since my grandfather's death, which has helped ease the pain. We have gone to numerous Aggie football and basketball games as well as a few shows with current Camp;M students over the last couple of years. Our time together in College Station has brought us even closer. I have become a well-rounded and cultured person thanks to my family, friends, community, and school. I have a diverse group of friends that have taught me about their cultures, coping with learning disabilities, and self-awareness. My family has given me endless opportunities and unlimited boundaries to be the person I am and the person I want to become. My grandfather's legacy of his insatiable thirst for knowledge, strong-willed personality, and ethical beliefs will live on through me for generations to come.

Hi,I'm going to apply to school of nursing in UT, and I'm gonna write the essay for application with topic A.Can someone give me some recommendation for my essay?I just finish ESOL class in writing, and I still make a lots of mistakes in writing.Thanks so much. "The statement of purpose will provide an opportunity to explain any extenuating circumstances that you feel could add value to your application. You may also want to explain unique aspects of your academic background or valued experiences you may have had that relate to your academic discipline. The statement of purpose is not meant to be a listing of accomplishments in high school or a record of your participation in school-related activities. Rather, this is your opportunity to address the admission committee directly and to let us know more about you as an individual, in a manner that your transcripts and the other application information cannot convey." --------------------------- I lived with my grandfather who died because of lung cancer when I was five years old. At that time, I was too young to take care of him, but I wish that I could have done something more than sitting and praying beside his bed. Because of that, I want to become a nurse. I want to put myself in other's position to understand their pain and to able to take care of them. Unfortunately, in the last year of high school, I was convinced by my families that working in a healthcare filed will be so stressful with blood and illness while being an accountant will be so much easier with all clean and tidy paper works. Consequently, I chose to drop out my goal to become a nurse and got into a financial and marketing university in Viet Nam. I went to school for two years in the financial field, but I had no idea what I was going to do in school and after graduation. I felt lost because I had no interested in that field of study. Not until I left Vietnam and came to the United State to start a new life with my family. While I had always had an interest in health science, I had never thought that all my memories about my grandfather and my nursing goal came back when I started to take care of my grandmother who lives with my family since we moved to the US. She is 92 years old, and she has Alzheimer. She cannot remember her morning medicines, how to take shower, and wake up in the middle of the night to search for things lost a couple of years ago. Nothing can't describe how hard for watching your loved one suffer every single day and do nothing. We, humans, are mortal. Everyone could suffer from a stroke or cancer, and we still can't do anything against that human nature. At that moment, I believe that the minimize things people desire at that time is the comfort. Most importantly, I found myself so happy, passionate, and energetic when I spending more time to research and studies anything related to science and healthcare. I want to study that how my family and I can give her warm and protective feelings in medically and psychological ways. After all, I decided to come back to school and put myself into the pre-health science. Ever since I enrolled in science courses at Austin community college, I tried hard to learn the most of my education. By going to school, I was going to discover that the healthcare field can help me to fulfill my desire to help others. Until now, I'm sure that I never regret when I choose Nursing major in my life. The more I learn academically, the more I feel compassionate and curiosity for the knowledge in this field of study. My curiosity for science has never stopped to grow over the courses of my studies in community college. In other words, the more I study, the smaller I fell about myself in compare with the world of knowledge. Therefore, I have decided to extend my education. No doubt, being one of the top schools in the country is the first appeal to me for a bachelor's science in nursing. The University of Texas at Austin will provide me with many resources, opportunities, and extracurricular activity options. I'm so impressed whenever I think that I could be a part of the university where "What starts here changes the world." The opportunities in attending in the University of Texas in Austin can help me to open the door to the world of knowledge and seek for the challenges. I believe that being a part of this fascinating community will reinforce my expertise and allow me to use what I learn and experience to serve people.

Hi, I'm going to apply to school of nursing in UT, and I'm going to write the essay for application with topic A. Can someone give me some recommendation for my essay? I just finish ESOL class in writing, and I still make a lot of mistakes in writing. Thanks so much. "The statement of purpose will provide an opportunity to explain any extenuating circumstances that you feel could add value to your application. You may also want to explain unique aspects of your academic background or valued experiences you may have had that relate to your academic discipline. The statement of purpose is not meant to be a listing of accomplishments in high school or a record of your participation in school-related activities. Rather, this is your opportunity to address the admission committee directly and to let us know more about you as an individual, in a manner that your transcripts and the other application information cannot convey." --------------------------- I lived with my grandfather who died because of lung cancer when I was five years old. At that time, I was too young to take care of him, but I wish that I could have done something more than sitting and praying beside his bed. Because of that, I want to become a nurse. I want to put myself in other's position to understand their pain and to be able to take care of them. Unfortunately, in the last year of high school, I was convinced by my families that working in a healthcare filed will be so stressful with blood and illness while being an accountant will be so much easier with all clean and tidy paper works. Consequently, I chose to drop out my goal to become a nurse and got into a financial and marketing university in Vietnam. I went to school for two years in the financial field, but I had no idea what I was going to do in school and after graduation. I felt lost because I had not interested in that field of study. Not until I left Vietnam and came to the United States to start a new life with my family. While I had always had an interest in health science, I had never thought that all my memories about my grandfather and my nursing goal came back when I started to take care of my grandmother who lives with my family since we moved to the US. She is 92 years old, and she has Alzheimer. She cannot remember her morning medicines, how to take shower, and wake up in the middle of the night to search for things lost a couple of years ago. Nothing can't describe how hard for watching your loved one suffer every single day and do nothing. We, humans, are mortal. Everyone could suffer from a stroke or cancer, and we still can't do anything against that human nature. At that moment, I believe that to minimize things people desire at that time is the comfort. Most importantly, I found myself so happy, passionate, and energetic when I'm spending more time to research and studies anything related to science and healthcare. I want to study that how my family and I can give her warm and protective feelings in medically and psychological ways. After all, I decided to come back to school and put myself into the pre-health science. Ever since I enrolled in science courses at Austin community college, I tried hard to learn the most of my education. By going to school, I was going to discover that the healthcare field can help me to fulfill my desire to help others. Until now, I'm sure that I never regret when I choose Nursing major in my life. The more I learn academically, the more I feel compassionate and curiosity for the knowledge in this field of study. My curiosity for science has never stopped to grow over the courses of my studies in community college. In other words, the more I study, the smaller I fell about myself in compare with the world of knowledge. Therefore, I have decided to extend my education. No doubt, being one of the top schools in the country is the first appeal to me for a bachelor's science in nursing. The University of Texas at Austin will provide me with many resources, opportunities, and extracurricular activity options. I'm so impressed whenever I think that I could be a part of the university where "What starts here changes the world." The opportunities in attending in the University of Texas in Austin can help me to open the door to the world of knowledge and seek for the challenges. I believe that being a part of this fascinating community will reinforce my expertise and allow me to use what I learn and experience to serve people.

I am the product of my environment. I'm quite literally the product of my parents but I am also a product of me. I am a bisexual hearing impaired first-generation Tibetan-American feminist. I've grown up in a household that firmly believes in the American dream- come to this country and work hard- as my parents are living examples. They grew up as Tibetan refugees in India after their parents fled the persecution by the Chinese Communist Party in Tibet. The overcoming of their hardships in a new country has always inspired me to persevere through challenges. In addition, my identity is also credited towards women in STEM. Throughout high school, I've worked in a lab studying hearing loss. My time there has allowed me to unabashedly embrace my deafness as it redefined who I am. My background, beliefs, and experiences have allowed me to become the person I am today.

I am the product of my environment. I'm quite literally the product of my parents, but I am also a product of me. Furthermore, I am a bisexual hearing impaired first-generation Tibetan-American feminist. Furthermore, I've grown up in a household that firmly believes in the American dream-come to this country and work hard-as my parents are living examples. They grew up as Tibetan refugees in India after their parents fled the persecution by the Chinese Communist Party in Tibet. The overcoming of their hardships in a new country has always inspired me to persevere through challenges. In addition, my identity is also credited towards women in STEM. Throughout high school, I've worked in a lab studying hearing loss. My time there has allowed me to unabashedly embrace my deafness as it redefined who I am. My background, beliefs, and experiences have allowed me to become the person I am today.

Prompt: What was the environment in which you were raised?Describe your family, home, neighborhood, or community, and explain how it has shaped you as a person. There were many layers to the environment that I was brought up in and each have had their fair share of impact on the person I've become today. Being raised as the second son in my family, I grew up in a rather protective environment where I was subjected to some extra affection and care. However, this always came at the cost of being compared to my elder brother who is the ultimate definition of an alpha male-a gym junky, outgoing and equally sociable. I on the other hand am rather docile and an inherently shy person. To be able to accept my personality and thrive with it despite being constantly reminded of the glaring contrasts in my brother's personality and mine has always been a struggle for me. Nonetheless, over the years and with great empathy, I've found in me the compassion to appreciate and love these differences. I love my brother unconditionally, and I am indeed proud that I've been able to retain my own introversion in a world that constantly favors and prefers extroverts. To accept this side of me has been proven to be a challenge ever since I was a child since my mother has been the co-curricular activity in charge at my school for over 2 decades-giving hundreds of students the chance and confidence to speak on stage. Yet, her own son always preferred the backstage. In her eyes, I could always see the desire to see me in the limelight and become one of her prodigies-and naturally so I would say. I've often also felt disappointed for not being interested in being one, but it is not without perplexing introspections that I've accepted the fact that my life cannot and will not be a product of someone else's expectations. I have my own capabilities and interests that I am proud of and I've worked excessively hard in those aspects to do my mother and the rest of my family proud. Growing up in Nepal as a Muslim meant being the ethnic minority. I consider myself fortunate to have grown up at a time when Nepal was just transitioning into democracy which also meant that I had the chance to see it transition into being a secular country. This has had a huge impact on me as my family and I've felt more accepted than ever before. This has made me realize the importance of a society that is progressive, tolerant and welcoming. As a result, I have not only become a person who is more accepting of differing views but also someone who takes pride and enjoyment in learning from these differences.

Prompt: What was the environment in which you were raised? Describe your family, home, neighborhood, or community, and explain how it has shaped you as a person. There were many layers to the environment that I was brought up in and each have had their fair share of impact on the person I've become today. Being raised as the second son in my family, I grew up in a rather protective environment where I was subjected to some extra affection and care. However, this always came at the cost of being compared to my elder brother who is the ultimate definition of an alpha male-a gym junky, outgoing and equally sociable. I on the other hand am rather docile and an inherently shy person. To be able to accept my personality and thrive with it despite being constantly reminded of the glaring contrasts in my brother's personality and mine has always been a struggle for me. Nonetheless, over the years and with great empathy, I've found in me the compassion to appreciate and love these differences. I love my brother unconditionally, and I am indeed proud that I've been able to retain my own introversion in a world that constantly favors and prefers extroverts. To accept this side of me has been proven to be a challenge ever since I was a child since my mother has been the co-curricular activity in charge at my school for over 2 decades-giving hundreds of students the chance and confidence to speak on stage. Yet, her own son always preferred the backstage. In her eyes, I could always see the desire to see me in the limelight and become one of her prodigies-and naturally, so I would say. I've often also felt disappointed for not being interested in being one, but it is not without perplexing introspection that I've accepted the fact that my life cannot and will not be a product of someone else's expectations. I have my own capabilities and interests that I am proud of, and I've worked excessively hard in those aspects to do my mother and the rest of my family proud. Growing up in Nepal as a Muslim meant being the ethnic minority. I consider myself fortunate to have grown up at a time when Nepal was just transitioning into democracy which also meant that I had the chance to see it transition into being a secular country. This has had a huge impact on me as my family, and I've felt more accepted than ever before. This has made me realize the importance of a society that is progressive, tolerant and welcoming. As a result, I have not only become a person who is more accepting of differing views but also someone who takes pride and enjoyment in learning from these differences.

I always considered myself as a creative human being. I gravitated towards Legos when I was younger since it allowed me to create anything that I desired. Having opportunities where I can let my mind roam free with endless possibilities is where my mind thrives the most. I also find myself having a natural inclination toward problem-solving and efficiency. This inclination is where I believe my strength in math and science comes from. These characteristics give me the ability to conjure up zany and weird ideas and when I find one that I think is a best fit to solve a problem, I get sort of a "Eureka!" feeling knowing that my own idea actually worked to solve that problem. The successful application of an idea or ideas are what make problem-solving so fascinating and satisfying to me. When I found out that creativity, problem-solving, and making things more efficient is exactly what Industrial Engineers deal with on a daily basis, I knew that becoming an Industrial Engineer was the right fit for me. Just knowing that I have the possibility to get involved in major engineering projects and make the world a much better place as a result of those projects makes me even more hungry to learn more about becoming an engineer. If I was given the opportunity to go straight to a university after graduating high school instead of attending Lone Star College, I would not take that opportunity. I do not regret my learning experience at Lone Star College because it has given me a taste of what being an engineering major will entail. Calculus, Physics, and an Intro to Engineering course seemed like a daunting challenge for me but after completing these courses, I can say that I have the foundation and tools necessary to be successful to study Industrial Engineering at Texas A&M. Not only did Lone Star College provide valuable groundwork for my future in education, it also made me into the kind of person and student that I am today. In high school, I lacked the ambition and drive to pursue my education and as a result, my grades suffered. At Lone Star however, the difference was night and day. My professors genuinely cared about me succeeding in their class and just the overall environment of the college was more learner-friendly for me. I thank Lone Star College for reigniting the fire inside me to learn more and I firmly believe that they have prepared me for the next step in my college career. Why did I choose Texas A&M? I thought about my future in terms of my career after school and came to the conclusion that this university is the right fit for me. Texas A&M's engineering college consistently ranks as having some of the top public undergraduate engineering programs in the country according to the U.S. News & World Report and it ranks second in the country in undergraduate enrollment according to the American Society for Engineering Education. I know that I'll be in good hands under the tutelage of award-winning professor Alfredo Garcia due to his Ph.D. in Industrial and Operations Engineering. It would also be a privilege to learn from Natarajan Gautam as he received the Texas A&M-IISE Most Influential Faculty Award and his research being published in a numerous amount of publications. Having the privilege to put Texas A&M University on my resume indicates to my potential employers that I received a strong education from one of the top schools in the country and it sets me above the rest of potential candidates. Another attractive feature of this prestigious university is the sense of camaraderie and companionship that exudes from the student body. Even just the simple "Howdy!" makes it seem like everyone is part of one big family. It would truly be an honor to be a part of the Aggie culture and be the first one in my family to do so.

I always considered myself as a creative human being. I gravitated towards Legos when I was younger since it allowed me to create anything that I desired. Having opportunities where I can let my mind roam free with endless possibilities is where my mind thrives the most. I also find myself having a natural inclination toward problem-solving and efficiency. This inclination is where I believe my strength in math and science comes from. These characteristics give me the ability to conjure up zany and weird ideas and when I find one that I think is the best fit to solve a problem, I get sort of a "Eureka!" feeling knowing that my own idea actually worked to solve that problem. The successful application of an idea or ideas are what make problem-solving so fascinating and satisfying to me. When I found out that creativity, problem-solving, and making things more efficient is exactly what Industrial Engineers deal with on a daily basis, I knew that becoming an Industrial Engineer was the right fit for me. Just knowing that I have the possibility to get involved in major engineering projects and make the world a much better place as a result of those projects makes me even more hungry to learn more about becoming an engineer. If I was given the opportunity to go straight to a university after graduating from high school instead of attending Lone Star College, I would not take that opportunity. I do not regret my learning experience at Lone Star College because it has given me a taste of what being an engineering major will entail. Calculus, Physics, and an Intro to Engineering course seemed like a daunting challenge for me but after completing these courses, I can say that I have the foundation and tools necessary to be successful to study Industrial Engineering at Texas Camp;M. Not only did Lone Star College provide valuable groundwork for my future in education, it also made me into the kind of person and student that I am today. In high school, I lacked the ambition and drive to pursue my education and as a result, my grades suffered. At Lone Star however, the difference was night and day. My professors genuinely cared about me succeeding in their class and just the overall environment of the college was more learner-friendly for me. I thank Lone Star College for reigniting the fire inside me to learn more, and I firmly believe that they have prepared me for the next step in my college career. Why did I choose Texas Camp;M? I thought about my future in terms of my career after school and came to the conclusion that this university is the right fit for me. Texas Camp;M's engineering college consistently ranks as having some top public undergraduate engineering programs in the country according to the U.S. News camp; World Report and it ranks second in the country in undergraduate enrollment according to the American Society for Engineering Education. I know that I'll be in good hands under the tutelage of award-winning professor Alfredo Garcia due to his Ph.D. in Industrial and Operations Engineering. It would also be a privilege to learn from Catamaran Gautam as he received the Texas Camp;MILE Most Influential Faculty Award and his research being published in a numerous amount of publications. Having the privilege to put Texas Camp;M University on my resume indicates to my potential employers that I received a strong education from one of the top schools in the country, and it sets me above the rest of potential candidates. Another attractive feature of this prestigious university is the sense of camaraderie and companionship that exudes from the student body. Even just the simple "Howdy!" makes it seem like everyone is part of one big family. It would truly be an honor to be a part of the Aggie culture and be the first one in my family to do so.

My first essay, so a lot of things might be off - please do point out(that's what I'm here for after all) Thank you. It all began quite a long time ago. I was nine or ten years old. My father would often take me and my younger brother on summer holiday to Crimea, where, in the outskirts of Sevastopol, our distant relatives lived. I didn't enjoy their company as much as Dad did, but there was one thing that stuck to me and never let go since. One day, he brought me a star atlas as a gift. I didn't pay much attention to the actual maps, since they were mainly white dots on a dark navy blue background - nothing of great interest to a little boy - but over a week or so I scrutinised every page that contained at least some information about what the dots meant. I learned the entire life cycle of a star and various properties of the planets orbiting the Sun. When I finally decided to put the maps to use, I was left breathless by how the night sky, chaotic in its beauty, was suddenly brought to order in my eyes. The depths of cosmos have always captivated me since then. Living in a country that once was the pioneer of space exploration, I aspired to be like the great Korolyov. I wanted to build rockets that would lift off the ground, leaving it shuddering. They would pierce the blue sky and travel to places where no one has ever been before. They would carry satellites and rovers, crew and supplies, and someday, tourists or even colonists. This was my dream, my first and greatest ambition since I embraced the night sky, full of stars as it was. And I was utterly devastated to see my homeland stagnating in this area. The country that once launched a person into space before anyone else did is now barely afloat in the space industry, mainly converting military-grade rockets to launch satellites. Seeing such a grand legacy being turned into a pathetic moneymaker with no real research potential made me feel like I didn't belong there. Every day I urged for ambitious projects to dream of working on. And so I turned to the other side of the globe to fulfill this need. America turned out to be a Klondike for me; after following Roskosmos's futile efforts for a couple of years I was overwhelmed by everything that NASA, SpaceX and others were doing. And now, every time I need inspiration, I take another look at such projects as BFR, SLS and Mars colonisation and my brain goes into overdrive, making me work even harder to reach my dream. I became captivated by the mysterious abyss of cosmos at a young age, and now I stand before my greatest challenge. One day, I hope, I will work on something colossal, knowing that history has its eyes on me. I will put all the effort I can in order to leave a legacy not for my motherland, not for any other, but for all of humankind.

My first essay, so a lot of things might be off - please do point out(that's what I'm here for after all) Thank you. It all began quite a long time ago. I was nine or ten years old. My father would often take me and my younger brother on summer holiday to Crimea, where, in the outskirts of Sevastopol, our distant relatives lived. I didn't enjoy their company as much as Dad did, but there was one thing that stuck to me and never let go since. One day, he brought me a star atlas as a gift. I didn't pay much attention to the actual maps, since they were mainly white dots on a dark navy blue background - nothing of great interest to a little boy - but over a week or so I scrutinized every page that contained at least some information about what the dots meant. I learned the entire life cycle of a star and various properties of the planets orbiting the Sun. When I finally decided to put the maps to use, I was left breathless by how the night sky, chaotic in its beauty, was suddenly brought to order in my eyes. The depths of cosmos have always captivated me since then. Living in a country that once was the pioneer of space exploration, I aspired to be like the great Korolyov. I wanted to build rockets that would lift off the ground, leaving it shuddering. They would pierce the blue sky and travel to places where no one has ever been before. They would carry satellites and rovers, crew and supplies, and someday, tourists or even colonists. This was my dream, my first and greatest ambition since I embraced the night sky, full of stars as it was. And I was utterly devastated to see my homeland stagnating in this area. The country that once launched a person into space before anyone else did is now barely afloat in the space industry, mainly converting military-grade rockets to launch satellites. Seeing such a grand legacy being turned into a pathetic moneymaker with no real research potential made me feel like I didn't belong there. Every day I urged for ambitious projects to dream of working on. And so I turned to the other side of the globe to fulfill this need. America turned out to be a Klondike for me; after following Roscosmos's futile efforts for a couple of years I was overwhelmed by everything that NASA, SpaceX and others were doing. And now, every time I need inspiration, I take another look at such projects as BFR, SLS and Mars colonization and my brain goes into overdrive, making me work even harder to reach my dream. I became captivated by the mysterious abyss of cosmos at a young age, and now I stand before my greatest challenge. One day, I hope, I will work on something colossal, knowing that history has its eyes on me. I will put all the effort I can in order to leave a legacy not for my motherland, not for any other, but for all humankind.

What is the secret of the Cosmos? Why we are here? Why only the Pale blue dot has life? How tiny lifeless quarks, create atoms which combine to form living human beings and other species? How small we are compared to the whole cosmos and whats that equation that is the code for this Grand programmed Cosmos? These are some of the quenchers for my thirst in the area of Space and Exploration. A childhood dream of becoming an Astronaut, to reach the ISS, well in my childhood age I only knew about the ISS, once crushed by the society near me, has once again been awakened by books and films. It pokes my mind all the times that, the Big Bang that happened 13.7 billion years ago created all the matter and energy that forms the present universe. We know that Hydrogen was the first and only element to be formed, and stars were formed out of it. These big stars created the higher elements in their super duper hot nuclear reactors which we find today in out bones and body as Calcium and Carbon. Isn't that amazing? Looking at my hand and thinking that it was formed inside a big bright star? Its just fascinating to think, how we all are connected to each other, and, we all to the Cosmos, it makes the mind peaceful when you return home after a busy day. This concept is so vast that it needs a lot and lot of dreaming and imagination, to know why you too are reading this essay? Is anybody controlling you or did anyone controlled me when I was writing the essay like we control the Sims? Who knows perhaps yes? perhaps no. I love reading books on Space and Astrophysics in my lease time such as, on the train and in the school car. Every time a book is completed I feel great to have such beautiful facts about our Cosmos. To speak specifically, I love reading books on rockets too, can be confusing to choose between the two : Astronautics or Astrophysics. After going through countdowns and watching a lot of rocket launches, I thought of building a rocket by myself, I didn't knew about sugar powered rockets then. After I came to know about the Sugar Rocket (powered by R-Candy) I fought, yeah literally fought to built it. India is a place where you get Potassium Nitrate only in laboratories and at a very high cost in the plant shop. My Mom and Dad clearly said no a thousand times as they believed that I would burn my hands and face in an accident with the rocket. Somehow, I made them believe that there won't be any problem and launched bought an container. Till now I tested two rocket motors, sadly both of them were a flop. So, I thought I need more knowledge and hence wandering on the internet I found edX, MITOCW, Coursera and great sites to learn rocket science. They truly helped me fill my gap of knowledge for rockets and also various topics. I wish to launch another sugar rocket soon. Till know all the books I have read, have changed my views on how I saw things before. After going through these deep ideas, my eyes views things as nothing but a group of subatomic particles. The thing that saddens me is some of the greatest problems we face, one of them is war. Lets have a world where we do not have weapons, where we do not have Egoistic leaders for whom their whole country suffers. Even one of the greater problem is poverty and the ever demand of energy especially green energy. Using the Space's lush and rich resources we can easily feed ourselves without harming our own Earth for example using Asteroid mining and Solar Energy. Atlast, we all are here alone on this Planet.

What is the secret of the Cosmos? Why we are here? Why only the Pale blue dot has life? How tiny lifeless quarks, create atoms which combine to form living human beings and other species? How small we are compared to the whole cosmos and what's that equation that is the code for this Grand programmed Cosmos? These are some quenchers for my thirst in the area of Space and Exploration. A childhood dream of becoming an Astronaut, to reach the ISS, well in my childhood age I only knew about the ISS, once crushed by the society near me, has once again been awakened by books and films. It pokes my mind all the times that, the Big Bang that happened 13.7 billion years ago created all the matter and energy that forms the present universe. We know that Hydrogen was the first and only element to be formed, and stars were formed out of it. These big stars created the higher elements in their super-duper hot nuclear reactors which we find today in out bones and body as Calcium and Carbon. Isn't that amazing? Looking at my hand and thinking that it was formed inside a big bright star? It's just fascinating to think, how we all are connected to each other, and, we all to the Cosmos, it makes the mind peaceful when you return home after a busy day. This concept is so vast that it needs a lot and a lot of dreaming and imagination, to know why you too are reading this essay? Is anybody controlling you or did anyone control me when I was writing the essay like we control the Sims? Who knows perhaps yes? Perhaps no. I love reading books on Space and Astrophysics in my lease time such as, on the train and in the school car. Every time a book is completed I feel great to have such beautiful facts about our Cosmos. To speak specifically, I love reading books on rockets too, can be confusing to choose between the two : Astronautics or Astrophysics. After going through countdowns and watching a lot of rocket launches, I thought of building a rocket by myself, I didn't know about sugar powered rockets then. After I came to know about the Sugar Rocket (powered by R-Candy) I fought, yeah literally fought to built it. India is a place where you get Potassium Nitrate only in laboratories and at a very high cost in the plant shop. My Mom and Dad clearly said no a thousand times as they believed that I would burn my hands and face in an accident with the rocket. Somehow, I made them believe that there won't be any problem and launched bought a container. Till now, I tested two rocket motors, sadly both of them were a flop. So, I thought I need more knowledge and hence wandering on the internet I found EDX, MITO CW, Coursera and great sites to learn rocket science. They truly helped me fill my gap of knowledge for rockets and also various topics. I wish to launch another sugar rocket soon. Till know all the books I have read, have changed my views on how I saw things before. After going through these deep ideas, my eyes views things as nothing but a group of subatomic particles. The thing that saddens me is some of the greatest problems we face, one of them is war. Let's have a world where we do not have weapons, where we do not have Egoistic leaders for whom their whole country suffers. Even one of the greater problem is poverty and the ever demand of energy especially green energy. Using the Space's lush and rich resources we can easily feed ourselves without harming our own Earth for example using Asteroid mining and Solar Energy. Atlas, we all are here alone on this Planet.

It would also be nice to have some suggestions on a more fitting title. I used the first idea I had, but I'm sure there's better options to describe my essay more accurately. Please be honest, and constructive criticism is always welcome! Thank you in advance :) Prompt: Discuss an accomplishment, event, or realization that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others. The daunting task ahead of me consisted of several oddly shaped packages piled on top of a metal table. They were only about two to three feet long with one end protruding out and were extremely heavy to lift. According to the instructions I was given earlier that day, I had to pick them up and wrap them inside a huge plastic trash bag. Standing to my right side, a cheerful woman wearing a white lab coat helped me hold the trash bag open. After hefting two or three packages into the awaiting bag, a sense of curiosity began to nag at the back of my mind. The lab specialist holding the bag open for me saw me lifting a corner of the package and casually mentioned, "Oh, those are just cadaver legs that we used for the Orthopedic lab this morning. We're done with them now, so we're going to ship them off." I was stunned and absolutely speechless. I couldn't believe that this was the same volunteer opportunity that I signed up for in the beginning of the summer... *** The next morning, I remained lying in bed when the alarm blared me to consciousness at 7:45. It was difficult to get up and return to the research institute due to the shocking events of the first day, but it was even harder to give up my commitment after only one day. When I arrived at the lab, there was a full cadaver lying on a draped bed. An instructor dressed in black scrubs explained to us the procedure of channeling catheters through the arm into the heart and encouraged us to step closer for a better view. However, after a few minutes, one of the other volunteers began to sway and stumble around. Before he was able to faint onto the cadaver, the instructor successfully grabbed his shoulders and pushed him against a wall. When he regained his consciousness, he looked up at all our concerned faces and began to laugh. The whole situation was brushed off as if it was completely normal, and he resumed his place around the back table. Once again, I was stunned and absolutely speechless. Even though he fainted in front of a large group of people, I was able to see the amount of courage it took for him to return standing in front of the cadaver. Through the events that happened during the first few days of the summer, I was able to learn several important lessons. First of all, there will always be surprises regardless of whether you least expect them. Second of all, there's no use in being ashamed of anything, because how you deal with it afterwards is more important. Lastly, and the most important of all, even though the surprises that happen in life won't always necessarily be good surprises, there will always be a way to switch them around.

It would also be nice to have some suggestions on a more fitting title. I used the first idea I had, but I'm sure there are better options to describe my essay more accurately. Please be honest, and constructive criticism is always welcome! Thank you in advance :) Prompt: Discuss an accomplishment, event, or realization that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others. The daunting task ahead of me consisted of several oddly shaped packages piled on top of a metal table. They were only about two to three feet long with one end protruding out and were extremely heavy to lift. According to the instructions I was given earlier that day, I had to pick them up and wrap them inside a huge plastic trash bag. Standing to my right side, a cheerful woman wearing a white lab coat helped me hold the trash bag open. After hefting two or three packages into the awaiting bag, a sense of curiosity began to nag at the back of my mind. The lab specialist holding the bag open for me saw me lifting a corner of the package and casually mentioned, "Oh, those are just cadaver legs that we used for the Orthopedic lab this morning. We're done with them now, so we're going to ship them off." I was stunned and absolutely speechless. I couldn't believe that this was the same volunteer opportunity that I signed up for in the beginning of the summer... *** The next morning, I remained lying in bed when the alarm blared me to consciousness at 7:45. It was difficult to get up and return to the research institute due to the shocking events of the first day, but it was even harder to give up my commitment after only one day. When I arrived at the lab, there was a full cadaver lying on a draped bed. An instructor dressed in black scrubs explained to us the procedure of channeling catheters through the arm into the heart and encouraged us to step closer for a better view. However, after a few minutes, one of the other volunteers began to sway and stumble around. Before he was able to faint onto the cadaver, the instructor successfully grabbed his shoulders and pushed him against a wall. When he regained his consciousness, he looked up at all our concerned faces and began to laugh. The whole situation was brushed off as if it was completely normal, and he resumed his place around the back table. Once again, I was stunned and absolutely speechless. Even though he fainted in front of a large group of people, I was able to see the amount of courage it took for him to return standing in front of the cadaver. Through the events that happened during the first few days of the summer, I was able to learn several important lessons. First, there will always be surprises regardless of whether you least expect them. Second of all, there's no use in being ashamed of anything, because how you deal with it afterwards is more important. Lastly, and the most important of all, even though the surprises that happen in life won't always necessarily be good surprises, there will always be a way to switch them around.

Many years ago, I was a first grader who loved drawing sailor moon with her stunning costumes, while other boys in the class were drawing robots. The seed that I was attracted by fashion design got planted at that moment. From time to time, I have drawn down numerous fashion figures with whatever ideas coming across my mind. However, I did not really pursuit to become a fashion designer. In fact, I majored in accounting during the time in university and worked as accountant after graduation. Until one day, 4 years ago, I accidentally found a summer course for basic sewing and patterning skills. I, then, realized that I had never made my drawing come to life by actually making them into garments. The idea of doing that made me so excited. So, I signed up that summer course to put magic on my drawing to turn them into real garments. I not only had a wonderful time with learning to make a dress from draft but also am amazed by discovering how quickly I could comprehend instructor's tips as a beginner. After that course, everything was taking off. I got hired by an athletic wear manufacturing company as a sampling assistant. I learned many skills to handle knitted fabrics with large elasticity when sewing them into garments. In the meanwhile, my friend who owns a shop for lady's wear told me "do you want to sell your designs in my shop"? I seized this chance to see what will people feedback to me. The result was great; my pieces were sold out in a short period of time. And many more opportunities like this came to me. That short-term fashion design course was a wakening call for me to follow my true passion. I want to express myself by telling stories through my collections. I also want women in different generations to find confidence by wearing my clothes. This is such a big dream to achieve. I have earned some experiences from my job and projects, but they were not fully related to the design part. Hence, in my opinion, it is a excellent decision for me to go back to professional school to understand thoroughly the process of design and practical skills, such as computer aid design, patterning and draping technical, to help me develop my own collection. Plus, there will be many fashion students growing up in different backgrounds with various aesthetics in the school. I believe working with them on assignments will not only inspire me but also spark innovative ideas for fashion among us. Lastly, FIDM has multiple connections with famous designers and international brands which is beneficial for me to seek for an internship and I also want to be able to use these connections to have a competitive ranking in job market after graduation. My way finding the career path that I have passion for might be detoured. The result, nevertheless, was worth my time. Drawing dresses and sewing them into garments make me feel so alive. I still remember the thrill that first time my dress was wore by a real person, the satisfaction that people complimented how they appreciated my designs, the ecstasy that my piece was sold, the achievement that I set up a sample room on my own, the request from my manager; and the excitement that an investor asked me to help him start a brand for yoga outfits. My feelings for fashion design more than words can describe. There are endless energy and ideas inside me waiting to be shown to this world. I want to keep doing this for the rest of my life.

Many years ago, I was a first-grader who loved drawing sailor moon with her stunning costumes, while other boys in the class were drawing robots. The seed that I was attracted by fashion design got planted at that moment. From time to time, I have drawn down numerous fashion figures with whatever ideas coming across my mind. However, I did not really pursuit to become a fashion designer. In fact, I majored in accounting during the time in university and worked as accountant after graduation. Until one day, 4 years ago, I accidentally found a summer course for basic sewing and patterning skills. I, then, realized that I had never made my drawing come to life by actually making them into garments. The idea of doing that made me so excited. So, I signed up that summer course to put magic on my drawing to turn them into real garments. I not only had a wonderful time with learning to make a dress from draft but also am amazed by discovering how quickly I could comprehend instructor's tips as a beginner. After that course, everything was taking off. I got hired by an athletic wear manufacturing company as a sampling assistant. I learned many skills to handle knitted fabrics with large elasticity when sewing them into garments. In the meanwhile, my friend who owns a shop for lady's wear told me "do you want to sell your designs in my shop"? I seized this chance to see what will people feedback to me. The result was great; my pieces were sold out in a short period of time. And many more opportunities like this came to me. That short-term fashion design course was a wakening call for me to follow my true passion. I want to express myself by telling stories through my collections. I also want women in different generations to find confidence by wearing my clothes. This is such a big dream to achieve. I have earned some experiences from my job and projects, but they were not fully related to the design part. Hence, in my opinion, it is an excellent decision for me to go back to professional school to understand thoroughly the process of design and practical skills, such as computer aid design, patterning and draping technical, to help me develop my own collection. Plus, there will be many fashion students growing up in different backgrounds with various aesthetics in the school. I believe working with them on assignments will not only inspire me but also spark innovative ideas for fashion among us. Lastly, FILM has multiple connections with famous designers and international brands which is beneficial for me to seek for an internship and I also want to be able to use these connections to have a competitive ranking in job market after graduation. My way finding the career path that I have passion for might be detoured. The result, nevertheless, was worth my time. Drawing dresses and sewing them into garments make me feel so alive. I still remember the thrill that first time my dress was worn by a real person, the satisfaction that people complimented how they appreciated my designs, the ecstasy that my piece was sold, the achievement that I set up a sample room on my own, the request from my manager; and the excitement that an investor asked me to help him start a brand for yoga outfits. My feelings for fashion design more than words can describe. There are endless energy and ideas inside me waiting to be shown to this world. I want to keep doing this for the rest of my life.

I feel like I am most similar to all that is different. I don't singularly identify with my one ethnicity, Persian, but embrace it alongside all the others I have become in the diversity of Houston. At USC, I would willingly accept all who deviate from the norm, primarily because it is this deviation that encourages intelligent debate, and it is that debate that advances society and policy. My belief in the importance of conflicting opinions stems from my experience in my AP History classes. As I read through the works of Russell, Du Bois, and Zinn, I realized that the varying opinions of historians and analysts help invoke new insights into the past, and can lead to a better construct of the present and future. In class debates I always played the role of the contrarian: "Yes increased infrastructure spending can help economic growth, but is that slight advancement worth increasing our already crippling budget deficit?" And enjoyed the arguments that ensued, whether I agreed with them or not. Simply birthing an innovative thought in an otherwise rigid learner's mind is enough to spark a renaissance, one of the most beautiful things to experience. So I helped create Middle Ground, where questions surrounding a topic allow both sides to learn more about each other and understand why that person believes the opposite of what they believe. My goal at USC and in life is to help others cooperate and compromise so that debate wins over division and society advances. Would this essay also work for this prompt? What about your background, or what perspective, belief, or experience, will help you contribute to the education of your classmates?

I feel like I am most similar to all that is different. I don't singularly identify with my one ethnicity, Persian, but embrace it alongside all the others I have become in the diversity of Houston. At USC, I would willingly accept all who deviate from the norm, primarily because it is this deviation that encourages intelligent debate, and it is that debate that advances society and policy. My belief in the importance of conflicting opinions stems from my experience in my AP History classes. As I read through the works of Russell, Du Boys, and Inn, I realized that the varying opinions of historians and analysts help invoke new insights into the past, and can lead to a better construct of the present and future. In class debates I always played the role of the contrarian: "Yes increased infrastructure spending can help economic growth, but is that slight advancement worth increasing our already crippling budget deficit?" And enjoyed the arguments that ensued, whether I agreed with them or not. Simply birthing an innovative thought in an otherwise rigid learner's mind is enough to spark a renaissance, one of the most beautiful things to experience. So I helped create Middle Ground, where questions surrounding a topic allow both sides to learn more about each other and understand why that person believes the opposite of what they believe. My goal at USC and in life is to help others cooperate and compromise so that debate wins over division and society advances. Would this essay also work for this prompt? What about your background, or what perspective, belief, or experience, will help you contribute to the education of your classmates?

The moment I discovered the Ecole hôtelière de Lausanne, my opinion about hospitality management schools was changed and so were my future plans. Introduced to hospitality management courses through an acquaintance of mine, I was quite curious about these types of curriculum relatively new to me. Although I knew about a few hospitality programs in Italy, none of them was specifically a bachelor's degree; they were mostly diplomas, certificates, and masters. While I was surfing the net for more info, I suddenly came across the website of EHL and got a glimpse into one of the best hospitality schools in the world... that was the time I made up my mind to apply for this unique entity. Despite being already enrolled in the Business and Economics degree program at the University of Bologna, I eventually decided to give myself a second chance. Comprehensive educational programs combining university-level academic courses with practical work experience (operational and administrative internships), internationally accredited degrees, real-life business projects, research and interaction with industry experts, a worldwide network of alumni connections make EHL stand out in a crowd of average hospitality institutions. No wonder it has been a pioneer in hospitality education since 1893, setting the standards of Swiss excellence in this customer-based sector. However, its cultural diversity is the distinctive feature that intrigues me the most, with over 115 different nationalities on campus. Being IBC (Italian-born of Chinese descendant) has made me realize over the years what having an international outlook really means. It cannot be simply defined by how many countries you have visited or the time you have spent abroad. It is a cosmopolitan attitude to life, an open-mindedness to other cultures, the willingness to embrace and learn from people of diverse backgrounds, the hunger to be a global citizen. Growing up in a family-owned restaurant has also played a significant role in determining the person I have become. From a young age, my parents have taught me many core values──accountability, perseverance, empathy, empowerment, adaptability, work ethic──all necessary in the hospitality industry and in the business world. While helping with the day-to-day operating activities, I acquired both soft and hard skills as waitress and barista. I was trained to handle several tasks at a time, learn and process information quickly, interact and communicate effectively, memorize customers' faces and preferences, understand their needs and expectations, remain calm under pressure, be good at time management and teamwork. On the other side, having spent most of my childhood surrounded by food has turned me into a real foodie (not to be confused with a glutton). Back in those days, I enjoyed trying out my dad's new recipes whilst giving suggestions for improvement, and actually, I still love it. Beyond the academic offer, I consider co-curriculars to be essential for personal development, and this school is the total package with so many student committees and sport associations to get involved. During my upbringing, I was actively engaged in ballet, swimming and piano classes. In high school, I completed a course to be a FIDAL official at province-level, and coordinated a small-group tour. Thanks to such invaluable experiences, I had the possibility to broaden my horizons. I would not be who I am today without my parents, but I believe that EHL is the right mentor for shaping who I will be tomorrow... Looking forward to joining the EHL family, organizing memorable events (e.g. Fête Finale and Fête Universelle), and living the "Work Hard, Play Harder" lifestyle!

The moment I discovered the Cole hotelier de Lausanne, my opinion about hospitality management schools was changed and so were my future plans. Introduced to hospitality management courses through an acquaintance of mine, I was quite curious about these types of curriculum relatively new to me. Although I knew about a few hospitality programs in Italy, none of them was specifically a bachelor's degree; they were mostly diplomas, certificates, and masters. While I was surfing the net for more info, I suddenly came across the website of EHL and got a glimpse into one of the best hospitality schools in the world... that was the time I made up my mind to apply for this unique entity. Despite being already enrolled in the Business and Economics degree program at the University of Bologna, I eventually decided to give myself a second chance. Comprehensive educational programs combining university-level academic courses with practical work experience (operational and administrative internships), internationally accredited degrees, real-life business projects, research and interaction with industry experts, a worldwide network of alumni connections make EHL stand out in a crowd of average hospitality institutions. No wonder it has been a pioneer in hospitality education since 1893, setting the standards of Swiss excellence in this customer-based sector. However, its cultural diversity is the distinctive feature that intrigues me the most, with over 115 different nationalities on campus. Being IBC (Italian-born of Chinese descendant) has made me realize over the years what having an international outlook really means. It cannot be simply defined by how many countries you have visited or the time you have spent abroad. It is a cosmopolitan attitude to life, an open-mindedness to other cultures, the willingness to embrace and learn from people of diverse backgrounds, the hunger to be a global citizen. Growing up in a family-owned restaurant has also played a significant role in determining the person I have become. From a young age, my parents have taught me many core values──accountability, perseverance, empathy, empowerment, adaptability, work ethic──all necessary in the hospitality industry and in the business world. While helping with the day-to-day operating activities, I acquired both soft and hard skills as waitress and barista. I was trained to handle several tasks at a time, learn and process information quickly, interact and communicate effectively, memorize customers' faces and preferences, understand their needs and expectations, remain calm under pressure, be good at time management and teamwork. On the other side, having spent most of my childhood surrounded by food has turned me into a real foodie (not to be confused with a glutton). Back in those days, I enjoyed trying out my dad's new recipes whilst giving suggestions for improvement, and actually, I still love it. Beyond the academic offer, I consider co-curriculars to be essential for personal development, and this school is the total package with so many student committees and sport associations to get involved. During my upbringing, I was actively engaged in ballet, swimming and piano classes. In high school, I completed a course to be a FINAL official at province-level, and coordinated a small-group tour. Thanks to such invaluable experiences, I had the possibility to broaden my horizons. I would not be who I am today without my parents, but I believe that EHL is the right mentor for shaping who I will be tomorrow... Looking forward to joining the EHL family, organizing memorable events (e.g. Fête Finale and Fête Universally), and living the "Work Hard, Play Harder" lifestyle!

What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT?Why are you interested in the major you are applying to? This question has been very hard for me to answer. Only because there are so many reasons why I think I am a suitable fit for FIT. My dedication and commitment to being a Fashion Model and Artist have led me to see things in life differently. The different life experiences that I've been through has pushed me into becoming the best that I can be. The reason I say this is because Fashion and Art have changed me for the better. It has helped me with expressing who I am without words but through my pieces. During my years of High School, a whole new world was opened up to me that has changed the course of my life forever. Who knew art would turn into my euphoria-causing me to come out like a flourishing butterfly, different from the caterpillar that I once was. Toni Morrison a powerful novelist who inspired me to believe that anything is possible once said, "Life is like water. No matter how much anyone tried to cover it up or build over my dreams, they just came flooding back to the same place in my heart every time and washing the doubt away. When an artist is meant to be an artist, their fate doesn't go away. It comes right back every time". This quote has always inspired me to remember never to doubt myself into becoming who I want to be in life. In the past, I've always been afraid to show my work. I was afraid of what others would say or think. There were times where I wouldn't acknowledge my artwork or say that I created this piece because I was reluctant. One day during my critique in class everyone made a piece of how they felt. Days after critique was completed my professor called me in class to say that he wanted my piece to be presented in our schools Art Gallery. At that moment I was so appalled. That point in time I knew what God had planned for me. Like my father always said, " Everything happens for Reason", and that reason was for me not to be fearful or concerned what others thought of my art because not everyone is going to have something good to say. I knew Graphic Design would be something that I had the desire to do in life. While putting multiple ideas together to create one piece led me into the direction of wanting to be Visual Graphic Designer. I believe Art can be expressed in many different ways and forms. I've been developing my Graphic Design skills at SUNY Potsdam University over the past two years. I took art courses such as Art History, Drawing 1 and 2, Color & Design, 3 Dimensional Design, and Graphic Design & Media Arts 1. Throughout these courses, I've learned and developed different techniques such as being able to create Spreadsheets for a clothing line called PrettylittleThing. I've had the opportunity of making a logo for Orchestra of Northern New York that was presented in there youth charity. I've also created my own Bo Diddley Magazine an old-school rock musician, to remember his legacy that was featured in my schools' magazine. During the summer I did a freelance job, My duty was to design multiple logo signs for an Auto Shop company. I would take pictures and redesign them on Adobe Photoshop, Illustrator, and Indesign. Applying as a Graphic Design major at FIT can help me continue with my originality. I've been interested in art for as long as I can remember, and have enjoyed studying art and showing my own work in high school and throughout college. I can't think of a better place to pursue a major in Graphic Design than Fashion Institute Of Technology. Not only do the courses sound fascinating, but it is my dream to live so close to great museums and close to home. Fashion Institute Of Technology is where I believe I can grab people's attention. Applying to this school can assist me in the right direction by achieving my goal of becoming a Visual Graphic Designer. Having lifelong experiences here at Fashion Institute of Technology can help me with being an effective Visual Graphic Designer in the future.

What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT? Why are you interested in the major you are applying to? This question has been very hard for me to answer. Only because there are so many reasons why I think I am a suitable fit for FIT. My dedication and commitment to being a Fashion Model and Artist have led me to see things in life differently. The different life experiences that I've been through has pushed me into becoming the best that I can be. The reason I say this is that Fashion and Art have changed me for the better. It has helped me with expressing who I am without words but through my pieces. During my years of High School, a whole new world was opened up to me that has changed the course of my life forever. Who knew art would turn into my euphoria-causing me to come out like a flourishing butterfly, different from the caterpillar that I once was. Toni Morrison a powerful novelist who inspired me to believe that anything is possible once said, "Life is like water. No matter how much anyone tried to cover it up or build over my dreams, they just came flooding back to the same place in my heart every time and washing the doubt away. When an artist is meant to be an artist, their fate doesn't go away. It comes right back every time". This quote has always inspired me to remember never to doubt myself into becoming who I want to be in life. In the past, I've always been afraid to show my work. I was afraid of what others would say or think. There were times when I wouldn't acknowledge my artwork or say that I created this piece because I was reluctant. One day during my critique in class everyone made a piece of how they felt. Days after critique was completed my professor called me in class to say that he wanted my piece to be presented in our schools Art Gallery. At that moment I was so appalled. That point in time I knew what God had planned for me. Like my father always said," Everything happens for Reason", and that reason was for me not to be fearful or concerned what others thought of my art because not everyone is going to have something good to say. I knew Graphic Design would be something that I had the desire to do in life. While putting multiple ideas together to create one piece led me into the direction of wanting to be Visual Graphic Designer. I believe Art can be expressed in many ways and forms. I've been developing my Graphic Design skills at SUN Potsdam University over the past two years. Furthermore, I took art courses such as Art History, Drawing 1 and 2, Color camp; Design, 3 Dimensional Design, and Graphic Design camp; Media Arts 1. Throughout these courses, I've learned and developed different techniques such as being able to create Spreadsheets for a clothing line called PrettylittleThing. I've had the opportunity of making a logo for Orchestra of Northern New York that was presented in there youth charity. I've also created my own BO Diddle Magazine an old-school rock musician, to remember his legacy that was featured in my schools' magazine. During the summer I did a freelance job, My duty was to design multiple logo signs for an Auto Shop company. I would take pictures and redesign them on Adobe Photoshop, Illustrator, and InDesign. Applying as a Graphic Design major at FIT can help me continue with my originality. I've been interested in art for as long as I can remember, and have enjoyed studying art and showing my own work in high school and throughout college. I can't think of a better place to pursue a major in Graphic Design than Fashion Institute Of Technology. Not only do the courses sound fascinating, but it is my dream to live so close to great museums and close to home. Fashion Institute Of Technology is where I believe I can grab people's attention. Applying to this school can assist me in the right direction by achieving my goal of becoming a Visual Graphic Designer. Having lifelong experiences here at Fashion Institute of Technology can help me with being an effective Visual Graphic Designer in the future.

I was just writing my Caltech Personal essay for Why I should choose Caltech. I am posting my essay for knowing my essay skills, and would it be a good fit for the prompt. Feel free to point out mistakes. Essay:For me, Scientific exploration is something that I want to dedicate my life, so that my contributions can make the Earth a better place to live, and even beyond Earth say one day when SpaceX or NASA's SLS will take us to far beyond Earth. What I think is, Caltech has one of the brightest minds in field of Astrophysics and Aerospace engineering and these two subjects are my true love. But I'm bit confused about how to choose within the two because probably I won't be allowed to pursue both. I wished to be an Astronaut since a long time, I still wish today to be so. My family probably won't like the idea of seeing me sitting in a Soyuz capsule as the only reason they say, I am skinny and thin and I would die on a spacecraft. Chances are that I would not be accepted as an Astronaut but still I will apply once I complete my Postgraduate Studies. Caltech has the legendary Jet Propulsion Laboratory, a lot of videos by NASA in Youtube shows the JPL logo at the end, especially the Cassini Mission, one of my favorite missions. When I was young I used to see those videos and always dreamt of working with NASA. And studying there would be more fun. I am just astonished to see how there is no student-professor barrier that is prevalent in a lot of places. Professors are cool at Caltech, you know, I saw the "Discovery of Planet IX" video in which Mike Brown and his student just explained the stuff so beautifully. I think, all the edX and MOOCs I have taken will help me a lot in coping up with the difference in American Education system and the Indian Education system. And Caltech can help me extract my inner space scientist in the best possible way. I feel that Caltech is the place that can feed my thirst and curiosity for the Cosmos and "The theory of Everything", Caltech's motivating culture and people suits me the best.

I was just writing my Caltech Personal essay for Why I should choose Caltech. I am posting my essay for knowing my essay skills, and would it be a good fit for the prompt. Feel free to point out mistakes. Essay:For me, Scientific exploration is something that I want to dedicate my life, so that my contributions can make the Earth a better place to live, and even beyond Earth say one day when SpaceX or NASA's SLS will take us to far beyond Earth. What I think is, Caltech has one of the brightest minds in field of Astrophysics and Aerospace engineering and these two subjects are my true love. But I'm a bit confused about how to choose within the two because probably I won't be allowed to pursue both. I wished to be an Astronaut since a long time, I still wish today to be so. My family probably won't like the idea of seeing me sitting in a Soyuz capsule as the only reason they say, I am skinny and thin, and I would die on a spacecraft. Chances are that I would not be accepted as an Astronaut but still I will apply once I complete my Postgraduate Studies. Caltech has the legendary Jet Propulsion Laboratory, a lot of videos by NASA on Youtube shows the JPL logo at the end, especially the Cassini Mission, one of my favorite missions. When I was young I used to see those videos and always dreamt of working with NASA. And studying there would be more fun. I am just astonished to see how there is no student-professor barrier that is prevalent in a lot of places. Professors are cool at Caltech, you know, I saw the "Discovery of Planet IX" video in which Mike Brown and his student just explained the stuff so beautifully. I think, all the EDX and Moons I have taken will help me a lot in coping up with the difference in American Education system and the Indian Education system. And Caltech can help me extract my inner space scientist in the best possible way. I feel that Caltech is the place that can feed my thirst and curiosity for the Cosmos and "The theory of Everything", Caltech's motivating culture and people suits me the best.

It would be great if i got your feedback and advice on it. "Success is walking from failure to failure with no loss of enthusiasm." This quote from Winston Churchill has had plenty of impact in my life. To my understanding, this quote is saying to never give up or lose hope on whatever it is you are trying to succeed. There has been numerous times where I've given up, but I came to my senses once I came across that quote. If i were to give up, I most likely would not be sitting here writing an essay for college, but with the motivation my friends and family have given me I have been able to be successful throughout my life. At an early age, i faced many struggles from not having a good relationship with my mom to stressing about school and keeping my dad satisfied. One of my main priorities has been to always do what my dad says. Both my mom and dad came here for better opportunities that would not just benefit them, but also their children. It was a tough journey for both of them, but they say that if they were able to be successful I can too. They constantly remind me that I should never give up on something i want because the struggle in the end will be worth it. So far, they have been right. My dad has always been my biggest critic. It is true that words have energy and power, I say this because my dad would never lie to me. He always told me the truth about what he thought about me or what i was doing. Sometimes the words he used hurt, but my mom said he says it because he wants me to be in the right path in life. Ever since i can remember I've always put an effort into satisfying my dad. To this day, I'm still not sure why but maybe it's because I've always had a closer bond to him than my mom. My dad is always telling me right from wrong. Even though growing up his personality was very real and strong, i have learned to cope with it since he is a very traditional hispanic father. My family and community have shaped me into the person I am today by observing and having different experiences. I have learned many skills from them especially with my brother. My brother has down syndrome and i have learned to be patient with him. He is the one i would do anything for to keep him happy. I have always loved being apart of my community and help conserve it. My community has had a huge impact in my life ,due to the fact, that i have made new connections. It also makes me feel productive and happy knowing i have done something to help my community. In the end, I am so grateful for the influences i have had in my life and thankful for my parents for being there every step of the way. I am so glad they have been my number one supporters. I wouldn't trade them for the world.

It would be great if I got your feedback and advice on it. "Success is walking from failure to failure with no loss of enthusiasm." This quote from Winston Churchill has had plenty of impact in my life. To my understanding, this quote is saying to never give up or lose hope on whatever it is you are trying to succeed. There have been numerous times when I've given up, but I came to my senses once I came across that quote. If I were to give up, I most likely would not be sitting here writing an essay for college, but with the motivation my friends and family have given me I have been able to be successful throughout my life. At an early age, I faced many struggles from not having a good relationship with my mom to stressing about school and keeping my dad satisfied. One of my main priorities has been to always do what my dad says. Both my mom and dad came here for better opportunities that would not just benefit them, but also their children. It was a tough journey for both of them, but they say that if they were able to be successful I can too. They constantly remind me that I should never give up on something I want because the struggle in the end will be worth it. So far, they have been right. My dad has always been my biggest critic. It is true that words have energy and power, I say this because my dad would never lie to me. He always told me the truth about what he thought about me or what I was doing. Sometimes the words he used hurt, but my mom said he says it because he wants me to be in the right path in life. Ever since I can remember I've always put an effort into satisfying my dad. To this day, I'm still not sure why, but maybe it's because I've always had a closer bond to him than my mom. My dad is always telling me right from wrong. Even though growing up his personality was very real and strong, I have learned to cope with it since he is a very traditional Hispanic father. My family and community have shaped me into the person I am today by observing and having different experiences. I have learned many skills from them especially with my brother. My brother has down syndrome and I have learned to be patient with him. He is the one I would do anything for to keep him happy. I have always loved being a part of my community and help conserve it. My community has had a huge impact in my life, due to the fact, that I have made new connections. It also makes me feel productive and happy knowing I have done something to help my community. In the end, I am so grateful for the influences I have had in my life and thankful for my parents for being there every step of the way. I am so glad they have been my number one supporters. I wouldn't trade them for the world.

Your interests and personalityYour academic objectivesYour goals related to your field of study and personal developmentThe reasons why you wish to pursue them in the U.S.A and how it relates to your interests and future objectives Here is what I've made. I've been growing through difficult times "Belonging to a middle-class family having financial instability, I've fostered through difficult times. Having no siblings, my father ensured best possible education for me. Continuing self-study up to college, the result of pre-entry test reflected my success. Being inquisitive since childhood, I developed a special interest in machines by assisting my father in affixing household appliances. I'd unscrew my remote-controlled toys to see what was inside. Propelled by this curiosity, I chose mechanical engineering and became first in the family to attend a prestigious university. The metallurgical dimension of mechanical engineering has overwhelmingly fascinated me. I'm currently conducting research about advanced materials for turbine blades which will enable them to function at elevated temperatures. Standing at the forefront of technology, I nominate US as the best place to accomplish my research as I'll get chance to learn and consult professional engineers. Apart from academics, I've engaged myself in numerous extra-curricular activities. Working with departmental society, I've been successfully organizing events, fundraising, and blood donation drives. Also, have volunteered in campaigns promoting educational reforms. Being socially active has profited me by refining my interpersonal skills. Besides, I spend time reading about science, history, and philosophy and write relevant articles. Having an unprivileged background, I never managed to travel much. I'm anticipating to utilize this opportunity to explore US' culture, diversity, and education system. Reciprocating cultural customs with international students, I'd embellish my cross-cultural skills. By scrutinizing US' pedagogical methods closely, I'll be able to work for educational reforms in Pakistan." Is my essay convincing enough? If not, please suggest me some tactics to make it look more convincing. Please help. Thank you for your time.

Your interests and personalityYour academic objectivesYour goals related to your field of study and personal development reasons why you wish to pursue them in the U.S.A. and how it relates to your interests and future objectives Here is what I've made. I've been growing through difficult times "Belonging to a middle-class family having financial instability, I've fostered through difficult times. Having no siblings, my father ensured the best possible education for me. Continuing self-study up to college, the result of pre-entry test reflected my success. Being inquisitive since childhood, I developed a special interest in machines by assisting my father in affixing household appliances. I'd unscrew my remote-controlled toys to see what was inside. Propelled by this curiosity, I chose mechanical engineering and became first in the family to attend a prestigious university. The metallurgical dimension of mechanical engineering has overwhelmingly fascinated me. I'm currently conducting research about advanced materials for turbine blades which will enable them to function at elevated temperatures. Standing at the forefront of technology, I nominate US as the best place to accomplish my research as I'll get chance to learn and consult professional engineers. Apart from academics, I've engaged myself in numerous extracurricular activities. Working with departmental society, I've been successfully organizing events, fundraising, and blood donation drives. Also, have volunteered in campaigns promoting educational reforms. Being socially active has profited me by refining my interpersonal skills. Besides, I spend time reading about science, history, and philosophy and write relevant articles. Having an unprivileged background, I never managed to travel much. I'm anticipating to utilize this opportunity to explore US' culture, diversity, and education system. Reciprocating cultural customs with international students, I'd embellish my cross-cultural skills. By scrutinizing US' pedagogical methods closely, I'll be able to work for educational reforms in Pakistan." Is my essay convincing enough? If not, please suggest me some tactics to make it look more convincing. Please help. Thank you for your time.

When I began my studies in Landscape Architecture at the University of ***, UK, I thought it was the right path for me. However, as eager and passionate as I was to create a whole environmental area better along with bringing communities together, I realised that a career in designing was unsuitable for me. Thus I weighed in a decision which was a turning point for my future - changing my major. I carefully considered the strongest aspects of my personality; a passionate interest in natural surroundings, a concern for the environment and understanding of conservation issues. Therefore I have decided to instead, pursue higher studies in the more career relevant to Earth Sciences, which focuses on seeking new and innovative ways to use natural resources and minimize the effects of our activities on other species and the planet. The University of *** offers exactly what I am looking for. It is one of the leading Earth Sciences Departments in Canada and known for excellence in research all over the world. Their faculty members are committed to excellence in scholarship, and to helping me reach my highest potential. Students can investigate their interests in the classroom, the laboratory and the great outdoors. They are given the opportunity to explore the amazing geology of Newfoundland and Labrador such as the rare fossils of Mistaken Point Ecological Reserve and the rugged, unique rocks of the Tablelands in Gros Morne National Park. They have the opportunity to participate in research projects in exotic places like New Zealand, Greece and Mediterranean. Graduates from the programme will not only leave with excellent industry-endorsed scientific training but also with a foundation of marketable career skills. Vietnam's population has rapidly grown and industrial developments have placed unprecedented demands on Earth's natural resources. As a result, a growing demand for scientists and professionals equipped to deal with agricultural and environmental issues means a wide variety of career choices for graduates specializing in environmental science. Moreover, Canada has an excellent higher education system, hence a science degree from Canada is highly sought after in Vietnamese workplace. The cost of is also comparatively affordable, particularly compared to the UK. Having studied in the UK for almost three years, I have gathered a good variety of skills and knowledge. During my A-levels, I chose subjects that would complement each other. Mathematics has helped me to think logically and critically whilst facing difficult challenges, Physics taught me how to apply this information practically. This has given me a solid practical approach and a wide technical knowledge base. Although I left the architecture course early, before I could finish the first year, I was able to encourage my personal development, critical judgement and self-expression, together with strong research skills. I improved these qualities when I had to compile the Cultural context module for my personal investigation as well as taking part in the Designing group project. My Mother will financially support me during my studies. Being the chairman of *** Highschool has allowed her to have a steady income to provide funding to me for the full tuition fees and maintenance while studying in Canada. I have enclosed her business registration along with the certificate of deposit as evidence. I am looking forward to completing the degree and returning to my country with a new perspective on culture, language skills and a great education. I am independent, willing to embrace challenges, and able to cope with diverse situations. Therefore, I will not give up until I have achieved my full potential. This is my passion and I will persevere to succeed.

When I began my studies in Landscape Architecture at the University of ***, UK, I thought it was the right path for me. However, as eager and passionate as I was to create a whole environmental area better along with bringing communities together, I realized that a career in designing was unsuitable for me. Thus, I weighed in a decision which was a turning point for my future - changing my major. I carefully considered the strongest aspects of my personality; a passionate interest in natural surroundings, a concern for the environment and understanding of conservation issues. Therefore, I have decided to instead, pursue higher studies in the more career relevant to Earth Sciences, which focuses on seeking new and innovative ways to use natural resources and minimize the effects of our activities on other species and the planet. The University of *** offers exactly what I am looking for. It is one of the leading Earth Sciences Departments in Canada and known for excellence in research all over the world. Their faculty members are committed to excellence in scholarship, and to helping me reach my highest potential. Students can investigate their interests in the classroom, the laboratory and the great outdoors. They are given the opportunity to explore the amazing geology of Newfoundland and Labrador such as the rare fossils of Mistaken Point Ecological Reserve and the rugged, unique rocks of the Tablelands in Grow More National Park. They have the opportunity to participate in research projects in exotic places like New Zealand, Greece and Mediterranean. Graduates from the program will not only leave with excellent industry-endorsed scientific training but also with a foundation of marketable career skills. Vietnam's population has rapidly grown, and industrial developments have placed unprecedented demands on Earth's natural resources. As a result, a growing demand for scientists and professionals equipped to deal with agricultural and environmental issues means a wide variety of career choices for graduates specializing in environmental science. Moreover, Canada has an excellent higher education system, hence a science degree from Canada is highly sought after in Vietnamese workplace. The cost of is also comparatively affordable, particularly compared to the UK. Having studied in the UK for almost three years, I have gathered a good variety of skills and knowledge. During my A-levels, I chose subjects that would complement each other. Mathematics has helped me to think logically and critically whilst facing difficult challenges, Physics taught me how to apply this information practically. This has given me a solid practical approach and a wide technical knowledge base. Although I left the architecture course early, before I could finish the first year, I was able to encourage my personal development, critical judgement and self-expression, together with strong research skills. I improved these qualities when I had to compile the Cultural context module for my personal investigation as well as taking part in the Designing group project. My Mother will financially support me during my studies. Being the chairman of *** High school has allowed her to have a steady income to provide funding to me for the full tuition fees and maintenance while studying in Canada. I have enclosed her business registration along with the certificate of deposit as evidence. I am looking forward to completing the degree and returning to my country with a new perspective on culture, language skills and a great education. Furthermore, I am independent, willing to embrace challenges, and able to cope with diverse situations. Therefore, I will not give up until I have achieved my full potential. This is my passion and I will persevere to succeed.

A distraught, four-year-old child, tugs on my arm and begs me for spare change, as I walk around the city of Ahmedabad in Gujarat, India. Shocking scenes similar to this one are common in India and have played an immense role in shaping me into who I am today. The several trips I have made to the country of India, have left striking images in my mind. While preparing for my initial visit, in 2011, I pictured country similar to the United States, not what I saw before me. As I walked through the city, I saw images that stayed with me for the rest of my life. Families lived in tiny, self-made cinder block houses without running water or even electricity. Never before had I seen so many children without shoes or even clothes. I witnessed women and children no older than myself plowing fields and living on the side of the street in shacks made out of plywood. I watched as sick men, women, and children begged, on their knees, outside a hospital for flu shots and antibiotics, so that they would not die. My heart sank as I saw people in these horrendous situations, knowing that there was nothing I could do to help them. As I walked back to my grandparent's house, I thought to myself. "How I was put in such an advantageous situation, while others had literally next to nothing and were struggling to survive?" Then, I slowly realized that I was given all of these blessings so that I could take advantage of them, and later come back in order to help those less fortunate than me. Ever since this trip, I began to try, to the fullest extent, to take advantage of all opportunities I was given, especially the ones in the academic realm. I started to transform from a mediocre student to one with a dream of one day becoming a doctor and going back to India to help those who inspired me in the first place. I owe my trips to India for not only altering my life in a way I never thought possible but helping to become the person I am today.

A distraught, four-year-old child, tugs on my arm and begs me for spare change, as I walk around the city of Ahmedabad in Gujarat, India. Shocking scenes similar to this one are common in India and have played an immense role in shaping me into who I am today. The several trips I have made to the country of India, have left striking images in my mind. While preparing for my initial visit, in 2011, I pictured country similar to the United States, not what I saw before me. As I walked through the city, I saw images that stayed with me for the rest of my life. Families lived in tiny, self-made cinder block houses without running water or even electricity. Never before had I seen so many children without shoes or even clothes. I witnessed women and children no older than myself plowing fields and living on the side of the street in shacks made out of plywood. I watched as sick men, women, and children begged, on their knees, outside a hospital for flu shots and antibiotics, so that they would not die. My heart sank as I saw people in these horrendous situations, knowing that there was nothing I could do to help them. As I walked back to my grandparent's house, I thought to myself. "How I was put in such an advantageous situation, while others had literally next to nothing and were struggling to survive?" Then, I slowly realized that I was given all of these blessings so that I could take advantage of them, and later come back in order to help those less fortunate than me. Ever since this trip, I began to try, to the fullest extent, to take advantage of all opportunities I was given, especially the ones in the academic realm. I started to transform from a mediocre student to one with a dream of one day becoming a doctor and going back to India to help those who inspired me in the first place. I owe my trips to India for not only altering my life in a way I never thought possible but helping to become the person I am today.

Yes, I have looked up myself on Google before. Type in the search box: "Vera Kee", then press enter. A list of results will display. My "Google identity" lists my leadership positions and my accomplishments. However, I often I find myself shaking my head, disagreeing with the results. I think Google is wrong. The information that it provides about me is deceitful for it only gives the highlights of my life and the parts of me that I selected to put on my social media account. Google doesn't know that I was actually born in Taiwan and raised single handedly by my biological father nor that I was a foster kid who was bullied by classmates because I had no parents. The Google results of "Vera Kee" will not display that the responsibilities I had as the older sister to take care of my sister and the house because my father was out earning money nor the number of hours I spent to study. I am more than what Google portrays me. My father lost his battle to cancer when I was third grade, and, to my dismay, my mother gave up her legal guardianship for us to be adopted. When an Asian American couple adopted us, however, in my twelve-year-old mind, I envisioned America as an opportunity to start over and the uncertainty of my future as hope. Starting over was much more difficult than expected. I recall times when I blankly stared at the list of vocabulary to memorize and the pile of grammar books and cried until my eyes were swollen. I had to google-translate almost every word in a children's vocabulary book called "Times Giant Book of 4000 Words" and learn to correctly pronounce simple words such as "in" and "ball". However, my desire to succeed motivated me to work hard to adopted the language and culture within a span of one year. As I became adjusted to my new life, I found myself surrounded by a group of talented friends who encourage me to push my own limits and pursue my passions. Nevertheless, I felt isolated for I was still haunted by my past. When people ask "So you're Taiwanese, your dad's Malaysian, and your mom's Korean? How come?", I often remained silent or tried to switch topic. As an older adoptee, my past was like a scar that is permanent and visible because I remembered everything. I viewed my past as my weakness because it hurt and made me feel inferior, not until I accepted my role in the adopted family as my parents' daughter and embraced my past instead of avoiding it. Through both my parents' and friends' acceptance, I learned to accept myself as well. I realized that my past is integral to my identity. Because of the hardships I went through and the difficulties that I faced, I learned how to appreciate opportunities and education. Though I was still embarrassed of my past, I knew that I had to embrace my old self in order to truly mature as an individual because experience itself is a lesson from life. Slowly, I learned to reflect on my life experience and enjoy my identity. The accomplishments I have today are the manifestation of my past. My participation in Leo Club has allowed me to give back to the Lions Club, an international service organization from which I received a scholarship as a child, and my involvement with OCA, an organization focusing on advocating the rights of Asian Americans, helped me to be proud to be a Taiwanese American. Looking back now, the growth I experienced as I started to learn from the past is far more valuable to my identity than my accomplishments, and this is what Google fails to convey about me.

Yes, I have looked up myself on Google before. Type in the search box: "Vera See", then press enter. A list of results will display. My "Google identity" lists my leadership positions and my accomplishments. However, I often I find myself shaking my head, disagreeing with the results. I think Google is wrong. The information that it provides about me is deceitful for it only gives the highlights of my life and the parts of me that I selected to put on my social media account. Google doesn't know that I was actually born in Taiwan and raised single-handedly by my biological father nor that I was a foster kid who was bullied by classmates because I had no parents. The Google results of "Vera See" will not display that the responsibilities I had as the older sister to take care of my sister and the house because my father was out earning money nor the number of hours I spent to study. I am more than what Google portrays me. My father lost his battle to cancer when I was third grade, and, to my dismay, my mother gave up her legal guardianship for us to be adopted. When an Asian American couple adopted us, however, in my twelve-year-old mind, I envisioned America as an opportunity to start over and the uncertainty of my future as hope. Starting over was much more difficult than expected. I recall times when I blankly stared at the list of vocabulary to memorize and the pile of grammar books and cried until my eyes were swollen. I had to google-translate almost every word in a children's vocabulary book called "Times Giant Book of 4000 Words" and learn to correctly pronounce simple words such as "in" and "ball". However, my desire to succeed motivated me to work hard to adopt the language and culture within a span of one year. As I became adjusted to my new life, I found myself surrounded by a group of talented friends who encourage me to push my own limits and pursue my passions. Nevertheless, I felt isolated for I was still haunted by my past. When people ask "So you're Taiwanese, your dad's Malaysian, and your mom's Korean? How come?", I often remained silent or tried to switch topic. As an older adopted, my past was like a scar that is permanent and visible because I remembered everything. I viewed my past as my weakness because it hurt and made me feel inferior, not until I accepted my role in the adopted family as my parents' daughter and embraced my past instead of avoiding it. Through both my parents' and friends' acceptance, I learned to accept myself as well. I realized that my past is integral to my identity. Because of the hardships I went through and the difficulties that I faced, I learned how to appreciate opportunities and education. Though I was still embarrassed of my past, I knew that I had to embrace my old self in order to truly mature as an individual because experience itself is a lesson from life. Slowly, I learned to reflect on my life experience and enjoy my identity. The accomplishments I have today are the manifestation of my past. My participation in Leo Club has allowed me to give back to the Lions Club, an international service organization from which I received a scholarship as a child, and my involvement with OCT, an organization focusing on advocating the rights of Asian Americans, helped me to be proud to be a Taiwanese American. Looking back now, the growth I experienced as I started to learn from the past is far more valuable to my identity than my accomplishments, and this is what Google fails to convey about me.

PROMPT: What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT? Why are you interested in the major you are applying to? The essay is also your chance to tell us more about your experiences, activities and accomplishments. (No more than 750 words, please.) As I was walking to gym class, I could feel the sweat forming on my palms. Girls, gossiping and laughing, disappeared behind the heavy wooden door labeled "GIRLS LOCKER ROOM." Boys, discussing topics greatly foreign to me, sauntered through the opposing door labeled "BOYS LOCKER ROOM." With sky-high heels, bleach blonde hair, and lipstick, what locker room was I supposed to use? I had faced challenges similar to this one; my youth, filled with gender nonconformity and defiance of societal expectations, was a time of experimentation when I discovered my blossoming aspiration to work within the fashion industry. Experimentation has always been a defining component of my character. As a child, I was the only boy amongst my female friends-however, that never stopped me from winning our dress-up competitions. I never questioned myself, even while wearing typically female-gendered clothing, but instead pursued the fire inside me to dress, act, and express how I felt. Therefore, style and fashion came naturally to me, inspiring me to wear whatever caught my eye. Because of this creative viewpoint, I had an easy time choosing classes; if it was related to fashion, art, or design, then I was interested. These classes taught me artistic and fashion skills like composition, trend forecasting, and fashion history. I immersed myself in extracurricular activities: Art Club, Photography Club, Fashion Club, and Yearbook club, where I designed the school fashion page. Through commitment to these clubs, I learned the value of listening to and learning from peers. Rooted in communication and creativity, my background also consists of business, a necessity at the Fashion Institute of Technology (FIT). This intrigue in business was sparked by discussions with my father (a Faculty Associate at the (name of university removed)) about the global fashion market, specifically how companies are able to meet consumer demand while selling products to consumers with rapidly changing needs. This inspired me to intermix my creativity with business by taking courses like AP Statistics. I nurtured data skills such as organization, analysis, and inference making, and will use those in my upcoming Principles of Marketing class, where I will also learn consumer buying behavior and marketing principles. These business skills have ignited my fascination with what makes the fashion marketplace tick. This drove me to become interested in buying, because by forecasting trends, understanding the economy, and communicating, buying is a way to meld my business skills with my eye for fashion into a fulfilling career. With this in mind, I looked for a comprehensive program to combine business and fashion. FIT's Fashion Business Management major spoke to me as a fruitful opportunity, where I could specialize in buying and planning. This, coupled with the Merchandising Society and the Style Shop, makes FIT a standout school for anyone attracted to buying. FIT emphasizes fashion and creativity, but also business. Unlike many other students who only have a fashion or business interest, I encompass both, and these interests along with my background have prepared me to excel in FIT's program. In addition to my fashion and business skills, I have attained a solid academic foundation at (NRHS -name removed high school). This year, the governing body of Public Education in (state) ranked NRHS as the top school in its County. This emphasis on academic excellence and the rigorous curriculum has prepared me for the challenging coursework at FIT. NRHS also puts an emphasis on giving back, encouraging frequent volunteer work through Key Club. At FIT, I would continue to give back through the plethora of exceptional clubs, organizations, and volunteer opportunities, particularly SVCS and LGBTQ+ Students United Club. As a gender nonconforming student, I could contribute an informed point of view to the LGBTQ+ Students United Club. I would advocate for an inclusive environment where all students can feel comfortable giving input into the discourse FIT offers. FIT would bring out the best in my abilities, as I thrive in fast-paced environments like New York City. New York holds opportunities like interning, networking, and learning from industry professionals that cannot be found elsewhere. To study at the Jay and Patty Bakker School of Business and Technology at FIT would give me unparalleled resources and the knowledge to make an impression on the fashion industry while giving back to both my school and community. The challenges I've faced as a gender nonconforming student have intensified my appreciation for academic interaction between students of diverse life experiences. Inclusive communication ultimately leads to fully developed ideas with input from all types of voices and viewpoints. Given the opportunity, I would be thrilled to contribute to FIT's enriched body of diverse scholars and further FIT's outstanding reputation in the fashion industry. Thank you again to anyone who reads this!

PROMPT: What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT? Why are you interested in the major you are applying to? The essay is also your chance to tell us more about your experiences, activities and accomplishments. (No more than 750 words, please.) As I was walking to gym class, I could feel the sweat forming on my palms. Girls, gossiping and laughing, disappeared behind the heavy wooden door labeled "GIRLS LOCKER ROOM." Boys, discussing topics greatly foreign to me, sauntered through the opposing door labeled "BOYS LOCKER ROOM." With sky-high heels, bleach blonde hair, and lipstick, what locker room was I supposed to use? I had faced challenges similar to this one; my youth, filled with gender nonconformity and defiance of societal expectations, was a time of experimentation when I discovered my blossoming aspiration to work within the fashion industry. Experimentation has always been a defining component of my character. As a child, I was the only boy amongst my female friends-however, that never stopped me from winning our dress-up competitions. I never questioned myself, even while wearing typically female-gendered clothing, but instead pursued the fire inside me to dress, act, and express how I felt. Therefore, style and fashion came naturally to me, inspiring me to wear whatever caught my eye. Because of this creative viewpoint, I had an easy time choosing classes; if it was related to fashion, art, or design, then I was interested. These classes taught me artistic and fashion skills like composition, trend forecasting, and fashion history. I immersed myself in extracurricular activities: Art Club, Photography Club, Fashion Club, and Yearbook club, where I designed the school fashion page. Through commitment to these clubs, I learned the value of listening to and learning from peers. Rooted in communication and creativity, my background also consists of business, a necessity at the Fashion Institute of Technology (FIT). This intrigue in business was sparked by discussions with my father (a Faculty Associate at the (name of university removed)) about the global fashion market, specifically how companies are able to meet consumer demand while selling products to consumers with rapidly changing needs. This inspired me to intermix my creativity with business by taking courses like AP Statistics. I nurtured data skills such as organization, analysis, and inference making, and will use those in my upcoming Principles of Marketing class, where I will also learn consumer buying behavior and marketing principles. These business skills have ignited my fascination with what makes the fashion marketplace tick. This drove me to become interested in buying, because by forecasting trends, understanding the economy, and communicating, buying is a way to meld my business skills with my eye for fashion into a fulfilling career. With this in mind, I looked for a comprehensive program to combine business and fashion. FIT's Fashion Business Management major spoke to me as a fruitful opportunity, where I could specialize in buying and planning. This, coupled with the Merchandising Society and the Style Shop, makes FIT a standout school for anyone attracted to buying. FIT emphasizes fashion and creativity, but also business. Unlike many other students who only have a fashion or business interest, I encompass both, and these interests along with my background have prepared me to excel in FIT's program. In addition to my fashion and business skills, I have attained a solid academic foundation at (NRHS -name removed high school). This year, the governing body of Public Education in (state) ranked NRHS as the top school in its County. This emphasis on academic excellence and the rigorous curriculum has prepared me for the challenging coursework at FIT. NRHS also puts an emphasis on giving back, encouraging frequent volunteer work through Key Club. At FIT, I would continue to give back through the plethora of exceptional clubs, organizations, and volunteer opportunities, particularly SVCS and LGBTQ+ Students United Club. As a gender-nonconforming student, I could contribute an informed point of view to the LGBTQ+ Students United Club. I would advocate for an inclusive environment where all students can feel comfortable giving input into the discourse FIT offers. FIT would bring out the best in my abilities, as I thrive in fast-paced environments like New York City. New York holds opportunities like interning, networking, and learning from industry professionals that cannot be found elsewhere. To study at the Jay and Patty Baker School of Business and Technology at FIT would give me unparalleled resources and the knowledge to make an impression on the fashion industry while giving back to both my school and community. The challenges I've faced as a gender-nonconforming student have intensified my appreciation for academic interaction between students of diverse life experiences. Inclusive communication ultimately leads to fully developed ideas with input from all types of voices and viewpoints. Given the opportunity, I would be thrilled to contribute to FIT's enriched body of diverse scholars and further FIT's outstanding reputation in the fashion industry. Thank you again to anyone who reads this!

My name is Ngan. I am a sixteen years old girl born in Vietnam.For the most part of my life, everything is perfect. My father is a successful engineer and a proficient CEO of a building materials and construction joint-stock company who married to a teacher. Then I have 2 annoying younger sisters whom I consider as my fondly running errand girls and I have 2 younger brothers which are twins, they are 3 years old. We live in a house full of happiness. And there are my friends. Two of them I have known since the beginning of time, or at least kindergarten and they know me better than myself. One of them that I met when I was studying at English class last year but it feels like I have known her forever. It is a perfectly normal life. Those stories like this usually start with going to the university, graduate with a good degree and then get a job providing stable income, marry a nice guy and have two or three kids, end up with living happily forever after like every typical, ordinary woman in Vietnam. That is not my dream, my future and more importantly, that is not who I am.For me, life is about learning and experiencing things, to be yourself and do things differently.Since I was a little girl, I have always been curious about the ancient world, about other culture and foreign people. History and politics have had a profound impact on my outlook. From childhood, the tangible history I found in castles, museums and family photographs appealed uniquely to my imagination. As I grew up, both subjects retain their fascination for me and become a perfect platform to a more implicit understanding of the world and its future. My interest seems to be different from other students in Vietnam as nobody cares about how the parliament works, how democracy brings benefits to people and in a developing country where History and other social subjects are considered as not important as Science such as Maths, Physics, I have a strong passion and belief to change the community's stereotypes. Also, I passionate about traveling. In my perspective, immersing myself in as many cultures as I can give me the breadth of experience to make me the most effective thinker. Last year, I had an opportunity to go to to the U.S for a summer camp where I met a lot of new friends coming from many other countries. In there, I experienced a diverse environment and gained social skills. Therefore, when I came back to my hometown, I knew that America is the most suitable for me to study abroad. I consider myself as an ambitious and competitive person. Since the first day of school, I have set my goal is to become the best and train myself to be better every day. My favorite athlete, Venus Williams once said: "I don't focus on what I'm up against. I focus on my goals and I try to ignore the rest." I take this quote as the motto of my life. For me, the pathway to success and dream is not always nice and peaceful, it comprises challenges and obstacles, and I just need to concentrate on what I believe and try my best, I could achieve my goals. Aside from my academic pursuits, I am involved in school activities such as singing competitions and choral society. Having been interested in singing from a young age, I often enjoyed listening some artists such as Beyoncé, Whitney Houston, which ultimately motivated me to join the Glee club and the Hanoi club for singing. Over the past few years, I have also dedicated myself to participating in various forms of charity work which has allowed me to learn a variety of previously alien skills. I worked for VEO ( Volunteer For Education) over the summer and during my tenth-grade year, I volunteered at the Department of Social Services where I helped to prepare the meals for the old people and young orphans. This is my first essay writing about myself so hopefully, somebody will help me edit this.

My name is NGA. I am a sixteen years old girl born in Vietnam. For the most part of my life, everything is perfect. My father is a successful engineer and a proficient CEO of a building materials and construction joint-stock company who married to a teacher. Then I have 2 annoying younger sisters whom I consider as my fondly running errand girls and I have 2 younger brothers which are twins, they are 3 years old. We live in a house full of happiness. And there are my friends. Two of them I have known since the beginning of time, or at least kindergarten, and they know me better than myself. One of them that I met when I was studying at English class last year, but it feels like I have known her forever. It is a perfectly normal life. Those stories like this usually start with going to the university, graduate with a good degree and then get a job providing stable income, marry a nice guy and have two or three kids, end up with living happily forever after like every typical, ordinary woman in Vietnam. That is not my dream, my future and more importantly, that is not who I am. For me, life is about learning and experiencing things, to be yourself and do things differently. Since I was a little girl, I have always been curious about the ancient world, about other culture and foreign people. History and politics have had a profound impact on my outlook. From childhood, the tangible history I found in castles, museums and family photographs appealed uniquely to my imagination. As I grew up, both subjects retain their fascination for me and become a perfect platform to a more implicit understanding of the world and its future. My interest seems to be different from other students in Vietnam as nobody cares about how the parliament works, how democracy brings benefits to people and in a developing country where History and other social subjects are considered as not important as Science such as Math, Physics, I have a strong passion and belief to change the community's stereotypes. Also, I passionate about traveling. In my perspective, immersing myself in as many cultures as I can give me the breadth of experience to make me the most effective thinker. Last year, I had an opportunity to go to the U.S. for a summer camp where I met a lot of new friends coming from many other countries. In there, I experienced a diverse environment and gained social skills. Therefore, when I came back to my hometown, I knew that America is the most suitable for me to study abroad. I consider myself as an ambitious and competitive person. Since the first day of school, I have set my goal is to become the best and train myself to be better every day. My favorite athlete, Venus Williams once said: "I don't focus on what I'm up against. I focus on my goals and I try to ignore the rest." I take this quote as the motto of my life. For me, the pathway to success and dream is not always nice and peaceful, it comprises challenges and obstacles, and I just need to concentrate on what I believe and try my best, I could achieve my goals. Aside from my academic pursuits, I am involved in school activities such as singing competitions and choral society. Having been interested in singing from a young age, I often enjoyed listening some artists such as Beyoncé, Whitney Houston, which ultimately motivated me to join the Glee club and the Hanoi club for singing. Over the past few years, I have also dedicated myself to participating in various forms of charity work which has allowed me to learn a variety of previously alien skills. I worked for VETO (Volunteer For Education) over the summer and during my tenth-grade year, I volunteered at the Department of Social Services where I helped to prepare the meals for the old people and young orphans. This is my first essay writing about myself so hopefully, somebody will help me edit this.

Since I entered high school,I have been overwhelmed by lots of pressure coming from my studies and peer.In pursuit of excellence,sometimes "jealousy" is the most vicious and enormous power that I'm extremely afraid of.Jealousy occupies my mind when I see my classmates performing better than me on studies or the tasks.I concern about how others can be so prominent and how inadequate I am.These feelings haunt my head and as a result make myself less confident. For the reason that I perceive that "jealousy" gets me weaker,I try to fixate on myself instead of observing how others perform.I find this way efficient,as I'm able to accomplish my own task without considering others.Therefore,there are more spare time for me to elevate my ability and erect my self-esteem.Gradually,it becomes easier for me to confront those "jealous" thoughts because I'm always endeavor to trust in myself.By establishing confidence and self-esteem,I transform the evil "jealousy" into the "awareness" of my own mind.

Since I entered high school, I have been overwhelmed by lots of pressure coming from my studies and peer. In pursuit of excellence, sometimes "jealousy" is the most vicious and enormous power that I'm extremely afraid of. Jealousy occupies my mind when I see my classmates performing better than me on studies or the tasks. I concern about how others can be so prominent and how inadequate I am. These feelings haunt my head and as a result make myself less confident. For the reason that I perceive that "jealousy" gets me weaker, I try to fixate on myself instead of observing how others perform. I find this way efficient, as I'm able to accomplish my own task without considering others. Therefore, there are more spare time for me to elevate my ability and erect my self-esteem. Gradually, it becomes easier for me to confront those "jealous" thoughts because I'm always endeavor to trust in myself. By establishing confidence and self-esteem, I transform the evil "jealousy" into the "awareness" of my own mind.

Hi guys, I will be applying for my study permit in about a month from now, therefore, I have made a first draf for you guys look at ; ) Here it comes: I have chosen this program, due to the fact, that during my high school years I had develop a curiosity about Biology, and Chemistry culminating in my participation in scientific Olympic of these two subjects during my school years in Brazil. In this competitions, I discovered my fascination for Biotechnology and bioengineering techniques. Because of my country lack of investment in technology and research, I was lead to pursue an education abroad. I chose to study in Montreal because is the fourth best student's cities in the world, in this year QS ranking, and home to one of the best universities as well. McGill University current ranks between the best 32 universities in the world, and has 12 noble laureates under its belt, the most in Canada. McGill, unlike its counter parts in Brazil, offers me the opportunity of learning with high achieving personnel in my field and provides me the knowledge to make an impact in sustainable energy, pharmaceutical, agricultural, and environment areas in Brazil. My long term goal is to become a prominent professional in the biotechnology industry in my country and work towards its development. I am confident that by achieving a bachelor degree from McGill will enhances my employment opportunities in my home country and the world as well. I think there is still room for improvement but I think I am on the right track. kkkk

Hi guys, I will be applying for my study permit in about a month from now, therefore, I have made a first DRAF for you guys look at ;) Here it comes: I have chosen this program, due to the fact, that during my high school years I had developed a curiosity about Biology, and Chemistry culminating in my participation in scientific Olympic of these two subjects during my school years in Brazil. In these competitions, I discovered my fascination for Biotechnology and bioengineering techniques. Because of my country lack of investment in technology and research, I was lead to pursue an education abroad. I chose to study in Montreal because is the fourth-best student's cities in the world, in this year QS ranking, and home to one of the best universities as well. McGill University current ranks between the best 32 universities in the world, and has 12 noble laureates under its belt, the most in Canada. McGill, unlike its counterparts in Brazil, offers me the opportunity of learning with high achieving personnel in my field and provides me the knowledge to make an impact in sustainable energy, pharmaceutical, agricultural, and environment areas in Brazil. My long term goal is to become a prominent professional in the biotechnology industry in my country and work towards its development. I am confident that by achieving a bachelor degree from McGill will enhance my employment opportunities in my home country and the world as well. I think there is still room for improvement, but I think I am on the right track. Kkkk

With both great excitement and disappointment to see my status update on my admission portal yesterday, I am glad that I still have a chance at attending Barnard College but also anxious about having to wait a few more weeks for the final decision. Please accept this letter as an addendum to my application to provide brief updates on my recent achievements. Since I submitted my application to Barnard, I have won the first place in the Horsemanship Show supervised by the Intercollegiate Horse Shows Association (IHSA) in Region 1 and was named the IHSA semifinalist in early March. On March 17, representing Mount Holyoke College Western Riding Team in IHSA Semi Final, I won the 7th place out of riders selected from 8 regions which represent one-third of total western riding teams in the United States. For this semester, I, along with other senators at Mount Holyoke College, Amherst College, Smith College, and Umass Amherst Student Governments, has initiated a petition called Save Pioneer Valley Transit Authority (PVTA) to save the public transportation taken by most residents in Pioneer Valley of Western Massachusetts every day. We have attracted significant attention by gathering 3,414 signatures on the petition and set up meetings with the Board of Massachusetts Ways and Means and representatives from PVTA in late March. Even though there is a $3 million budget cut that we can offer limited help with, initiating such a petition and fighting for social welfare has given me pride in taking social responsibility. In the past April, I have made major progress on my extra credit project about foreign capital flow at Smith College. My project is directed to test the qualifications of two emerging markets in Latin America- Colombia and Peru- for foreign capital inflow. During the gathering and evaluation of data regarding external balances, global finance, and global business, I have been able to utilize concepts I learned in an international Finance class, including but not limited to the Mundell-Fleming approach, purchasing power parity, exchange rate regimes, and foreign exchange intervention. I have been expanding on my economics, especially finance knowledge, and have been prepared to dive into more fields in a rigorous liberal arts environment of Barnard, with extensive resources from Colombia University background. Despite having to wait for a few more weeks, having any chance to be at Barnard this fall is an honor. After visiting campus last semester, there seems to be no better choice than Barnard to call home for the remaining two years of my college life. I genuinely appreciate the opportunity for a second review based on these additional achievements. As Barnard has been my first and only choice now, if admitted, I will accept without hesitation, be able to pay full tuition and matriculate to the class of 2020.

With both great excitement and disappointment to see my status update on my admission portal yesterday, I am glad that I still have a chance at attending Barnard College but also anxious about having to wait a few more weeks for the final decision. Please accept this letter as an addendum to my application to provide brief updates on my recent achievements. Since I submitted my application to Barnard, I have won the first place in the Horsemanship Show supervised by the Intercollegiate Horse Shows Association (IHS) in Region 1 and was named the IHS semifinalist in early March. On March 17, representing Mount Holyoke College Western Riding Team in IHS Semi Final, I won the 7th place out of riders selected from 8 regions which represent one-third of total western riding teams in the United States. For this semester, I, along with other senators at Mount Holyoke College, Amherst College, Smith College, and Mass Amherst Student Governments, has initiated a petition called Save Pioneer Valley Transit Authority (PVA) to save the public transportation taken by most residents in Pioneer Valley of Western Massachusetts every day. We have attracted significant attention by gathering 3,414 signatures on the petition and set up meetings with the Board of Massachusetts Ways and Means and representatives from PVA in late March. Even though there is a $3 million budget cut that we can offer limited help with, initiating such a petition and fighting for social welfare has given me pride in taking social responsibility. In the past April, I have made major progress on my extra credit project about foreign capital flow at Smith College. My project is directed to test the qualifications of two emerging markets in Latin America-Colombia and Peru-for foreign capital inflow. During the gathering and evaluation of data regarding external balances, global finance, and global business, I have been able to utilize concepts I learned in an international Finance class, including but not limited to the Mundell-Fleming approach, purchasing power parity, exchange rate regimes, and foreign exchange intervention. I have been expanding on my economics, especially finance knowledge, and have been prepared to dive into more fields in a rigorous liberal arts environment of Barnard, with extensive resources from Colombia University background. Despite having to wait for a few more weeks, having any chance to be at Barnard this fall is an honor. After visiting campus last semester, there seems to be no better choice than Barnard to call home for the remaining two years of my college life. I genuinely appreciate the opportunity for a second review based on these additional achievements. As Barnard has been my first and only choice now, if admitted, I will accept without hesitation, be able to pay full tuition and matriculate to the class of 2020.

Katherine H-Grade 11Can attend Band Camp 2018Flute section- Three years When I got there, I was really shy and nervous. Mostly because I missed band camp. It took me a very long time to be able to warm up to all the people there: all very nice and welcoming. Three particular people struck me that year as people who I admired and still do: My section leader, Sarah; the trumpet section leader, Allison; and my BBBS, Charlotte. The three of these people were among the first to show me that they weren't kids, much like who I'd normally interacted with in eighth grade, they knew what was going on and how to deal with people and things, and they'd reach out to me. During that time I realized that Charlotte was the drum major and I thought it was very impressive to see her up there as a highly influential figure leading all the other kids. It looked pretty awesome. Simple intent, I wanted to emit that kind of aura, so I went for drum major that year with a lot of doubt of getting the position. As expected, I didn't end up getting the position, but I still wanted to go for it the next year. And so it went, me trying to adjust myself (Not to change who I am, but to stretch my abilities) to fit the criteria of which was needed to be a drum major. In my mind I recall myself trying to talk to people more at the start of the year, a little awkward. I still am now. I had some combined class with freshman and I tried to befriend them and help where they needed with items such as showing them where things are or telling them about how some aspect of the school operates. At the end of the year I'm still relatively quiet by most people's standards. I go for drum major again, thinking I have a better shot. Second time, I don't get it again, and it struck me hard since there were only three people who applied and I was the odd ball out. I kept contemplating "What is it that I lack" and "What is it that I needed to do to get there". I didn't think I'd apply again for a long time after that event because it must be something that I simply don't have the capacity or ability to do. It caused a lot of frustration, a lot more than it should have probably. After I cooled my head, I wanted to spite myself and prove that I had the ability and potential to be a drum major- adjust quickly to unexpected events and quickly learn what needs to be done for that situation (and be prepared for any surprises); hold mutual respect for my peers; have dedication; be able to produce good results; motivate others; use my prior experience; be enthusiastic; reach out to others ; be clear with communication; be confident;and be empathetic to peers; . It took me a long time to realize those skills previous band leaders had. This leads into the next topic of what I want to see the band accomplish next year. Organization. I talked to a number of students and many of them would agree with the fact it was pretty chaotic and people didn't know what was going on. It can be a fairly simple fix though- for whatever the case is find out what information people need to hear and make sure everyone can find out somehow: be it telling everyone when they're in the room; emails; or telling section leaders to inform students; or just repeating yourself. Another thing is that I'd like being able to march more difficult drills as a group- a set normalcy so that we're used to it and in the future we can learn those drills more easily. An example of that was this year, and it took us a long time to learn. The heart and the diagonal lines in the second song were likely the most difficult drills. And lastly, I want to bring more members into the band. I'm not exactly sure why there are fewer members in our band than in other schools, however, making more showcases to younger students may make them interesting in joining in future years. If there's one thing I'll take away from applying three times, is that I've gained a lot of experience doing this and have no regrets for shooting high, Thank you for reading

Katherine H-Grade 11Can attend Band Camp 2018Flute section- Three years When I got there, I was really shy and nervous. Mostly because I missed band camp. It took me a very long time to be able to warm up to all the people there: all very nice and welcoming. Three particular people struck me that year as people who I admired and still do: My section leader, Sarah; the trumpet section leader, Allison; and my BBBS, Charlotte. The three of these people were among the first to show me that they weren't kids, much like who I'd normally interacted with in eighth grade, they knew what was going on and how to deal with people and things, and they'd reach out to me. During that time I realized that Charlotte was the drum major and I thought it was very impressive to see her up there as a highly influential figure leading all the other kids. It looked pretty awesome. Simple intent, I wanted to emit that kind of aura, so I went for drum major that year with a lot of doubt of getting the position. As expected, I didn't end up getting the position, but I still wanted to go for it the next year. And so it went, me trying to adjust myself (Not to change who I am, but to stretch my abilities) to fit the criteria of which was needed to be a drum major. In my mind I recall myself trying to talk to people more at the start of the year, a little awkward. I still am now. I had some combined class with freshman and I tried to befriend them and help where they needed with items such as showing them where things are or telling them about how some aspect of the school operates. At the end of the year I'm still relatively quiet by most people's standards. I go for drum major again, thinking I have a better shot. Second time, I don't get it again, and it struck me hard since there were only three people who applied, and I was the odd ball out. I kept contemplating "What is it that I lack" and "What is it that I needed to do to get there". I didn't think I'd apply again for a long time after that event because it must be something that I simply don't have the capacity or ability to do. It caused a lot of frustration, a lot more than it should have, probably. After I cooled my head, I wanted to spite myself and prove that I had the ability and potential to be a drum major-adjust quickly to unexpected events and quickly learn what needs to be done for that situation (and be prepared for any surprises); hold mutual respect for my peers; have dedication; be able to produce good results; motivate others; use my prior experience; be enthusiastic; reach out to others ; be clear with communication; be confident;and be empathetic to peers;. It took me a long time to realize those skills previous band leaders had. This leads into the next topic of what I want to see the band accomplish next year. Organization. I talked to a number of students and many of them would agree with the fact it was pretty chaotic and people didn't know what was going on. It can be a fairly simple fix though-for whatever the case is found out what information people need to hear and make sure everyone can find out somehow: be it telling everyone when they're in the room; emails; or telling section leaders to inform students; or just repeating yourself. Another thing is that I'd like being able to march more difficult drills as a group- a set normalcy so that we're used to it and in the future we can learn those drills more easily. An example of that was this year, and it took us a long time to learn. The heart and the diagonal lines in the second song were likely the most difficult drills. And lastly, I want to bring more members into the band. I'm not exactly sure why there are fewer members in our band than in other schools, however, making more showcases to younger students may make them interesting in joining in future years. If there's one thing I'll take away from applying three times, is that I've gained a lot of experience doing this and have no regrets for shooting high, Thank you for reading

This essay is still a work in progress. The start is fine but the ending might feel off, I would be happy to know if there is anything that needs to be removed or added to my essay or if there is something that is needed to be focused on. Savannah College of Art and Design has always been the only school for me. I want to attend SCAD because it is the best school in my humble opinion for my passion which is animation and graphic design. Because I find art and the history of animation so appealing, SCAD has always been my dream school. Since the tenth Grade, my has always been to attend the Savannah College of Art and Design. In my mind, there is nowhere else. I wear two SCAD pins everyday at my current High School, both on my shirt and school bags. Everyday I look up new information about the school because I adore it's teaching style and lesson structure, my love for the structure stems from the fact you can learn more info from both the staff and students. SCAD should consider accepting me because of my enthusiastic and bright personality. I'm optimistic and I'll take criticism of any kind positively. With the Savannah College of Art and Design I'll achieve a new look on art but I would also learn various different art styles and step out of my comfort zone. I believe that SCAD can help me accomplish these things that can help become a better artist. My hope is that SCAD won't just help me improve my artwork, but that they would help me to produce more art. As for my future plans. I want to produce an animated series as well as animated features that would help push the limit to what 2D animation could do, the way series like The spectacular Spider-Man did. I think that the mainstream animation industry abandoned 2D too soon, and I would like to show the world what it's capable of. I want to create stories about the protection of life, and queerness, because with 2D animation dreams can come true.

This essay is still a work in progress. The start is fine, but the ending might feel off, I would be happy to know if there is anything that needs to be removed or added to my essay or if there is something that is needed to be focused on. Savannah College of Art and Design has always been the only school for me. I want to attend SCAD because it is the best school in my humble opinion for my passion which is animation and graphic design. Because I find art and the history of animation so appealing, SCAD has always been my dream school. Since the tenth Grade, my has always been to attend the Savannah College of Art and Design. In my mind, there is nowhere else. I wear two SCAD pins every day at my current High School, both on my shirt and school bags. Every day, I look up new information about the school because I adore it's teaching style and lesson structure, my love for the structure stems from the fact you can learn more info from both the staff and students. SCAD should consider accepting me because of my enthusiastic and bright personality. I'm optimistic, and I'll take criticism of any kind positively. With the Savannah College of Art and Design I'll achieve a new look on art, but I would also learn various different art styles and step out of my comfort zone. I believe that SCAD can help me accomplish these things that can help become a better artist. My hope is that SCAD won't just help me improve my artwork, but that they would help me to produce more art. As for my future plans. I want to produce an animated series as well as animated features that would help push the limit to what 2D animation could do, the way series like The spectacular Spider-Man did. I think that the mainstream animation industry abandoned 2D too soon, and I would like to show the world what it's capable of. Furthermore, I want to create stories about the protection of life, and queerness, because with 2D animation dreams can come true.

Many lessons have been instilled in me throughout my life, lessons that define who I am as a person. One lesson is that success comes many times from humble beginnings . My grandmother was born in Velletri, Italy, in 1930 and lived through starvation and constant threat of death under German occupation.. Caught up in a conflict she knew nothing about, she witnessed the deaths of her relatives, and the constant bombardment of her hometown. Through a act of bravery, her and her family crept across the German lines to Anzio beach, and the safety of the American front. They were greeted with welcome arms, and soon after she moved to America where she married my grandfather, an American soldier at the time. She then raised four children, my father included, in an old GI barracks with no running water or electricity, living on pennies a day. She worked in factories, as well as helping to build their house, transforming the wooded lot in which they lived into a lush country villa, living there to this day in comfort. My father started working at the age of thirteen in the tobacco fields of rural North Carolina, balancing this with his job as a waiter at a seafood restaurant at fourteen. With no aspirations and no money, my father was taken to a military recruiter at 18. He served in the army, and used the money he earned to pay his own way through college, the first and only one in his family to ever go. He continued to serve twenty six years in the army and national guard, flying Apache helicopters. These stories inspired me deeply throughout my life, instilling an overall theme that nothing is impossible through hard work and dedication. My family rose from nothing to become who they are today through a love and dedication for this country. I carry this love and dedication every day through all I do. I used this spirit to join the marching band, becoming a leader of my section and proudly representing my school. I also pursued my athletic goals by joining the wrestling team sophomore year, wrestling varsity that same year. Becoming a wrestler taught me to respect hard work even more, breaking me down and building me up stronger and more diligent.One of my proudest moments was being inducted into the National Honors Society, as well as the Tri-M Music Honors society. All of these things in my life were highlighted by the love I have for my country. America has given me and my family everything, and I owe everything to past Americans whose sacrifices have given me freedom and liberty from tyranny. It would be an honor and a privilege to attend The United States Military Academy at West Point, a culmination of my duty to a higher cause. This is all I have so far, It would be great if I could get some feedback on it, thanks!

Many lessons have been instilled in me throughout my life, lessons that define who I am as a person. One lesson is that success comes many times from humble beginnings. My grandmother was born in Seller, Italy, in 1930 and lived through starvation and constant threat of death under German occupation. Caught up in a conflict she knew nothing about, she witnessed the deaths of her relatives, and the constant bombardment of her hometown. Through an act of bravery, her and her family crept across the German lines to Anti beach, and the safety of the American front. They were greeted with welcome arms, and soon after she moved to America where she married my grandfather, an American soldier at the time. She then raised four children, my father included, in an old GI barracks with no running water or electricity, living on pennies a day. She worked in factories, as well as helping to build their house, transforming the wooded lot in which they lived into a lush country villa, living there to this day in comfort. My father started working at the age of thirteen in the tobacco fields of rural North Carolina, balancing this with his job as a waiter at a seafood restaurant at fourteen. With no aspirations and no money, my father was taken to a military recruiter at 18. He served in the army, and used the money he earned to pay his own way through college, the first and only one in his family to ever go. He continued to serve twenty-six years in the army and national guard, flying Apache helicopters. These stories inspired me deeply throughout my life, instilling an overall theme that nothing is impossible through hard work and dedication. My family rose from nothing to become who they are today through a love and dedication for this country. I carry this love and dedication every day through all I do. I used this spirit to join the marching band, becoming a leader of my section and proudly representing my school. Furthermore, I also pursued my athletic goals by joining the wrestling team sophomore year, wrestling varsity that same year. Becoming a wrestler taught me to respect hard work even more, breaking me down and building me up stronger and more diligent. One of my proudest moments was being inducted into the National Honors Society, as well as the Trim Music Honors society. All of these things in my life were highlighted by the love I have for my country. America has given me and my family everything, and I owe everything to past Americans whose sacrifices have given me freedom and liberty from tyranny. It would be an honor and a privilege to attend The United States Military Academy at West Point, a culmination of my duty to a higher cause. This is all I have so far, It would be great if I could get some feedback on it, thanks!

Respected Visa officer,I am writing this Statement of Purpose to apply for a student visa for a study in Canada. I have already been accepted in Actuarial Science at York University. Enclosed you will find my letter of acceptance and letter of sponsorship from my aunt pledging to fund the full cost of my education and other expenses. After successful completion of Matric in 2013, I started my higher secondary education in the field of Pre-Engineering. I did H.S.C from Board of Intermediate & Secondary Education Karachi, Sindh, Pakistan in 2015; which not only give me a certain set of skills but has also helped me understand my fields of interest and my academic strengths and weaknesses. I am currently doing Bachelor of Electrical Engineering from Usman Institute of Technology affiliated with NED University of Engineering and Technology since September 2015 and have completed the fourth semester with 3.17 CGPA. Being a student from an engineering background, I was able to accomplish all the desired goals and successfully face the hardships of this new technical field with the ongoing immense hard work and dedication to it. Meanwhile, I realized that my stronger area of interest is the statistical and mathematical part in any subject. In Pakistan, the word is "Actuary" is as uncommon as hailing in Karachi. This field, Actuarial Science, has always fascinated me as Actuaries has always been in the limelight for being the extreme minority in the world and also being the highly valued professionals globally. The people of Pakistan are unaware of this field and they often mistook this as a field which is just confined to insurance. But according to my research and findings, Insurance is a part of Actuarial Science but Actuarial Science is itself a dynamic field which covers almost the professions. An Actuary studies Economics, Finance, Statistics, Math, Research and Data Analysis etc. Those various methods caught my attention as I always enjoy analyzing data and running calculations in software like Met lab, SPSS. The computational methods used in engineering for calculating risk of any project being a hit or a miss is something which requires immense calculation for checking the probability of success of the project. All these have always been my strong area of interest and I want to avail this opportunity of learning more ways of further analyzing, predicting and suggesting probable consequencesoutcomes of anything, be it the Policy success, Investment decision, Financial position in coming years or premium calculations. An actuary has the growth opportunity in both Life Contingent and Non life contingent firms therefore; they never fail to make space for them in any Profession. I want to excel in this field and take primary advantage of this international exposure. In my personal opinion, an Actuary plays a key in determining the risk factor in anything. Risk is something which we cannot eliminate from our lives but we, for sure, can minimize its effects through mitigation, control and monitoring or accepting it completely. I started searching for a university that could provide me with a deeper and an explicit approach to the current major along with Actuarial Science. My search ended at "York University", I applied and fortunately got admission to the undergraduate degree program in Actuarial science with a successful transfer of 45 credits from my previous studies at Usman Institute of Technology. Upon submission of my English proficiency documents from my previous attended school and university, York University decided to exempt me from taking IELTS test. Canada became a strong choice because of the various features and facilities it provides. The university is highly research-oriented which is quite important for my course of study. Getting an undergraduate qualification would earn me a great deal of International exposure which I can cash while working in my own country or for the matter of fact anywhere around the world. Students from different Countries with varied experience would form a great pool of classroom experience. The university inspires its students to work hard and gives an equal opportunity to come out with flying colors. Along with this, Canada is a multicultural country which means that during my stay I may face no problem in engaging in activities associated with my culture as well as I can learn about other cultures norms. World recession has made every industry highly competitive. For a successful future, each individual has to present himself with an uncommon qualification and talent that separates him from the mass. From my point of view, I believe I have that potential that will not only further polish my skills of computational logic, good time management, teamwork, problem-solving, leadership but will also vividly assist me in ascending towards my goal of being an actuary. A combination of these aspects of my course would definitely provide my resume with an edge over my contemporaries back in Pakistan. After completing my bachelor studies, I have considered financial analyst as my career. I foresee a bright future for me back in Pakistan by joining any of the multinational company or homegrown company and serve with effective tools to attain long-term goal to be the corporate leader; I will explore opportunities relevant to my intended course making me among the best in my country. I also have physical and emotional ties with my family and friends making an unbreakable bond with my homeland where I plan to pursue my career and fulfill my social obligation, supporting my parents and providing financial and emotional support to my siblings I provided true information in order to help you consider me an eligible candidate.

Respected Visa officer, I am writing this Statement of Purpose to apply for a student visa for a study in Canada. I have already been accepted in Actuarial Science at York University. Enclosed you will find my letter of acceptance and letter of sponsorship from my aunt pledging to fund the full cost of my education and other expenses. After successful completion of Matrix in 2013, I started my higher secondary education in the field of Pre-Engineering. I did H.S.C from Board of Intermediate camp; Secondary Education Karachi, Sindh, Pakistan in 2015; which not only give me a certain set of skills but has also helped me understand my fields of interest and my academic strengths and weaknesses. I am currently doing Bachelor of Electrical Engineering from Usman Institute of Technology affiliated with NED University of Engineering and Technology since September 2015 and have completed the fourth semester with 3.17 CGPA. Being a student from an engineering background, I was able to accomplish all the desired goals and successfully face the hardships of this new technical field with the ongoing immense hard work and dedication to it. Meanwhile, I realized that my stronger area of interest is the statistical and mathematical part in any subject. In Pakistan, the word is "Actuary" is as uncommon as hailing in Karachi. This field, Actuarial Science, has always fascinated me as Actuaries has always been in the limelight for being the extreme minority in the world and also being the highly valued professionals globally. The people of Pakistan are unaware of this field, and they often mistook this as a field which is just confined to insurance. But according to my research and findings, Insurance is a part of Actuarial Science, but Actuarial Science is itself a dynamic field which covers almost the professions. An Actuary studies Economics, Finance, Statistics, Math, Research and Data Analysis etc. Those various methods caught my attention as I always enjoy analyzing data and running calculations in software like Met lab, SPSS. The computational methods used in engineering for calculating risk of any project being a hit or a miss is something which requires immense calculation for checking the probability of success of the project. All these have always been my strong area of interest and I want to avail this opportunity of learning more ways of further analyzing, predicting and suggesting probable consequences outcomes of anything, be it the Policy success, Investment decision, Financial position in coming years or premium calculations. An actuary has the growth opportunity in both Life Contingent and Non life contingent firms therefore; they never fail to make space for them in any Profession. I want to excel in this field and take primary advantage of this international exposure. In my personal opinion, an Actuary plays a key in determining the risk factor in anything. Risk is something which we cannot eliminate from our lives but we, for sure, can minimize its effects through mitigation, control and monitoring or accepting it completely. I started searching for a university that could provide me with a deeper and an explicit approach to the current major along with Actuarial Science. My search ended at "York University", I applied and fortunately got admission to the undergraduate degree program in Actuarial science with a successful transfer of 45 credits from my previous studies at Usman Institute of Technology. Upon submission of my English proficiency documents from my previous attended school and university, York University decided to exempt me from taking IELTS test. Canada became a strong choice because of the various features and facilities it provides. The university is highly research-oriented which is quite important for my course of study. Getting an undergraduate qualification would earn me a great deal of International exposure which I can cash while working in my own country or for the matter of fact anywhere around the world. Students from different Countries with varied experience would form a great pool of classroom experience. The university inspires its students to work hard and gives an equal opportunity to come out with flying colors. Along with this, Canada is a multicultural country which means that during my stay I may face no problem in engaging in activities associated with my culture as well as I can learn about other cultures norms. World recession has made every industry highly competitive. For a successful future, each individual has to present himself with an uncommon qualification and talent that separates him from the mass. From my point of view, I believe I have that potential that will not only further polish my skills of computational logic, good time management, teamwork, problem-solving, leadership but will also vividly assist me in ascending towards my goal of being an actuary. A combination of these aspects of my course would definitely provide my resume with an edge over my contemporaries back in Pakistan. After completing my bachelor studies, I have considered financial analyst as my career. I foresee a bright future for me back in Pakistan by joining any of the multinational company or homegrown company and serve with effective tools to attain long-term goal to be the corporate leader; I will explore opportunities relevant to my intended course making me among the best in my country. I also have physical and emotional ties with my family and friends making an unbreakable bond with my homeland where I plan to pursue my career and fulfill my social obligation, supporting my parents and providing financial and emotional support to my siblings I provided true information in order to help you consider me an eligible candidate.

Essay: Sharing my messy room with my chaotic mind, I always found myself yielding to his troublesome requests. Back when our simplest distraction was driving remote toy cars in our cushion-limited living room, he paused me once declaring his boredom and asked if we could build a fan out of the car's engine. I was about to refuse because we shouldn't break our new toy, but he convinced me when he lured me to imagine how cool I would look carrying a homemade pocket fan.
 The idea worked (Although it wasn't very cool to be stung by a wire every time you moved your leg) and so we continued on our reverse engineering mission, destroying every cool object that we could hold, from my mother's tripod to my sister's small radio, convinced that we were about to make a breakthrough. As we grew up, our opposing tendencies became sort of a union. At some point he would be Tesla, the crazy genius whose wildest aspiration was to learn and build, and I would be Edison, the sharp entrepreneur whose best invention is the most useful one; at others, he would be Wozniak, hacking my father's old computer for fun, and I would be Sherlock, coming up with different theories as we were watching our favorite TV show. Now the reason why my mind played such an important role in my life is its role in maintaining my duality. I was alone, but I had a friend. I was different, but I had a partner. I lived in a community where I wasn't allowed to innovate, so I created my own. In fact, my reality was a post-revolution Tunisia, a country honored by its Arab spring, but unfortunately lost in its quest to prosperity. As much as we were excited about our newborn democracy, we were afraid of it. The same Teacher who encouraged me to seek my dreams warned me about becoming a scientist, the same activist who went with me to the protests, advised me not to approach the cops. I was free, yet captivated at the same time. So as the inconsistency between what I envisioned and what I encountered grew even bigger, this gap became my opportunity to see how my mind and I can solve this enigma. We were rational agents trying to find meaning in an irrational world, and this mindset was exactly the key point that trapped me in my mission to connect with my community. I was seeking logic in a dynamic environment, and my Newtonian calculations and my Sherlockian deductions were by the end a mere reflection of my perception, failing to grasp its complexity.
 As I came to this realization, a duality of calmness and intensity immersed me. I was peaceful because I finally came to terms with my environment, but I was also enthusiastic because I had an unshakable belief in a better one. My everyday life wasn't just about exploring and analyzing anymore, it became a continuity of challenges that help me and my community progress together.

Essay: Sharing my messy room with my chaotic mind, I always found myself yielding to his troublesome requests. Back when our simplest distraction was driving remote toy cars in our cushion-limited living room, he paused me once declaring his boredom and asked if we could build a fan out of the car's engine. I was about to refuse because we shouldn't break our new toy, but he convinced me when he lured me to imagine how cool I would look carrying a homemade pocket fan.
The idea worked (Although it wasn't very cool to be stung by a wire every time you moved your leg) and so we continued on our reverse engineering mission, destroying every cool object that we could hold, from my mother's tripod to my sister's small radio, convinced that we were about to make a breakthrough. As we grew up, our opposing tendencies became sort of a union. At some point he would be Tesla, the crazy genius whose wildest aspiration was to learn and build, and I would be Edison, the sharp entrepreneur whose best invention is the most useful one; at others, he would be Wozniak, hacking my father's old computer for fun, and I would be Sherlock, coming up with different theories as we were watching our favorite TV show. Now the reason why my mind played such an important role in my life is its role in maintaining my duality. I was alone, but I had a friend. I was different, but I had a partner. Furthermore, I lived in a community where I wasn't allowed to innovate, so I created my own. In fact, my reality was a post-revolution Tunisia, a country honored by its Arab spring, but unfortunately lost in its quest to prosperity. As much as we were excited about our newborn democracy, we were afraid of it. The same Teacher who encouraged me to seek my dreams warned me about becoming a scientist, the same activist who went with me to the protests, advised me not to approach the cops. I was free, yet captivated at the same time. So as the inconsistency between what I envisioned and what I encountered grew even bigger, this gap became my opportunity to see how my mind and I can solve this enigma. We were rational agents trying to find meaning in an irrational world, and this mindset was exactly the key point that trapped me in my mission to connect with my community. I was seeking logic in a dynamic environment, and my Newtonian calculations and my Shylockian deductions were by the end a mere reflection of my perception, failing to grasp its complexity.
As I came to this realization, a duality of calmness and intensity immersed me. I was peaceful because I finally came to terms with my environment, but I was also enthusiastic because I had an unshakable belief in a better one. My everyday life wasn't just about exploring and analyzing anymore, it became a continuity of challenges that help me and my community progress together.

As people living in America, "The Land of the Free," you would think that we would have a choice on everything that happens in our lives. The life cycle of a human is birth, live life then die. No matter who that person is, no matter if he or she is rich, famous or if they have the brightest brain in the world, they all die in the end. In a vast amount of deaths is the deaths from terminally ill people who die earlier than others. Since they are basically on a time limit on how much longer they get to live others would say that they should live the rest of their lives the way they want, doing whatever they want and leaving the world on their own terms. However, once some people enter a hospital to get treated for their illness, they never get to leave. The idea of Death with Dignity has been a small but serious idea about whether or not people who are terminally ill should be able to choose whether or not they want to receive healthcare or live the rest of their lives out the way they want, free from drugs and confinement in a hospital ward. In the essay "Death with Dignity" by a forum member with the username Kyra, the writer talks about the Death with Dignity movement and why this movement exists. Although you would think that people could be able to control the setting and the conditions where they would die if they had a terminal illness. However, in all but five states in the United States, terminally ill patients aren't allowed to stop their treatment process and live the rest of their lives the way they want to. Instead they have to stay in a hospital bed connected too various machines and have needles stuck in them for the rest of their lifetime. In the essay it says that Brittney Maynard, the person who brought Death with Dignity to attention, was also a terminally ill patient who had to "move to Oregon where Maynard could obtain Death with Dignity laws." This brings to light that even in the "land of the free" people have to go to great lengths just to die the way they want it they are terminally ill. The fact that Maynard had to move somewhere else just to live her life to the fullest potential, shows that there needs to be a change in the way some medical practitioners think just so they can do what is the best for their patient. According to the "Death with Dignity" homepage, there are different ways that doctors "treat" different terminally ill patients. One of them is called "Terminal Sedation" which is the process of making the patient medically unconscious until the disease takes their life. This process can take a long time because the patient isn't supposed to die the moment that they find out about the disease. Even if they know about the disease and know they can't do anything about it, that doesn't mean that they should be giving up on the rest of their lives to a hospital bed. This obviously feels like it is a waste of the time that the patients have left in their lives since they can be doing something they actually want to do before they die instead of being connected to medical devices and suffering for a longer time than they should be. Although some people might say that these doctors are helping all the patients by letting them live longer through medication and hospital care but in reality, even though these patients might be receiving the best care in the world, they could also be suffering on the inside. The physical pain from the effects of drugs and the mental pain of knowing they are dying but they can't do anything that they want to do in their last days can be even worse for the patient than dying. According to the article, "End the Suffering of Those Who are Terminally Ill" by Raymond Tallis, it states "we have the unequivocal evil of unbearable suffering, often prolonged by medical care, forced on a dying patient who wishes to die," which further explores the reasoning that some of the people with terminal illnesses might want to live the rest of their lives the way they want to in order to end their lives without regrets. With the hospital care that most states force on to patients, they can't really die on a high note. Even though the essay "Death with Dignity" doesn't really have any quantitative data as to how many people are affected by this issue, it doesn't decrease the validity of the topic at all. Instead of providing cold hard facts about the laws and how many people are affected, the essay focuses on engaging the reader's emotions as a basis for the argument. Unless the reader has no sense of compassion for others, this essay is a surefire way to tug at the reader's heartstrings. The emotions that the essay triggers can thus can make the reader inquire about the Death with Dignity Laws themselves and see the history and who these particular laws affect. On the surface, mandatory hospital care for terminally ill patients is a good idea in order for these people to live the longest life they can. But once someone thinks a bit deeper on the issue, they might realize that the patient doesn't want this treatment. Even if they don't want the treatment they can't do anything about it because of laws that bind them. From the essay "Death with Dignity" we can conclude that even though the policies that bind terminally ill patients to a hospital bed is intended to be for the patient's welfare but it might not have the effects of what it is supposed to do.

As people living in America, "The Land of the Free," you would think that we would have a choice on everything that happens in our lives. The life cycle of a human is birth, live life then die. No matter who that person is, no matter if he or she is rich, famous or if they have the brightest brain in the world, they all die in the end. In a vast amount of deaths is the deaths from terminally ill people who die earlier than others. Since they are basically on a time limit on how much longer they get to live others would say that they should live the rest of their lives the way they want, doing whatever they want and leaving the world on their own terms. However, once some people enter a hospital to get treated for their illness, they never get to leave. The idea of Death with Dignity has been a small but serious idea about whether people who are terminally ill should be able to choose whether they want to receive healthcare or live the rest of their lives out the way they want, free from drugs and confinement in a hospital ward. In the essay "Death with Dignity" by a forum member with the username Kyra, the writer talks about the Death with Dignity movement and why this movement exists. Although you would think that people could be able to control the setting and the conditions where they would die if they had a terminal illness. However, in all but five states in the United States, terminally ill patients aren't allowed to stop their treatment process and live the rest of their lives the way they want to. Instead, they have to stay in a hospital bed connected too various machines and have needles stuck in them for the rest of their lifetime. In the essay it says that Brittney Maynard, the person who brought Death with Dignity to attention, was also a terminally ill patient who had to "move to Oregon where Maynard could obtain Death with Dignity laws." This brings to light that even in the "land of the free" people have to go to great lengths just to die the way they want it they are terminally ill. The fact that Maynard had to move somewhere else just to live her life to the fullest potential, shows that there needs to be a change in the way some medical practitioners think just so they can do what is the best for their patient. According to the "Death with Dignity" homepage, there are different ways that doctors "treat" different terminally ill patients. One of them is called "Terminal Sedation" which is the process of making the patient medically unconscious until the disease takes their life. This process can take a long time because the patient isn't supposed to die the moment that they find out about the disease. Even if they know about the disease and know they can't do anything about it, that doesn't mean that they should be giving up on the rest of their lives to a hospital bed. This obviously feels like it is a waste of the time that the patients have left in their lives since they can be doing something they actually want to do before they die instead of being connected to medical devices and suffering for a longer time than they should be. Although some people might say that these doctors are helping all the patients by letting them live longer through medication and hospital care but in reality, even though these patients might be receiving the best care in the world, they could also be suffering on the inside. The physical pain from the effects of drugs and the mental pain of knowing they are dying, but they can't do anything that they want to do in their last days can be even worse for the patient than dying. According to the article, "End the Suffering of Those Who are Terminally Ill" by Raymond Wallis, it states "we have the unequivocal evil of unbearable suffering, often prolonged by medical care, forced on a dying patient who wishes to die," which further explores the reasoning that some people with terminal illnesses might want to live the rest of their lives the way they want to in order to end their lives without regrets. With the hospital care that most states force on to patients, they can't really die on a high note. Even though the essay "Death with Dignity" doesn't really have any quantitative data as to how many people are affected by this issue, it doesn't decrease the validity of the topic at all. Instead of providing cold hard facts about the laws and how many people are affected, the essay focuses on engaging the reader's emotions as a basis for the argument. Unless the reader has no sense of compassion for others, this essay is a surefire way to tug at the reader's heartstrings. The emotions that the essay triggers can thus can make the reader inquire about the Death with Dignity Laws themselves and see the history and who these particular laws affect. On the surface, mandatory hospital care for terminally ill patients is a good idea in order for these people to live the longest life they can. But once someone thinks a bit deeper on the issue, they might realize that the patient doesn't want this treatment. Even if they don't want the treatment they can't do anything about it because of laws that bind them. From the essay "Death with Dignity" we can conclude that even though the policies that bind terminally ill patients to a hospital bed is intended to be for the patient's welfare, but it might not have the effects of what it is supposed to do.

I am applying to BSc program at Bocconi University in Italty. Could you have a look at my motivational letter and suggest some ways I could improve it? Thanks a lot! Dear Admissions Committee, My name is ... and I am a high school graduate from ... I am writing this letter to apply to the BSc International Economics and Management at Bocconi University. As I am looking for an international university that incorporates academic excellence and extracurricular diversity, Bocconi University arises as the school of my choice. With the highly intellectual yet dynamic environment at Bocconi University, I wish to acquire necessary knowledge and skills to manage my own non-profit- organization, PINK. Challenges have always been my fascination. I love to place myself in unfamiliar situations and discover where my limits are. That is the reason why you may find I entered in several academic competitions and engaged myself in a variety of projects. Bocconi would be a perfect fit for me to continue challenging myself in different aspects. With a reputedly rigorous curriculum in line with the ever-changing society, my intellectual curiosity will undoubtedly be satisfied. In grade 10, I established a non-profit organization called PINK, providing educational opportunities to underprivileged children and offering workshops on necessary social skills in the 21st century to the youth. As stated, "Bocconi was founded on economic and social progress with a stress on strong ethics and values". I feel that Bocconi would enormously support my vision when I created PINK: to make a better society. Moreover, a global network of over 100000 alumni in assorted careers would offer me priceless advice on how to innovate PINK day after day. Curious, versatile and ambitious are three adjectives to describe me. From an early age, I have always been eager to know more about the world and how things function. If I am interested in any field, regardless of how much time and effort has, I am committed to finding out the answer. Thanks to my relentless curiosity, I have had a great deal opportunities to take part in various kinds of extracurricular activities as stated in my CV, from fundraising, voluntary teaching to organizing event. In each experience, I applied the boring theory to practical situation and gained hands-on insight into how the professional world resembles in the future. These ranges of activities has well-equipped me for the vigorous milieu at Bocconi and simultaneously, drives me to change the world. The projects and workshops launched by PINK have enabled me to see that the future generation of Vietnam is in desperate need of an improved educational environment. Seeing their potential being wasted, their mindset disorientated, I am inclined to take action. With the qualifications from Bocconi University, I aim to expand PINK to a greater scale, turning it into a national foundation offering help for the youth in terms of academics and orientation. I believe that this is a feasible plan, as Bocconi "prepare us to change the world, not mold us to fit in it" I am ascertained that my academic profile, extracurricular exposure and visions are a great match for Bocconi University. In return, Bocconi would bring out the unexplored side to me, encouraging me to reach what I have aspired to.

I am applying to B.Sc. program at Bocconi University in Italy. Could you have a look at my motivational letter and suggest some ways I could improve it? Thanks a lot! Dear Admissions Committee, My name is ... and I am a high school graduate from ... I am writing this letter to apply to the B.Sc. International Economics and Management at Bocconi University. As I am looking for an international university that incorporates academic excellence and extracurricular diversity, Bocconi University arises as the school of my choice. With the highly intellectual yet dynamic environment at Bocconi University, I wish to acquire necessary knowledge and skills to manage my own non-profit- organization, PINK. Challenges have always been my fascination. I love to place myself in unfamiliar situations and discover where my limits are. That is the reason why you may find I entered several academic competitions and engaged myself in a variety of projects. Broccoli would be a perfect fit for me to continue challenging myself in different aspects. With a reputedly rigorous curriculum in line with the ever-changing society, my intellectual curiosity will undoubtedly be satisfied. In grade 10, I established a non-profit organization called PINK, providing educational opportunities to underprivileged children and offering workshops on necessary social skills in the 21st century to the youth. As stated, "Broccoli was founded on economic and social progress with a stress on strong ethics and values". I feel that Broccoli would enormously support my vision when I created PINK: to make a better society. Moreover, a global network of over 100000 alumni in assorted careers would offer me priceless advice on how to innovate PINK day after day. Curious, versatile and ambitious are three adjectives to describe me. From an early age, I have always been eager to know more about the world and how things function. If I am interested in any field, regardless of how much time and effort has, I am committed to finding out the answer. Thanks to my relentless curiosity, I have had a great deal opportunities to take part in various kinds of extracurricular activities as stated in my CV, from fundraising, voluntary teaching to organize event. In each experience, I applied the boring theory to practical situation and gained hands-on insight into how the professional world resembles in the future. These ranges of activities have well-equipped me for the vigorous milieu at Broccoli and simultaneously, drives me to change the world. The projects and workshops launched by PINK have enabled me to see that the future generation of Vietnam is in desperate need of an improved educational environment. Seeing their potential being wasted, their mindset disorientated, I am inclined to take action. With the qualifications from Bocconi University, I aim to expand PINK to a greater scale, turning it into a national foundation offering help for the youth in terms of academics and orientation. I believe that this is a feasible plan, as Broccoli "prepare us to change the world, not mold us to fit in it" I am ascertained that my academic profile, extracurricular exposure and visions are a great match for Bocconi University. In return, Broccoli would bring out the unexplored side to me, encouraging me to reach what I have aspired to.

I have included my story in the motivation letter. They just require a motivation letter and no further prompts were mentioned.I have put some sentences between brackets for the possibility to delete them in order to make the essay shorter. Dear sir:I am writing to apply for a long-term student visa for Germany in order to pursue my education in Computer scienceBuisness information at Clausthal University of Technology. My interest in applied science dates back to my childhood period.As I was raised in a family that believes in science,during every summer, I enrolled in courses in computer-related topics.In school, I had the desire to discover new-born fields so I was attracted IT to subjects.During high school,I had a passion towards electronics physics and mathematics, and I got the total mark in physics subject and high scores in other scientific ones. All these experiences were paving my way to my prospective career of becoming an engineer.That's why after a lot of hard work,I graduated with high a GPA that let me to enter the faculty of electrical and electronic engineering in Aleppo university. While an undergraduate studying communication engineering in the faculty, I have taken not only courses in the field of communication engineering, but also those related to computer science in which I excelled like:C++ ,Algorithms and data structures and neural networks.I got to know the great deal that computer science has to do with my major and I considered this connection a probable subject for master degree. As I proceeded in my studies,and in response to my arising curiosity I enrolled in private courses in topics that are mutual between communication and computer science like computer networks. I got fascinated by the fact that the transformation of society is closely linked to current developments in communications and information technology, such as the Internet, multimedia and 4G wireless. I was fueled by a desire to contribute to the development of my country's technology in its bright prospect future. My enthusiasm for knowledge was repelled by the erupting war whose onset dates back to seven years. In my college, a lot of the university's best professors has traveled, I was also deprived of an important stage in my study which is the internship, in which the engineer gets mixed with the practicality of the companies. I was on the brink of graduation when situations reached the point where I had to leave Syria after the persistence of electricity cuts and being displaced because my house was bombed. With my lack of practical experience my discontinued study profile,however,I was determined on moving forward to complete my scientific career abroad, (Turkey was the most likely destination to travel .After learning Turkish to a certain extent, I joined a Turkish university, but that university did not reach my ambitions. After doing researches and discussions with most of my colleagues, I found that Turkish universities are not comparable with the level of German or European universities in general.) (I want to take a step further in my undergraduate studies and move to a country where theory and practice are combined to produce a world-class education,a place where brilliant minds cooperate to take the concept of education to the next level,that's when I thought of Germany.) I got to know more about Germany's education system first by my brother who is studying in one of Germany's universities,he reported to me the high quality of education and the well-equipped laboratories in his university. After doing my research, I felt inclined to choose Germany because it's one of the pioneers in the field of computer science.Moreover,living and breathing the international atmosphere and integrating with English and German speaking people in order to develop a third language is undoubtedly one of the motivations for studying in a country as multicultural as Germany. I seek to deepen my knowledge and develop my skills in computer science in regard to my previous study, that's what encouraged me to pick the computer science program of TU Clausthal. It is a unique program in Germany which offers the opportunity to choose a main focus from according to the main fields of Computer Science,(then a certain area of specialization can be chosen from alongside with many others within that main focus accordingly,which led me to) an interdisciplinary specialization that integrates computer engineering with my previous knowledge.This program which has more than one internship that makes it close to industry,stands as an unprecedented opportunity for me to further hone my abilities and compensate for the practical experience that I missed during my existence in Syria . I believe that Syria now more than any other time requires a skilled and high qualified scientists and engineers to contribute to its rebuilding, that's why for now my long term goal is to become a prominent professional in the IT industry in my country and work towards its development and rebuilding. In conclusion I am confident that TU Clausthal is the right place for me to earn the knowledge and exposure to be that engineer with international experience ready to return to Syria after the war ends,as well it will help me achieve me goals and attainment in life. (I didn't mention why I chose this university, I still can if somebody can refer to its importance) thanks.

I have included my story in the motivation letter. They just require a motivation letter and no further prompts were mentioned. I have put some sentences between brackets for the possibility to delete them in order to make the essay shorter. Dear sir:I am writing to apply for a long-term student visa for Germany in order to pursue my education in Computer scienceBuisness information at Clausal University of Technology. My interest in applied science dates back to my childhood period. As I was raised in a family that believes in science, during every summer, I enrolled in courses in computer-related topics. In school, I had the desire to discover newborn fields, so I was attracted IT to subjects. During high school, I had a passion towards electronics physics and mathematics, and I got the total mark in physics subject and high scores in other scientific ones. All these experiences were paving my way to my prospective career of becoming an engineer. That's why after a lot of hard work, I graduated with high a GPA that let me enter the faculty of electrical and electronic engineering in Aleppo university. While an undergraduate studying communication engineering in the faculty, I have taken not only courses in the field of communication engineering, but also those related to computer science in which I excelled like:C++, Algorithms and data structures and neural networks. I got to know the great deal that computer science has to do with my major and I considered this connection a probable subject for master degree. As I proceeded in my studies, and in response to my arising curiosity I enrolled in private courses in topics that are mutual between communication and computer science like computer networks. I got fascinated by the fact that the transformation of society is closely linked to current developments in communications and information technology, such as the Internet, multimedia and 4G wireless. I was fueled by a desire to contribute to the development of my country's technology in its bright prospect future. My enthusiasm for knowledge was repelled by the erupting war whose onset dates back to seven years. In my college, a lot of the university's best professors has traveled, I was also deprived of an important stage in my study which is the internship, in which the engineer gets mixed with the practicality of the companies. I was on the brink of graduation when situations reached the point where I had to leave Syria after the persistence of electricity cuts and being displaced because my house was bombed. With my lack of practical experience my discontinued study profile, however,I was determined on moving forward to complete my scientific career abroad, (Turkey was the most likely destination to travel. After learning Turkish to a certain extent, I joined a Turkish university, but that university did not reach my ambitions. After doing researches and discussions with most of my colleagues, I found that Turkish universities are not comparable with the level of German or European universities in general.) (I want to take a step further in my undergraduate studies and move to a country where theory and practice are combined to produce a world-class education, a place where brilliant minds cooperate to take the concept of education to the next level, that's when I thought of Germany.) I got to know more about Germany's education system first by my brother who is studying in one of Germany's universities, he reported to me the high quality of education and the well-equipped laboratories in his university. After doing my research, I felt inclined to choose Germany because it's one of the pioneers in the field of computer science. Moreover, living and breathing the international atmosphere and integrating with English and German-speaking people in order to develop a third language is undoubtedly one of the motivations for studying in a country as multicultural as Germany. I seek to deepen my knowledge and develop my skills in computer science in regard to my previous study, that's what encouraged me to pick the computer science program of TU Clausal. It is a unique program in Germany which offers the opportunity to choose a main focus from according to the main fields of Computer Science, (then a certain area of specialization can be chosen from alongside with many others within that main focus accordingly, which led me to) an interdisciplinary specialization that integrates computer engineering with my previous knowledge. This program which has more than one internship that makes it close to industry, stands as an unprecedented opportunity for me to further hone my abilities and compensate for the practical experience that I missed during my existence in Syria. I believe that Syria now more than any other time requires a skilled and high qualified scientists and engineers to contribute to its rebuilding, that's why for now my long term goal is to become a prominent professional in the IT industry in my country and work towards its development and rebuilding. In conclusion, I am confident that TU Clausal is the right place for me to earn the knowledge and exposure to be that engineer with international experience ready to return to Syria after the war ends, as well it will help me achieve me goals and attainment in life. (I didn't mention why I chose this university, I still can if somebody can refer to its importance) thanks.

The more I read, the more I understand the world around me, there is an underlying realization I'm confronted with. There is so much in this world which I don't understand. I don't understand the social relationships which underpin the gender roles, I don't understand the inequality which is increasingly underpinning the reality of the 21st-century economy, I don't understand why despite scientific consensus there isn't enough being done to tackle climate change, and, above all, I don't understand how to react to increasing global polarisation of the society. But what I understand is that in order to answer these questions, I need a solid liberal arts undergraduate education. Where I can understand the causes of things, where I can open myself to new ideas, and challenge myself to critically think about the world. This is why I don't intend to choose a major from the point of departure, but aggressively pursue an education in its truest sense. This pushed me to decide to study abroad in the United States, where this form of education has been rightly championed. Over the past few months, as I browsed through liberal arts colleges across the states, there was something which drew me closer to Mount Holyoke. There is no one thing I can point towards. There was no eureka moment. But small things which pulled me towards applying to Mount Holyoke. Perhaps, it is the small, personal nature of the college, or that it has been an incubator of women leaders who have championed social justice causes, or it could be the idea of studying on the bank of the Lower Pond. What's more likely, is that its a combination of these factors. Underpinned by the desire to understand the world, and that journey, for me, begins from Mount Holyoke.

The more I read, the more I understand the world around me, there is an underlying realization I'm confronted with. There is so much in this world which I don't understand. I don't understand the social relationships which underpin the gender roles, I don't understand the inequality which is increasingly underpinning the reality of the 21st-century economy, I don't understand why despite scientific consensus there isn't enough being done to tackle climate change, and, above all, I don't understand how to react to increasing global polarization of the society. But what I understand is that in order to answer these questions, I need a solid liberal arts undergraduate education. Where I can understand the causes of things, where I can open myself to new ideas, and challenge myself to critically think about the world. This is why I don't intend to choose a major from the point of departure, but aggressively pursue an education in its truest sense. This pushed me to decide to study abroad in the United States, where this form of education has been rightly championed. Over the past few months, as I browsed through liberal arts colleges across the states, there was something which drew me closer to Mount Holyoke. There is no one thing I can point towards. There was no eureka moment. But small things which pulled me towards applying to Mount Holyoke. Perhaps, it is the small, personal nature of the college, or that it has been an incubator of women leaders who have championed social justice causes, or it could be the idea of studying on the bank of the Lower Pond. What's more likely, is that it's a combination of these factors. Underpinned by the desire to understand the world, and that journey, for me, begins from Mount Holyoke.

My motto in life is "dream big and do something. Don't just be good but do something excellent". I was born in a family that loves art. My parents have a big influence in shaping my mindset and character. Both of my parents are Bachelor of Arch. My father not only good at drawing but also proficient at handy craft. My mother was going to take fashion design department but constrained in financial problem, so she takes architecture instead. Both of them are really good at art, and the blood of arts also flows in me. Since childhood i have liked art especially dancing. Dancing has taught me to seize the moment and allows me be myself. I had my passion in dancing. I like to express myself through dance that can be enjoyed by everyone. If there are dancing events such as Christmas, Easter and so on, I like to volunteer myself to participate. During high school I took dance extracurricular that allowed me to participate in various events or competitions and multiply my experience in field of dance. I managed to earn several awards in dance competitions such as 1st winner Dance Competition Engineering Expo Riau University and 2nd winner Dance Competition Festival Music Polytechnic Caltex Riau. My family always support me in doing my hobby. My teacher also say that I am talented at dancing and support me. But in the last year of my high school I had to quite dance because I decided to focused on my national exam. My hard work was paying off, I got the highest score in Indonesian language and biology at my school. But back then, I did not know what exactly I want to be. Because in my country which art, especially dance is not very popular, being a dancer is not a promising future. My friend tend to choose majors that popular like accounting, management, etc which much needed now even though it is not their passion. While I am still not sure what to do. But one day when I find out about Art Major Asian Scholarship, I finally found my dream. My dream is one day I will be a choreographer and dancer which is recognize by many people both domestically and internationally. Because in Korea, which is very popular with K-pop, I will be able to develop my dance skills and start a career in art. I want to be a professional choreography and dancer like May J and Lia Kim. I want to be able to make a new and creative choreography with my own style in entertainment industry. Moreover I wish I can take the burden of my tuition fees from my parents. That's why this is so important to me. So in the one last year I started to prepare all the necessary qualifications and focusing on this scholarship. I started to looking for Korean language courses which was very limited because I do not live in big cities in Indonesia. I started to learn from tutoring teacher, internet, books, video, music etc. After 2 months I take the TOPIK exam and pass level 2 with satisfactory result. Seen from the magnitude of world interest to the country of Korea lately especially K-pop and drama series, Korea already has an impact worldwide. Which makes me believe it is a good point to start learning from Korea and it should be a very ideal choice in studying art. Learning directly about Korean lifestyles, league, history, and culture will give me the best lesson and experience. K'Arts is one of the best arts school in South Korea with the professional lecturers which makes the lessons focused on one major to produce professional and experienced graduates in the art field. I hope after I studied in Korean National University of Arts, in the next few years I become a talented dancer who has creative ideas in making choreography that much people like and enjoy. please help me to fix my study plan, all the criticism and advice is very welcome.

My motto in life is "dream big and do something. Don't just be good but do something excellent". I was born in a family that loves art. My parents have a big influence in shaping my mindset and character. Both of my parents are Bachelor of Arch. My father not only good at drawing but also proficient at handy craft. My mother was going to take fashion design department but constrained in financial problem, so she takes architecture instead. Both of them are perfect at art, and the blood of arts also flows in me. Since childhood I have liked art especially dancing. Dancing has taught me to seize the moment and allows me to be myself. I had my passion in dancing. I like to express myself through dance that can be enjoyed by everyone. If there are dancing events such as Christmas, Easter and so on, I like to volunteer myself to participate. During high school I took dance extracurricular that allowed me to participate in various events or competitions and multiply my experience in field of dance. I managed to earn several awards in dance competitions such as 1st winner Dance Competition Engineering Expo IAU University and 2nd winner Dance Competition Festival Music Polytechnic Called IAU. My family always support me in doing my hobby. My teacher also say that I am talented at dancing and support me. But in the last year of my high school I had to quite dance because I decided to focused on my national exam. My hard work was paying off, I got the highest score in Indonesian language and biology at my school. But back then, I did not know what exactly I want to be. Because in my country which art, especially dance is not very popular, being a dancer is not a promising future. My friend tend to choose majors that popular like accounting, management, etc. which much needed now even though it is not their passion. While I am still not sure what to do. But one day when I find out about Art Major Asian Scholarship, I finally found my dream. My dream is one day I will be a choreographer and dancer which is recognize by many people both domestically and internationally. Because in Korea, which is very popular with K-pop, I will be able to develop my dance skills and start a career in art. I want to be a professional choreography and dancer like May J and LIA Kim. I want to be able to make a new and creative choreography with my own style in entertainment industry. Moreover, I wish I can take the burden of my tuition fees from my parents. That's why this is so important to me. So in the one last year I started to prepare all the necessary qualifications and focusing on this scholarship. I started to looking for Korean language courses which was very limited because I do not live in big cities in Indonesia. I started to learn from tutoring teacher, internet, books, video, music etc. After 2 months I take the TOPIC exam and pass level 2 with satisfactory result. Seen from the magnitude of world interest to the country of Korea lately especially K-pop and drama series, Korea already has an impact worldwide. Which makes me believe it is a good point to start learning from Korea, and it should be a very ideal choice in studying art. Learning directly about Korean lifestyles, league, history, and culture will give me the best lesson and experience. K'Arts is one of the best arts school in South Korea with the professional lecturers which makes the lessons focused on one major to produce professional and experienced graduates in the art field. I hope after I studied in Korean National University of Arts, in the next few years I become a talented dancer who has creative ideas in making choreography that much people like and enjoy. Please help me to fix my study plan, all the criticism and advice is very welcome.

I am a person who sets goals high and believes that they can be achieved with self-confidence, commitment, and a belief that you can always improve. Coming from a low financial status family I could not afford any university tuition fees so for an opportunity to get a higher education I invested my time and effort, worked hard and I got a four-year full scholarship. This motivates me to set my goals even higher and work towards achieving them. My curiosity for computers, desire to create something unique and work on great projects with a variety of people to serve our community, led me towards Computer Science, as its main purpose for me is to enable us to impact our world positively. Studying in the U.S. will improve my career possibilities, academic knowledge and leadership skills that will help me to finish my bachelor's degree, as well as motivate, inspire and lead other students towards improvement and growth of our community. I hope to use this experience as an opportunity to get a Fulbright scholarship for master's degree in Computer Science. Few years ago I was on an international cultural exchange tour in Bulgaria as a dance academy member and had a great opportunity to meet people from different countries, learn about diversity, and get a cross-cultural experience and make new friends. I have a strong desire to expand on this previous experience and become a part of American society, learn about a new culture, experience different educational environment, and promote mutual understanding between my country and the USA. I will have a chance to meet a variety of people, build strong relationships and present them my country through International Education Week events and other projects while in the same manner, I will learn about theirs. My first volunteering activity was at school as a leader of a team that collected some free food and clothing for a homeless people. This rewarding experience helped me realize how even a little effort from every one of us can have a positive impact on our community. I want to spread this practice and gain more experience of volunteering. When I return home I will share my knowledge and experience across my community, and try my best with the help of my university to promote volunteering among others in the best possible way. As a curious youngster I have always loved to take on new challenges and hobbies. I started learning Georgian folk dances in an academy when I was 8, followed up by teaching myself how to play the guitar and the piano. Music is my passion, a way to communicate with others. I often play the instruments and dance with my friends to have fun and relax. This exchange period would be a perfect opportunity for me to join local music club, make new friends, learn more about American music culture and share Georgian as well. I assure you, that I will contribute to the program with all my heart and reciprocate the experience by acting as a true ambassador of my country. I realize the potential this program offers and I am certain I will take full advantage of it to return at home as a more mature, independent and a better leader. Please, feel free to post any comments as I will highly appreciate any kind of help. Thanks.

I am a person who sets goals high and believes that they can be achieved with self-confidence, commitment, and a belief that you can always improve. Coming from a low financial status family I could not afford any university tuition fees so for an opportunity to get a higher education I invested my time and effort, worked hard, and I got a four-year full scholarship. This motivates me to set my goals even higher and work towards achieving them. My curiosity for computers, desire to create something unique and work on great projects with a variety of people to serve our community, led me towards Computer Science, as its main purpose for me is to enable us to impact our world positively. Studying in the U.S. will improve my career possibilities, academic knowledge and leadership skills that will help me to finish my bachelor's degree, as well as motivate, inspire and lead other students towards improvement and growth of our community. I hope to use this experience as an opportunity to get a Fulbright scholarship for master's degree in Computer Science. Few years ago I was on an international cultural exchange tour in Bulgaria as a dance academy member and had a great opportunity to meet people from different countries, learn about diversity, and get a cross-cultural experience and make new friends. I have a strong desire to expand on this previous experience and become a part of American society, learn about a new culture, experience different educational environment, and promote mutual understanding between my country and the USA. I will have a chance to meet a variety of people, build strong relationships and present them my country through International Education Week events and other projects while in the same manner, I will learn about theirs. My first volunteering activity was at school as a leader of a team that collected some free food and clothing for a homeless people. This rewarding experience helped me realize how even a little effort from every one of us can have a positive impact on our community. I want to spread this practice and gain more experience of volunteering. When I return home I will share my knowledge and experience across my community, and try my best with the help of my university to promote volunteering among others in the best possible way. As a curious youngster I have always loved to take on new challenges and hobbies. I started learning Georgian folk dances in an academy when I was 8, followed up by teaching myself how to play the guitar and the piano. Music is my passion, a way to communicate with others. I often play the instruments and dance with my friends to have fun and relax. This exchange period would be a perfect opportunity for me to join local music club, make new friends, learn more about American music culture and share Georgian as well. I assure you, that I will contribute to the program with all my heart and reciprocate the experience by acting as a true ambassador of my country. I realize the potential this program offers, and I am certain I will take full advantage of it to return home as a more mature, independent and a better leader. Please, feel free to post any comments as I will highly appreciate any kind of help. Thanks.

During my final year project, I led four male classmates to code a mobile app for KK Women and Children Hospital. This is by far the toughest obstacle that I had faced as we were required to learn a new technology and be proficient enough to code the app within a short timeframe. Nevertheless, I told myself not to give up. Rather than be defeated by it, I fought hard and stayed up until the wee hours to watch online tutorials as well as learning through trial and error to get my functionalities work. Fast forward just 2 weeks before the deadline, I not only manage to produce the core functionalities but also improvised and coded out additional functions on top of the project requirements. This has not only taught me to be committed and focused even if the task on hand is challenging or difficult and has also taught me the importance of managing people in a business context which is essential in the accounting world. In my course, I have also undertaken an accounting module which allows me to learn concepts such as income statements and this has fuelled my passion in accounting ever since. This experiences has support my choice of programme as I feel that as an accountant, not only do I need solid accounting knowledge but also soft skills such as leadership as well as communication skills which are of paramount importance. Upon graduation, I would like to work as an accountant in an accounting firm where I provide key financial information to help facilitate business decisions. Because of my determination of gaining valuable knowledge in the field of accounting as well as a strong background of IT and business, I am keen toundetake bachelor of accounting.

During my final year project, I led four male classmates to code a mobile app for OK Women and Children Hospital. This is by far the toughest obstacle that I had faced as we were required to learn a new technology and be proficient enough to code the app within a short timeframe. Nevertheless, I told myself not to give up. Rather than be defeated by it, I fought hard and stayed up until the wee hours to watch online tutorials as well as learning through trial and error to get my functionalities work. Fast-forward just 2 weeks before the deadline, I not only manage to produce the core functionalities but also improvised and coded out additional functions on top of the project requirements. This has not only taught me to be committed and focused even if the task on hand is challenging or difficult and has also taught me the importance of managing people in a business context which is essential in the accounting world. In my course, I have also undertaken an accounting module which allows me to learn concepts such as income statements and this has fuelled my passion in accounting ever since. This experience has support my choice of program as I feel that as an accountant, not only do I need solid accounting knowledge but also soft skills such as leadership as well as communication skills which are of paramount importance. Upon graduation, I would like to work as an accountant in an accounting firm where I provide key financial information to help facilitate business decisions. Because of my determination of gaining valuable knowledge in the field of accounting as well as a strong background of IT and business, I am keen undertake bachelor of accounting.

I hope the essay can be proof-read for grammar and structure as well as content. The full question is as follows:Reasons for choosing your program and WaterlooPlease tell us about your educational goals, your interest in your chosen program(s), and your reasons for applying to the University of Waterloo. If you have applied to more than one program please discuss your interest in each program. (900 character limit) I was drawn towards the University of Waterloo for 2 main reasons. First of all, the university's reputation as Canada's most innovative university lends itself well to my career goal of working in the field of Data Science, a new and ever-changing field requiring adaptability in its specialists. I believe the university's innovative culture will set me up with the right mindset for actualizing my goal. With the experience at the university with its aspiring student body, I hope to find ways data can improve different existing systems and services. Furthermore, Waterloo complements its academic excellence with its comprehensive co-op program. My lack of experience will hinder my odds of getting a job. In helping me gain valuable practical knowledge and familiarize myself with business practices, the program will fully prepare me with both hard and soft skills to success after graduation. (0 characters left)

I hope the essay can be proofread for grammar and structure as well as content. The full question is as follows:Reasons for choosing your program and WaterlooPlease tell us about your educational goals, your interest in your chosen program(s), and your reasons for applying to the University of Waterloo. If you have applied to more than one program please discuss your interest in each program. (900-character limit) I was drawn towards the University of Waterloo for 2 main reasons. First, the university's reputation as Canada's most innovative university lends itself well to my career goal of working in the field of Data Science, a new and ever-changing field requiring adaptability in its specialists. I believe the university's innovative culture will set me up with the right mindset for actualizing my goal. With the experience at the university with its aspiring student body, I hope to find ways data can improve different existing systems and services. Furthermore, Waterloo complements its academic excellence with its comprehensive co-op program. My lack of experience will hinder my odds of getting a job. In helping me gain valuable practical knowledge and familiarize myself with business practices, the program will fully prepare me with both hard and soft skills to success after graduation. (0 characters left)

I'm used to working alone without help, since I was 8 years old. After my parents had divorced, my mother had to work over 10 hours a day to earn a living and support my family. To help her, I had to do everything on my own. It was my role to take care of my brother, do the dishes, and do extra chores. Even in those circumstances, I tried my best to do my duty as a student and I graduated an elementary school, ranked third out of all students. Though I didn't have enough time to hang out with my friends, I have no regrets at all. I could develop independence and a sense of responsibility by doing all the housework on my own and thinking how to use my time more effectively. Moreover, as I spent most of my time with my brother, we could have a close relationship until now. Now my brother is grown up so I don't have to look after him but I'm still helping my mother with chores. However, no regrets doesn't mean I was always happy back then. I went through a rough time during adolescence. During that time, I've always felt I was different and I just wanted to be alone. By reading psychology books or watching psychology clips on youtube I could overcome the difficult moments. Ever since then, I've got an interest in psychology. Under the influence of my mother, who work as a marketer, I found that I'm especially interested in consumer behavior and marketing. For these reasons, I choose a business administration as my major. Recently I'm looking for specific fields that I would like to work and fields that drew my attention were game, interactive broadcasting service, and tourism. Also I prefer a foreign company. The reason I prefer a foreign company is based on my overseas experiences. I've been to the States when I was 5 years old. I had went to a preschool there and stayed with my relatives who have lived in Los Angeles for many years. Even after I went to elementary school in Korea, I used to visit relatives once a year. Accordingly, I got a lot of great opportunities to make local friends. Since then, I've been able to become familiar with American culture. Besides the United States, I visited various countries such as Indonesia, New Zealand, Japan and Australia. Experience from Australia was particularly special to me. I went to Australia to attend an English language program. Usually when I'm faced with a problem, I tried to solve it on my own through searching or using my own knowledge. However in Australia, I was not familiar with speaking in English and using English in daily life. I had realized that no one will help me if I don't ask them for a help. Therefore, I had to be enthusiastic when I had to. I tried to ask immediately when I got a question and tried to talk a lot to the local people. Also, I had spent most of my weekends with my home stay families and it helped me to learn English and their culture in a short time. Through these efforts, I had adjusted to the new environment very quickly. I became friends with students from all different cultural and religious backgrounds. By associating with them, I was able to learn about various cultures and it has broadened my perspective. I want to interact with people from all over the world and I feel like when I use English I became more confident. Overall experiences from abroad affects my future plan.

I'm used to working alone without help, since I was 8 years old. After my parents had divorced, my mother had to work over 10 hours a day to earn a living and support my family. To help her, I had to do everything on my own. It was my role to take care of my brother, do the dishes, and do extra chores. Even in those circumstances, I tried my best to do my duty as a student and I graduated from an elementary school, ranked third out of all students. Though I didn't have enough time to hang out with my friends, I have no regrets at all. I could develop independence and a sense of responsibility by doing all the housework on my own and thinking how to use my time more effectively. Moreover, as I spent most of my time with my brother, we could have a close relationship until now. Now my brother is grown up, so I don't have to look after him, but I'm still helping my mother with chores. However, no regrets doesn't mean I was always happy back then. I went through a rough time during adolescence. During that time, I've always felt I was different, and I just wanted to be alone. By reading psychology books or watching psychology clips on YouTube I could overcome the difficult moments. Ever since then, I've got an interest in psychology. Under the influence of my mother, who work as a marketer, I found that I'm especially interested in consumer behavior and marketing. For these reasons, I choose a business administration as my major. Recently I'm looking for specific fields that I would like to work and fields that drew my attention were game, interactive broadcasting service, and tourism. Also, I prefer a foreign company. The reason I prefer a foreign company is based on my overseas experiences. I've been to the States when I was 5 years old. I had gone to a preschool there and stayed with my relatives who have lived in Los Angeles for many years. Even after I went to elementary school in Korea, I used to visit relatives once a year. Accordingly, I got a lot of great opportunities to make local friends. Since then, I've been able to become familiar with American culture. Besides the United States, I visited various countries such as Indonesia, New Zealand, Japan and Australia. Experience from Australia was particularly special to me. I went to Australia to attend an English language program. Usually when I'm faced with a problem, I tried to solve it on my own through searching or using my own knowledge. However, in Australia, I was not familiar with speaking in English and using English in daily life. I had realized that no one will help me if I don't ask them for a help. Therefore, I had to be enthusiastic when I had to. I tried to ask immediately when I got a question and tried to talk a lot to the local people. Also, I had spent most of my weekends with my home stay families, and it helped me to learn English and their culture in a short time. Through these efforts, I had adjusted to the new environment very quickly. I became friends with students from all different cultural and religious backgrounds. By associating with them, I was able to learn about various cultures, and it has broadened my perspective. I want to interact with people from all over the world and I feel like when I use English I became more confident. Overall experiences from abroad affects my future plan.

definitely still a WIP. start and ending feel rough; in general would love to know if there's anything extraneous that can be removed or if things need to be more focused. Some starts are rougher than others. In high school, I battled depression with doodles in the margins of my math notebooks and clung to my sketchbook like a security blanket. But if you'd asked me what I wanted to do with my life, I would've come up blank-despite drawing being my one constant love. Community college was a blessing I didn't know I needed. Suddenly, there were more art classes than I knew what to do with. I took what was required for my degree, and whatever else I could get my hands on-storyboarding, figure drawing, sculpture, painting. Some of them I took twice. Two things changed at this point. First, I started reading more webcomics. Unlike in high school, their creators weren't anonymous internet behemoths. They were people my age, publishing their work and gushing about their stories just like I gushed about mine. Something that seemed so distant and dominated by big-name industry players was suddenly well within reach. The stories these people told were fresh and exciting; they made me remember what it was I loved about art on those days when I could hardly get myself to draw. I had to keep going, so that I could tell my stories too. Signing up for storyboarding my first semester drove the idea home: there was no one right way to tell a story; no medium I had to restrict myself to. I fell in love the way I fell in love with comics, and was delighted to discover SCAD's sequential art program, where I could continue to draw nothing but. My hope is that SCAD will not only help me improve as a sequential artist, but allow me to reach a place where I produce work not out of a sense of obligation, but because I enjoy it. At this point in my life, a relentless dissatisfaction with my art is one of my primary driving forces, and I want to find a way to leave that behind. There's nothing wrong with constantly striving for improvement, but not when it prevents you from being proud of what you've already achieved. Future plans are wide-spread. I also want to produce animated features and short films that push the envelope of what 2D animation can do, the way films like Secret of Kells did. I feel like the mainstream animation industry abandoned 2D too soon, and I want to show people what it's capable of. And I want to make comics that do for people what so many webcomics did for me. I want to tell stories about mental illness, and queerness, (and monsters, and space pirates, and-) because there's nothing like finding a story about someone that is like you. A story that says, yes, you can have the adventure. You can tame the dragon and have the happy ending. And then you can go on and tell your story, too.

Definitely still a WIP. Start and ending feel rough; in general would love to know if there's anything extraneous that can be removed or if things need to be more focused. Some starts are rougher than others. In high school, I battled depression with doodles in the margins of my math notebooks and clung to my sketchbook like a security blanket. But if you'd asked me what I wanted to do with my life, I would've come up blank-despite drawing being my one constant love. Community college was a blessing I didn't know I needed. Suddenly, there were more art classes than I knew what to do with. I took what was required for my degree, and whatever else I could get my hands on-storyboarding, figure drawing, sculpture, painting. Some of them I took twice. Two things changed at this point. First, I started reading more webcomics. Unlike in high school, their creators weren't anonymous internet behemoths. They were people my age, publishing their work and gushing about their stories just like I gushed about mine. Something that seemed so distant and dominated by big-name industry players was suddenly well within reach. The stories these people told were fresh and exciting; they made me remember what it was I loved about art on those days when I could hardly get myself to draw. I had to keep going, so that I could tell my stories too. Signing up for story boarding my first semester drove the idea home: there was no one right way to tell a story; no medium I had to restrict myself to. I fell in love the way I fell in love with comics, and was delighted to discover SCAD's sequential art program, where I could continue to draw nothing but. My hope is that SCAD will not only help me improve as a sequential artist, but allow me to reach a place where I produce work not out of a sense of obligation, but because I enjoy it. At this point in my life, a relentless dissatisfaction with my art is one of my primary driving forces, and I want to find a way to leave that behind. There's nothing wrong with constantly striving for improvement, but not when it prevents you from being proud of what you've already achieved. Future plans are wide-spread. I also want to produce animated features and short films that push the envelope of what 2D animation can do, the way films like Secret of Tells did. I feel like the mainstream animation industry abandoned 2D too soon, and I want to show people what it's capable of. And I want to make comics that do for peopling what so many webcomics did for me. I want to tell stories about mental illness, and queerness, (and monsters, and space pirates, and-) because there's nothing like finding a story about someone that is like you. A story that says, yes, you can have the adventure. You can tame the dragon and have the happy ending. And then you can go on and tell your story, too.

I have a lovely family, I have a mother, father, and one sister. My mother name is Sri Wulansari. My mother is a cool mom, why? Because she does not only became a good mother, but also a good worker. Yes, my mom is career mother, and if I can describe, my mom is the greatest mom in this world. My father name is Nursyamsu Santoro, my father good workers too, the patient one in this family, kind, and always teach me how to be a good person. My sister name is Anindya Siti Fauziah, my sister is a cute one in this family, like if you see her, you will actually in love with her beauty and her cutie face, my sister is still school in Junior High School 5 Malang. Yes, I love my family like a lot. I love to be here, I mean on this campus because is near from my house. Usually, I go to campus with my friend ride a motorcycle. If you ask me I love English or not, absolutely I love English like so much, why? Because this language is unique and complicated sometimes. I love English, start at my Elementary School, and I listening Westlife song, the title is My Love. This song is good in my ear and I do not know English anymore, but when I listening to Westlife song, I felt alive. From that song, and from that time, I learn English and I do love English. But I knew that my English still bad until now, my grammar is not good anyway, so I need direction to help my English skill. Please help me for my grammar, thank you ^^

I have a lovely family, I have a mother, father, and one sister. My mother name is Sri Wulansari. My mother is a cool mom, why? Because she does not only become a good mother, but also a good worker. Yes, my mom is career mother, and if I can describe, my mom is the greatest mom in this world. My father name is Nursyamsu Santos, my father good workers too, the patient one in this family, kind, and always teach me how to be a good person. My sister name is India Site Faith, my sister is a cute one in this family, like if you see her, you will actually in love with her beauty and her cutie face, my sister is still school in Junior High School 5 Along. Yes, I love my family like a lot. I love to be here, I mean on this campus because it is near to house. Usually, I go to campus with my friend ride a motorcycle. If you ask me I love English or not, absolutely I love English like so much, why? Because this language is unique and complicated sometimes. I love English, start at my Elementary School, and I'm listening Westlife song, the title is My Love. This song is good in my ear and I do not know English anymore, but when I'm listening to Westlife song, I felt alive. From that song, and from that time, I learn English and I do love English. But I knew that my English still bad until now, my grammar is not good anyway, so I need direction to help my English skill. Please help me for my grammar, thank you ^^

ESSAY: Choosing the right school is a decision that I do not take lightly, and I'm looking for an institution that can provide the most opportunities for me to grow academically and develop my character. Ever since I first laid eyes on the great pillars of Bascom Hall I couldn't get Madison out of my mind. Okay, it may be one of the top research institutions in the nation, it may have one of the greatest NCAA football teams in America, and it may have a world class academic faculty, but so many other schools check these boxes. And yet UW-Madison has made me more excited about continuing my education than any other school. The reason is because of its abundance of opportunities and strong sense of school spirit and community. Of course, the main reason I am applying to any school is to further my education so I can arm myself with the intellectual tenacity that will allow me to serve my purpose in life most fully. The Wisconsin idea that education should extend beyond the classroom to benefit all people in the state I cannot agree with enough, and I hope to fulfill this profound legacy throughout my life as I give back to the world. Aside from the extensive amount of classes offered, I am interested in seeking opportunities that will further my experience in the field of computer science, and in particular artificial intelligence and machine learning. I hope to take courses in artificial intelligence and seek research opportunities with the professors to gain experience in the process of acquiring knowledge. Aside from broadening my academic arsenal I also intend on building my character through participating in extracurricular activities. The moment I decided that I belonged at UW Madison was when I read through the list of student led organizations. What an impressive and diverse list of interests! If the diversity of the list is any reflection of the student body I am sure to fit right in. To name a few of the clubs that sparked my enthusiasm, I would get involved with the Art History Society, Better Business Ideas, Chess Club, Entrepreneurship of UW-Madison, the Madison Debate Society, Men's Rugby Club, and the Society of Undergraduate Research. I'm thrilled just thinking about being an active member of the group of students that proudly call themselves Badgers. To top it all off, Madison just seems like an amazing place to be. Of course the scenery is incredibly beautiful, and there are plenty of things to do downtown. But I am most interested in the fact that Madison is Wisconsin's capitol. Politics have always been an important part of my understanding of the world, and what better place to have such an interest? University should be the engine that drives civilization to greater heights. It should produce an alumni that are motivated to take on the world and make a difference to better their fellow man. It should inspire its students to reach their fullest potential by taking as many opportunities as they can. I aim to make my alma mater proud someday, and if you would have me, I will wear my Badge with honor.

ESSAY: Choosing the right school is a decision that I do not take lightly, and I'm looking for an institution that can provide the most opportunities for me to grow academically and develop my character. Ever since I first laid eyes on the great pillars of Mascot Hall I couldn't get Madison out of my mind. Okay, it may be one of the top research institutions in the nation, it may have one of the greatest NCAA football teams in America, and it may have a world-class academic faculty, but so many other schools check these boxes. And yet UW-Madison has made me more excited about continuing my education than any other school. The reason is because of its abundance of opportunities and strong sense of school spirit and community. Of course, the main reason I am applying to any school is to further my education, so I can arm myself with the intellectual tenacity that will allow me to serve my purpose in life most fully. The Wisconsin idea that education should extend beyond the classroom to benefit all people in the state I cannot agree with enough, and I hope to fulfill this profound legacy throughout my life as I give back to the world. Aside from the extensive amount of classes offered, I am interested in seeking opportunities that will further my experience in the field of computer science, and in particular artificial intelligence and machine learning. I hope to take courses in artificial intelligence and seek research opportunities with the professors to gain experience in the process of acquiring knowledge. Aside from broadening my academic arsenal I also intend on building my character through participating in extracurricular activities. The moment I decided that I belonged at UW Madison was when I read through the list of student led organizations. What an impressive and diverse list of interests! If the diversity of the list is any reflection of the student body I am sure to fit right in. To name a few of the clubs that sparked my enthusiasm, I would get involved with the Art History Society, Better Business Ideas, Chess Club, Entrepreneurship of UW-Madison, the Madison Debate Society, Men's Rugby Club, and the Society of Undergraduate Research. I'm thrilled just thinking about being an active member of the group of students that proudly call themselves Badgers. To top it all off, Madison just seems like an amazing place to be. Of course the scenery is incredibly beautiful, and there are plenty of things to do downtown. But I am most interested in the fact that Madison is Wisconsin's capitol. Politics have always been an important part of my understanding of the world, and what better place to have such an interest? University should be the engine that drives civilization to greater heights. It should produce an alumnus that are motivated to take on the world and make a difference to better their fellow man. It should inspire its students to reach their fullest potential by taking as many opportunities as they can. I aim to make my alma mater proud someday, and if you would have me, I will wear my Badge with honor.

Essay prompt: Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve. While studying psychology at the University of South Florida, I participated in various research projects and observed the research environment first-hand. The knowledge and experiences I earned in the lab resonate with my initial reasons for choosing psychology as my major: Whether it be an individual or a larger group, I wish to investigate the reasons people act a certain way, their mental processes, and the ways we could predict and thus prevent harmful thinking patterns and behaviors before they arise as a major problem with an individual or a group. I seek to get an extensively enriching education towards this goal. That is why I wish to be a part of the comprehensive and challenging psychology program offered at the University of Miami. I believe that the rigorous academics, research opportunities, and the guidance of proficient instructors at UM will provide insight and knowledge that I need to gain proficiency in my field, and also prepare me for future challenges I will encounter in my occupation. With a world-class education from UM, I would feel confident that I could build a rewarding career after graduation. The extracurricular and involvement opportunities at UM also fit my needs and interests. The polyphonic choir and the orchestra I attended in high school thought me how to be a team player and provided me with invaluable friendships and experiences. I want to get involved with musical and artistic events in college as well, besides other extracurricular activities. In my freshman year, I took the English Composition I class and discovered my passion for writing. This year I am taking many other writing-intensive courses such as Critical Thinking, Introduction to Literature, and Composition II which allow me to further develop and enhance my writing skills. With the Arts & Sciences Magazine at UM, I would have the opportunity to share my work with an intellectual community and seek their feedback. With UM's wide variety of clubs and organizations, I would have numerous opportunities to express myself and contribute to the school spirit. Besides the prestigious academics and abundant involvement opportunities, UM's diverse and intellectual student body is another element that I aspire to be a part of. As I visited the campus several times, I realized the beauty of the diversity and the vibrant school spirit at The U. I was deeply impressed with the hospitality of the people on campus and the legendary school spirit. I believe that it is an imperative part of college for us students to interact with people from different backgrounds, gain insights from other's lives and cultures, expand our view of the world and create a productive environment with the harmony of our personas and individual strengths. Because only then we can genuinely experience the status of being a well-educated individual: a person who is able to express and defend arguments efficiently, truly relate to people and serve as a loyal team player. That is why I chose to study abroad in the first place, because I know for a fact that I will never be, neither intellectually nor spiritually, satisfied with the limited world of the familiar. With the diverse and vigorous student body of UM, I would have many chances to share the same interests, goals, backgrounds or ambitions with the community -and if not nothing else, our minds and thoughts. It is apparent that UM can help me fulfill all of my aspirations. The comprehensive academics at UM would be an invaluable source for the knowledge I seek. Besides theory, UM would also provide me with numerous opportunities such as research, extracurricular and community service projects for me to experience and practice what I had learned. Seeing that UM would be the most beneficial guide through my intended journey, I feel ready and motivated to put all my efforts to such a dynamic environment: both as a hard-working student and a devoted part of the community.

Essay prompt: Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve. While studying psychology at the University of South Florida, I participated in various research projects and observed the research environment first-hand. The knowledge and experiences I earned in the lab resonate with my initial reasons for choosing psychology as my major: Whether it be an individual or a larger group, I wish to investigate the reasons people act a certain way, their mental processes, and the ways we could predict and thus prevent harmful thinking patterns and behaviors before they arise as a major problem with an individual or a group. I seek to get an extensively enriching education towards this goal. That is why I wish to be a part of the comprehensive and challenging psychology program offered at the University of Miami. I believe that the rigorous academics, research opportunities, and the guidance of proficient instructors at UM will provide insight and knowledge that I need to gain proficiency in my field, and also prepare me for future challenges I will encounter in my occupation. With a world-class education from UM, I would feel confident that I could build a rewarding career after graduation. The extracurricular and involvement opportunities at UM also fit my needs and interests. The polyphonic choir and the orchestra I attended in high school thought me how to be a team player and provided me with invaluable friendships and experiences. I want to get involved with musical and artistic events in college as well, besides other extracurricular activities. In my freshman year, I took the English Composition I class and discovered my passion for writing. This year I am taking many other writing-intensive courses such as Critical Thinking, Introduction to Literature, and Composition II which allow me to further develop and enhance my writing skills. With the Arts camp; Sciences Magazine at UM, I would have the opportunity to share my work with an intellectual community and seek their feedback. With UM's wide variety of clubs and organizations, I would have numerous opportunities to express myself and contribute to the school spirit. Besides the prestigious academics and abundant involvement opportunities, UM's diverse and intellectual student body is another element that I aspire to be a part of. As I visited the campus several times, I realized the beauty of the diversity and the vibrant school spirit at The U. I was deeply impressed with the hospitality of the people on campus and the legendary school spirit. I believe that it is an imperative part of college for us students to interact with people from different backgrounds, gain insights from other's lives and cultures, expand our view of the world and create a productive environment with the harmony of our personas and individual strengths. Because only then we can genuinely experience the status of being a well-educated individual: a person who is able to express and defend arguments efficiently, truly relate to people and serve as a loyal team player. That is why I chose to study abroad in the first place, because I know for a fact that I will never be, neither intellectually nor spiritually, satisfied with the limited world of the familiar. With the diverse and vigorous student body of UM, I would have many chances to share the same interests, goals, backgrounds or ambitions with the community -and if not nothing else, our minds and thoughts. It is apparent that UM can help me fulfill all of my aspirations. The comprehensive academics at UM would be an invaluable source for the knowledge I seek. Besides theory, UM would also provide me with numerous opportunities such as research, extracurricular and community service projects for me to experience and practice what I had learned. Seeing that UM would be the most beneficial guide through my intended journey, I feel ready and motivated to put all my efforts to such a dynamic environment: both as a hard-working student and a devoted part of the community.

Dear SirMadams,My name is "XXX", and I am writing this letter to express my enthusiasm in pursuing the Bachelor program in Applied Computer Science at "XXX University". I believe by studying in one of the most recognized and qualified university in Netherlands will broaden my knowledge and practical skills relating to the field of computer science. In my last year of primary school, I got a phone for the first time. I explored the fascinating world of technology through my little antique phone. As I wandered in curiosity, I encountered my favorite game called Sudoku. Again, stunned by the advancement of technology, I wondered how people made Sudoku playable on a tiny screen. I found out later that Sudoku and many other games are made by programming. During my secondary school, I learned some basic programming and markup language which are Visual Basic, ActionScript on Adobe Flash, and HTML. Even though I stumbled on many obstacles and faced countless dead-end, I kept on creating projects and making simple websites. I was bemused that the words I typed could fill a blank sheet with colors, animations, and even interactive programs. These experiences incented me to delve deeper into the realm of computer science. Throughout my school, I have participated in opportunities that strengthened my abilities on leadership and team work. The scout activities I used to participate taught me how important it is to trust and respect each other in order to achieve outstanding results. As a leader, I learned to give my ears to those in needs and making tough decisions that satisfy members in my team. I am eager to gain new experiences, enhance my skills, and utilize them to give a great contribution to the society. Studying at Saxion University of Applied Sciences will be a perfect springboard for my future career. Thank you for considering my application. Yours sincerely,Keiko Question :1. Please kindly give me some feedbacks :) 2. I am going to apply for a scholarship on the same university, should I use this same motivational letter? This one that i typed is for the admissions. 3. I am still in secondary school, so is the grammar on the third paragraph right?

Dear Armadas, My name is "XXX", and I am writing this letter to express my enthusiasm in pursuing the Bachelor program in Applied Computer Science at "XXX University". I believe by studying in one of the most recognized and qualified university in the Netherlands will broaden my knowledge and practical skills relating to the field of computer science. In my last year of primary school, I got a phone for the first time. I explored the fascinating world of technology through my little antique phone. As I wandered in curiosity, I encountered my favorite game called Sudoku. Again, stunned by the advancement of technology, I wondered how people made Sudoku playable on a tiny screen. I found out later that Sudoku and many other games are made by programming. During my secondary school, I learned some basic programming and markup language which are Visual Basic, ActionScript on Adobe Flash, and HTML. Even though I stumbled on many obstacles and faced countless dead-end, I kept on creating projects and making simple websites. I was bemused that the words I typed could fill a blank sheet with colors, animations, and even interactive programs. These experiences incented me to delve deeper into the realm of computer science. Throughout my school, I have participated in opportunities that strengthened my abilities on leadership and team work. The scout activities I used to participate taught me how important it is to trust and respect each other in order to achieve outstanding results. As a leader, I learned to give my ears to those in needs and making tough decisions that satisfy members in my team. I am eager to gain new experiences, enhance my skills, and utilize them to give a great contribution to the society. Studying at Saxon University of Applied Sciences will be a perfect springboard for my future career. Thank you for considering my application. Yours sincerely, Keiko Question :1. Please kindly give me some feedbacks :) 2. I am going to apply for a scholarship on the same university, should I use this same motivational letter? This one that I typed is for the admissions. 3. I am still in secondary school, so is the grammar on the third paragraph right?

Does life have a meaning? This universal question has gone unanswered for thousands of years, or at least for my entire life. Albert Camus was a man whose views contributed to absurdism, a philosophy that was expressed in his novel The Stranger, a book that kept me reading and questioning. Camus believed that although a human should accept the condition of life being absurd, he should still continue to go explore and look for the meaning of life. He basically believed that life means what you want it to mean, what you make it to mean. I side with Camus. Albert Camus basically defines the meaning of life by using the Myth of Sisyphus to illustrate that the world can't meet the demands of definition. What's the Myth of Sisyphus you ask? When a man named Sisyphus was punished by the gods with a task to roll a boulder up the hill all day knowing it's just going to roll back down, Sisyphus learned to accept the absurdity and enjoy his life although he found his task meaningless. What Camus is trying to get at is if we can't imagine that Sisyphus is happy at life, we will never be. There's no real objective meaning to life, there never is going to be; life is what you make it out to be, if you sit on your arse all your life, go to work, come home, and sleep, and that's it, that's not living life. Because of this, he finds religion or spirituality as a coward's way out from the reality of our world. After my Grandma passed, I realized that life is short because you don't know what can come up. I was 11 when she passed and I couldn't even say goodbye because at first I didn't know what was happening, but then my little brain started to piece it together, piece by piece, she was gone. It was then that I realized , I need to make the most of my life, I need to do what I want to do in life. Life is what you make it, so make the best out of it, don't follow a template . In conclusion, life is life, live it to your full potential. Explore the world, try new foods, do what you think will complete you, that will complete your quest, the quest of life. That's how I've been thinking since 11 and it's how I'm going to think until my time is up; Camus and my grandma helped me realize that.

Does life have a meaning? This universal question has gone unanswered for thousands of years, or at least for my entire life. Albert Camus was a man whose views contributed to absurdism, a philosophy that was expressed in his novel The Stranger, a book that kept me reading and questioning. Camus believed that although a human should accept the condition of life being absurd, he should still continue to go explore and look for the meaning of life. He basically believed that life means what you want it to mean, what you make it to mean. I side with Camus. Albert Camus basically defines the meaning of life by using the Myth of Sisyphus to illustrate that the world can't meet the demands of definition. What's the Myth of Sisyphus you ask? When a man named Sisyphus was punished by the gods with a task to roll a boulder up the hill all day knowing it's just going to roll back down, Sisyphus learned to accept the absurdity and enjoy his life, although he found his task meaningless. What Camus is trying to get at is if we can't imagine that Sisyphus is happy at life, we will never be. There's no real objective meaning to life, there never is going to be; life is what you make it out to be, if you sit on your ass all your life, go to work, come home, and sleep, and that's it, that's not living life. Because of this, he finds religion or spirituality as a coward's way out from the reality of our world. After my Grandma passed, I realized that life is short because you don't know what can come up. I was 11 when she passed, and I couldn't even say goodbye because at first I didn't know what was happening, but then my little brain started to piece it together, piece by piece, she was gone. It was then that I realized, I need to make the most of my life, I need to do what I want to do in life. Life is what you make it, so make the best out of it, don't follow a template. In conclusion, life is life, live it to your full potential. Explore the world, try new foods, do what you think will complete you, that will complete your quest, the quest of life. That's how I've been thinking since 11, and it's how I'm going to think until my time is up; Camus and my grandma helped me realize that.

Here my essay so far:From a young age, the world of live performance and expression has captivated my eye. Growing up with parents in the music industry, I saw the impact of live music and how much it affects people. As I went through grade school, I found myself choosing classes that directed me to the creative path. One of excitement and promise. I naturally found myself behind the sound console in the theatre and it has never failed to bring my passion and joy. I joined technical theatre club, participated in productions as well as aided in our school winning state-given awards in the theatre department. Even outside of class, I found myself following audio technology, going to as many shows as I could and feeding off those experiences to fuel my own. After graduating from UT Austin, I plan to pursue a career in the theatre. Whether that be a live performance in music or acting, I find myself most comfortable in the sound booth. There is nothing that captivates me more than the magic of live performances. During my time in high school however, my GPA bega to dip. I focused too much on my extracurricular activities, such as technical theatre, than my studies. As a young teenager, I was immature towards education and thought of it more as a "chore" than an opportunity. I was always unclear about my career path and what I wanted to do in my life. But after graduating, I decided to complete my core classes at Austin Community College and use that opportunity to transfer into UT Austin. Since then, my academic discipline has strengthened significantly and I possess a newfound work ethic that has aided me in class as well as life. There is no place in the country I'd rather be than right here in Austin, Texas. After living here for 9 years, I've found a blend of cultures, background, and opportunities, unlike any other city I've visited. The "live music capital of the world" title is no accident as every day, bands and artists thrive through the copious amount of venues and clubs around the city. The great thing about UT Austin is that it just happens to possess one of the best theatre programs in the country. It's large theatre and knowledgeable staff offer training on the professional level which would aid in my creative color pallet. I see this not as just an opportunity to grow, but also to meet other like-minded individuals that will broaden my horizons. Thank you for your time and Hook em' Horns!

Here is my essay so far:From a young age, the world of live performance and expression has captivated my eye. Growing up with parents in the music industry, I saw the impact of live music and how much it affects people. As I went through grade school, I found myself choosing classes that directed me to the creative path. One of excitement and promise. I naturally found myself behind the sound console in the theater, and it has never failed to bring my passion and joy. I joined technical theater club, participated in productions as well as aided in our school winning state-given awards in the theater department. Even outside of class, I found myself following audio technology, going to as many shows as I could and feeding off those experiences to fuel my own. After graduating from UT Austin, I plan to pursue a career in the theater. Whether that be a live performance in music or acting, I find myself most comfortable in the sound booth. There is nothing that captivates me more than the magic of live performances. During my time in high school however, my GPA began to dip. I focused too much on my extracurricular activities, such as technical theater, than my studies. As a young teenager, I was immature towards education and thought of it more as a "chore" than an opportunity. I was always unclear about my career path and what I wanted to do in my life. But after graduating, I decided to complete my core classes at Austin Community College and use that opportunity to transfer into UT Austin. Since then, my academic discipline has strengthened significantly, and I possess a newfound work ethic that has aided me in class as well as life. There is no place in the country I'd rather be than right here in Austin, Texas. After living here for 9 years, I've found a blend of cultures, background, and opportunities, unlike any other city I've visited. The "live music capital of the world" title is no accident as every day, bands and artists thrive through the copious amount of venues and clubs around the city. The great thing about UT Austin is that it just happens to possess one of the best theater programs in the country. Its large theater and knowledgeable staff offer training on the professional level which would aid in my creative color pallet. I see this not as just an opportunity to grow, but also to meet other like-minded individuals that will broaden my horizons. Thank you for your time and Hook em' Horns!

Hello everyone! My name's Huy. I'm studying at Kim Lien Highschool, Hanoi. I was born in a countryside of Phu Tho in 1999. I live with my parent and my younger brother. I have a close-knit family. I do many thing for entertainment: playing games, reading book, listening to music,... but my hobby and also my dream is to learn about computer. When I was a 13-year-old boy, i watched a movie about the life of a hacker. He's so cool that i thinked:" Wow, i want to be a man like that". I'm not just dreaming. Since i came to my highschool and learn Pascal , i've learn much about other programing languages, the first was PHP, then HTML, and now i'm still learning Python. I have many weakpoints, i'm very reserve, easy to be stressful and sometimes ignorant. But I want my dream to come true and i'll do my best for it. Tks for reading!

Hello everyone! My name's Hey. I'm studying at Kim Lien High school, Hanoi. I was born in a countryside of PhD Tho in 1999. Furthermore, I live with my parent and my younger brother. Furthermore, I have a close-knit family. Furthermore, I do many things for entertainment: playing games, reading book, listening to music, ... but my hobby and also my dream is to learn about computer. When I was a 13-year-old boy, I watched a movie about the life of a hacker. He's so cool that i thought:" Wow, I want to be a man like that". I'm not just dreaming. Since I came to my high school and learn Pascal, i've learned much about other programming languages, the first was PHP, then HTML, and now I'm still learning Python. I have many weak points, I'm very reserve, easy to be stressful and sometimes ignorant. But I want my dream to come true and I'll do my best for it. TKS for reading!

Many people tend to overlook the importance of communication. Therefore, I'd like to share of an important lesson I've learned from a mistake I've made. Previously at work, there had been a miscalculation regarding my first pay cheque. However, I was hesitant whether or not I should ask my employer directly due to the sensitive nature of the subject. Instead, I addressed my questions to my coworkers first. Eventually, my boss found out of about this through my coworkers and personally talked to me regarding the matter. To my surprise, she expressed how she felt disrespected and told me to directly tell her the next time I have concerns or problems. At this point, I came to realize how easily a misunderstanding can be created in a relationship that lacked communication. Although the outcome of my mistake was unintentional, I could have avoided tension with my employer by being more open in our communication. Ironically, I was afraid of hurting our relationship with the mention of money while my boss felt distrust coming from me. Shortly after, I reflected on my mistake and changed my perception of my boss, which helped strengthen our employer-employee relationship.Speaking from my experience, a problem should be solved right away, otherwise, you'd only be left with bigger consequences to face later; just like how a misunderstanding was created when I avoided talking with my employer. With that being said, the important lesson I've learned is that good communication amongst one another is crucial to the success of any relationship. Through this small mistake, I have gained an important asset which I can take with me to Queen's Commerce and when I venture into the networking world of business.

Many people tend to overlook the importance of communication. Therefore, I'd like to share of an important lesson I've learned from a mistake I've made. Previously at work, there had been a miscalculation regarding my first pay check. However, I was hesitant whether I should ask my employer directly due to the sensitive nature of the subject. Instead, I addressed my questions to my coworkers first. Eventually, my boss found out of about this through my coworkers and personally talked to me regarding the matter. To my surprise, she expressed how she felt disrespected and told me to directly tell her the next time I have concerns or problems. At this point, I came to realize how easily a misunderstanding can be created in a relationship that lacked communication. Although the outcome of my mistake was unintentional, I could have avoided tension with my employer by being more open in our communication. Ironically, I was afraid of hurting our relationship with the mention of money while my boss felt distrust coming from me. Shortly after, I reflected on my mistake and changed my perception of my boss, which helped strengthen our employer-employee relationship. Speaking from my experience, a problem should be solved right away, otherwise, you'd only be left with bigger consequences to face later; just like how a misunderstanding was created when I avoided talking with my employer. With that being said, the important lesson I've learned is that good communication amongst one another is crucial to the success of any relationship. Through this small mistake, I have gained an important asset which I can take with me to Queen's Commerce and when I venture into the networking world of business.

Moving to the United States at the age of 15, I found it challenging for myself to cope with the new education system. From the school's schedule, different form of learning, and people. After witnessing myself having a fair first year, i knew i had to change my attitude and structure towards my education if i wanted to make time there worthwhile. And through hard work, and dedication in due time, i had accomplished just that. More so, where the National Society of High School Scholars contacted me through my school, Offering me a position, to become a member in their scholar society, opening up more opportunities.I was truly honored as i knew, coming to a completely knew country as a foreigner where opportunities and resources were scarce, that i had made a big achievement for myself. With this big achievement under my name, i decided apply for a short internship. When choosing where, i had to combine my passion of helping others and interest of rehabilitation. During my high school years of being a physically active person, I saw how common it is for people from athletes to the everyday person, to sustain minor to major injuries. Therefore deciding on my school's rehabilitation facility. There, I was lucky to have a mentor where I learned different ways of therapy techniques. Interning in a physical therapy environment was a great opportunity as it gave me insight into the industry and a sense of importance when it came to serving the community. Not only does it have a highly practical emphasis occupation-wise, it will also provide me with the opportunity to aid someone in increasing their standard of life which truly appealed to me. That was when i knew, physiotherapy was the course for me. Seeing the progress of different patients and how happy they were, brought me to an excitement every time. Being able to interact with people everyday and get to know their progress of treatment, while knowing your job is to help others lead a healthier lifestyle is hard to find. Not only does it bring happiness to. Moving forward I hope to be selected for this program so that I may pursue my passion of being an official physiotherapist, aiding those affected by injuries, as well as the aging population in Singapore.

Moving to the United States at the age of 15, I found it challenging for myself to cope with the new education system. From the school's schedule, different form of learning, and people. After witnessing myself having a fair first year, I knew I had to change my attitude and structure towards my education if I wanted to make time there worthwhile. And through hard work, and dedication in due time, I had accomplished just that. More so, where the National Society of High School Scholars contacted me through my school, Offering me a position, to become a member in their scholar society, opening up more opportunities. I was truly honored as I knew, coming to a completely knew country as a foreigner where opportunities and resources were scarce, that I had made a big achievement for myself. With this big achievement under my name, I decided apply for a short internship. When choosing where, I had to combine my passion of helping others and interest of rehabilitation. During my high school years of being a physically active person, I saw how common it is for people from athletes to the everyday person, to sustain minor to major injuries. Therefore, deciding on my school's rehabilitation facility. There, I was lucky to have a mentor where I learned different ways of therapy techniques. Interning in a physical therapy environment was a great opportunity as it gave me insight into the industry and a sense of importance when it came to serving the community. Not only does it have a highly practical emphasis occupation-wise, it will also provide me with the opportunity to aid someone in increasing their standard of life which truly appealed to me. That was when I knew, physiotherapy was the course for me. Seeing the progress of different patients and how happy they were, brought me to an excitement every time. Being able to interact with people every day and get to know their progress of treatment, while knowing your job is to help others lead a healthier lifestyle is hard to find. Not only does it bring happiness to. Moving forward I hope to be selected for this program so that I may pursue my passion of being an official physiotherapist, aiding those affected by injuries, as well as the aging population in Singapore.

There's nothing better than showing magic tricks. A year ago I came across a youtube channel where they were showing impressive magic tricks.They inspired me and I started to learn some of these tricks (the easiest ones of course). After a couple of months my skill has improved and I was able to learn more complicated tricks. When you are showing a magic trick you always need to keep an eye on spectator and to be focused on the magic tick itself. Sometimes my hands are shaking because of the pressure of fail. It is one thing that I like in magic tricks the most. Magic tricks are designed to give people positive emotions. This feeling when you know that you made somebody's day is incredible.For me as for magician magic tricks are kind of ritual in which you give people positive emotions and that makes you even more happy than spectators. I can't show magic tricks if I feel sick or I'm in a bad mood. I think it's because I don't have any positive to share.From my point of view magic tricks are very good exercise to share happiness. I recommend you to try showing magic tricks. You will spend about 3 hours to learn a good one but it worth it. Positive emotions you will get are much more stronger than spectator's ones because your emotions will be multiplied by pressure of failing magic trick. It was very interesting to see how magician feel themselves while showing tricks.I think that all people should feel experience of any action from both sides.

There's nothing better than showing magic tricks. A year ago I came across a YouTube channel where they were showing impressive magic tricks. They inspired me and I started to learn some of these tricks (the easiest ones of course). After a couple of months my skill has improved, and I was able to learn more complicated tricks. When you are showing a magic trick you always need to keep an eye on spectator and to be focused on the magic tick itself. Sometimes my hands are shaking because of the pressure of fail. It is one thing that I like in magic tricks the most. Magic tricks are designed to give people positive emotions. This feeling when you know that you made somebody's day is incredible. For me as for magician magic tricks are kind of ritual in which you give people positive emotions and that makes you even more happy than spectators. I can't show magic tricks if I feel sick, or I'm in a bad mood. I think it's because I don't have any positive to share. From my point of view magic tricks are very good exercise to share happiness. I recommend you to try showing magic tricks. You will spend about 3 hours to learn a good one but it worth it. Positive emotions you will get are much stronger than spectator's ones because your emotions will be multiplied by pressure of failing magic trick. It was very interesting to see how magician feel themselves while showing tricks. I think that all people should feel experience of any action from both sides.

The past year I was faced with many hardships that I never expected to face. They included my dad being diagnosed with cancer, my aunt suddenly dying, my life changing in a matter of days. In the fall I was supposed to attend University of Texas, however with the news of my dad having cancer everything changed, I postponed my admission University of Texas and enrolled into Lonestar community college. This was one of the hardest decisions to make because all throughout high school the plan was to get into a four-year university and leave home, and at the very last second everything changes. I then proceeded to attend Lonestar community college and it was much different than I expected it was rather small and quiet, however I acclimated quickly and decided to make the best of the situation at hand. Then in November my aunt suddenly died and it sent a massive ripple amongst our family and just when everything seemed to get better it all fell apart and went back to square one. It felt as if everything was falling down and I couldn't do anything about it, I began questioning, "why is this all happening?" Then I read something in a book that made me think that things could be a lot worse than they already are, what I read was "there is always a light at the end of the tunnel". I began to ask myself what my light was, and it took me a while to think of what exactly it was and then I finally stumbled on it, it was to make a better future for myself and to keep moving forward and to try and gain admittance into one of the best schools in the nation. This past year was one of the most difficult years in my young life especially psychologically because it felt as if I was handling so many responsibilities at once especially after my dad was diagnosed with cancer. However, there were some positives things that came out of this grueling year, I made myself mentally stronger and mature. At first when I was told that I much more mature and mentally stronger I did not understand what they meant but then I began to see the slight changes that I was making in my life and I was making better decisions and reacting to major decisions with more poise and determination than before. Also with mental strength school came with much less stress and I was able to handle assignments, projects, exams much better. Now I believe that the sky is the limit for me because this past year taught so much and one of those things were that academically I have never had this much success and put myself in a positive position. When I first saw everything pile up I was confused and asked "why me?" but now I look back and I say "why not?" because now I feel like everything is come much easier due to these invaluable life experiences that made me grow as a person and will forever change me, and when I think of these experiences I will thank them for making me the person that I will be in the very near future.ement of purpose will provide an opportunity to explain any extenuating circumstances that you feel could add value to your application.

The past year I was faced with many hardships that I never expected to face. They included my dad being diagnosed with cancer, my aunt suddenly dying, my life changing in a matter of days. In the fall I was supposed to attend University of Texas, however with the news of my dad having cancer everything changed, I postponed my admission University of Texas and enrolled into Lodestar community college. This was one of the hardest decisions to make because all throughout high school the plan was to get into a four-year university and leave home, and at the very last second everything changes. I then proceeded to attend Lodestar community college, and it was much different from I expected it was rather small and quiet, however I acclimated quickly and decided to make the best of the situation at hand. Then in November my aunt suddenly died, and it sent a massive ripple amongst our family and just when everything seemed to get better it all fell apart and went back to square one. It felt as if everything was falling down, and I couldn't do anything about it, I began questioning, "why is this all happening?" Then I read something in a book that made me think that things could be a lot worse than they already are, what I read was "there is always a light at the end of the tunnel". I began to ask myself what my light was, and it took me a while to think of what exactly it was, and then I finally stumbled on it, it was to make a better future for myself and to keep moving forward and to try and gain admittance into one of the best schools in the nation. This past year was one of the most difficult years in my young life especially psychologically because it felt as if I was handling so many responsibilities at once especially after my dad was diagnosed with cancer. However, there were some positives things that came out of this grueling year, I made myself mentally stronger and mature. At first when I was told that I much more mature and mentally stronger I did not understand what they meant, but then I began to see the slight changes that I was making in my life, and I was making better decisions and reacting to major decisions with more poise and determination than before. Also, with mental strength school came with much less stress, and I was able to handle assignments, projects, exams much better. Now I believe that the sky is the limit for me because this past year taught so much and one of those things were that academically I have never had this much success and put myself in a positive position. When I first saw everything pile up I was confused and asked "why me?" but now I look back, and I say "why not?" because now I feel like everything is come much easier due to these invaluable life experiences that made me grow as a person and will forever change me, and when I think of these experiences I will thank them for making me the person that I will be in the very near future.event of purpose will provide an opportunity to explain any extenuating circumstances that you feel could add value to your application.

It is always a very euphoric feeling to be able to elicit a strong emotion from someone. At least that is how it has always felt for me. I have been acting since I was a shy, shrimpy boy in 6th grade and as each year passed me by I was able to better understand what I love so much about theatre. As a middle schooler, I was not sure what I was doing or why I could possibly be enjoying it. As such an apprehensive kid it did not make any sense why I enjoyed putting myself out in front of others but as I reminisce it was always just so exciting. Scary, but exciting nonetheless. Up until highschool that is the mindset I carried with me. I did it for the excitement. I did it because of how emotional it all made me feel. I began learning in high school a lot of hard truths. You might not always be cast. You might not ever be cast. You might be unliked. And there is always someone better than you. This brought me down for a while and I would say that only recently I have began to discover what I really love about theatre. I have found that it truly is the emotions that drive me now and will always drive me. Eliciting any kind of feeling from others has always invigorated me but more than anything else, what drives me is laughter. In times when I was not even sure why I was in plays, or in acting classes, or spending just so much of my time with theatre, I remembered laughter. My dream is to make people laugh and have the opportunity to center my career around that. But, I don't want to pigeonhole myself. I want the opportunity to make a career out of all emotions. I have always fallen back on laughter when I had the choice between comedic and dramatic acting. I do not want to be forced to fall back anymore. Along with practicing long and hard to be the funniest person I can be, I want to be able to do everything else too. I want to make people cry. I want to make people scared. I want to make people angry. It is an honor when you see that you have had an effect on someone. I want the chance to become the best actor I can be, in every way possible. There are times in my life when I found it difficult to work hard. I did not always get the best grades in high school and I did not always feel confident in myself either. But, when it comes to being accepted into UT Austin's Theatre and Dance program and attending a college where I feel as though I can grow, I've never been more motivated. I finished my first semester at Collin Community College with really good grades and I expect to finish my second semester with the same, not because it's easy, but because I'm working hard. I want to become so funny that everyone laughs before I even start my jokes. It sounds unrealistic, but this is one of the first times in my life when I have been so confident about something. For a long time I was not sure what I wanted, like many people just leaving highschool, and even now I still can not say what exactly I want, but I know that I want to make people laugh. I want to make people laugh and then render them speechless when I turn around and make them cry. My goal is to hone the skills I already have and open myself to everything I do not. I believe that I can make an impact at UT Austin and I believe that I deserve the chance to try.

It is always a very euphoric feeling to be able to elicit a strong emotion from someone. At least that is how it has always felt for me. I have been acting since I was a shy, shrimp boy in 6th grade and as each year passed me by I was able to better understand what I love so much about theater. As a middle schooler, I was not sure what I was doing or why I could possibly be enjoying it. As such an apprehensive kid it did not make any sense why I enjoyed putting myself out in front of others but as I reminisce it was always just so exciting. Scary, but exciting nonetheless. Up until high school that is the mindset I carried with me. I did it for the excitement. I did it because of how emotional it all made me feel. Furthermore, I began learning in high school a lot of hard truths. You might not always be cast. You might not ever be cast. Furthermore, you might be unliked. And there is always someone better than you. This brought me down for a while and I would say that only recently I have begun to discover what I really love about theater. I have found that it truly is the emotions that drive me now and will always drive me. Eliciting any kind of feeling from others has always invigorated me but more than anything else, what drives me is laughter. In times when I was not even sure why I was in plays, or in acting classes, or spending just so much of my time with theater, I remembered laughter. My dream is to make people laugh and have the opportunity to center my career around that. But, I don't want to pigeonhole myself. I want the opportunity to make a career out of all emotions. I have always fallen back on laughter when I had the choice between comedic and dramatic acting. Furthermore, I do not want to be forced to fall back anymore. Along with practicing long and hard to be the funniest person I can be, I want to be able to do everything else too. I want to make people cry. I want to make people scared. Furthermore, I want to make people angry. It is an honor when you see that you have had an effect on someone. I want the chance to become the best actor I can be, in every way possible. There are times in my life when I found it difficult to work hard. I did not always get the best grades in high school and I did not always feel confident in myself either. But, when it comes to being accepted into UT Austin's Theatre and Dance program and attending a college where I feel as though I can grow, I've never been more motivated. I finished my first semester at Collin Community College with perfect grades and I expect to finish my second semester with the same, not because it's easy, but because I'm working hard. I want to become so funny that everyone laughs before I even start my jokes. It sounds unrealistic, but this is one of the first times in my life when I have been so confident about something. For a long time I was not sure what I wanted, like many people just leaving high school, and even now I still can not say what exactly I want, but I know that I want to make people laugh. I want to make people laugh and then render them speechless when I turn around and make them cry. My goal is to hone the skills I already have and open myself to everything I do not. I believe that I can make an impact at UT Austin and I believe that I deserve the chance to try.

Currently, it has 492 words. The 2015 Vaughan Car Crash had an impact in my life. It was a devastating tragedy in Ontario, Canada that claimed four innocent lives, three young children and their grandfather. This was the result of an irresponsible decision by the driver to drive under the influence, having three times the legal amount of alcohol in his blood. I decided to take a close watch on this case. After all, I had faith in the system, that it will guarantee that justice will be served. When I looked at the picture of the victims, their smiling faces haunted me. I closed my eyes and prayed for their souls to find peace. Months later, much to my dismay, I discovered that the perpetrator was sentenced to only ten years in prison and would be eligible for parole in three years. His license to drive would be revoked for just a bit over a decade. I was infuriated. These pieces of information made my blood boil: this is a travesty of justice. Why is his prison sentence not longer than ten years? Why is he even eligible for parole? Why was not his punishment severe enough? In addition, I was concerned about the ripple effect that the tragedy has on the victims' family and friends. Above all, there was no justice for the victims. It was as if they were mere cadavers that could be easily disposed of and that their killer gets a mild punishment. The case opened a new door in my life. The anger, the hunger, and the yearning for a sense of justice had amalgamated. As a result, I decided to dedicate my life to criminal justice. I want to fight for the underdog, and for those who want their voices heard loudly and clearly by everyone. I want the justice system to regard victims as people who would have had a future, that they were people with value, and that they were individuals who could have changed someone's life. Thus, I immersed myself in activities related to criminal justice, such as applying to the University of Toronto's Criminal Law session last summer to learn more about the system. I was described by the educators as the "Most Aggressive Lawyer," a title I have been proud of since. I also began volunteering for Mothers Against Drunk Driving and the Toronto Police as a Youth Corps Volunteer to work with the police force and be an eye to maintain my community's safety. Someday, I want to become a legislator who will initiate reforms and public discussions on the effectiveness of the system in assuring to deliver justice for the victims. I wake up every day to thank God that I am blessed to be alive, safe and sound. I want this to be the reality for everyone and I will fight tooth and nail to ensure that. As Martin Luther King Jr. once proclaimed, "Injustice anywhere is a threat to justice everywhere."[b]

Currently, it has 492 words. The 2015 Vaughan Car Crash had an impact in my life. It was a devastating tragedy in Ontario, Canada that claimed four innocent lives, three young children and their grandfather. This was the result of an irresponsible decision by the driver to drive under the influence, having three times the legal amount of alcohol in his blood. I decided to take a close watch on this case. After all, I had faith in the system, that it will guarantee that justice will be served. When I looked at the picture of the victims, their smiling faces haunted me. I closed my eyes and prayed for their souls to find peace. Months later, much to my dismay, I discovered that the perpetrator was sentenced to only ten years in prison and would be eligible for parole in three years. His license to drive would be revoked for just a bit over a decade. I was infuriated. These pieces of information made my blood boil: this is a travesty of justice. Why is his prison sentence not longer than ten years? Why is he even eligible for parole? Why wasn't his punishment severe enough? In addition, I was concerned about the ripple effect that the tragedy has on the victims' family and friends. Above all, there was no justice for the victims. It was as if they were mere cadavers that could be easily disposed of and that their killer gets a mild punishment. The case opened a new door in my life. The anger, the hunger, and the yearning for a sense of justice had amalgamated. As a result, I decided to dedicate my life to criminal justice. I want to fight for the underdog, and for those who want their voices heard loudly and clearly by everyone. I want the justice system to regard victims as people who would have had a future, that they were people with value, and that they were individuals who could have changed someone's life. Thus, I immersed myself in activities related to criminal justice, such as applying to the University of Toronto's Criminal Law session last summer to learn more about the system. I was described by the educators as the "Most Aggressive Lawyer," a title I have been proud of since. I also began volunteering for Mothers Against Drunk Driving and the Toronto Police as a Youth Corps Volunteer to work with the police force and be an eye to maintain my community's safety. Someday, I want to become a legislator who will initiate reforms and public discussions on the effectiveness of the system in assuring to deliver justice for the victims. I wake up every day to thank God that I am blessed to be alive, safe and sound. I want this to be the reality for everyone and I will fight tooth and nail to ensure that. As Martin Luther King Jr. once proclaimed, "Injustice anywhere is a threat to justice everywhere."[b]

My ultimate educational goal is to attend law school and become a certified attorney, though I believe a good undergraduate program is essential in building a solid foundation for any future endeavors. The School of Planning would allow me to utilize critical thinking skills to solve a variety of problems in unique ways, similarly to how one would in the law profession. It has also always been a dream of mine to work in digital media, particularly video. The chance GBDA provides to do not only just that, but to also apply those skills in a business context is an amazing opportunity. I have applied to Waterloo primarily due to the plethora of work experience opportunities that the school offers for my chosen fields. Companies nowadays value actual work experience above all else, and the extensive tools WaterlooWorks provides in this regard is simply unmatched by any other school. Ever since I watched my first film, the unique ways digital media is able to convey messages, feelings, and even emotion has fascinated me. Throughout my life I have striven to replicate such experiences in my own work, with video production, photography, and graphic design all having developed into great passions of mine. Having friends also interested in media pushed me even further down this path, and growing up with cousins in similar fields no doubt played a role in this as well (one studies animation, another studies CS at Waterloo). However, there has always been something preventing me from following fully in their footsteps- job security, and the questionable applicability of media-focused studies in a business-centric world. GBDA is the solution that I have been looking for- a program that allows me to connect my passions with the business skills to survive in today's society.

My ultimate educational goal is to attend law school and become a certified attorney, though I believe a good undergraduate program is essential in building a solid foundation for any future endeavors. The School of Planning would allow me to utilize critical thinking skills to solve a variety of problems in unique ways, similarly to how one would in the law profession. It has also always been a dream of mine to work in digital media, particularly video. The chance GBA provides to do not only just that, but to also apply those skills in a business context is an amazing opportunity. I have applied to Waterloo primarily due to the plethora of work experience opportunities that the school offers for my chosen fields. Companies nowadays value actual work experience above all else, and the extensive tools Waterworks provides in this regard is simply unmatched by any other school. Ever since I watched my first film, the unique ways digital media is able to convey messages, feelings, and even emotion has fascinated me. Throughout my life I have striven to replicate such experiences in my own work, with video production, photography, and graphic design all having developed into great passions of mine. Having friends also interested in media pushed me even further down this path, and growing up with cousins in similar fields no doubt played a role in this as well (one studies animation, another studies CS at Waterloo). However, there has always been something preventing me from following fully in their footsteps-job security, and the questionable applicability of media-focused studies in a business-centric world. GBA is the solution that I have been looking for- a program that allows me to connect my passions with the business skills to survive in today's society.

For an hour and a half each day, a war rages between my body and my mind, my pride and my lassitude. My masochistic need for pain battles the comfort of quitting, angels and demons fighting over the same fundamental question: Why the hell am I here? The gym where I train and workout is a place where I know who I am. It is a place I can go to escape my problems for a while and release some stress. It's where I have formed some of my closest friendships. It's the place where I have invested years of hard work for many of my personal accomplishments. To some, it may seem odd that a place associated with sweat, blood and physical pain means so much to someone. However, in my eyes, this is my Iron Temple, my second home. A certain familiarity has developed over time that makes it home. I drive my car into the pot-hole filled parking lot off the highway and park in the same spot I always have, people just seem to know that's my spot. Walking around to the back I open the brown door and enter. Bright industrial lights dangle from the ceiling; pungent sweat invades my nostrils; echoes of agony make me smile. "C'mon Ewan! Two more reps!"A bead of sweat trickles down his temple towards his ear as he tries to push the 30-pound barbell over his chest. I hover over him, to "spot" him, slightly holding the bar to make sure that his arms don't buckle under the weight. Three weeks ago, he came to me for advice and the very next day I saw him at the gym, energetic and motivated. We are a community that helps and motivates each other. We "spot" each other through challenging workouts and build everlasting friendships. Needless to say, I am very proud to be a part of this community.

For an hour and a half each day, a war rages between my body and my mind, my pride and my lassitude. My masochistic need for pain battles the comfort of quitting, angels and demons fighting over the same fundamental question: Why the hell am I here? The gym where I train and workout is a place where I know who I am. It is a place I can go to escape my problems for a while and release some stress. It's where I have formed some of my closest friendships. Furthermore, it's the place where I have invested years of hard work for many of my personal accomplishments. To some, it may seem odd that a place associated with sweat, blood and physical pain means so much to someone. However, in my eyes, this is my Iron Temple, my second home. A certain familiarity has developed over time that makes it home. I drive my car into the pot-hole filled parking lot off the highway and park in the same spot I always have, people just seem to know that's my spot. Walking around to the back I open the brown door and enter. Bright industrial lights dangle from the ceiling; pungent sweat invades my nostrils; echoes of agony make me smile. "C'mon Evan! Two more reps!" A bead of sweat trickles down his temple towards his ear as he tries to push the 30-pound barbell over his chest. I hover over him, to "spot" him, slightly holding the bar to make sure that his arms don't buckle under the weight. Three weeks ago, he came to me for advice and the very next day I saw him at the gym, energetic and motivated. We are a community that helps and motivates each other. We "spot" each other through challenging workouts and build everlasting friendships. Needless to say, I am very proud to be a part of this community.

An essay describing your past academic experiences and your reasons for wishing to transfer to Maryland at this point in your academic career is required. Students who have been out of school for several years, or who have a personal circumstance that affected their academic performance, may wish to address that situation in their essay. Your essay should be no more than 300 words. Ever since the day I decide to join community college, I knew that I wanted to electrical and computer engineer. My academic experience at Baltimore City Community College is awesome in terms of grade, but I have some limitation extracurricular activities such as research, internship, organization involvement and student competitions. The limitation is occurred due to personal reasons and taking extra classes during summer. So, in the first year when started looking at 4 years universities, I realized that needed to pick one that had a research opportunity, internship, community engagement and also I want the school that helps me to accomplish my research plan about energy sources. After looking several schools, I decided that UMD electrical and computer engineering program is my first choice. The fundamental reason I decided to join UMD was the school provide things that are acquired for my career plan. As mentioned on the website of UMD they offer Undergraduate Research Fellowships, internship opportunities, professional engineering organization involvement, and student competitions. Besides the points I mentioned earlier they help me to improve and enhance my mathematics, physics, basic engineering science knowledge. I got an opportunity to visit UMD during fall TERP of 2017. I was able to meet with kind members of alumni, which work with a student like a hand in glove then we visit classrooms, laboratories and surrounds. I was impressed by specific undergraduate extracurricular activities, which includes on-campus and off-campus opportunity. In the internship, I would have a chance to gain professional experience from popular companies like Ultisat, Clark construction and Exelon, which will provide me the best resources to feel prepared for the future. My transcript reveals that I have done satisfactorily at BCCC furthermore, I know would develop my knowledge at UMD. ECE program at UMD is perfectly meet my career interests and professional goals.

An essay describing your past academic experiences and your reasons for wishing to transfer to Maryland at this point in your academic career is required. Students who have been out of school for several years, or who have a personal circumstance that affected their academic performance, may wish to address that situation in their essay. Your essay should be no more than 300 words. Ever since the day I decide to join community college, I knew that I wanted to electrical and computer engineer. My academic experience at Baltimore City Community College is awesome in terms of grade, but I have some limitation extracurricular activities such as research, internship, organization involvement and student competitions. The limitation is occurred due to personal reasons and taking extra classes during summer. So, in the first year when started looking at 4 years universities, I realized that needed to pick one that had a research opportunity, internship, community engagement, and also I want the school that helps me to accomplish my research plan about energy sources. After looking several schools, I decided that UMD electrical and computer engineering program is my first choice. The fundamental reason I decided to join UMD was the school provide things that are acquired for my career plan. As mentioned on the website of UMD they offer Undergraduate Research Fellowships, internship opportunities, professional engineering organization involvement, and student competitions. Besides the points I mentioned earlier they help me to improve and enhance my mathematics, physics, basic engineering science knowledge. I got an opportunity to visit UMD during fall TERM of 2017. I was able to meet with kind members of alumni, which work with a student like a hand in glove then we visit classrooms, laboratories and surrounds. Furthermore, I was impressed by specific undergraduate extracurricular activities, which includes on-campus and off-campus opportunity. In the internship, I would have a chance to gain professional experience from popular companies like Ultimate, Clark construction and Evelyn, which will provide me the best resources to feel prepared for the future. My transcript reveals that I have done satisfactorily at BCCC furthermore, I know would develop my knowledge at UMD. ECE program at UMD is perfectly meet my career interests and professional goals.

Stepping foot in Malaysia after two years, almost nothing had changed. Rain poured down just as heavily with the occasional cacophony of thunder ringing through the air. Twin Towers loomed over the city as though to keep a watchful eye on the citizens. Roads lead me to familiar places and the restaurants served the same food that I grew up eating. I had lived here for seven years and it felt as though I was coming back home. But this time there was something different. There was a new flyover. A flyover that led me straight to my new university. In the fall of 2016, I pursued Computer Science at Taylors University's American Degree Program (TUADP) in Malaysia. I chose to attend TUADP mainly because of two main reasons. Firstly, it was because of its proximity to my parents since I was not emotionally ready to leave them and study abroad. Secondly because of its affordability. At the time TUADP was the best academic and financial fit for my needs. Throughout my two years at TUADP, I met several like-minded individuals with similar goals and interests and enjoyed being a part of the ADP Engineering Society. Starting out as a member of the society, I took part in educational field trips, attended guest lectures and seminars and helped my fellow peers with math and computer science. Soon enough my seniors started to notice my interest in the society and elected me as a new Board of Director. My job title was Event Manager which meant that it was my responsibility to organize educational trips, fundraising events and workshops. I organized an educational trip to Safran Landing System - a company specializing in landing gears and brakes for multimillion-dollar aircrafts, a 3D printing workshop and a robotics workshop. Being able to work with a robot battle kit or using 3D printers to design and build gears has taught me the importance of understanding the foundation of each field-from coding to electronics. At TUADP, I managed to step out of my comfort zone, a cocoon that I had been a part of for most of my life. Although my time at TUADP was enjoyable and memorable, my growth as an individual and a professional would be limited by the opportunities provided here. From experiencing computer science directly and taking courses in it, I soon realized the importance of a broader curriculum with emphasis on research. TUADP offers a great program for a two-year institution, but to fulfil my personal and professional goals, it is imperative that I continue my further studies at a four-year institution. In composing my target list of colleges, first and foremost, I have selected schools with strong computer science departments and research facilities and have scrutinized many course catalogs to be sure there are interesting courses in Artificial Intelligence and Machine learning at every college I'm considering. Secondly, I have selected schools with a diverse community. Coming from an international school, I have learned to accept and acknowledge distinct cultural perspectives and have embraced a variety of opinions. A university with a diverse community would be a perfect fit for me since it encompasses all the qualities of me as a person and provides the same environment that I have thrived in and excelled in most of my life. To be able to benefit the society with my research is my personal goal and as for my professional goal, my dream is to start my own firm that helps the elderly, the disabled and the underprivileged from developing countries using Artificial Intelligence and Machine Learning to enhance their lives. It would be with great honor for someone like myself to graduate a school with a great legacy in the computer science field. Many would dream of attending a prestigious university creating relationships and connections within the years of attending. However, I hope that your university would provide me with the opportunity and the guidance to help me achieve my goals soon.

Stepping foot in Malaysia after two years, almost nothing had changed. Rain poured down just as heavily with the occasional cacophony of thunder ringing through the air. Twin Towers loomed over the city as though to keep a watchful eye on the citizens. Roads lead me to familiar places and the restaurants served the same food that I grew up eating. I had lived here for seven years, and it felt as though I was coming back home. But this time there was something different. There was a new flyover. A flyover that led me straight to my new university. In the fall of 2016, I pursued Computer Science at Taylor's University's American Degree Program (TU ADP) in Malaysia. I chose to attend TU ADP mainly because of two main reasons. Firstly, it was because of its proximity to my parents since I was not emotionally ready to leave them and study abroad. Secondly because of its affordability. At the time TU ADP was the best academic and financial fit for my needs. Throughout my two years at TU ADP, I met several like-minded individuals with similar goals and interests and enjoyed being a part of the ADP Engineering Society. Starting out as a member of the society, I took part in educational field trips, attended guest lectures and seminars and helped my fellow peers with math and computer science. Soon enough my seniors started to notice my interest in the society and elected me as a new Board of Director. My job title was Event Manager which meant that it was my responsibility to organize educational trips, fundraising events and workshops. I organized an educational trip to Saran Landing System - a company specializing in landing gears and brakes for multimillion-dollar aircraft, a 3D printing workshop and a robotics workshop. Being able to work with a robot battle kit or using 3D printers to design and build gears has taught me the importance of understanding the foundation of each field-from coding to electronics. At TU ADP, I managed to step out of my comfort zone, a cocoon that I had been a part of for most of my life. Although my time at TU ADP was enjoyable and memorable, my growth as an individual and a professional would be limited by the opportunities provided here. From experiencing computer science directly and taking courses in it, I soon realized the importance of a broader curriculum with emphasis on research. TU ADP offers a great program for a two-year institution, but to fulfil my personal and professional goals, it is imperative that I continue my further studies at a four-year institution. In composing my target list of colleges, first and foremost, I have selected schools with strong computer science departments and research facilities and have scrutinized many course catalogs to be sure there are interesting courses in Artificial Intelligence and Machine learning at every college I'm considering. Secondly, I have selected schools with a diverse community. Coming from an international school, I have learned to accept and acknowledge distinct cultural perspectives and have embraced a variety of opinions. A university with a diverse community would be a perfect fit for me since it encompasses all the qualities of me as a person and provides the same environment that I have thrived in and excelled in most of my life. To be able to benefit the society with my research is my personal goal and as for my professional goal, my dream is to start my own firm that helps the elderly, the disabled and the underprivileged from developing countries using Artificial Intelligence and Machine Learning to enhance their lives. It would be with great honor for someone like myself to graduate a school with a great legacy in the computer science field. Many would dream of attending a prestigious university creating relationships and connections within the years of attending. However, I hope that your university would provide me with the opportunity and the guidance to help me achieve my goals soon.

Hi everyone,This is my first post on here so I apologize if I'm not posting in the correct format, please bare with me! :)I am going to be applying to dental hygiene school about a month from now and I'm going to begin writing my essay, but I'm feeling stuck on what to write about. I've never really been great at writing and putting the words I'm thinking onto paper. The prompt says, "Discuss any special abilities or skills that you believe would make you an asset to this profession". I spoke to many students who are currently in the program and they suggested that I write about my journey and passion to become a dental hygienist. I was thinking about starting off writing about my high school experience. I had no idea what I wanted to do with life and was very unmotivated to the point where my lowest GPA was a 1.8 (yikes, I know). But as soon as I discovered that my passion was to become a dental hygienist after getting my braces on and becoming very fixated on my own personal hygiene, I immediately did a 180° and became super determined. From that point on, I never got anything below a 4.0. Then I was going to go on and discuss my college journey - briefly touch on being a first generation college student and how that shaped me, further paint a picture of how hard I have been working for the past two years on prereqs, why I love dental hygiene, why I want to be apart of their program, etc. My question here really is, should I leave out the part about having a 1.8 GPA in high school? I'm not sure if it will lean more towards making me look terrible or really impressive since I found my passion and skyrocketed from there. What do you guys think about the other things I want to discuss as well? Thank you all in advance! :)

Hi everyone, This is my first post on here, so I apologize if I'm not posting in the correct format, please bare with me! :)I am going to be applying to dental hygiene school about a month from now, and I'm going to begin writing my essay, but I'm feeling stuck on what to write about. I've never really been great at writing and putting the words I'm thinking onto paper. The prompt says, "Discuss any special abilities or skills that you believe would make you an asset to this profession". I spoke to many students who are currently in the program, and they suggested that I write about my journey and passion to become a dental hygienist. I was thinking about starting off writing about my high school experience. Furthermore, I had no idea what I wanted to do with life and was very unmotivated to the point where my lowest GPA was a 1.8 (yikes, I know). But as soon as I discovered that my passion was to become a dental hygienist after getting my braces on and becoming very fixated on my own personal hygiene, I immediately did a 180° and became super determined. From that point on, I never got anything below a 4.0. Then I was going to go on and discuss my college journey - briefly touch on being a first generation college student and how that shaped me, further paint a picture of how hard I have been working for the past two years on priers, why I love dental hygiene, why I want to be a part of their program, etc. My question here really is, should I leave out the part about having a 1.8 GPA in high school? I'm not sure if it will lean more towards making me look terrible or really impressive since I found my passion and skyrocketed from there. What do you guys think about the other things I want to discuss as well? Thank you all in advance! :)

The moment I see 2 pointy ears, sapphire-yellow eyes surrounded by jet-black fur, a fluffy tail, and 4 smooth paws gently treading in my direction, I am engulfed with happiness. I'm a cat enthusiast, and that's my cat: Thunder. Thunder owned me for the last six years (I believe cats own us rather than the other way around). Although he passed away recently, he taught me a few lessons about life. Even as a kitten, Thunder had a certain confidence that his life has a purpose and everything he did was important and relevant. You could never change his mind if he wanted something. He would dart towards me and mew relentlessly until I shared my snacks with him. Similarly, I learnt that wonderful things can happen when I put my energy into a single purpose. Thunder made no bones about the fact that he held me in high regard than others in my household. The reason was simple: I fed him daily. The perks I received for feeding him were many. He would rub himself around my legs, snuggle up to me when I was on the couch and offer me his quiet companionship by napping near my feet while I was studying. Consequently, I learnt to appreciate the people who love and

The moment I see 2 pointy ears, sapphire-yellow eyes surrounded by jet-black fur, a fluffy tail, and 4 smooth paws gently treading in my direction, I am engulfed with happiness. I'm a cat enthusiast, and that's my cat: Thunder. Thunder owned me for the last six years (I believe cats own us rather than the other way around). Although he passed away recently, he taught me a few lessons about life. Even as a kitten, Thunder had a certain confidence that his life has a purpose and everything he did was important and relevant. You could never change his mind if he wanted something. He would dart towards me and mew relentlessly until I shared my snacks with him. Similarly, I learned that wonderful things can happen when I put my energy into a single purpose. Thunder made no bones about the fact that he held me in high regard than others in my household. The reason was simple: I fed him daily. The perks I received for feeding him were many. He would rub himself around my legs, snuggle up to me when I was on the couch and offer me his quiet companionship by napping near my feet while I was studying. Consequently, I learned to appreciate the people who love and

Some feedback on my application personal statement would be great. It was only through my early years being a physically active person, that I saw how common it is for people from athletes to the everyday person, to sustain minor to major injuries. It was through these observations, that the field of physiotherapy called out to me. Thus I made the decision that this would be my field of choice and that I could make an impact in treating others and enabling them to lead a better, pain-free lifestyle. Through my curiosity and research. I've come to realize that Physiotherapy is a wide field. It helps people affected by injury, illness or disability and incorporates elements from science, rehabilitation, and medicine through physical intervention and advice. As such, I took up classes related to this field such as biology, physics, and chemistry. Due to my distinguished academic achievements, I was given a spot in the National Society of High School Scholars, where I was offered an internship in my school's rehabilitation facility. There, I was lucky to have a mentor where I learned different ways of therapy techniques, such as joint manipulation, mobilization and manual resistance training. Interning in a physical therapy environment was a great opportunity as it gave me insight into the industry and my career prospects. Not only does it have a highly practical emphasis occupation-wise, it will also provide me with the opportunity to aid someone in increasing their standard of life. Since applying, I have also enrolled myself in courses to extend my knowledge. Moving forward I hope to be selected for this program so that I may pursue my passion of being an official physiotherapist, aiding those affected by injuries, as well as the aging population in Singapore. Knowing with the skills and knowledge attained, I will help others improve their quality of life.

Some feedback on my application personal statement would be great. It was only through my early years being a physically active person, that I saw how common it is for people from athletes to the everyday person, to sustain minor to major injuries. It was through these observations, that the field of physiotherapy called out to me. Thus, I made the decision that this would be my field of choice and that I could make an impact in treating others and enabling them to lead a better, pain-free lifestyle. Through my curiosity and research. I've come to realize that Physiotherapy is a wide field. It helps people affected by injury, illness or disability and incorporates elements from science, rehabilitation, and medicine through physical intervention and advice. As such, I took up classes related to this field such as biology, physics, and chemistry. Due to my distinguished academic achievements, I was given a spot in the National Society of High School Scholars, where I was offered an internship in my school's rehabilitation facility. There, I was lucky to have a mentor where I learned different ways of therapy techniques, such as joint manipulation, mobilization and manual resistance training. Interning in a physical therapy environment was a great opportunity as it gave me insight into the industry and my career prospects. Not only does it have a highly practical emphasis occupation-wise, it will also provide me with the opportunity to aid someone in increasing their standard of life. Since applying, I have also enrolled myself in courses to extend my knowledge. Moving forward I hope to be selected for this program so that I may pursue my passion of being an official physiotherapist, aiding those affected by injuries, as well as the aging population in Singapore. Knowing with the skills and knowledge attained, I will help others improve their quality of life.

I have 500 characters to describe a time I fell short. I planned to talk about my extreme shyness. This is just a summary of my situation and will write a 2000 character essay about how I overcame it later. A major step in my life was starting high school; I didn't how to act, where to sit, or who to talk to. I would become light-headed contemplating every move, outfit, and hairstyle. The first week of school, I was chosen to read a paragraph in the disclosure document, I would begin to sweat and stutter every other word. I would feel a sigh of relief when it was over. I knew I couldn't keep this up for three years and that something needed to change. The next section I will write about how I overcame this.Is this a good description of my situation? Any grammar errors, etc?

I have 500 characters to describe a time I fell short. I planned to talk about my extreme shyness. This is just a summary of my situation and will write a 2000-character essay about how I overcame it later. A major step in my life was starting high school; I didn't how to act, where to sit, or who to talk to. I would become light-headed contemplating every move, outfit, and hairstyle. The first week of school, I was chosen to read a paragraph in the disclosure document, I would begin to sweat and stutter every other word. I would feel a sigh of relief when it was over. I knew I couldn't keep this up for three years and that something needed to change. The next section I will write about how I overcame this. Is this a good description of my situation? Any grammar errors, etc.?

My interest in computers started from a very young age. I would spend innumerable hours sailing through the vast sea of networks, stumbling on new thing along the way. When I was 12 my father handed me my first laptop igniting the first spark towards computer science. My curious young mind wanted to know how the machine worked and thus I landed on the doorsteps of computer programming. Most of my time would be spent programming several types of simulators and calculators from binomial expansions to Newton's method. At University of Illinois, my final goal would be to specialize in Cyber and Network Security as I believe that since computers are getting more accessible to people in my country, the risk of getting compromised is increasing as well. With the introduction of new systems such as driver-less cars or smart home systems, hackers would start to innovate new ways to destabilize computer systems and steal critical information. In India sensitive personal information is leaked amongst the masses and there isn't much that has been done to prevent that. Hence, I would like to spend my time at UIUC researching ways for people not just in my country but around the world to have a safe and secure experience whilst online which is something I firmly believe in. With the guidance and the facilities provided to me by University of Illinois and the College of Engineering, I believe that it will be apt for me to succeed in my goals. Hi, I am an international student applying to the University of Illinois at Urbana-Champaign. I am having difficulties in starting the essay and keeping it within the word limit. Please help me figure out any grammatical errors, weird sentence structure and any comments on how to improve my essay further. Constructive criticism would be much appreciated. Thank you!

My interest in computers started from a very young age. I would spend innumerable hours sailing through the vast sea of networks, stumbling on new thing along the way. When I was 12 my father handed me my first laptop igniting the first spark towards computer science. My curious young mind wanted to know how the machine worked, and thus I landed on the doorsteps of computer programming. Most of my time would be spent programming several types of simulators and calculators from binomial expansions to Newton's method. At University of Illinois, my final goal would be to specialize in Cyber and Network Security as I believe that since computers are getting more accessible to people in my country, the risk of getting compromised is increasing as well. With the introduction of new systems such as driver-less cars or smart home systems, hackers would start to innovate new ways to destabilize computer systems and steal critical information. In India sensitive personal information is leaked amongst the masses and there isn't much that has been done to prevent that. Hence, I would like to spend my time at UIC researching ways for people not just in my country but around the world to have a safe and secure experience whilst online which is something I firmly believe in. With the guidance and the facilities provided to me by University of Illinois and the College of Engineering, I believe that it will be apt for me to succeed in my goals. Hi, I am an international student applying to the University of Illinois at Urbana-Champaign. I am having difficulties in starting the essay and keeping it within the word limit. Please help me figure out any grammatical errors, weird sentence structure and any comments on how to improve my essay further. Constructive criticism would be much appreciated. Thank you!